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The Red Eyed Queen

Discussion in 'Creative Writing' started by siddharth1998m, Apr 15, 2019.

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    siddharth1998m Making the rounds.

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    Author Note: This Fic was inspired by Writer with bad Grammar T-T – “Crimson Dragon Emperor and Crimson Eyed Knight”. This story is a SI-OC but she doesn't know the plot after the first arc with Raynare so she doesn't know the full story of Highschool DxD.
    This story borrows elements from Naruto and Bleach.
    From Naruto: - Sharingan, Eternal Mangekyō Sharingan as well as its abilities which will be reveled in the later chapters (My OC is a Sharingan user); and Chakra also work similarly in this story as it did in Naruto so all chakra user of Highschool DxD can use jutsus from Naruto.
    From Bleach: -Angels as well as Exorcists use Quincy abilities while fallen Angels can use Kido. Now this doesn't mean Angels and Fallen Angels can’t use spears of light they can still use it how this work will be explained in the later chapters.
    The is a Femslash fanfic the OC will also not have Harem she will pick a partner and stick with her. Issei on the other hand will have a haram.
    Also if it has grammar mistakes please forgive me as English is not my first language
    I Don’t Own Naruto, Bleach or Highschool DxD
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    Prologue
    ? POV
    Another normal day at school, it's been 17 years since I was born in this world
    You must be confused about what I mean by this world aren't you? Well to tell you the truth I’m not who I am
    Anyways, my name is Akane, but my name from before was Lisa, Lisa Miles. You see I'm not originally from this world. I was doctor before; well you could say new Doctor. I just graduated from a Medical Student 1 year prior, and I'd like to tell you all about my previous life, but that's another story. I will tell you all what happen to me before I born as Akane
    One day I was about to go home from hospital, as new doctor I still worked as a secretary under a senior doctor, at that time. When I was about to cross the road my phone started ringing. I notice the traffic lamp was still red so I decide to answer. It was call from my mother; she was saying she had some problems with my father, who was drinking somewhere. So she asked me to pick him up, since the bar my father liked, is near my work place.
    While I was talking to her I noticed the traffic light become green so I decide to walk while talking on the phone, however what I didn't notice, was that some truck was moving so fast.
    It seems like the driver in hurry so he/she decide to run through, and ignore the traffic lights.
    That's when everything goes to hell.
    At last moment I manage to look at the truck since I hear someone screaming, the last I see was the lights from the truck before it hit me. At the time I feel like I'm flying, and suddenly, BAM! I feel like my backs being crushed by a mountain. I can feel everything slipping; going black. I also notice one other thing…I was going to die.
    With this realization I recall my life. I was able to remember when I graduated from high school with my friends, I remember when I played with some cadaver, when I was still in college, I remember when I laughed, when I was sad, when I fought my parents for my girlfriend, who in the end cheated on me.
    And I realized one thing...
    My life is Seriously Boring.
    I study for 12 years in school from elementary to high school, without anything interesting happening, then I spend 7 years to become doctor, not to mention I was nerd. While I thinking about this I can hear several people screaming, and my body being lifted but it useless, I can feel life start to fade from my body, I can't even open my eyes. I must have hit my head hard for me to rupture my optic nerve; I mutter one thing before I succumb to the darkness
    "I wish the next world is not boring like this one was."
    With that my body went limp.
    First thing I noticed when I died was; It's dark, very dark, it's also frightening, I feel fear start to crawl down my spine, I move, or I try to move, but somehow my body seems to have a hard time to moving!
    Then suddenly I feel something pushing me from behind! I was about to turn and see what push me but I can't! I can't see anything! It is to dark!
    The darkness does not stay for long...
    I suddenly see light. Yes, a light! I can feel my body being pushed to that light! I didn't think anything about that at the time; I was just thinking to get out from this darkness!
    To that light!
    With that I try to move to the light, being helped by something that pushed me on, more precisely I helped pushing me, when I reached the light, suddenly the entire world was a blur to me. It wasn't quite color blindness, but the easiest thing to see was the stark contrast between light and dark.
    I could see shapes and edges but the world looked incredibly confusing. Now this isn't what I expected. I was thinking, trying to see where I was, but something blurry like this?! No, not something expected at all!
    I was about to speak, but I found no words, rather it's more like Babbling? I then yelled, shouted, roared, but my voice it seemed to stay away! I can felt something wetting my face. I tried to touch my face, but I found I can't move my hands or legs! I can feel I was being lifted and carried.
    Now I know I'm not that tall or heavy but…This is ridiculous! I can fell I am being held in the crook of someone's arm! What is carrying me, a Giant; a Monster?!
    Once again fear started to crawl through my body. Naturally I was not the type of person who was easy get afraid of something. I mean I have seen cadavers that only have half a face, cadavers who got it guts spilled, locked alone with a dozen corpses, seeing a gruesome wound from patients, but I don't know why I am afraid now.
    Seeing talking and shouting were useless. I did the only thing I could have. I screamed. I wailed. I cried
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    17 years later
    "Issei" A sweet voice called within a bedroom. "Issei It is time to get up now" The voice was that of a young woman, directing it towards the lone bed in the room. "Damn it Issei!! Wake up or we are going to be late for the school”
    Though the young women called, he still in the bed didn't respond to her besides saying "Oppai hehehehe~" in a perverted manner, squeezing his hands across the pillow as his drool came out over said pillow, coating it in his saliva.
    The young man in question was around 17 years old boy of average height, at around 5ft 7inches tall, with short spiky brown hair, with two short locks of hair behind his head, and light brown eyes. He was average build and seemed to be fit for a young man his age.
    This young man was Issei Hyoudou, the younger Twin brother of the young women who was trying to wake him up.
    The young women who was trying to wake her brother was Akane Hyoudou. She was 4 minutes Older than her brother thus being twin siblings they both shared similar features aside from her spikey long black waist-length hair with shoulder-length bangs framing the sides of her face, covering most of her right eye, she also had onyx colored eyes unlike her brother’s light brown eyes. She was wearing a new Kuoh girls uniform that hid her impressive figure.
    “Issei” Akane whispered into her brother’s ears with a dangerously sweet voice. “Wake up or else I will burn all of your porn collection” she threatened her elder brother.
    “Nooooo” The reaction to the threat was instant as Issei screaming. “Well if you don’t want me burn all of them. Then I suggest you go get ready I don’t want to be late at my first day at school because of you” And with that Akane left her brothers room to join her parents for breakfast.
    “Man she hasn't changed one bit” Issei grumbled getting up from his bed rubbing his eyes still sleepy
    “So Akane are you exited for your first day at Kuoh?” Her father asks her while eating his breakfast and reading his newspaper
    “Yeah I guess it would be a new experience for me” Akane tells her father while eating her breakfast
    “Morning Mom Dad” Issei greeted his parent as he joins them for breakfast dressed in his school uniform before he started eating his breakfast in silence which irked Akane a little bit she just got back home yesterday and such was just itching to bully her little brother just a little bit.
    “So Issei did you find yourself a real girlfriend while I was gone or you are still dating your right hand?” Akane asked ribbing her brother. Upon hearing her question both Issei and her Father spewed out what they were chewing while her mother gave her the look she used to give when she used to annoy her brother when they were little.
    “What!!!! Yes, I mean no I have girlfriend now one with a big Oppai” Issei blurted out clearly being caught off-guard by her question. “Sure you do” Akane mocks him Clearly seeing through his white lie
    “Anyways Akane I am surprised that you still wanted to finish your High school in Japan after 6 years of studying in the Boarding School in Italy with Irina” Her Mother asks her deciding to come to her son’s rescue and changes the subject.
    “Well I always wanted to finish my High school with Issei Mom plus Irina was also leaving to start her training as a Priest so it left very little reason for me stay there” Akane answered her mother
    “Well it’s great that you are back home” Issei tells her twin sister with a bright smile “that reminds me which class did She get mom” Issei asks his mother
    “Ohh she is in the same class as you Issei” their mother tells him. “Well then you better follow me Akane” Issei tells his twin sister who nods in response
    They finish their breakfast before leaving for school.
    “This feels kind of nostalgic isn't it” Issei asked his sister as they headed towards the school “You know us going to school together when we were little” He continued
    “Together Dear Brother I distinctly remember it was only me going to school while you had to be dragged there either by Grandpa or Grandma” Akane teased her brother while giggling at the memory
    “I was a kid at that time you know and do you really have bring that memory up again Mom and Dad had finally stopped teasing me about It” Issei moaned about the fact in embarrassment
    “Hey it was you reminiscing about our childhood it just corrected your inconstancy about that time” Akane replied before flicking Issei in the head. “So how is Grandma I heard she went back to Kyoto?” She asked silently as they walked towards the school.
    “Hmm she is fine I guess she visits us once or twice a year and still hadn't changed that much” Issei replied wryly getting a laugh from his sister
    “Did she not call you when you were in Italy as I remember Mom did give her a cellphone as gift on her birthday?” Issei asked
    “and how many times did she call you using that cellphone?” Akane asked back “You know she does not like talking to people on phone and prefers face to face meeting” she continued
    “A person’s mouth can lie but their eyes will always tell the truth” Issei quoted what her grandmother always said to them regarding to talking to someone on phone.
    “So you were paying attention during our lessons” Akane praised Issei a little who just turned his head away from her so she can’t see that he was blushing
    “Anyways how about we do some sparring after the just like the old days” Akane asked
    “I don’t know Akane there is a very good chance that I will hanging out with my friends after school” Issei replied a little apologetically “plus you do remember that Mom rented our grandparents shrine to someone else right?” he continued not realizing that they had reached their destination and were greeted with a shocked expression of the students.
    When they entered the school Campus it caused quite a chaos that one of the perverted trio had a hot chick with him, Akane was rather amused by their reaction
    “Issei!!! Who is the hot chick you”? A bald guy shouts at Issei Clearly angry thinking Issei got a girlfriend before them
    “B34-W23-H89 Damn Issei” A guy tells Issei while Adjusting his glasses
    “Wow that’s actually accurate” Akane tells the guy impressed by his correct observations “Wait seriously” Issei turned towards her with a perverted expression amazed about the reveal “Wait a second…” before he came back to his senses and punches both of them in their faces “That’s my Twin sister you dumb morons”
    “Issei why don’t you introduce your friend to me” Akane asked her brother looking clearly amused by their interaction
    “Yeah sure the bald guy there is Matsuda and the guy with glasses is Motohama, Guys this my Twin sister Akane” Issei Introduces them to each other
    “Ohhh yeah now that I remember you did tell us about your sister once but wasn't she studying abroad?” Motohama asked while adjusting his glasses.
    “Yeah she was studying in Italy but now had transferred back to Kuoh and will be starting her classes today” Issei answered
    “Anyways I will join you two later after I had introduced Akane to our homeroom Teacher” And with that Issei guides her towards their classroom, Issei Introduces her to their Homeroom teacher who told her to wait outside the class and wait for him to call her in so she can introduce herself to the class.
    “All right class we have a new transfer student joining us from Italy. Ms. Hyoudou Please come in” the Homeroom teacher asks Akane to Introduce herself
    Akane enters the class where both the guys and the girls were looking at her with interest as she writes her name in the blackboard “My Name Is Akane Hyoudou I am pleased to meet you all and I look forward to study with you all” Most of the students in the class were surprised that the new girl might be related to One of the perverted trio and were itching to ask her about their relationship which the homeroom teacher picked up.
    “Okay does anybody wants to ask Ms. Akane a question they can ask her before we start the class” the Homeroom teacher tells his class
    “Akane-san are you by means related to Hyoudou-kun over their” the girls introduce herself as Aika Kiryuu asks her
    “Issei is my younger Twin brother Kiryuu-san he is 4 minutes younger than me” Akane answer her question which shocks all the students before their teacher interrupts them and show Akane where she needs to sit and Starts the class.
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    “So Sona were you able to do a thorough background check on Akane Hyoudou?” A young woman with long knee length crimson hair with an extra pluck sticking out on top, blue eyes with a taint of green, she was tall and had a busty hourglass figure asked out loud while sitting naked in a steam room with a beautiful young woman with a voluptuous figure, very long black hair and violet eyes. Her hair was usually tied in a long ponytail, reaching all the way down to her legs with two strands sticking out from the top and sloping backward, with an orange ribbon keeping it in place.
    This young woman with crimson hair was Rias Gremory who was a 3rd year student at Kuoh Academy and is the Academy's number one idol. She is also known as one of the "Two Great Ladies" and sitting beside her was Akeno Himejima who ranks second in popularity after Rias, and was the other "Two Great Ladies of Kuoh Academy", they were both president and vice-president of the Occult research club of Kuoh Highschool.
    “I have but none of the information is concrete” a young bespectacled woman with a slim figure, black hair styled in a short bob cut and violet eyes answered while sitting in front of Rias in the steam room sitting with her was a young bespectacled woman with long straight black hair that extends all the way down to her knees, with split bangs and heterochromic eyes, with a violet left eye and a light brown right eye.
    This young woman with slim figure was Sona Sitri and the women who was sitting with her was Tsubaki Shinra they were both president and vice president of the Kuoh Academy’s student council.
    “The only solid information I have on her out of the ordinary is that she moved to Italy with the family of exorcists that lived here before the church surrendered this area to your brother. The school she was in is well known place were the church trains their most gifted students to become exorcists” Sona tells Rias in a serious tone.
    Few days ago Sona received information from their principle that a transfer student will be joining their second year batch from Italy It was kind of normal for their school to have few transfer students coming in from abroad. But this was a special case as the girl was Issei Hyoudou’s twin, both Sona and Rias had sensed there was some potential in the boy and wanted him to join their Peerage but they were not able to decide who will get him so Sona was surprised and was curious about the girl and started going through her profile. The information she found on Akane Hyoudou were vague but what she found was concerning enough that she had to contact Rias.
    “An Exorcist? Sona are you sure?” Rias asked her
    “Like I said no information about her is concrete aside from the information I just gave you Rias.” Sona tells her
    “Well she did notice us as well as all of our peerage members the moment she entered school this morning” Akeno tells them as Rias had asked her keep an eye on her “She knew we were keeping an eye her and didn’t seemed that concerned about that” Akeno later added
    “the fact that she has moved back to Japan is also weird” Tsubaki adds
    “Yes Exorcists especially the young one generally don’t leave their academy. Hmmm maybe she is a rouge” Akeno thought out loud
    “Highly unlikely She had submitted legitimate Transfer papers when she took admission here and believe me I have checked them thoroughly” Sona tells Akeno
    “Rias I think we should invite Akane in the clubhouse and ask her directly she is in a devil’s territory after all” Akeno gave her thought on the situation to Rias who took some time think it through “You know what it’s not a bad idea, why don’t you invite Akane to the clubhouse tomorrow but until then I want all familiars to follow her” Rias gave Akeno her orders who nods in response
    “Sona, Tsubaki you two should also join us tomorrow” Rias tells them
    “Why Rias are you thinking about asking her join your peerage” Sona asks slyly already knowing Rias answer.
    “Well she did show more potential than her brother and she does know about us so it’s a win-win situation for both of us, if she decides to join my Peerage you can take Issei Sona” Rias tells Sona
    “And if she doesn’t join your peerage” Sona asks her
    “then we will be back to where we were” Rias replies
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    “YOU WHAT” Mr. and Mrs. Hyoudou shouted in disbelief while Akane was eating dinner quietly
    “I have a girlfriend now” Issei said proudly before looking at Akane “what no reactions”
    “I thought you had a girlfriend for a while weren’t you telling me about her during the breakfast today? Or was I right all along” Akane asks slyly smiling at Issei reaction who looked like a deer caught in the headlight
    “O-O Of course I was talking about her we have dating for a while now hehehe” Issei answered her
    “What’s her name anyway” Their mother asks him
    “Yuuma Amano” Issei tells them the name of his girlfriend. That name immediately caught Akane attention “So it begins huh” She whispers to herself deep in thought
    "Hey Akane what's wrong? You seem pale? Are you sick” Issei asks her
    “Well joking aside… Issei seriously, some girl asking to go out with you? Brother I admit you aren't ugly because saying your ugly is the same as saying I am ugly too. From what Mom told me your reputation in the school is not great because you are a pervert, and now out of nowhere this girl comes and asks you on date? Don't you find it strange, have you asked her why she wanted to go out with you?" Akane asked him while both of their parents were looking at Issei with a little worry
    "Hey! Don't you believe in my natural charm?!" Issei said in hurt tone for which he only got a deadpanned look from his family
    “Do you want me to say it out loud” Akane deadpanned
    "But what Akane said is true Issei. You have to be careful okay?" Mother said with a worried tone and Issei nodded.
    "Don't worry! I will introduce her to you tomorrow Akane! Our date is this Sunday; I mean 3 days from now! You have to see her Mom, Dad, Akane, she a beauty, with big Oppai!" Issei said with perverted face that makes Akane roll her eyes “Of course she is a beauty, she is a Fallen Angel after all” she mutters under her breath.
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    siddharth1998m

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    Chapter-2

    Hyoudou Residence
    It was half past midnight every member of the Hyoudou family were asleep by now everyone except for Akane who was still awake sitting in her bed as she couldn't sleep, her brother's Girlfriend or to be precise the Fallen angel Raynare was on her mind and was making her a little skittish. Though it was not Raynare that was making her skittish as she knew her brother will eventually beat her and if not She herself can deal with her personally she was but a minor annoyance.
    No It was the aftermath that she was worried about as she didn't actually know what was in store for her Dear Brother in the future as she never watched an Episode past the first Arc. Which on hind side she was really regretting that decision "Who knew not watching the entire season of an Anime which was an equivalent to a softcore Pornography with great premise might come to bite back to bite me in my arse" Akane thought bitterly
    Thought one thing Akane was sure about that her brother would not have a normal life of a teenager after that as threat escalation is kind of a normal motif for plot of an Anime, especially this world of Anime where all the mythologies that are known to man are real and she had gotten the first-hand experience of how annoyingly complicated things can get quickly in her travels.
    "I might as well get some training done" Akane muttered as she gets out of her bed and get changed into her normal training clothes a haori and hakama not the best choice for clothing during combat as it slowed down movement but they served as a perfect training garments after you put some weights in them.
    After getting dressed as well as picking up her Battle Deck she left the house through her bedroom window and left for her Grandparents shrine that was situated at the top of in the hilly mountain areas of Kuoh.

    1 A.M After Midnight
    A Bright glowing crimson seal appeared out of nowhere and from it a lone figure came out
    "Ara ara Today sure was interesting" Akeno said to herself just returning home after completing all the contracts she had left pending something that Rias has been bugging her for about a few days now. The only thing that was left for her to do was to check up on her familiars who had been tasked to follow Akane Hyoudou.
    "I Summon Thee Mezu" Akeno summoned her familiars who answered her call immediately as 4 summon seals appeared in front of her four chibi Oni came out which made Akeno frown as one of them did not answer to her call.
    "Mezu where is your younger brother" Akeno asked the Oni who was slightly taller than the three behind him who looked behind at his sibling as if looking for his sibling before turning while rubbing his head as if he was confused himself
    Akeno sighed "Don't bother I will go find him he might have fallen asleep somewhere like the last time as he has not yet returned to summon realm" Akeno said as the rest of the Oni were handing her the Memory tear while the elder Oni bowed before Akeno trying to apologize for his younger brother's mistake which made Akeno laugh softly "It's not a big deal Mezu great job regardless come back to me on Sunday I will have some snacks ready for all of you" she later added which made all of them jump up and down joy before they went back to the summon realm.
    "Now then where are you?" Akeno said to herself as a small orb appeared in her hand which was making a beeping sound telling her how far the her familiar is.
    "Well that's strange he is quite close" Akeno said checking the distance between her and the familiar who was close too close as the map showed the signal was coming from the Lake that was walking distance away from the house.
    After confirming that the signal was correct Akeno left through the backyard door of her house and with the map that tracked her familiar every movement and started to follow the route map showed her towards the signal on foot.
    She was enjoying her walk through the wood in the middle of the night, she normally takes a strolls in the wood like this quite often mostly after she had returned home after finishing that day work but the last few weeks have kept her busy. The sound of crickets and occasional hoot of the owls always calmed her down when she was stressed as it reminded her of her childhood home and how she and her mother would also take strolls together. This was one of the reasons why she choose to live there and not stay with Rias.
    As Akeno got close the location of the signal the sound of swords clashing can be heard coming from the lake and the sound was loud enough to draw her attention. She was pretty sure that her Familiar was not in danger because if that would have been the case he would have activated his Panic button and she and the rest of her peerage would have been alerted immediately. She decided it was best to call some backup and check what was the source of the sound and summoned a Gremory seal called for Rias to come immediately.
    After a few minutes someone did appear in the seal a petite girl with white hair and hazel eyes appeared. The front of her hair has two long bangs going past her shoulders and several loose bangs hanging over her forehead, while the back has a short bob cut. She also wearing a black cat-shaped hair clip on both sides of her hair. She usually wears the Kuoh Academy girls' school uniform, without the shoulder cape but at this moment she was in her PJs.
    "Koneko? Why are you here I called for Rias?" Akeno asked the petite girl who looked like she was still a little asleep
    "Her Parents called her back home for the night" Koneko answered in her usual monotone voice "Why have you called me here Akeno?" Koneko asked after looking around her surroundings Akeno can this time clearly hear the tone of complaint coming from her voice which made Akeno giggle a little
    "For someone who has been a devil as long as I have you still have not gotten used to our sleep schedule Koneko" Akeno tells while her fingers tries to scratch Koneko Cat ears for a purr but only getting a hiss from the annoyed Nekoshou
    Thought the girls where interrupted when they heard some trees falling near the lake "Was that the reason you called?" Koneko asked slapping away Akeno hand
    "Yeah one of my familiars is missing and the signal is coming from the lake. No Panic button has been pressed and he also have not returned to the summon realm" Akeno Quickly informed Koneko about the situation
    "Have you checked the Memory tears?" Koneko asked as she took out her Black fighter gloves with a pink cat paw on the top.
    "My familiars were tasked with following Akane Hyoudou around it will take me a while to go through all of them" Akeno answered "Do you think the individuals at the lake would are hostile" Akeno asked as she saw Koneko put on her Fighter gloves with a frown as when it comes to predicting the outcome of any situation after a quick rundown no one could beat Koneko at that as her instincts were so finely tuned. This was also one of the reasons why Rias stopped bothering her to play chess with her as none of the matches ended with a clear victor as most matches either it ended on a draw or Koneko would draw out the match and annoy Rias to the point that she just forfeits.
    "If the individuals are supernatural then are trespassing on Area that belongs to the Gremory and we have a right to ask question" Koneko replied not clearly answering her question though her voice answered Akeno questions as this voice only used when they are hunting Strays.
    "Be on your guard" Koneko warned Akeno who nodded as they slowly moved toward the area following the blinking signal.
    After walking for a few minutes they came across a few fallen trees that they heard fall before after that the whole area has gone eerie quiet, it looked like whoever was there at the pond is either gone or was now hiding purposefully thought on the other hand her familiars signal has not moved and they were close
    "What do you think Koneko?" Akeno asked her about the fallen trees
    Koneko didn't answer just crouched to check the area of the impact from where the tree broke "Weird"
    "Hmmm?" Akeno questioned
    "Someone was thrown in to this which broke on Impact but the tree did not fall because of the impact like it should have. Look at it yourself" Koneko replied to Akeno who crouched down to check what she was trying to say
    "The force of Impact was enough that person would have gone through the tree causing it to fall the initial impact can be clearly seen in the bark but the tree actually fell because of the its weight. It's like the person thrown disappeared during the impact" Koneko continued
    "Let's move we are close to my familiar" Akeno said getting up while Koneko nodded and they moved towards the signal




    Within a few minute they reached the location Akeno could see the lake now it was looking beautiful under the bright moonlight It was still a little eerie because of the silence.
    "Koneko can you see Mezu somewhere?" Akeno asked looking at the map it should have been beeping as they have reached their destination "Koneko?" she asked again but not getting a reply from her
    "Koneko?" She looked to check on her but she was not there she quickly checked the perimeter to look for her but she was not there
    "What the!.." Akeno noticed she was being consumed by the sand when she tried to use her hand to summon her magic it got constricted by some vine which were pulling her pulling her towards something she quickly checked the source of the vine and found she was being pulled into a tree "Fuck!" She closed her eyes tried to concentrate in order to summon her lighting but failed to do so. Though she felt someone shaking her "Akeno Wake up" She heard Koneko voice calling her
    When Akeno opened her eyes she noticed everything was back to normal Vines from the tree as well as the sand where all gone. The sound of Owls hooting and crickets chirping also returned.
    "What Happened?" Akeno asked out loud felling a little rattled
    "We were under a Genjutsu" She heard Koneko answer from behind. She looked behind to check up on her and noticed She had her hand placed on her back "I had to give you some of my Chakra to break you out of it" Koneko added
    They were interrupted by the beeping sound form Akeno's map notifying them that they had reached their destination
    "Are you okay?" Koneko asked looking a little concerned
    Akeno takes a deep breath before replying to her "I am Fine now. Let go and get Mezu"
    "I can help you with that" A Mysterious voice interrupts them alerting both of them as get ready for a potential fight before checking its source
    "Akane Hyoudou" Akeno said her name out loud recognizing the young women who was sitting on tree branch dressed in a haori and hakama
    "Are you looking for this little guy?" Akane took the Unconscious Oni out and was holding by its tail "I found this little Guy out of my house spying on me. You don't happen to know anything about that Right?" Akane asked them Knowingly Only getting a glare form the two of them which she found amusing
    "Was it you who casted the Genjutsu?" Koneko asked trying to gauge the threat
    "OHH Did you encounter the haunted trees that reside in the mountain areas of Kuoh I heard they like to consume young humans in order to create new trees just like them" Akane replied with a deliberate condescending tone just to annoy them even further but after getting no reaction other than a glare out of them She decided to quit screwing around and jumps down from the tree branch she was sitting on. This made both girls take a step back take a battle pose ready to fight back if Akane attacked them.
    "Here take him" Akane offered them to take back the Oni but none of them came forward to take him instead staying where they are "Come on, I don't have all night to waste here I need to go home take a bath and get some sleep" She tells them who share a look then a nod and Akeno slowly moves towards her to take back her familiar from her hands who give the Oni back without any problem.
    "Now then It was wonderful meet you two on this lovely night but its time I go back home" Akane tells then as she leaves "WAIT!" Akeno stops her from leaving
    "I have a message for you from my Master Rias Gremory" Akeno tells her as she put her familiar in her skirt's pocket he looked fine and was in a deep sleep.
    "Go on" Akane asks her to continue curious about the message
    "My Master has invited you join us in our Clubhouse tomorrow after our classes are done. We know you were involved with Exorcist before you came back and as the Devil whose area you are in she wants to know your intentions. We will send you someone to your class who will Escort you to the Clubhouse" Akeno Tells her the full message as well as strongly suggesting that the choice of not going to clubhouse is invalid and she has to come meet Rias
    "Is there anything else" Akane asked
    "No that was all" Akeno answered get out of Akane way
    And with single hand-sign which alerted the Akeno and Koneko again, Akane Leaves surrounded by a whirlwind of leaves and wind leaving the two of them behind.
    "She is chakra user and a skilled one as well" Koneko tells her being reminded of her sister who could also do those techniques.
    "Should we have asked her some more questions like who was she fighting with back there we did hear swords clashing right" Akeno asked her
    "She must have been using the Shadow clone Jutsu its functions kind fits perfectly to tree that we encountered earlier as shadow clones tend dispel we they get hit with a solid attack" Koneko explains
    "Also you are coming with me to stay at Rias place. There is a less risk of a potential attack there" Koneko tells Akeno who nods getting with reasoning behind her decision and they leave with summon seal.



    Author Note: The words that are in Bold Italic are some powers up or accessories whose function will be explained in the later chapters. Some of them are pretty self-explanatory others have some functions which will be explained later
    If You are like how this fic is going or have some question regarding the it, please leave its in the thread I will answer it when i see them I am kind of new to this site so I am Apologizing in advance for any mistake i make. this fic is also posted in Fanfiction.net under same title
     
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    Interesting. Seems a little too convenient that Akane studied abroad just so that we could keep the canon on rails.
    I'm looking forward to see the chakra angle like whether Senjutsu follow the DxD or Naruto rules and who all can use chakra.

    Also, it's my personal opinion, but I don't like reading past life, dying and getting born scenes. They are way too common and generally not relevant.
    Same for your character intros. There's no need to describe what Rias or Sona look like, or their reputations. Maybe talk about those familiars instead.
     
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    The reason for her being away from Kuoh will be explored later down the line. SI-OC stuff i can understand as not many people can write great story using that though one of my favorite stories ever written in Fiction and fanfic had been sort of Self insert
    Fiction: Dante's Inferno, purgatorio and Paradiso (I will be using factors and principal introduced in this Book in my fic),
    Fan-fiction; Walk on the moon by Six perfection (If you haven't read it Read it! Its amazing)
    But i won't be using the past life subplot as there is nothing to it other she knows the initial beginning of the story
     
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    mapu Know what you're doing yet?

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    Impressively bad idea, characterization and grammar. Please use dots. Lear how character power curves work, or at least how to to curb stomp comedy. Also how to establish a scene, and not jump around in time. This Is multi-cross marry sue, not an OC. Also you are using synonyms or repeating same word to describe things, that should be actually described in more than one word. You know like description? Describe the sound, smell, tactile feeling, color, emotions it invokes, closest comparisons? Not just "It was dark in dark place" or "I shouted a roar" or whatever. Also describe the facial expressions, or actions(crying, smashing fist on table and so on) not emotions, if you have to convey them. Also the emotion of the direct speech should be obvious by the context clues.
     
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    Blunt Critique I like it
    Again i am not a English speaker and not a writer with this being my first story so i know there are problem with the Grammer and Dialogue and for that i am looking for a Co-Author who could brush those up for me
    The Marry Sue stuff - I have not even revealed what her current power set is and she is labeled Marry Sue Jesus . The most Power she has shown and used is in the second chapter that being a genjutsu which again Koneko Broke Instantly and freed Akeno. Now if this fact was not well explained in the that chapter it would have been in the later ones. And i don't Think Labeling any character as an Marry sue or Gary stu even before the first major arc or a fight is just not fair in my opinion.
    Still U r blunt Critique is much appreciated as i am not Hiding the fact that suck at writing dialogue and my English but i also want to improve those mistakes as well
     
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    mapu Know what you're doing yet?

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    Put dots at end of your sentences. Will improve your writing greatly.
     
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    End of a dialogue or inner monologue
     
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    Sure i will do that
     
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    You still use dots in dialogue, especially in between different people talking. Especially if you do different paragraphs. You don't put a run-on sentence in different paragraphs. Or at least put in some commas, even if it does not make sense as people speaking are different. Also if you use actual question and exclamations marks you don't need to do stuff like "questioned questioningly" you have after direct speech. Are you confused to where put punctuation marks in direct speech? Because you just need to put something at the end of your sentence, irregardless of direct speech, and quotation marks don't really count as a sentence end.
     
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    I have been told i use way to many adverbs in my work and my Grammer is also bad mostly because my whole English vocabulary mostly came from watching sitcoms
     
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    Author Note: This is a rewrite of the first chapter that will be followed by the second chapters’ rewrite
    1. Why am I rewriting this Fic?
    2. It simple I found a way to make my OC a little more compelling in my opinion as I was writing the third chapter before the rewrite I realized that my character needed more of a compelling reason to move forward. Plus, the Hyoudou Family back is the most normal of all so it really didn’t mix well with my OC character. So I changed Akane to Akane Orimura she is a separate character. She knew Issei as a kid and later became friends with Irina as well.
    Oh and also I have answered a few Q and A that I have got at the end of the chapter.
    This story borrows elements from Naruto and Bleach.
    From Naruto: - Sharingan, Eternal Mangekyō Sharingan as well as its abilities which will be revealed in the later chapters (My OC is a Sharingan user); and Chakra also work similarly in this story as it did in Naruto so all chakra user of Highschool DxD can use Justus from Naruto.
    From Bleach: -Angels, as well as Exorcists, use Quincy abilities while fallen Angels can use Kido. Now, this doesn’t mean Angels and Fallen Angels can’t use spears of light they can still use it how this work will be explained in the later chapters.
    The is a Femslash fanfic the OC will also not have Harem she will pick a partner and stick with her. Issei, on the other hand, will have a haram.
    Also if it has grammar mistakes please forgive me as English is not my first language
    I Don’t Own Naruto, Bleach or Highschool DxD
    Beta reader- NoLifeFaction
    The Red Eyed Queen

    Chapter-1
    "Attention All passengers, this is your Captain speaking. We are currently on our final approach to Haneda Airport. Please fasten your seatbelts until further notice. Thank you." A Japanese voice said over the speakers and the passengers began to clasping their seatbelts with the attendants helping however they can.

    In the first class cabin, the folks there too were getting ready for landing.

    A flight attendant was making their final rounds, inspecting each person if they were secured for the landing as airplane landings can be somewhat rough. So far, everyone was secured except for the last one.

    In the far corner of the cabin was a young woman in her late teens, seating cross-legged leaning on her head on her hands as she looked like she was reading a magazine that was lying at top of one of her legs. She had a spikey long black waist-length hair with shoulder-length bangs framing the sides of her face, covering most of her right eye which made it difficult for the attendant to know whether she was sleeping or busy reading as she could not see her other eyes which were obscured by her hand.

    Seeing that calling her by words was no use, the stewardess opted to just tap her gently to catch her attention. Stretching an arm out to her, she tapped her shoulder which got her attention.

    Feeling something, the young women turned to her right and saw that one of the stewardesses was there with a smile. She closes the Magazine which she was reading. "Yes?" she questioned

    The stewardess couldn't help but smile as the young women Onyx colored eye were looking at her “We are about to land, Miss. So, please fasten your seatbelt” the stewardess asked with a friendly smile

    “Oh Thank you” the young women replied with a smile on her face as the stewardess moves along.

    Once her seatbelt was fastened, the young women took a breath and laid back in her chair. As she looked outside the window she saw the city of Tokyo drawing ever closer.

    “Well, its look like I am back,” She said to herself enjoying the scenery as she laid back further into her chair as the aircraft began its final approach to the airport.

    "Attention all passengers, this is Captain Shin Yamamoto. We have arrived at Haneda Airport. We thank you for flying with Tokyo Air, and I bid you all a good day. Thank you and enjoy your stay in Japan."

    The young women was dragged out of her thoughts when she learned that the plane has stopped and the other passengers were all preparing to disembark. "Huh...how 'bout that." She muttered to herself putting away the inflight magazine back where it was and went about unbuckling herself.

    She made her way out of the first class cabin, the flight attendants moving the passengers along and saying their goodbyes. One stewardess, the same one who had told her to put her seatbelts on earlier, waved goodbye. She was a little too friendly her taste.

    Nonetheless, She replied with a smile and a curt nod before exiting the plane and into the terminals. Once she was out of the tube and into the main terminal, she breathed in the new air. “It’s best I keep a low profile until I get in contact with the Devils here,” She said to himself walking with the other passengers towards the conveyor belts where she waited for the rest of her luggage to come. It didn't take long for it to come along and she hauled it out of the belt.
    Extending the handle and pulling it alongside her, she made her way to the check-out station with her ticket and passport in hand.

    "Next, please." The clerk said

    "Kon'nichiwa." She greeted in Japanese, a language that she had not spoken in years something the clerk picked up on as handed her documents

    “Been a while since you've spoken Japanese Huh?” Clerk asked picking up on her Italian accents as he checked her documents

    “Something Like that” She replied with the Italian accent present in her voice

    “Well I pretty sure your normal accent will come back in a month or two I have seen similar cases like you a lot here” The Clerk replied still busy

    Satisfied with what he's seeing, the clerk took out his stamp and cleared the ticket and the passport and gave it back to the Her. "Here you go. Welcome back to Japan." He said with a friendly smile.

    "Dōmo arigatōgozaimashita." She returned the smile and went on her way as the next passenger took her place.
    After having her luggage person checked for anything suspicious, she moved towards the Airport restroom
    “Might as well get rid of the loose ends” She muttered under her breath as she spots a restroom which had wet floor sign in front of the door. After a quick look around her perimeter after finding everything’s clear she quickly enters the restroom which looked empty she would have checked all the stalls just to be sure but she was short on time, she had a few people waiting for her at the entrance.

    She quickly takes out her mobile phone from her jeans pocket before taking out the sim card and breaking it in half then throwing it away in the trash and started to scratch out sticker inside which had the phone's model No. and other details printed on it. As she was doing that she heard a slight moaning noise coming from one the restroom stalls at first she did not pay any attention to thinking someone was answering nature's call. But as the noises did not stop she got suspicious and decided to check it out and concentrated her chakra towards her ears to temporarily enhance her hearing but what she found made her regret her decision.

    “Out of all the places in the world who finds airport restrooms suitable place for Sex” She thought to herself as she bends sideways to check out the restroom stalls gaps finding two sets of feet present there close to each other and a women’s clothing fallen on the floor “They are not even trying to hide that fact” she adds shaking her head before deciding to leave the restroom after ditching her phone as well but she stopped when her ears picked up the horny couple’s conversation

    “I have been waiting for him to leave for so long” Her ears picked up a male voice grunting

    “And whose fault is that huh You just could just couldn’t help yourself and made me pregnant. Of course, your brother would have come back to see his wife after she gave birth to her son” A women voice answered between moans, as her ears picked small low pitched malice filled laugh coming from the male as the women’s moan start to get louder.

    “Enjoying themselves aren’t they,” She thinks in clear disgust of what she has just heard looking around she did not find any other luggage other than hers so lovely couple came to airport drop her husband and his brother off.

    Normally she would have ignored couples in a situation like this but not these two. She always did have a particular hatred towards people who commit adultery and started looking around restroom trying to brainstorm an idea before it hits her as it has been in her hands all along. She snatches the women clothes of the floor who too busy enjoying herself to notice they are gone and dumps them in the trash can where she had thrown away her sim card before dumping her phone in there as well and with a small scale fire Jutsu she lights the trash can up while her phone melts slowly the women’s clothes were up in flames immediately. And with her work done here, she leaves for the airport’s exit knowing that smoke detectors in the restroom will do the rest of her job. Within 20 secs after she had left the room smoke detectors went of prompting the officer and civilian’s nearby to take notice.

    After a few minutes, a women’s loud screech can be heard in that corridor which drew a lot of attention of people there who decided to check it out. This made the young women Chuckle in delight “Severs you two right” She muttered as she made her way towards the crowd of people who were standing there waiting for someone, some of them were even holding signs with names written on them. She looked at the crowd trying to find her ride to the city.

    Giving the crowd a once over, she saw someone holding a sign with her name on it. She figured that was her ride there so she went to the middle-aged man.

    The man saw someone coming towards him and assumed that this was the one he was sent to fetch. "Hello, are you by any chance the one I'm sent to pick up?"

    "I am." The young women nodded and bowed her head in respect as is customary in Japan. "A pleasure to meet you..."

    "A pleasure to meet you as well." The man gave a smile and bowed in return. "Come, my car is this way."

    The two of them went to the parking lot and eventually arrived where the older man's car was parked, he opened up his car trunk to put her luggage in and while she proceeded to enter the back seat.

    “Ms. Yamada had asked me to take you to your new apartment she had picked out for you in Kuoh. That should take us about an hour and a half depending on the traffic.” He tells her

    “An Apartment why?” She asked him “I already have a house beside the shrine in Kuoh which my grandmother left me after her Death” she later added

    “You can ask Ms. Yamada that question as she will be waiting for you there.” He answered as he gets inside the car

    “Where is Ms. Yamada anyway? I thought she was supposed to pick me up at the airport?” She asked the car starts moving

    “She was actually going to come with me to pick you but Your school called to inform her that she had forgotten to give them some of your essential documents for your Admission. She literally spent the entire morning scrambling on her office computer to find the copy of all those documents” He replied with humor present his voice

    “Oh, Yamada-san... Did she find the document she needed before you came here to pick me up?” She asked him dreading that she had to do that on her own

    “She did Don’t worry about It.” He assured her “I actually dropped her off at your new school while on my here. So just relax I am pretty sure your admission to the school should be done by now” He adds later as he drives toward their destination

    She sighed and laid back on her seat “I will take you up on that” She replied while looking outside the window of the car

    Meanwhile at Kuoh Academy

    It was just another day for Kuoh Academy. Another typical school day for the students, another day of learning, and for a certain three boys…it was another day of being perverts.

    "C' mon, man! Don't hog it all to yourself!" A boy whispered, trying to squeeze himself to the peepholes to see their intended target. This was Matsuda, a member of the infamous Perverted Trio.

    "Shh! Be quiet or they'll hear us!" A second boy said. This was Motohama, another member of the group.
    On the peephole was none other than the revered leader of this perverted group, Issei Hyoudou.
    What were they doing? Well, it has something to do with watching the Kendo Club taking showers. They didn't get the moniker, the Perverted Trio for nothing after all.

    Issei felt himself getting hard down there as his nose bled. 'Oh my god, this is heaven!' He squealed to himself. 'So many Oppais! Oppais, Oppais, OPPAIS!'

    "Issei, come on, let me take a look!" Motohama whined as he and Matsuda pulled Issei down from his perch. "You had your turn, now it's mine!"

    "Oh no, you don't!" Matsuda grabbed his glassed comrade by the collar and pushed him aside. "It's my turn to witness the beauty of Oppais!" He giggled perversely, climbing up the box.

    Motohama was having none of that though. "Get your ass back here! It's my turn to stare at Oppais!" They began to have a scuffle where Issei joined in.

    "You idiots! I was this close to seeing Murayama-san's tits, and you two robbed me of that chance!" The perverted boy screamed to the heavens as he tried to beat his friends some sense.

    "So…you three dead men at it again, eh?" The Perverted Trio stopped dead in their brawl, all color draining from their faces.

    Looking at the side, the boy's fears skyrocketed when they saw about a dozen enraged looking girls in robes with kendo sticks in hand, and they were staring at the boys with the fires of hell.

    "Hehe…hi, M-Murayama…" Issei stuttered out nervously.

    Said girl just growled and raised her kendo stick high over her head. "PERVERTED ASSHOLES!"

    All over the academy grounds, students could hear the screams of agony of some poor souls that dared to peep at the Kendo Club.

    In a certain room of the school was where the Kuoh Academy Student Council resided. Currently, the president of the Student Council was Souna Shitori, but do not be fooled. Her real name is Sona Sitri, a devil and heiress to the Sitri Clan.

    Sona had heard the high pitched screams and couldn't help but shake her head in annoyance. "There they go again. Getting caught doing their immoral acts." She sighed irritably.

    Sona Sitri was, by all means, a very beautiful young woman. She is a young bespectacled woman in her late teens with a slim figure, black hair styled in a short bob cut and violet eyes. Personality wise, she has shown to be a very strict and intelligent individual. Whether it is a matter of the Student Council or the Sitri Clan, she does not take anything lightly. But despite all this, she is a very caring person and dedicated to those under her.

    But for a certain group of boys…Sona was considering to fall to the temptation of approving Murayama's request of castrating Issei and his cohorts.

    She swore the bastards had been eyeing her when she wasn't looking.

    "And does that surprise you still?" A red-haired girl in front of her giggled. "You should know by now how they are as you are also trying to recruit him." The girl then moved a chess piece on the board. "Your turn, Sona."

    This was Rias Gremory, the most popular girl in the academy. Rias is a beautiful young woman who appears to be in her late teens with white skin, blue eyes and a buxom figure. Her most distinctive feature is her long beautiful crimson hair that reaches down to her thighs, with a single hair strand – also known as ahoge in Japanese – sticking out from the top. Her hair also has loose bangs covering her forehead and side bangs framing her face.

    “True he has something interesting in him which I am pretty sure would be an excellent fit for my peerage His perverted nature can be ironed out through training,” Sona tells her as she moved her piece and had claimed one of Rias' own.

    "You seem to be getting better, Rias." She commented. It was no question that Rias and Sona had a bit of a rivalry going on between them, but they were still good friends.

    This was just a friendly bout.

    Rias gave a smile. "Thanks. But one day, Sona. Mark my words, I will defeat you." Rias declared with determination. Ever since she was little, she and Sona had this fierce rivalry… though it wasn't anything serious, just friendly.

    They would subtly compete over everything to see who was better, especially when it came to chess. Clearly, Sona had Rias beat on this but the Gremory heiress would not cry uncle until she tasted sweet victory at last.

    "Maybe," Sona said. "But that day hasn't come yet." She moved her queen… to her victory. "Checkmate, my old friend."
    Rias just gave out a sigh. This was already won by Sona by the very beginning, but she was getting better. "Hmm, well. Don't get too cocky, Sona."

    A knock on the door interrupted them “Come in” Sona replied

    Tsubaki Shinra a young bespectacled woman with long straight black hair that extends all the way down to her knees, with split bangs and heterochromic eyes, with a violet left eye and a light brown right eye entered the room with some documents and a file in hand.

    “We might have a little problem on our hands,” Tsubaki said passing over the file she had been carrying to Sona

    It was a file that had a note attached to it. Sona picked up the file and read the note.

    Sona, this is the Academy Head. I wish to inform you that we will be receiving a transfer student in the coming days and his credentials and bios are in the files.
    Thank you.


    “This note was signed a few days ago why am I getting it now,” Sona asked not sure whose fault it was that the file was coming too late

    “I just got the file form a clerk but that not important at this moment. Check the Transfer Student Bio and credentials” Tsubaki replied trying point Sona towards the real problem

    "A transfer student?" Rias asked in interest as Sona was opening the file and reading through the documents. It was common for a transfer student to take admission here in Kuoh Academy and Sona and her student's council dealt with them without any problem, so she was curious Tsubaki was bringing up this particular student to Sona.

    “This doesn’t make any sense,” Sona said to her herself “Are you sure this is correct information?” Sona inquired not believing what her eyes are seeing

    “The information is accurate one of the office members even called there for a standard checkup of information and they said everything here is accurate” Tsubaki replied

    “Sona what’s going on?” Rias asked genuinely a little confused as well as concerned

    Sona and Tsubaki share a look “An Exorcist might be joining our academy” Sona replied passing over the documents

    “What??” Rias said out loud before taking the documents from Sona hands and going through them as fast as possible

    “Sona She is…..” Rias began

    “Part of The True cross or at least was a part of them” Sona Finished her sentence

    “Akane Orimura age 17 twice-orphaned first by her parent’s death in a house fire which only she alone survived and later her Grandmother died under suspicious circumstances. She was Taken in by Christian family with whose daughter she has been friends and moved away to Italy with that family at the age of 10.” Rias read out her bio

    “Wait I knew I heard that name before,” Rias said to herself “Who wrote this memo?” Rias asked Tsubaki who leaned down to check what memo Rias was referring to

    “Maya Hamada she is a child service officer Akane is one of her cases. She was the one who submitted her applications as well as her documents to the school” Tsubaki answered checking the signature where she was mentioned and also had her child services certificate.

    “Rias do you know her by any chance?” Sona asked curiously

    “No, not personally but she is Akeno’s landlord” Rias answered

    “The house by the shrine in hilly areas? I thought your brother had bought that land up for you” Sona asked not being aware of this fact

    “He was. He even offered to pay 5 times more than the land was worth but that offer was refused by Maya Yamada who only wanted to rent the house out” Rias explained

    “That way too many coincidences for my liking.” Sona said, “What should we do?” She asked

    “Alert all of our peerages, for now, she might not be hostile towards us but she is an Exorcist of the True Cross it is best we be careful for now” Rias suggested getting a nod of approval from Sona

    “When will she be starting her classes” Rias enquired from Tsubaki

    “Tomorrow, She will be Second-year student at Hyoudou’s section” she answered

    “I think its best we invite her to my clubhouse so we could sort this stuff” Rias suggested further

    “Are you Thinking about asking her to join your peerage?” Sona asked as Rias was getting ready to leave for her clubhouse

    “If she is not with the church sure I wouldn’t mind having another true cross in my peerage” She replied as stood up and went to the door. “I will be seeing you two tomorrow at the clubhouse. Ohhh and Don’t worry I will be sending someone to escort her there” With her piece said Rias takes her to leave

    “Should I call all of them now?” Tsubaki asked

    “Yeah” Sona replied while looking at Akane Orimura Photo

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    “Is this the apartment?” Akane asked as the car stopped

    “Yes, go on inside Ms. Yamada would have been waiting for you for a while now. I will bring in your luggage there, the apart number is 2-c” The middle-aged man said as he gets out of the car with Akane following him
    The apartment looked normal nothing special, a 3 story building with 6 apartments in each floor with each apartment getting one small balcony space.

    She Ringed the doorbell of apartment 2-c “Coming, coming” She heard Ms. Yamada's voice from inside

    A woman with short green hair with matching colored eyes with glasses answered the door she was of around average height and She was wearing a revealing yellow dress with short sleeves and knee-high boots.

    “Akane-Chan look at you all grown up last time I saw you were just small girl” Ms. Yamada soft voice greets her

    “And you haven’t changed a day” Akane replied in returns with a smile happy to her after such a long time

    “Ohh you are such charmer come on inside.” She invited her inside “Where is Kuro-Kun?” She asked

    “He is bringing my luggage up” Akane answered as she enters the apartment. It was an average one-bedroom apartment with a living room and kitchen space with the bedroom having a small balcony and a washroom in it.

    “Do you like it?” Ms. Yamada asked

    “Why are we here Yamada-san? I already have a house here in Kuoh by the shrine why would I need to live here?” Akane asked her still not sure why she was here

    Ms. Yamada signed “Look while you were away an Individual coming to me asking about the house he wanted to buy it as well as the land. I knew you didn’t want the land to be sold but I also did not want that individual to leave without a deal you would need money for your college so we agreed on 3-year rent deal. That deal has still one year left so until then you will have to live here” She explained

    Akane signed as she really couldn’t blame her she was looking out for her “Fine I guess I can live here for a year what about the rent of this place?” She asked her

    “Ohh you don’t have to worry about the rent as well as electricity and water bills are really not a big deal as with all of them combined it will only take 5% of the rent you are getting from your house” Ms. Yamada boasted

    But that Akane made her a little suspicious towards whoever has rented her house. She knew how much money that area was worth but this was a little too much money.

    A Knock on the door breaks her out of her thoughts “Come in Kuro-Kun” Ms. Yamada invited him inside.
    Kuro bring her luggage into the apartment and places them into the living room

    “Maya I think it’s about time we take our leave we have other business to attend to as well” Kuro suggested
    “Yes Yes, Akane all of the books that you will need has been placed in your study table as well as your school uniform which is placed in your bedroom’s closet. Your school will start tomorrow so set up your alarm accordingly” Ms. Yamada informed, “You have your credit card with you right?” She asked

    “Yes, Ms. Yamada I waste my money spending on stupid things. Anything else?” Akane asked with a smile
    “No that’s all here this is my number call me anytime if you need my help and Take care of yourself Ok,” Maya said and with that left for the door

    “Thank you for coming to pick me up at the Airport Kuro-San” Akane bowed thanking the man

    “It’s nothing like Maya said if you need our help call us anytime” Kuro replied as Akane sees them off from to her apartment door.

    With them gone she Locked the main door and with her back leaning against it door she looked at the small empty apartment. It was the first time in her 17 years of life she will live alone. Which was a miracle in itself seeing her sucky track record? But it was not that bad if she plays her cards right she might be Devil by the end of the month. And after that gaining more powers as well as serving her master would keep her busy for a long while.

    “Ok First order of business getting myself a new cellphone,” She said to herself but getting interrupted by her hungry stomach “Ok first lunch then I will go get a cellphone”
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    Author Note: - here are my response to some of the questions that have been asked
    1.Dominus1389:- SHIP for Akane being Karasu Tengu just imagine it with EMS and Itachi's and Madara's techniques.
    Also SHIP for small harem Kuroka, Yasaka, Kunou, and Tamamo or at least Threesome Kuroka and Omamori Himari
    My Response:- While I like the Idea of Karasu Tengu and are the part of Shinto mythology. Problem Here is their design is way too much similar to that of the fallen angels. I was at one point seriously considering giving Akane Itachi’s crow abilities though when I sat and thought through it I decided to not do it.
    Also no Haram for my Oc sorry mate.

    1. Guest-Questioner:- Am I going to pair Akane up the with someone form Issei's Haram?
    My Response:- No she will not be pairing up with any of the girls in Issei harem.
    3.Guest-Questioner:- Battle Deck, What is that one? Also, How far will Akane' abilities go in comparison to the strength of Highschool DxD character's?
    My Response:- the battle decks function will be revealed by chapter 2 and 3 I suppose so stick around.
    Now an endpoint for her abilities I can’t tell you much with telling you something that is a spoiler but I can tell u this she won’t have Rinnegan in this story so you could cross that out.

    1. Gkso :- just out of curiosity but you're not going to make it travel the same bad path of the dragon fiction emperor and knight of red eyes because that of being bad and etc I say no offense but it was bad at first I understand you about the faction of heroes but let's go " I live to be the hero of darkness ñ "stop fucking what's wrong? can not think of a better way as neutral or something like that
    My Response:- Nooo She was not gonna do that before the rewrite and she is not gonna do that after the rewrite as well she won’t take the Itachi route
    1. Guest:- well the first time someone took inspiration from Red-eyed knight they made a broken as hell OC Gary Stu. Here's to hoping you don't do the same, good luck.
    My response:- Thanks mate I know for sure that I am gonna need your good luck
    1. Morgen:- Very good chapters. I enjoyed reading them so far. :)
    I would like if Akane's fighting style is like Yoruichi's or Soifon's hand to hand combat or maybe give her Senbonzakura from Baykuya because this sword is the best in my opinion. :)
    If you plan to add some characters from Bleach then make Yoruichi her love interest and her teacher. She also could be the former nekoshou queen before they were mostly killed by the devils (OR you could make Akane their savior and they got saved by her). :)
    I look forward to chapter 3.
    My Response:- You know what having the character of Yoruichi as Nekoshou is not a bad idea. You know what I am gonna do just in the later chapters. Now is she going to be mentor figure, in that case, yes Romantic interest I don’t think so?
    Her fighting style at this moment revolves mostly around dodging attacks, learning enemy attack patterns (Thank you Sharingan) and attacking back with a precise killing blows she is very much like Soi fon in that regards. So expect Akane to use shuppo down the line
    No zanpaktos for this fic at least They will just get lost amongst the holy sword, sacred gears and if want to write about zanpakto I want to do them justice.
     
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    Bobbot Know what you're doing yet?

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    I like the rewrite can't wait for more.
     
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    Akuma-Heika The Devil Exists Within

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    Only real advice I can give is to create space between your paragraphs. Currently, the chapter is a massive wall of text.
     
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    siddharth1998m

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    Chapter-2
    Market Area in Kuoh

    “Thank you for your purchase” the shop’s clerk thanks as Akane was leaving through the shop's automatic door with a new cellphone in one hand and plastic bag in another.

    It was evening time in Kuoh, and the market area was bustling with people. Akane is among them, having been shopping for groceries and other items she was going to need back at her apartment. She just had one item left in her list of things she needed to buy and was now heading towards the shop.

    All things considered, Akane could not have asked for a better apartment. She really needed to thank Ms. Yamada the next time she met with her. While being small, the Apartment suited her needs perfectly. On top of that, her neighbors were great, as none of them bothered her or tried to welcome her to the complex. It was great. The location was also very conveniently suited to her current needs, since it was near Kuoh Academy, something that she guessed sold Ms. Yamada on renting it out for her. While her school distance from her apartment really did not matter much to her (she could have just easily traveled there from her house in the mountainside to Kuoh in within few seconds) she still appreciated the thought Ms. Yamada put in choosing an apartment for her.

    “Good Evening young lady. What can I do for you?” The shopkeeper to the flower shop she had just entered greeted.

    “Yes, I want two bouquets made. One mixed with festive Red Poinsettias, White Roses, and Pinecones. The other one I will need with bright White, Pink and Yellow Daisies mixed in with some Yellow Daffodils.” Akane gave the shopkeeper her order, who nodded and started preparing the bouquets for her. In the meantime, Akane decided to explore the shop for a bit.

    RING!! RING!! Her new cell phone rang, and stopped her in her tracks. She slowly pulls it out from her pocket, not sure who was calling, considering she just got the number. The number shown in the screen was not from someone she knew.

    “Hello??” Akane replied, a little suspicion laced in her voice

    “So, you finally left huh..” the familiar charismatic voice of a Fallen Angel Governor General greeted her. “Can’t say I’m surprised, but you should have at least called me first” he added.

    “What do you want, Azazel?” Akane asked, not even bothering to ask him how he got her number.

    “Now, Now, I was just calling to check up on how you were doing? It must have been hard for you to leave your friends behind for your ultimate pursuit for power,” Azazel replied with a phony sympathetic tone.

    “Don’t waste my time, Azazel. Get to the point.” Akane remarks, ignoring his snide comments.

    “I’ve got a job for you,” Azazel replied after a brief moment of silence, which only made Akane laugh a little.

    “I haven’t even left the church for a few days, and you are already asking me for favors, Azazel,” Akane said in amusement. “Are you really still mad at me for leaving the Exorcist’s?” she asked him.

    “Miss, should I add a greeting card to the bouquets,” the shopkeeper asked, mostly done with the bouquets.

    “Well, now I have to jump through fewer hoops to get in contact with you, so that’s less annoying, but I am not asking you to do me a favor. It’s a job for which you will be paid handsomely,” Azazel replied while Akane waved her hand saying “no” to the shopkeeper. The shopkeeper nodded in response, continuing with her work.

    “Money is of little use to me, Azazel. I thought you knew that by now.” Akane chides him. “If you want me to do the job, you already know my price,” she tells him, getting an annoyed growl in response.

    “Fine, I will have them moved to your apartment once the job is done. Deal?” Azazel asked.

    “Deal.” she replied as she swiped her credit card and enters the code in the machine shopkeeper gave her. “So what’s the job Azazel?” she asked as she got both the receipt and the bouquets in a plastic bag. The shopkeeper thanks Akane for buying the flowers as Akane leaves.

    “Well your job Is to keep an eye on a few fallen angels I have sent in Kuoh,” Azazel informs.

    “Azazel!!” Akane groaned, dreading the mission already. “Please tell me you not asking me to babysit your fallen angels” she asked him.

    “No, No, No, anybody else could have done that job if that was the case. No, this job requires your peculiar expertise,” Azazel said in a dubious tone, which caught Akane off guard. “My particular expertise? An assassination contract,” Akane thought to herself.

    “Go on,” she replied as she was nearing her apartment building.

    “Not over the phone. Get back to your apartment, and a package will be waiting for you in your mailbox.” And with that, Azazel cuts the call, leaving Akane alone to wonder what kind of job Azazel had for her that required that many precautionary measures.
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    She got back to her apartment within 10 min with a black box in one hand and two plastic bags in the other. After locking all the doors and shutting all the curtains in her apartment. she took a seat in her living room sofa, placing the black box at the tea table she tries to find a button the activate it. Sadly, there weren’t any buttons present there.

    “Goddamnit Azazel!! Why do all of your inventions have to be so god damn complicated,” Akane growled in frustration, placing the box back at the table unable to find a way to activate it.

    “Voice recognition confirmed: -Subject- 03071998 Akane Orimura,” A voice spoke from the box, and in a few moments, the top of the box started to move in a circular motion outward. An orb started to rise from the box, stopping when it reached the height that was about double the box’s height.

    “You are here. Good” said a tall man, who appeared to be in his twenties with an average build, black hair, golden bangs and black goatee dressed in a knee-length dark blue blazer with a light blue dress shirt, a black waistcoat, and a red tie. He wore faded-purple slacks and black dress shoes, which appeared by the side of Akane’s sofa. He looked like he was present in the room, but a few flickers present in the image made it clear that it was a hologram.

    “So tell me what’s so important about this job that you had to go through all this nonsense,” Akane asked him, as she picked out a soft drink can out of the plastic bag she had brought home.

    Azazel sighed “In the last few months, dead bodies of potential sacred gear users have been found all around the world. And you may think, ‘Well, why would I, Akane, care other Sacred Gear users?’ Well, most of them have one thing in common; all of them were being followed by fallen angels to some extent,” he informs her as the full body scans of dead bodies appeared before her in her living room in the form of holograms, which she decided to check up on. All of them were around the age of 17 to 23, and had no visible signs of trauma.

    “Cause of death?” She asked as she takes sips of her drink, scrolling through the dead bodies.

    “Well some of them have GSWs, and some of them showed stab wounds,” Azazel said as the case file started to separate into three categories. Akane took out a body of a stab victim and placed the hologram near the other body she was recently going through.

    “Well this wound is definitely not a light spear wound” Akane remarked as she pointed out the stab wounds. “Whoever killed this guy did a really sloppy job, something a fallen angel would never do as they do tend to go for sweet spots like the larynx, spine, lungs, liver, jugular, subclavian artery, kidney, or heart, not stab their victims repeatedly in the stomach like a moron. yes It works, but it’s sloppy.”

    “So you are suspecting the bodies with no visible trauma present died because they got their Sacred gears extracted,” Akane asked him as takes back her seat in the sofa.

    “It would explain the cause of death,” Azazel replied stroking his goatee.

    “So why aren’t you tracking those sacred gears? I’ve been hearing rumor of you building a machine that could track down sacred gears for years now, this report just cements those rumors for me,” Akane asks him.

    “You really need to learn about keeping your ears to yourself,” Azazel says to her, eyes twitching in annoyance. “The machine was made in order to track potential sacred gear users, not sacred gears themselves, and mostly because you can’t track down sacred gears individually. After being extracted from their fated user, they start to wither away in somebody else hands until they back with The Law of Cycles waiting for being born with a new user,” Azazel explained to her.

    “How long does the withering process take?” she asked, throwing away the now empty Soft Drink Can in the dustbin.

    “By my estimates, a year and a half. And that are what concerns me,” Azazel tells her “All of these deaths were unnecessary, especially because gathering sacred gears is useless if you don’t have their user with them. Yes, it’s a slow process training them but it wields long-lasting results later on. This, on the other hand, is just a quick gathering of arm and ammunition for a fight that they know will end sooner or later” Azazel explains his concerns.

    “Someone gathers arms and ammunition for a possible conflict. For a war,” Akane theorized, getting a nod from Azazel.

    “That’s the same conclusion Baraqiel and I came to as well. Though, seeing the situation at hand, a Mutiny amongst the fallen angels is much more likely,” Azazel replies, making Akane massage her head as tries to calm down the headache the situation was causing her.

    “Is there someone you suspect as a possible culprit?” Akane asked.

    “The Fallen Angels are a family, both in a figurative and literal sense. How can I suspect someone from my own family?” Azazel replied, his voice showing the pain he is feeling suspecting someone from the Grigori.

    “Did you at least question the Fallen Angels who have been involved in this cases?” she asked.

    “We did, but it produced nothing. None of them knew anything regarding the situation. Now whether they were lying or not, only time will tell” he replied.

    “So what do you want me to do here Azazel? From the looks of things, this is some serious Fallen Angels business, and I’m an Outsider to those,” Akane asked him.

    “These are the Four Fallen Angel agents that are coming to Kuoh Tomorrow” Azazel says, as the profile of those agents appeared in front of Akane. “These are one of the few fallen angels that have been involved in the murders in some capacity. While we do not suspect them, we also have not exonerated them yet,” Azazel adds.

    “So they are here following a sacred gear right?” Akane asked as she read through their leaders, Raynare, profile.

    “Not just any sacred Gear. It’s one of the Longinus they have been tasked to follow, study and even recruit if they find him suitable for Grigori,” Azazel informs her. “Your job here is to follow them around without being noticed, and see if they are following my order. If they do good it narrows down our search here, but if not you are tasked to tail them until you have enough evidence, and capture them so I and Baraqiel can interrogate them in private and find out who is responsible,” Azazel tells her about the task as a pair of glasses with a black frame appeared from the side of the black box.

    “Use those glasses to gather evidence on the case. There is a button placed in the frame of the glasses which will let you take photographs of anything you are seeing. Don’t worry about the light, the glasses can automatically adjust themselves for a better picture. A copy of all the photos taken will be sent to me directly so you don’t have to worry about dropping of the evidence” Azazel informed her as Akane examined the glasses. “The glasses also have some other features that you might find useful in field” he adds.

    “Do you have any idea about where they will be staying?” she asks as she put away the glasses.

    “No, it’s not a high profile mission for them so I don’t know where they will be staying. Though there is a high chance they might find a place closer to Longinus user.” Azazel answered.

    “Okay, so who is the Longinus user exactly, and which Longinus does he carry,” Akane asks, thinking about doing a quick survey near the user’s location to find all the possible locations they might stay in.

    “How the hell would I know that? The machine doesn’t tell me the identity of the user. It just lets me know that user lives in Kuoh, and come on, it’s a Longinus user. You will know exactly who they are when you find them,” Azazel replied, pride of his invention present in his voice.

    “Yeah, about that machine Azazel. You are going to destroy that machine as well as burn its plans right?” Akane asked him.

    “Hehehe, looks like that has been a popular opinion today. First Baraqiel, and now you,” Azazel said in an amused tone.

    “Well, you creative sorts need someone to reign you in, otherwise the Frankenstein’s monster would become a reality,” Akane replied sarcastically. “That machine is a disaster waiting to happen Azazel, you know what will happen if the machine fells into the wrong hands. Destroy it while you have time,” Akane warns him. Azazel nods in reply before his hologram disappears.

    “The Black Box will self-destruct in five seconds” the message from the box made Akane chuckle. After the five-second countdown was over, the box disintegrated in the tea table.

    “He really needs to stop watching those Mission Impossible movies,” Akane said out loud in amusement. She got up from the sofa to check what time it was.

    “8:00 pm. I guess I should get things done today. Don’t know if I will get any free time after today,” Akane muttered as she took the plastic with the bouquets inside and left her Apartment.
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    mapu Know what you're doing yet?

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    Your formatting and punctuation has greatly improved. Good job.
     
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    siddharth1998m

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    Chapter-3
    Kuoh Cemetery
    10:30 P.M


    The cemetery in Kuoh was situated at the foothills of the Hilly areas in Kuoh, it was a beautiful place which attracted the people of that area to use it for Strolls which kept it bustling with people all day.

    At the moment it was deserted mostly because the handler of cemetery tends to close the gate after 7:30 PM. Thought at the moment the Handlers can be seen lying headfirst on the ground knocked near the gates of the cemetery.
    Inside the cemetery, the lone figure of Akane can be seen standing before two graves, where on each one she had placed two beautifully made bouquets she had bought earlier in the evening.

    Her family had been serving the Kuoh shrine form the day this town was founded and thus they had a special area in the cemetery where the members of her family’s remains where put to rest It was where her Father and Grandmother remains where put to rest after their deaths.

    Akane was not sure how she should feel or what she should do in front of her Father and Grandmother's Grave. She had seen people interact in front of their family members or loved one’s grave, some tended to cry or Smile sadly and reminisce about their time spent together with the deceased individual some would either try to talk with them. She once even encountered a Guy having a barbeque with even a small portable TV in front of his father's Grave when she asked him what he was doing he simply answered “Just watching the Superbowl with my Pops like always” before offering her a hotdog and having her join them for the game.

    She envied them as to her standing before the grave of her father and grandmother did not bring sorrow she couldn’t reminisce about her time spend with them heck she couldn’t even remember what activities or traditions she and her father used to do for fun before his death.

    No, to her standing before their graves only brought out the anger. While she couldn’t have done anything to save her father from the house fire as it was a miracle that she survived that fire. No, it was her grandmother's murder that could have been avoided if she bothered to train her in fighting rather than in healing and how to be a shrine maiden. This was the fact that made her angry towards her Grandmother, she knew that her father’s death in that house fire was no mere accident and culprit may come after her next. But No!! she was convinced that she would live a peaceful life of a shrine maiden something even convinced Akane to pursue something she in childish naivety followed through and Look where Her Grandmother peaceful ways resulted in, her murder where Akane could not do anything but cry tears of blood and despair.

    A beeping noise coming from Azazel’s glasses draw her attention she takes the glasses out of her pocket puts them on to see why is It making those noises. The beeping noise stops as she puts them on she finds out that the glasses had an inbuilt transparent screen of sorts that registered her ocular movement to operate the system which was showing her some feeds, one feed that drew her attention was a possible disturbance in Purgatorio near her location.

    “My My Azazel you really are a genius to minimize the function that requires Exorcists to use a whole bevy of equipment’s that can fill a room into a single pair of glasses” Akane muttered to herself as a former exorcist herself she knew how useful and revolutionary this technology was, as while Angels, Fallen Angels, and Devils could sense the disturbance in Purgatorio near them. Exorcists themselves could not sense these disturbances that why for every hunt or investigation every Team of Exorcists had a lesser Angel with them who worked as their sensor and guide.

    Akane wasn’t sure whether she wanted to go and check out what was causing the disturbance. As there were two possible causes for the disturbance One could be a fight taking place inside the Purgatorio other it could be a Stray devil or it can be a mixture of both of them.

    In the End, she decided to check it out anyway not wanting whoever causing that disturbance to interfere tomorrow while she was spying on the fallen angels.

    She glanced one last time at the grave of her father and grandmother before leaving the cemetery and moving towards the location where the disturbance was taking place which was a few blocks away from the Cemetery.

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    Akane arrived at a construction site where the disturbance signal was coming from and decided to get a high vantage point to scan out the location which looked seemingly empty there was a guard booth but she couldn’t see anybody in there. The neighboring four-story building looked like a great Vantage and from there she could enter the upper areas of the construction building quite easily if she needed a quick sneaky entry point.

    By focusing some chakra in her legs she was able to enhance her muscles and made the jump to the roof of the four-story building quite easily.

    “Let’s see what the causing the disturbance in the Purgatorio” Akane said to herself as she kneels at the edge of the roof as her glasses scan the entire area

    “No signs of life aside from the one who has been causing this ruckus...” Akane mutters as the as she reads through the results of the scan “A Stray devil thought its quite humongous in size with another heat source beside him which is clearly not humanoid. Hmmm maybe it’s a Qliphoth it would explain the stray devil's abnormal size as well as seemingly abandoned construction site” Akane theorized further.

    She looks at her watch to check what the time was “Hmm... 10:52 PM, If I remember correctly It takes approximately an hour or so for the Blood Fruit to be harvested from the Qliphoth and it hasn’t been that long since the stray has moved here” Akane Thinks to herself

    “Still where are the Gremory’s or the Sitri’s, this is supposed to be their territory; they should have been here by now taking care of the stray” she questions herself “Maybe it’s an S-Class Stray Devil as I have rumors that a devils of that power level can Remove the Evil Piece from their bodies making it harder for Other Devils to track them down Though if that’s the case why is the stray using a Qliphoth?” she thinks as she tries to make sense of what’s the situation was

    “If the Gremory and Sitri don’t arrive by 11:12 PM then I will have to take care of the Stray Myself before he eats another Blood Fruit” Akane decided as she takes a seat and waits for the Devils to Arrive
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    Construction Site
    11:15 PM


    An Unnatural tree can be seen glowing as it emanates power tree had no leaves and the bark of the tree and its branches gave it the Appearance of a dead tree even though one of those branches boasted a blood-red flower growing from it. The tree had been planted upon a heap of dead bodies, few of its roots gone completely through the dead bodies and made a hole in the concrete which had caused cracks to appears in that entire floor of the construction site.

    Near the tree A huge creature with hideous horns was standing beside the tree and shrieking as if he was in agony although at first glance the creature appeared to be malnourished and almost had a skeletal body, there is long fur covering mostly his back and his right hand which looked slightly longer than his right he was standing in an in a crouched fashion as his knees were bent. The closed thing that beast’s appearance can be compared to is of a Demonic Goat with a humanoid body. An ironic Appearance for a Stray Devil.

    “Soon” A disturbing mix of shrieking and giggling came from the Stray Devil “Soon I will get my….” But he was interrupted when a small Spear of light passed by him and it hit the blood-red flower burning it instantly. It happened so quickly that The stray couldn’t even react.

    “WHOO DIDD THISSS” The Stray shouted with a deafening Roar which was interrupted when again a spear of light passes through his snout and jaw forcing his mouth shut

    “Sorry for the inconvenience, but I cannot in Good conscious have let you eat another Blood fruit I am mean look at yourself hasn’t eating one done nearly enough” Akane said to the stray as she comes out of the shadows holding a Glowing Light purple Bow in the shape of a fancy Celtic cross.

    She drew her bow to launch another light spear launching it towards the Qliphoth Destroying the entire tree this time in the process, As the Stray Devil was busy trying to remove that spear from his mouth while making Agonizing sounds in the process.

    “AKANE ORIMURA,” The Stray says after removing the light spear from his mouth a bit of smoke was still coming out of his wounds as well as his hands who had been also burned in the process.

    “Do I know you by any chance Stray?” Akane asked with a little interest

    “You really don’t remember me,” The Stray said in a small tone that was barely heard by Akane. She was about to ask for his name but stopped as she saw Raw power radiating throughout his whole body “YOU DON’T REMEMBER ME YOU DON’T REMEMBER THE FAMILY YOU KILLED” He roared before chucking a steel beam towards Akane Direction

    Akane takes out a card form her Battle Deck and throws it up in the air before jumping as well in order to dodge the beam. The card she had thrown become a bright glowing rectangle through which Akane passes and when she came out from the other side of that Rectangle and landed back on the floor her civilian clothes were gone as she was now wearing Her Exorcist Uniform.

    A uniform which consisted of a white leather mini-jacket which adorned a Cross as well as Epaulettes that gave the jacket a militaristic look, like something a colonel of the 60s would wear. Beneath the short jacket, a short tight dress sprawled down her torso. With a belt wrapped around the waist area, the dress nicely displayed some of the slimness of her figure. Gossamer black thigh highs covered her smooth legs like dark second skin. Finally, she had leather boots, the fabric of which reached her even her knees. It was an outfit some fashion designers would be envious of, as it managed to put intimidation and elegance in sync.

    The Stray Demon quickly attacked her while she was putting away the card that had her civilian clothes in it back in her Battle Deck forcing her quickly dodge and start with setting up the usual trap set up used by exorcist in Stray Devil Hunts. Something that generally involves a team of three members which she did not have, she could use clones but that divide in her magic would be more of a hindrance in a hunt like this.

    “Is It a demon of Wrath or Pride?” Akane thought to herself as she was maneuvering around his wide swipe attacks “He did get enraged when I didn’t recognize him so maybe Pride” She thinks as she launches another spear which this time goes through the demon’s right hand and get stuck to the pillar behind him and for a good measure shot the ceilings near him as well making it its structural integrity so weak that it starts to fall on the demon when he tries to get his unstuck buying her more time.

    Akane raised her hand and started reciting the incantation “Beyond the ends of a thousand hands, the hands of darkness out of reach, the archer of heaven that goes unseen, road that guides the way, wind that ignites the embers converge where I point.” soon a few points started to appear beneath the stray in a pattern reminiscent to Big dipper constellation “Bullets of light, Bodies of Eight, rays of nine, hands of heaven, treasures of speed, wheels of immensity and canons of grey. The Bow is drawn and fades in the light” The endpoints of her left hand's fingers and those of her right hand's middle and index fingers started to glow and she placed them on top of each other. As with a loud Angry Roar, the Stray came out of the debris that he was buried under and inadvertently steps on the Seven points which started quickly turning into bright magic seals. “May the Seven Stars bring judgment upon you …Grand Chariot” with this the incantations of the spell were finally finished and seven magic seals appeared above the stray and started firing light attacks nonstop who was standing above the seals adjacent to the seals above.
    The ensuing nonstop attack hid the Screaming Stray’s body within the light as well as created a large dust cloud which covered the entire area. The attack continued on for 20 secs before the seals faded away, the stray had stopped screaming which would mean he is dead thought Akane can’t confirm that fact until she sees his body which was hidden with the Dust clouds which will take a while to settle down seeing no options left Akane quickly raised both of her hand in the air “Wind Style – Air Current Wild Dance” which created air currents in the palms of her hands which she started to use to whip up dust clouds in the area.

    As Akane was whipping up the dust cloud the Stray hand came out of the think clouds and punched her point blank in the mid-section with enough force that she was thrown backward to the concrete wall which created cracks in the wall because of the resulting impact.

    Akane fell to her knees as she landed back in the floor and was coughing up blood She had felt some of her ribs crack when the stray punched her “Of Course my Spell didn’t finish the job” Akane though bitterly as she gets back in her feet while still feeling the effects of the attack “You don’t have Faith” She remembered what Griselda always told her when she practiced spells with her and she was right in a way as when Irina and Xenovia casted the same spell without the Incantations their result were pretty much similar to hers but the main difference was they didn’t use incantations which are generally used to make spells stronger which meant their spells were much stronger than hers.

    “Still the spell should have killed the stray, weak or not it was still light magic. I would have understood if I was fighting Stray Devil but he is a Stray demon now they are more vulnerable to light than a normal devils” Akane thinks to herself as she saw the Stray came out of the dust cloud while he was very much alive he did look like he was in a very good condition pretty much all of his body was emitting smoking which was caused mostly by the light spell one of his horns were now broken off from his head and his fur looked like it was it in fire.

    “Well, at least it did some damage,” Akane said to herself “Still I am pretty much out of mana at the moment. Looks like I have to finish this beast as an Orimura rather than an Exorcist of True cross” she said out loud with a chuckle as she wipes the blood from her mouth.

    As she was contemplating a plan on how to fight the stray who liked he was getting stronger by every minute she felt a slight chill in one of her hands when she checked it was the hand she had wiped her blood with and it was picking up the wind that was coming from her back Through the entrance of the construction site she chuckled and quickly started making a few hand seals. And spat out a thick smokescreen from her mouth which started covering the whole area thanks to the wind she felt earlier. The smokescreen was so thick that the stray tried to use his hands to blow it away but couldn’t as even more smoke came in.

    “I generally don’t get to use this Jutsu more often mostly because even a slight miscalculation can come to bite me back in the arse, but unfortunately for you Stray our current situation is ideal for the use of this Jutsu” Akane told him with as she raised her hand so it could slightly touch the small amount of smokescreen which was in front of her and was slowly moved away by the wind “Fire Style – Burning Ash Pile” and with a snap of her fingers the whole smokescreen lights up instantly resulting in a violent explosion which hits the Stray point black who was standing in the middle of the smokescreen.

    The Explosion brought a Bright smirk out of Akane who had been dying for a chance to use this Jutsu in the field for years but because of the specific conditions that were needed for the safe use of this Justus she never used it before. Still she knew the job was not over yet as while this Jutsu might have killed a lesser Stray, the one she was currently fighting was easily in the higher B or lesser A-Class range a class which generally a team of 4 or 5 Exorcists and Only way to kill him permanently without the use of any light-based weapons or spells would be cutting off his head.
    Akane Took a card out of her battle deck which disappeared in light and soon a katana with an ornate bronze guard with, the Tsuka ("handle") having a traditional gold wrapping, with black ornaments, and the Tsuba ("guard") of the blade being octagonal. The tsuka-ito (“warping”) seems to be braided from white and dark blue material. The blade features several intricate ornaments, most notable is a relief of a dragon at the endpoint of the hilt. The scabbard of the blade is black, made of traditional lacquered wood, and features several metallic ornaments on its far end. it also features a yellow sageo, the cord used to tie the katana to the waist.

    Akane raises her left hand holding the sword with her fingers one scabbard and her thumb trying to push the sword out its handle “Of course you won’t come out” she thinks before she softly recites “Rest in this, my bruised and weary soul:
    I was a wretch, chosen to be a beauty;
    a Whore, chosen to be a bride;
    an orphan, chosen to be an heir;
    an enemy, chosen to be a friend.
    I deserved nothing but wrath and death
    yet received everything of life and grace.
    Come forth and Be our salvation Bakuya Masamune
    ” and with that her thumb pushed sword slightly out of its sheath. The explosion had now subsided and her nose was picking up the smell of charred flesh coming from within the residual Dust Cloud caused by the explosion. She was sure that this smell was coming from the stray as the dead bodies used in Qliphoth when burnt don’t smell mostly because they are generally Dry husks with nothing left inside. While the smoke limited her vision of what going on inside she is really not going to try and whip the dust cloud away via a wind Jutsu again, the Best thing she can rely on was her sense of smell and as well as her reflexes.

    As she pumped chakra in both her nose and Eyes to enhance them Her eyes quickly turned red and was now sporting three tomoe’s which connected by circular black line revolving around the black irises which were reading the movements in the Dust cloud quite keenly. Her nose also seemed to pick the direction from where the smell was coming from and with her sword in hand she slowly and quietly enters the dust cloud hoping to get a Surprise drop on the stray if possible.

    Following the smell through the Dust cloud seems to be doing its job as she felt like she was getting closer and closer to the stray by every step she takes but prediction his position was tricky as there are chances she might appear before his face first and she really can’t do anything about it. What she did not expect was stray jumping towards her direction head first something she saw coming from a mile and quickly offed his head from his shoulders with a quick slash of her sword. The Strays whole body dropped near her feet while his head rolled away. The whole thing felt rather Anti-climactic in Akane opinion as Even she has never encountered a demon of wrath who would attack is such a sloppy way, Yeah their Berserkers Rage tends to diminish they thinking capabilities they still have excellent Fighting instincts that made them dangerous.

    “Well, I guess you will be the first Dumb demon I have ever hunted.” She said with a slight chuckle present in her voice as she kicks the demons overgrown hand “Hmm…. the body is not disintegrating? that would explain why the devils are not here” Akane said to herself as checks the time “11:45 PM yup they are not commahhhh” the stray’s overgrown hand quickly grabs Akane by her waist locking both of her hands which made her drop her sword on the ground the stray slowly got back in his feet still headless which shocked the hell out of Akane “AAHHH HOW THE HELL ARE YOU STILL ALIVE!!” Akane screamed as the demon started to squeeze her as she tried to wiggle her arms out the Demon’s grasp but failing miserably.

    While she could make any hand signs with her hands she could control her sword and with a slight movement of her fingers started to guide it towards the arm of the stray and when the sword was in position she gave it the command to stab it through which did lessen the pressure a bit but she still couldn’t get out.

    Soon the pressure started to increase again and this time he was applying even more force than before. Akane could only scream in Agony as she started loose conscious she felt that there was no choice left, The Tomoe’s in her eyes quickly rotated in itself and formed an intricate pattern “Amaterasu” Akane strangely whispered as her left eye started bleeding and soon black flames appeared on the stray’s hand and quickly released Akane out of his grasps and she fell flat on concrete floor where she saw the Black Flames consuming the strays entire body as he tried to put the fire out before everything blacks out.

    Unknown Location
    11:50 PM


    “Well That was something” an Alluring voice said in amusement though if concentrated well enough the gravel can also be heard present in her voice “I really didn’t expect her to find him first” she said while looking at a screen which showed the construction site, as well as destruction caused by the battle and Akane, can be seen lying in middle of the black flames unconscious.

    “True” Another voice commented “Still we got what we wanted, he severed his purpose well” She added as she got up from her chair from which she was watching the battle

    “Should I go and bring her here” the voice from before asked

    “No, She is much more useful there” another voice replies before leaving the dimly lit room through the door

    Construction site
    2:34 AM


    With a loud groan, Akane wakes up “Shit that Fucker really did a number on me” she said to herself as she calls her sword back and uses it as a support as she gets back to her feet. Looking around the construction site she only found Amaterasu Black flames still burning thought with no active target it was now spreading outwards slowly. Her eyes catches something lying on the ground near her it was chess piece and Pawn piece at that, with a single hand sign she dispels Amaterasu whose flames fade away immediately as she picks chess piece up.

    “What the hell is going on? If the devil still had a piece why are the devil’s not here?” She thought to herself as she examined the Evil Piece not sure what to make of the situation. She had encountered a few strays before who still had their pieces in them and sooner or later a devil will always arrive to retrieve that piece so it could be given back to the master of the stray. It’s a common protocol shared amongst Devils and Exorcist when hunting strays in the territory that not owned by a devil.

    “I will deal with this tomorrow for I need to back home and heal” she this as she puts the Evil piece away and brings out her Limbo card and card that contained her civilian clothing of her Battle Deck and throws both of them forwards. The Limbo Card she threw turns into a bright rectangle with the size of a door right and the second cards containing her cloths passes through the door and become another door right in front of the previous one. Once both the doors are in place Akane passes through the first one and instantly She was out of the Purgatorio and was back in the Mortal realm and when she passes through the second door her Exorcist uniform changes back into her normal civilian clothing, once done both cards return back her whereas she places them back in her Battle Deck. She would have just used Shunshin no Jutsu to get back at her apartment but she needed the little chakra she has left for healing the wounds once she reaches her apartment and with her sword, in hand she heads back to her apartment.
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