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With This Ring (Young Justice SI) (Thread Fourteen)

Discussion in 'Creative Writing' started by Mr Zoat, Jan 27, 2019.

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  1. Chojin Patriarch

    Chojin Patriarch Veteran Lurker

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    Ah, the second-most useful tool in a New God's equipment belt.

    Focus, Renegade. No point getting away if you drop an Emo-bomb on everyone.

    Fascinating imagery... Goes to show you who he worries about.

    "Indeed. You are a lifesaver."

    Yeah, no-one wants that little treat running loose in anyone''s soul.

    He's much too full of anger for that...

    Mister Miracle, giver of Freedom Hugs!

    "Alright." He peeks out of cover again, then leaps...

    It's like weaponised Depression. You just don't feel like you have the energy to do anything... It's just so much easier to lay there...

    Impressive skill. Human ninjas would love to learn that shit from him, I bet.

    Eh, if only as a loss of a useful tool, I suppose.

    "Yes, I know you're not a tricorder. Honestly, should never have let you watch that show..."

    Too bad G-50 didn't cop the full force of it. I doubt he'd be much for resisting anything them.

    The same thing we do every night, Pinky!

    Honestly, you'd think he'd have picked up on that, with the whole 'Take Over The World' Pantomime last year.

    He has a point, you know. </Morgan Freeman>

    At least he'd be a decent ruler. He's not the sort to want blind obedience...

    So, she wants to punch him on principle.

    This ain't over, I'm guessing. She will be having words later.

    Get off this ship, find out what happened to those aboard the Watchtower, and then kick some New God ass.

    Seriously, if Grayven-50 doesn't come out of this beaten to a pulp and his armies thrown down around his ears, I will be disappointed...

    Godspeech, courtesy of Mister Miracle:
     
  2. BR549

    BR549 This is filth! FILTH!!

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    That description made me think of this, and thanks I didn't need to sleep tonight.
     
  3. Mquz

    Mquz Versed in the lewd.

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    Huh... so does preventing rebellion through influencing people’s opinion to like you, and letting them question your government, despite having supreme power constitute as a lack of freedom? Is it still a lack of freedom if you’re not a surveillance state?
    I don’t think there’s much of a difference between that and the US government, at least to the layman.
     
  4. Gantradies

    Gantradies Not too sore, are you?

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    or what the Pax did to Miranda.....
     
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  5. nick012000

    nick012000 Gone for Good

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    Or the British government, for that matter.
     
  6. ForeverShogo

    ForeverShogo Not too sore, are you?

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    Despite the modern usage, at its most fundamental level a tyrant is merely someone who seized power through less than legal means. If they're basically immortal, thus avoiding the headaches of succession, and benevolent . . . Does it really matter if you trim the fat and replace hundreds of different methods of ruling with a single method that works? Even if you're using literal god power to reinforce it?

    A dictatorship need not be inherently bad.
     
  7. Navi-Hank

    Navi-Hank An engine fuled by spite

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    Hey Zoat, I know you're using a modified Anti-life equation. Is the only difference that Self=Null instead of Self=Darkseid? And what are the equivalent changes in the Life equation?
     
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  8. Mquz

    Mquz Versed in the lewd.

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    Life = Pain is also not in the original.
     
  9. nick012000

    nick012000 Gone for Good

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    *points to Highfather’s rule over New Genesis*
     
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  10. Aeess

    Aeess I trust you know where the happy button is?

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    Tell that to the bugs.
     
  11. Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    Thank you, corrected.
    You silly billy, you think I've planned this out in full?
     
  12. Coda

    Coda Versed in the lewd.

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    If that's the decision you're making, that's up to you, but last time we had this conversation (back on SV) you linked me to a comic panel that rendered it DeSaad.

    Darkseid strove to solve the anti-life equation. Once he had a solution, he was able to derive an expression of it that included himself and his divine nature. "Life=Pain" is another such consequence of the theorem of anti-life -- not directly part of its most fundamental statement, but a provable corollary.
     
  13. Sockmonkey

    Sockmonkey I trust you know where the happy button is?

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    I think the YJ version of batman was one of the douchiest based on how he handled the team.
     
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  14. Navi-Hank

    Navi-Hank An engine fuled by spite

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    Yes? At least the overarching mcguffens. Not any details though
     
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  15. Enochi

    Enochi Having way to much fun with AI.

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    Damn I love Renegade storyline. Much more enjoyable then the main branch.
     
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  16. Cuchulin

    Cuchulin Versed in the lewd.

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    One could very well argue that living under such governments gives you more freedom than most due to the stability and safety they grant, at least in theory and once did for most people in reality. After all freedom is over rated if other people are free to screw you over, rob you blind, badly injure or even kill you.
     
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  17. Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    It has been both in the comics. I just change my mind sometimes.
     
  18. PrinceJonathan

    PrinceJonathan Versed in the lewd.

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    "Nice job breaking it, Scott. Now civilization has to walk everywhere."

    CONFIRM BEST WAIFU SUNNY BUN IS ALIVE!!! I'm so far at the edge of my seat here I'm getting a wedgie so bad I can taste it!

    Emo-Bomb! Oh that's a good one. Now I can't stop imagining underneath his tough stony exterior, Darkseid secretly listens to Linkin Park and My Chemical Romance.
     
  19. Flux Casey

    Flux Casey The Colonel

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    I... I'm confused. Clearly this means the update is over... But there are more words after it? I don't understand.

    This sounds like a joke but no, really. My brain lurched when I got to this sentence.
     
  20. Gilhelmi

    Gilhelmi Know what you're doing yet?

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    So, correct me if I am wrong.

    Reneged-SI-16's parallel is on Earth-50 (opposite of Earth 12). Both want to take over Earth, 50 just is being unnecessarily violent about it.
    Paragon-SI-16's parallel must then be the one we saw on Earth-12. Where they both want to make the world better using technology, just 12 can not (currently) use his ring so he has to do things the hard way.

    Or am I just overthinking things again?
     
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  21. Simonbob

    Simonbob Really? You don't say.

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    ............. I came very, very close to lecturing on politcal theory.


    After the first page, I remebered the rules.



    Shit.
     
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  22. Threadmarks: Conqueror's Moon (part 22)
    Mr Zoat

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    27th December 2004
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    I frown. "Rayner, can you feel your ring?"

    "N-."

    "Oh, and is that motley of yours armoured?"

    "No. I can't feel it and it's not armoured. I don't think I could get any armour on Earth that would stop a gordanian blaster."

    Sadly, the closest New Gods have to a 'Jesus Christ' is standing next to me and wearing red, yellow and green and fiddling with his multi-cube. But how is this man still alive?

    "Yes, if only you had a device which allowed you to travel to other worlds in search of better equipment. Rayner, I don't care if you want to be a prat when it's just your life at risk, but you're on a team with my brother and I'm not happy about you imperilling him. Here."

    A basic plasmic shield generator attaches itself to his waist.

    "You know, Kara tried to tell me you were faking the whole 'alien warlord jerk' thing, but you really weren't, were you? You're an alien, a warlord and a jerk."

    "Yes, healing you and upgrading your equipment. What a jerk. Scott?"

    "I think I got him." He nods to himself. "The other Grayven is preventing me from directly tracking his location, but this is an Apokoliptian ship. It's designed to allow the New God commanding it to feel the whole thing."

    I nod. "And you and your Mother Box can track it back?"

    "… No. But I can set up a boom tube that can take us right to him, wherever he is."

    Barda pats the head of her mega rod against her left palm. "How close?"

    "About ten feet away."

    Hm. "We'll be surrounded, reinforcements will be upon us sooner rather than later and he can just boom tube away again."

    "No, I can stop that. Not.. usually my thing, but 'freedom' includes the freedom to take the consequences. He could run on foot, but I don't think he will."

    No, me neither. I raise my hands slightly, examining my rings. If we go through Rayner will die. Without a ring, he's basically useless even as a human shield. "Rayner, how good are you at focusing your fear-"

    Lantern Grayven?

    "-or your avarice?"

    "'Huh' and 'don't know'." He follows my gaze. "Wait. Do you-?"

    "You can't fight like you are."

    "Hang on." Scott fiddles with the multi-cube a little more. "Oan technology should stand out. It's the only major thing around here that isn't designed to conduct God Speech."

    Rayner and I watch him for a moment while Barda starts pacing. A moment later his proddings become less sure.

    "Which.. also means that there's nothing to connect to it."

    I shake my head. "Rayner, can you do remote ring control?"

    "Yeah, close up. Not from the other end of a huge starship."

    I sigh faintly and then step towards him, laying my hands on his shoulders. He looks a little puzzled, particularly when I make a point of rubbing them.

    "Er… You wanna tell me-?"

    "Scott, is him calling the ring enough for you to trace it?"

    "Maybe. It might let Grayven know we're here, but since we're going to be moving anyway, I guess that doesn't matter."

    "I'll boost your calling ability. On two?"

    He frowns faintly, then nods. "One, two."

    Stalwart Retainer's Determination.

    "Oh Whaw. Ring, get over here!"

    Rayner gestures towards one of the walls with his right hand.

    "Scott?"

    "Not.. sure. I think the ring's in the same place Grayven is."

    I nod. "Makes sense. Can he use it himself, or have someone else use it? Maybe.. by cloning Rayner's skin to make a glove?"

    "Why are you asking me about the interactions between New Gods and power rings?" He points at my hands. "I'd have thought that you'd be the expert."

    "Jack of all trades, I'm afraid. Haven't really studied the interaction in any detail. Last time someone took one of my rings I stabbed them until they gave it back."

    "Hm. Well, I expect that the Guardians of the Universe would give it better security than that, but there's still a cachet in wearing one. Particularly to species from Vega."

    "Alright." I nod. "Rayner, get your ring back as fast as you can. Barda-."

    "Don't tell me what to do."

    "I will attack targets of opportunity. You hang back and keep an eye on everything while your good lady wife does as she feels appropriate. All s-?"

    There's a quiet puff sound as an object-. As Rayner's ring punches through a wall and lands on his finger.

    I release his shoulders as construct armour flows over his body. "Good enough?"

    "Ask the other Grayven. Watch Scott's back?"

    He nods. Right then. Sword of the Fallen as a finisher, daiklave, fusion cannon as a chaff dispenser. Cast Down the Rival.

    Barda takes position as close to me as she can stomach and then-

    Boom!

    -the tube opens and I'm charging through. Grayven's on a command dais ahead of us and to the left-

    I take a blaster shot to the left shoulder as one of the more on-the-ball gordanians takes a shot. My return shot incinerates him and the three standing next to him.

    -while next to him stands.. Bernadeth? What's she doing-?

    Grayven's eyes glow for a moment, then a beam of red energy zigzags through the air. I counter by dumping a lump of steel directly into its path. The steel is vaporised when the omega beam hits it, the blast exploding across the room with enough force that I need to reinforce my armour to avoid being knocked back. Barda throws her mega-rod at Bernadeth, who darts aside and draws a short sword. Most of the explosion passed, I leap at my alter ego, daiklave slashing at his eyes. He activates his armour, causing it to expand to cover his entire body in solid metal plates, then steps forward, using the thick armour of his left forearm to expertly turn my blade aside.

    I raise my gun to shoot him in the face as he fires his omega beams again.
     
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  23. moralrelativity

    moralrelativity Recovering pendant.

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    Needs another ]
     
  24. thebishop8

    thebishop8 Umm, ackchyually...

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    A question mark is needed at the end.

    The video is blocked in my country.
     
  25. Ngamer11

    Ngamer11 Experienced.

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    Who's Bernadeth?
     
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    thebishop8 Umm, ackchyually...

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  27. DeathlessProficiency

    DeathlessProficiency Know what you're doing yet?

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    ALL ABOARD THE HYPE TRAIN FOR THE-

    GRAYVEN BOOOOOOOOOOOOOOWL!
     
  28. Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    Thank you, corrected.
    Go and download F*ck You Tube, then.
     
  29. Chojin Patriarch

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    <Facepalm> Ugh, you'd think things like this would be simple basic training, but nooo, the Guardians want expendable cops...

    Yeah, I don't think we want to see the ring piss off to find a new wielder this soon.

    Since The Renegade hasn't got as good a relationship with Icon and Rocket, no Kinetic Barrier belt, eh? Then again, it wouldn't do too well against Gordanian beam weaponry anyway.

    Methinks Kara's perceptions are a little biased...

    Yup, having a wide-open connection to your soul kinda makes it easy to locate you, wouldn't it? You'd think these people would've heard of firewalls?

    Just close enough for a paddling, eh?

    Grayven-50 is far too overconfident for that, even with his close encounter with an Emo-Bomb chunk of Anti-life.

    Well, now. Wonder if this Kyle has the same potential as the pre-flashpoint one...

    And since you're proficient with Ring usage, this would be the second-best option. Best would be securing his own Green ring, but...

    Ha! Like trying to hack a 50's mainframe.

    "Time to power-level that skill, then... Or just cheat."

    Heh. I rather doubt that happened in this universe. Even if Tommy Callaghan existed... Would Bueno Excellente?

    Screwed if you do, screwed if you don't. Better to take the option that ups your combat potential anyway.

    Heh, Empowering an ally (if not a vassal yet.)

    "Tastes like almonds... And metal! Whoahoho!"

    Of course. Keeping a trophy of Conquest where he can see it probably empowers him a little.

    ...Ew.

    Shoulda specialised, but nooo, you had to splash the upgrade points around.

    It's called 'being a pain-in-the-ass to channel enough Will'. Seriously, Green Arrow tried it once and damn near gave himself an anuerysm.

    Boy, this Barda really doesn't like him, does she? Or is she like that with everyone?

    Next time, practice more with the Green Light, kid.

    Lock and load.

    Scry-and-die time!

    If he wasn't ash, I'd say give that guy a promotion...

    Oh, dear. Did The Renegade's attack on Apocalips drive them to throw in with Grayven-50?

    Oh, hell! He's got the Omega Effect, at least in part? this fight just went end-game!
    Also: 'steel'; extraneous space; 'passed'

    This is bad, very bad. Very, very, very bad. Seriously, only kryptonians and Batman have reliably resisted Omega Beams before... And there's a serious lack of either in this fight.

    Godspeech, from Grayven this time:
     
  30. Lord Ernest

    Lord Ernest At the End...

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    Grayvenbowl!! I have been waiting for this, even if it's not with the original Grayven 16, I hope for the fight to be awesome. Since I'm on the Renegade's corner, I think he should be using more his orange ring and pulling out his Radion blaster. That shot to the face could have been it for the fight if it were a Radion shot instead of just a 'simple' fusion cannon.

    Now, let the best Conquest win!
     
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