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Hereditas Daemonica [Shin Megami Tensei X DxD] (DEAD)

Discussion in 'Creative Writing' started by Alexander, Sep 5, 2014.

  1. Alexander

    Alexander That is not dead which can eternal lie

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    Hyodo Issei. That is my name. My parents and guys at school call me "Ise". I'm a second year high school student who is currently experiencing the time of his youth. After all, I'm famous for being really lecherous: I even got accused of peeping inside the Girls Kendo Club's changing room.

    Of course I won't do such a shameless thing as peeping into the girls' changing room...Okay I would. I was at the scene. I was in the storage room next to the Kendo Club. I was trying to peep from the hole on the wall in the Kendo Club's storage room.

    Unfortunately I couldn't have a look. That's because my equally perverted friends Matsuda and Motohama wouldn't get away from the hole. Seriously, those guys...In the end we got caught before I could take a peep and brutally beaten by the girls from the Kendo Club.

    Such was my life. However, something really blissful happened to a guy like me, who otherwise would be doing all sorts of perverted stuff every day.

    "Please go out with me."

    A confession from a girl! I felt what it was like to be really young. For a guy like me who didn't have a girlfriend, it was like a dream come true.

    The name of my girlfriend is Amano Yuuma-chan. She is a girl with silky black hair and a slender body. She's so cute that I fell in love with her at first sight.

    Won't you say "OK" right away if some beauty comes up to you and say "I love you! Please go out with me!"?

    That will be like something out of a dream for a guy like me whose age equals the number of years I didn't have a girlfriend.

    I actually thought it was a prank. I even thought several times that it was the result of a penalty game and that her friends were looking at us from elsewhere.

    That can't be helped. Until then, I believed that I was a guy born to be unpopular with girls.

    But ever since that day, I became a guy with a girlfriend. The world around me changed. I don't know how to explain it but my heart was at peace. I wanted to say "It's my win!" to every guy I walked past.

    And then came the day of our first date. I was ready to use the plan that I had made a while back.

    After brushing my teeth dozens of times I arrived to the date spot with the attitude of a super virgin guy.

    I also arrived three hours before Yuuma-chan did. I counted up to a hundred girls who wore glasses walking pass in front of me in the meantime!

    During that time, I received a suspicious leaflet from a cute girl cosplaying as a maid handing out leaflets. It was an occult-looking thing with a weird magic-circle and a sentence: "Your dream will be granted!" written on it.

    ...I wanted to throw it away, but since there wasn't a trashcan in sight I decided to put it in my pocket until I could throw it away.

    When Yuuma-chan arrived she asked if I was waiting for long, but I told her I also got there at that moment.

    I always wanted to say that!

    Then we walked while holding hands. I was really touched. To have a date while holding hands with my beautiful girlfriend! I was so moved that I was about to burst into tears.

    After that we enjoyed our date by doing regular things teenagers like us do. We went to a clothing store and had a look at decorations for our rooms. We also went to a music store. I was surprised when Yuuma-chan said she likes Jazz. My tastes are more for Hip-hop, but it was funny talking about our favourite bands. It was fantastic.

    For lunch, we ate at a family restaurant just like how a normal high school student would, and Yuuma-chan was eating her chocolate parfait deliciously. My stomach was full just by looking at her. Yeah, I felt as if I understood how other teenagers feel when they go on a date. I felt as if I was alive for the first time.

    Mum, thanks for giving birth to me. Dad, I was worried that I wouldn't be able to continue our family line, but it looks like you don't have to worry about that any more.

    After we leave the family restaurant I notice an odd shop. It was run-down, yet even if side by side with more modern and attractive shops it seems to attract my full attention.

    ...I don't know why, but the instant I see it I feel the sudden urge to enter. Yuuma was oddly hesitant at first, but then smiled and went along with my selfish request. What a good girl!

    The interior is poorly illuminated, with high shelves occupying the space available like in a library. On the shelves there were a lot of different things like jewels, books and even a candelabrum.

    Some time during the exploration I got separated from Yuuma. I am about to call for her when my eyes notice something on a shelf.

    It's a trinket made of stone, in the shape of a curved comma or maybe the number six. It feels oddly familiar, but I can't remember where I saw it before. I picked it up to see it better, and I was surprised when I discovered it was warm.

    "Do you like it?" Someone suddenly asks from my left. I am ashamed to admit I yelp in fright, but the one who surprised me don't seem to care.
    The stranger, who is probably the store owner, is clad in a dark blue suit, with a white shirt and a yellow tie around his neck. He has long blond hair and heterochromatic eyes: one is red and the other blue. He is also good looking, even more than that damned "Prince Kiba", but I can't help myself from thinking with uneasiness how his appearance is just too perfect, like a doll.

    "Ah.." I stammer, but try to appear civil. He is still an adult, and I need to be respectful. "I..guess? I don't even know what it is."

    "It's a Magatama." He answers with a delicate smile. "They appeared in prehistoric Japan, more than ten thousand years ago, and have since served as ceremonial and religious objects."

    Oh. That's why it felt familiar. I probably saw a similar one in some temple during New Year.

    "The one in your hands, however, is different. It is said a certain individual once used it to acquire the strength of a demon in order to rebel against a cruel fate."

    "A demon..?" Horror stories always scared me, but for some reasons my mind is too focused on the stranger's words to care.

    "Power can be both a blessing and a curse. Often we must sacrifice something to obtain something else of equal value." He tilts his head. "Do you want it?"

    If I want it? "Eh? No, I mean..." But still, for some reasons I am hesitating. "I don't even have much money with me."

    "Don't worry. For you..." Faster than a viper his hand shots to my pocket and pulls out the weird leaflet I received early. "This is more than enough." And with that he steps back into the shadows, quickly disappearing as if the darkness ate him.

    I can't help but gape, thinking for a moment that I was caught into the "Twilight Zone".

    "Ise, I'm good! Can we go?"

    Until my lovely girlfriend's voice snaps me out of it. Setting my priorities straight I put the Magatama in my pocket and go back to continue the date, forgetting entirely about the strange encounter.

    Time passes, and before I knew it was already afternoon.

    It's the climax! Kiss!? A kiss before going home!? My head got hyped just by thinking about that! Oh, maybe we will go even further!

    That's what a horny male high school student like me is thinking.

    We are at the park that is away from the town. There is no sign of people, and no one is here besides us. Thanks to that, my erotic imaginations builds up. I should have read a book that teaches you to do even more naughty stuff!

    Yuuma-chan already let go of my hand and she is standing before the fountain.

    "It sure was fun today." Yuuma-chan smiles while having the fountain behind her.

    Kuu! Damn, she's cute. The sunset which is behind her gave a good atmosphere.

    "Hey, Ise-kun."

    "What is it, Yuuma-chan?"

    "There is something I want to do to celebrate our first date. Can you listen to my wish?"

    Oh yeah. It's here! This is it! This must be it! The smell of my breath! Checked! My mental preparedness! Hmm! My heart is beating so fast~!

    "W-What is the w-wish you want?"

    Aaaaagh. The tone of my voice is deep. She will find out that I'm thinking of something idiotic! I made the dumbest mistake after coming this far...

    But Yuuma-chan just smiles at me.

    She then says it to me clearly.

    "Will you die for me?"

    ..........

    ...Eh? What was that? "...Eh? That is...huh, sorry, can you repeat that again? I think there's something wrong with my ears."

    I must have heard it wrong.

    That's what I thought. That must be it. So I ask her again.

    But...

    "Will you die for me?"

    She clearly says it to me again. While laughing. Her words didn't make any sense. The moment I was about to say "That's so funny, Yuuma-chan" with a smile...

    FLAP

    Black wings appear from her back.

    She then starts to flap her wings. The black feathers float in the air and then drop down to my feet.

    W-What is that? Eh? Certainly Yuuma-chan is cute like an angel, but...

    Angel? No, there's no way that can be true. Is it some kind of acting?

    My beautiful girlfriend who is flapping her wings while the sun sets behind her. It looks like a scene from a fantasy story.

    But there is no way I can believe something like this.

    Her cute looking eyes change into cold scary eyes.

    "It was fun. The short time I spent with you. It was like playing house with a little child."

    Yuuma-chan's voice sounds very cold. Her tone is like an adult's. Her mouth is set into a cold smile.

    BUZZ

    A sound much heavier than the noise that a game console makes vibrates in the air. The thing making a lot of buzzing noise appeared in her hands.

    It looks like a spear. Is it glowing? It seems like it’s a bulk of light or something...Actually, that is a spear.

    HYU

    The sound of the wind. A nasty noise follows after it.

    DON!

    The moment I thought something grazed my stomach, the spear which was in Yuuma-chan’s hand pierces my stomach.

    She threw that at me....

    But rather than that, why? I tried to pull the spear out of me, but it disappears.

    The only thing left is a huge hole in my stomach. And blood which is flowing out from it. Blood. Blood.

    This...isn't as I envisioned my date to end at all.

    My head got dizzy, and my eyesight became blurry. I was already lying on the ground and by the time I realized it, my legs lost their balance.

    Footsteps close in on me while I'm on the ground. A small voice vaguely reaches me. It's Yuuma-chan, but the once lovely voice now sounds so cold.

    "Sorry. You were a threat to us, so we decided to get rid of you early. If you want to hold a grudge, then hate the God who put the Sacred Gear inside you."

    ...Sacred, what...?

    I don't understand. I can't even ask her a question. Her footsteps get further away from me. At the same time I started to lose my consciousness.

    The hole in my stomach. It must be fatal. I don't feel any pain. But I realized that I was in a seriously bad condition because I could feel that I was about to lose consciousness.

    It must feel nice if I lose consciousness now as if I'm going to sleep. But if that happens, I will certainly die.

    Are you serious...? Am I going to die at this age? I haven't even lived half of my life yet!

    How can I laugh if I die because I was stabbed by my girlfriend at this weird park!

    Ku...My consciousness starts to fade away while I am having such thoughts...

    It feels like many things inside me are disappearing...

    Oh yeah, I wonder what's going to happen at school tomorrow? Will Matsuda and Motohama be shocked? Will they cry for me? No way, not them...

    Mum, Dad... I haven't done anything to please them yet as their child...Rather......it's not going to be funny if they find those porno magazines I was secretly hiding after my death...

    ...Why the heck am I only thinking of these kinds of things when I'm about to die?!

    My hands...can still move. I touched my stomach and brought it in front of me.

    It's red...... Crimson red. This is my blood. My whole hand is red. This is all my blood.

    I am about to die.

    As the reality of the situation finally settles in-

    THUMP

    Something moves.

    THUMP THUMP

    I feel something start moving in my pocket and slipping outside. The thing I can't see crawls on my dying body until it stands on my chest and I can finally see it.

    It's the Magatama I brought in that strange shop. But now instead of curved its body is now straight. There are cracks in the surface and pieces are falling off, revealing what was hidden under the stone.

    A white, slender body, with metal-like scales. Minuscule tentacles wiggling from the side. Pincer-like protrusions on what I assume is the head.

    It's...enormous, obscene hybrid between a worm and a snake. We stare at each other, me in horror, before the strange thing turns around and-

    I open my mouth and scream as the creature enters the hole in my stomach and start burrowing its way into my body, up to the chest and towards my head. It reaches my brain-

    And then I scream even more as the pain grows ten-fold.

    "The one in your hands, however, is different. It is said a certain individual once used it to acquire the strength of a demon in order to rebel against a cruel fate."

    I remember the store owner's words.

    "Power can be both a blessing and a curse. Often we must sacrifice something to obtain something else of equal value."

    Just what- He did to me-

    I reach my limits, and lose consciousness.

    § § §​

    The body of Hyodo Issei keeps spasming around for a long time until, finally, it stops. Only an almost imperceptible movement of the chest confirms he's still alive, the hole in his stomach now sealed up by freshly created flesh.

    For a few seconds all is still.

    WOOO

    A red and black vortex forms and from it steps out an individual wearing a dark blue suit, with long blond hair and heterochromatic eyes. Wearing a neutral expression, with just a hint of curiosity, he observes the body before kneeling down and placing a single finger on the hole where the spear of light pierced.

    "Is he alive?"

    From the vortex another individual appears before the strange phenomenon disappears. The new arrival is a woman wearing a stylish suit that show a lot of her cleavage and legs. She is tanned, with silver hair coming down to her chin. Her upper face and eyes are covered by a mask resembling a jeweled crown.

    "He is." He man answers without turning back. "But I need a deeper analysis to be sure there are no unwanted after-effects."

    "Master, may I suggest relocating to a more discrete environment? The current one is hardly fitting."

    The man merely nods to indicate his agreement.

    The black and red vortex appears and swallow them.

    The next instant they're inside Hyodo Issei's room. The lights are off, but neither of the two need them to see perfectly in the darkness. As if guided by an invisible hand the body of the high school student levitates in the air and lands on his bed, his clothes disappearing after.

    As the man begins his analysis the woman peeks at the sleeping boy. "He doesn't appear very bright." She tilts her head in a bird-like manner. "Through, that Fallen looks even less so."

    "His intelligence is not an issue." The man answers, his finger roaming on the boy's body while glowing an ominous red. "His potential is what counts the most."

    "Yes, now I can sense it." She frowns. "Such power...what was the Avatar of the Enemy thinking, sealing such a dangerous entity into a normal human?"

    "Arrogance my dear Paimon. Pure arrogance." He smiles, an oddly vindictive light in his eyes. "He thought none would defy him, that his so called gifts are to be rewarded with eternal gratitude."

    The woman just nods at her Master's words, never once doubting them. As the man continues his analysis she starts looking around the room.

    "...All is in order." After a few minutes the man removes his finger. He gently pulls open the eyelids of one of the boy's eyes, exposing an amber-colored pupil. "The Sacred Gear didn't interfere with the process. And as far as I can see the Magatama hasn't change it. This is a success. Now the only thing left is to see how the situation will change in the future."

    "Master. Look, look." With an amused smile 'Paimon' holds up two of Issei's 'questionable' magazines. "It appears the boy's Cardinal Sin is Lust."

    He blinks once, totally unfazed by the sight. "I see. It's actually an easily exploitable weakness. I will ask Lilith to loan me one of her clan's members."

    Her smile disappear. "It...may prove difficult."

    "How so?"

    "She...is currently spending most of her time observing and communicating with that young summoner."

    Hearing that he chuckles. "Still trying to get into Raidou-kun's pants? She always liked younger boys." Abruptly his expression goes back to neutral. "It doesn't matter. She will do as I say. See to it."

    The woman just bows in deference. The vortex of black and red appears again and she steps inside, disappearing. The man make to follow her, but before taking the final step he looks behind his back at the nude, sleeping boy.

    He grins. It is not a good grin.

    "I expect great things from you."

    He takes a step forward.

    "Second Generation Hitoshura."

    And then Hyodo Issei was alone.

    § § §​

    Hereditas Daemonica
    Shin Megami Tensei X Highschool DxD

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    In the end I decided this is worth a shot. However keep in mind that I only did the prologue, and for now I have no decisive plan to write more. If there is a good reception, I may consider continuing it.
     
  2. Introspective Tinkerer

    Introspective Tinkerer Searching for their Answer

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    Excellent work Alex. The only problems I'm seeing are spelling, which really isn't that bad.
     
  3. Nekraa

    Nekraa Nekraa Moderator

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    Looks interesting. I don't know anything about Shin Megami Tensei though.

    Although it feels like you are reusing/copying very much from Highschool DxD's light novel.
     
  4. Galeiam

    Galeiam Optimistically Asexual.

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    Hmm this story feels really translated.
     
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    Nekraa Nekraa Moderator

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    What do you mean?
     
  6. Rinsemon

    Rinsemon Not too sore, are you?

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    My only real complaint is that this is pretty much just the hook. I'll need to brush up on my Shin Megami Tensei once we hit the actual plot but it looks promising.
     
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  7. Least Devotee

    Least Devotee Experienced.

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    Looks interesting, though I don't know a hell of a lot about Shin Megami Tensei.
     
  8. Introspective Tinkerer

    Introspective Tinkerer Searching for their Answer

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    Long story short, God's a prick, Lucifer's a prick, and basically anyone high up on either side of Law or Chaos is a prick. So be Neutral and kick their asses.
     
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  9. Least Devotee

    Least Devotee Experienced.

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    That much I already know, sadly it's close to the limit of my knowledge.
     
  10. noahgab1133

    noahgab1133 Don't you trust me?

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    This seems interesting. Maybe use it as a side project whenever you get hit with writers block?
     
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  11. Alexander

    Alexander That is not dead which can eternal lie

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    It's because I am trying to recreate the LN's feel. It will lessen more and more as I keep writing, so don't worry.

    And yes, this is a side project for now.
     
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  12. Warslick

    Warslick I trust you know where the happy button is?

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    Yeah, most DxD quests pretty much start off the same and then have the big variable happen when he gets attacked by Raynare. Also the point of divergence you see in allot of regular and crossover fanfic for DxD as well. It is really just a very easy place to make the change. He gets his Exaltation, he develops mighty magical powers, or a whole host of other abilities pop out at this point. A character suffering from a major trauma like this, especially this early in the series, makes for a great break point from the standard series.
     
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  13. Selias

    Selias Well worn.

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    Excuse me for a moment.

    *Squeals in joy*

    Ahem. Very nice work, Alexander.
     
  14. Galeiam

    Galeiam Optimistically Asexual.

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    Like it's been through Google Translate
     
  15. Alexander

    Alexander That is not dead which can eternal lie

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    Veritas (Verità)

    [WAKE UP! WAKE UP! IF YOU DON'T WAKE UP I’M GOING TO K-KISS YOU...]

    "...Umm." It's an alarm clock which wakes you up with a tsundere voice, but it doesn't have a function to stay silent if the owner, that would be me, wish to sleep longer. Without opening my eyes I press it to make it stops.

    CRASH!

    "Uaah!?" Hearing the sound of something violently breaking I sit up. W-What happened?! I gasp when I see tsundere-chan smashed into many, little pieces. Along with half of the night table. It's like someone hit them with a sledgehammer.

    ...Did I do it? Impossible, I may not be weak but I don't train either. I just pushed the clock harder than usual because I am still stressed for yesterday...

    Yesterday? What happened yesterday?

    Black feathers. Black wings

    Pain. Blood

    Death


    I recoil back like someone just slapped me. What are those memories?! I remember going to a date with Yuuma-chan and having fun. But then at the end, instead...

    She killed me.

    I died?

    "It was fun. The short time I spent with you. It was like playing house with a little child."

    I can still hear Yuuma-chan's cold, adult-like voice

    She pierced my stomach and left me to bleed to death.

    T-That bitch! When I get my hands on her I will squeeze her neck until it fucking po-!

    "...What?"

    What am I-Did I just considered strangling Yuuma-chan?

    That's when I realized it.

    I am angry. Thinking about my girlfriend and how much she mocked me as I die fills me with great anger. Wait. Isn't that normal? Anyone would be angry if someone killed them for an incomprehensible reason.

    ...Killed? How can I have been killed if I am alive-?!

    Worm

    Pain

    PainPainPainPainPainPainPainPainPainPainPainPainitsburrowingburrowingburrowingitsburrowinginmybodymakeitstopsmakeitstopsmakeitstops--!!!


    My mouth emits a strangled noise. I feel to the floor and curl up, putting a hand on my mouth to stop myself from retching.

    "Buargh!"

    I fail and disgorge all the food I ate yesterday on my room's floor. Dreading what I am going to find I reach down with trembling hands to raise my shirt and expose my stomach.

    Only to realize I am not wearing a shirt. And anything else for that matter.

    "Why I am naked?!"

    "Ise! Wake-up! It’s already time for school!"

    Mum's voice comes from the stairs. Just like every morning. Hearing her familiar voice I calm down.

    "Stop masturbating and get ready for school!"

    "I'm not masturbating! Geez! Give me five minutes!"

    I pick myself up. A dream, it has to be a dream. There is no way that what happened it's real. Therefore it didn't happened.

    ...But who ever heard of feeling pain in a dream? I keep asking myself that as I enter the bathroom to clean myself and find a rag to clean the floor.

    And then I freeze as I catch my reflection on the mirror. Trembling I turn to fully face it and raise a hand to my face. "C-Contacts?"

    Ouch! Ouch ouch ouch! Nope, there is nothing over my eyes.

    But the alternative...

    In every photo with me in it my brown eyes can be clearly seen. My eyes have been brown since the day I was born. The same color as Mum's.

    If so, why?

    ...Why now my eyes are Amber?!?!
     
  16. Introspective Tinkerer

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    Very good Alex. The only problems seem to be grammar and spelling, and even then it's only minor.
     
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    nightblade Gone for Good

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    He didn't notice the glowing lines on his body?
     
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    noahgab1133 Don't you trust me?

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    this is only the beginning. I look forward to more.
     
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    cross_grave Belligerent Spitire

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    Who said he has them? And yes, I do know how the Hitoshura looks. Doesn't mean Ise's gonna look the same.

    Still, this is prolly gonna give a whole lot of people nightmares once they realize what he is.
     
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  20. Alexander

    Alexander That is not dead which can eternal lie

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    Like? Pointing them out help me improve.

    I'm going to try the tested method of writing parts of chapter when inspiration hit me. Maybe this will help me make them longer.

    Anyway, what do you think? Did I do a good Issei's First POV?
     
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    Robotninja Connoisseur.

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    Try everyone. Yes, everyone.
     
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  22. Introspective Tinkerer

    Introspective Tinkerer Searching for their Answer

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    Purple is punctuation. Red is missing words or parts of words and grammar.

    Also tsundere-chan will be repaired right? She's one of Issei's and Yandere-chan's only friends! :)
     
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    The Slumbering Crocodile Sleeping in the mud

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    A Highschool DxD / Shin Megami Tensei crossover.

    Huh.

    Well, this might turn out to be . . . interesting.

    Also, Alexander, if you're doing this cross, I'd like to recommend Shard of a Broken Sun. You may find it helpful, or at least entertaining.
     
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    Galeiam Optimistically Asexual.

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    Bleh...female leads
     
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    Alexander That is not dead which can eternal lie

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    Isn't that a Shugo Chara quest with a single Exaltation and various SMT elements throw into the mix?

    Wait, there is also Persona now?

    I have nothing against female leads, they're a refreshing change, but Shugo Chara is a massive turn out for me.
     
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    Galeiam Optimistically Asexual.

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    It's not really anything against female leads...Twilight and Fangirls of it ruined the possibility of an interesting one for me. All the books I used to read had female leads.
     
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    Heaven Canceler Behind You!

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    I am pretty sure it is all playing in the SMT verse with all the stuff together, just most of it doesn't meet normally. When I read it, I think People speculated that Charas and Persona were somehow related or variations of each other in some way. I got distracted and stopped somewhere around page 40 or so of the first thread.

    It was fun and I really have to continue it at some point. Not sure why you dislike Shugo Chara, don't like the series? I am pretty sure the main character (and everyone else) is actually the one from the manga. (Which means she is around.. 10 or so I think?) I never read it and only saw the Anime, which was okay though I most liked the Music from the openings and endings.

    Twilight is just really bad porn, but without the sex, so there is nothing to distract from the horrible plot.

    My cousin read it a few times, and she actually agreed with that when I told her that this is how people described it on the internet. I really cannot undertstand how anyone could think of it as anything else than a crack fic.

    One of my favourite fanfics is If Bella Were Sane which is basically taking her and making her react like a reasonable Person to the entire stuff.

    There are great stories with female leads, one bad apple has no right to destroy them all.
     
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    Galeiam Optimistically Asexual.

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    Ah, Actually I really enjoyed the Twilight Books, granted...I didn't know it was a romance until the movies came out...years later...
     
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    Alexander That is not dead which can eternal lie

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    It just doesn't appeal to my tastes.
     
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    Galeiam Optimistically Asexual.

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    ^I never got into the Magical Girl troupe despite the fact that I loved Sailor Moon growing up.
    That said...even cutting out all the hentai, Magical Girls have become...badasses and horror fuel lately. Say goodbye to friendships beams and say hello to Assasins and tragic backstories.