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With This Ring (Young Justice SI) (Thread Fourteen)

Discussion in 'Creative Writing' started by Mr Zoat, Jan 27, 2019.

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  1. Handlewithcare

    Handlewithcare Versed in the lewd.

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    So that thing can locate Pauls over paralel earth boundaries, can find their local identities and even name them...but is fooled by sentient clay looking like one?
     
  2. Cuchulin

    Cuchulin Versed in the lewd.

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    Agreed, that was one of the least intelligent things Hagen has done.
     
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  3. Simonbob

    Simonbob Really? You don't say.

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    That's funny as hell!

    Bit of a waste for 'Peter', all that money and favors, and the idiot jumps into a random portal asking for somebody else?

    Well, he is a DC villain.
     
  4. NightmareWarden

    NightmareWarden Versed in the lewd.

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    Grayven isn’t going to be directly involved in the multiverse shenanigans, is he? If non-Pauls (with their plus one) are involved and Paragon Paul does get grabbed, then we certainly aren’t getting an interaction between Renegade and Paragon.

    I’m an adult, this feeling of heartbreak won’t keep me down! I foresee one of Grayven’s buddies getting snatched up, possibly with a non-Earthling companion. Hmm. I wonder... if TimeTrapper is actually responsible for the abductions and everyone is returned to their original universes, then Mr Zoat has the option of doing some incredible trolling. Imagine the victims getting snatched up and fighting for their lives for one month. Once the antagonist has been taken care of a solution to the returning-home-problem is concocted. What could be troll-like about that?

    The victims have coordinates related to their original capture. The return trips could drop them off literally seconds after the original craft abducted them. There could be time travel tech available! So any parties worried about their missing Brits won’t even get to miss the guy.
     
  5. Chojin Patriarch

    Chojin Patriarch Veteran Lurker

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    "What I planned to do all along." Honestly, has she not worked with him enough to know he plans ahead?

    Someguy Somewhere called it, it's a rescue and recruitment run!

    What, never seen someone pulling themselves together?

    "Yes, Arsenal, do try to keep up..." So none of his operatives knew what he was after?

    Ouch, that'll make him a little upset, I think.

    Significant amongst the charges: Kidnapping and Deprivation of Liberty... Never mind his whole secret crime boss thing.

    Easy assumption to make, really.

    Us or Them mentality. How nice.

    Let's go with 'Mercenary'. Or maybe 'Freelance problem solver', mercenary is such an ugly word.

    It tends to be quite profitable for said people, too.

    Quite literally. :V Pun not intended, as far as Peter is concerned, I hope.

    Ah, he's suspicious. Sensible, really.

    You haven't heard the whole plan yet. Patience.

    A little bit of carrot. Unfortunately, I suspect the stick will carry more weight...

    You do realize there are four super-powered or exotically skilled individuals with weapons ready?

    Wait for it...

    Heh, not much of a choice at all.

    Ah, good, he's playing ball, rather than taking it and going home.

    Eyes on the prize, eh?

    Hasn't he been in a small tin can long enough already?:D

    I'm guessing Morgan Edge either uses his own private VTOL aircraft, or a teleporter system...

    I suppose the only Hero in the party has to play the Face...

    Oh, dear, this again. And this Paul isn't exactly geared for it...

    Hey, wait. Is he really going to try...

    Whoever that is just 'dun goofed' Seriously, working solely on visual data?

    Cue that Tenth Doctor clip...

    Well, as expected, an Alternate Paul got snatched. But this time, they got who they least expected... Wonder how this little bit of dirt in the works will mess up their plans. And... A giant blue hand... Hmm, an original Maltusian? Krona, perhaps?
     
  6. Irked

    Irked Experienced.

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    Not quite, Clayface has just been snatched instead. Gonna be funny to see how that affects the plans of whoevers doing the snatching, especially if they just think it's a Paul who got the Clayface treatment/powers.

    On the bright side whatever they're planning will probably not work properly thanks to the fact they're missing a Paul.
     
  7. Ngamer11

    Ngamer11 Experienced.

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    From out of the frying pan and into the fire. Wonder if Clayface had enough time to regret what he did? Also, it would technically be easy to know this was a fake. Just ask the shapeshifter you suspect isn't a version of you one question: what is your name? The fact that he doesn't faint, say he'll faint, or ask if they can say their name is enough for any of them to know that he ain't Paul. I hope whoever got him realized he wasn't one of them and decided to make an example of him or make him a braindead minion or something. It would make him think before trusting the ominous voice in the sky over the guy who freed him from years in captivity.
     
  8. Mquz

    Mquz Versed in the lewd.

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    Plot twist: Peter Wynne is actually an offshoot of Clayface, who Paul was given the powers of in this universe.
     
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  9. Darko

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    I am pretty sure that Hagen decided to go with the hand is that he doesn't trust Peter that much.
    For all we know Edge could have offered to help him and them put him in his collection.
    While Hagen isn't Arkham crazy he has spent several years in isolation and is probably not all that there in the head.
     
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  11. DrThoth

    DrThoth I trust you know where the happy button is?

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    Trusting a giant blue hand that comes from the sky would count as Arkham-crazy to me.
     
  12. Darko

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    Good point Thoth, good point.
     
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  13. Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    Well, I did tease the Anti-Monitor...
     
  14. Darko

    Darko Connoisseur.

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    If the crisis happens in 2012 then can you tell us just say what time it will happen, like in summer, winter etc.?
     
  15. Chaoswind

    Chaoswind Lord of nonsense

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    No thanks. We don't need that much information.
     
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  16. Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    Couldn't even if I wanted to.
     
  17. Maxx Crowley

    Maxx Crowley I trust you know where the happy button is?

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    The SI doesn't know.
     
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  18. Darko

    Darko Connoisseur.

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    Did that Martian porn star give renegade M'gann the pendant with the shape-shifting information?
     
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  19. Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    No, he was too cowed to do anything except get back on his ship and head for Mars.
     
  20. Gantradies

    Gantradies Not too sore, are you?

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    stupid. stupid, not insane.
     
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  21. Cuchulin

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    Pity. I mean it's a pity for that M'gann.
     
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  22. iamnuff

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    Kinda surprised that the portal-thing was fooled by a mud-man.
    they can detect people through dimensions and lock onto them with enough accuracy to find them seemingly anywhere, but will then grab the wrong guy just because they superficially look the same?

    It's not doing a DNA scan or anything? Just going by facial recognition? And it wasn't stumped by there being two people with the same face at the same location?
     
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  23. Cuchulin

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    This is DCAU Clayface, he is going to look EXACTLY like the person he is impersonating.
     
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  24. iamnuff

    iamnuff Connoisseur.

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    Yeah, superficially. Meaning he resembles them 'on the surface' not that he only vaguely looks like them.
    Any sort of technological scan (even as primitive as an X-ray) would reveal him not to be human though.

    If they're portaling dudes in from other universes, they should be doing dna scans or staring into the target's soul.
     
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  25. Cuchulin

    Cuchulin Versed in the lewd.

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    It's a quick snatch of basically exact duplicates of a guy who didn't have a soul who almost never makes any big changes to him self. Also in context superficially can also mean stunt double level of look alike or some one who looks exactly the same, but only from behind.
     
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  26. jaelin910

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    Also, they may have had the more in-depth analysis before/during opening the portal.
     
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  27. Threadmarks: Jungle Gym (part 1)
    Mr Zoat

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    Jungle Gym

    15th March
    20:46 GMT -5


    I walk-.

    "What-"

    I wince-.

    "-the-"

    Raquel grabs me by the right arm and pulls me around.

    "-fuck?!"

    "There's no point whispering. She'll hear us perfectly well if she concentrates."

    "What the fuck?"

    "Her culture has engineered a visceral revulsion at the idea of underemployment, she wanted a job and-."

    "A Nazi?!"

    "You know Canis is worse, right?"

    She grimaces, shaking her head. "He's not a Nazi, he's just a.. weird.. art.. guy."

    "Did you..? Miss the bit where he mentioned leading Apokoliptian armies? You've read the files on Apokolips, what did you think they were doing?"

    "Fighting a war?"

    I don't laugh, even though that statement is ridiculous.

    "The area around Apokolips is called 'The Waste', because whenever anyone tries settling there Apokoliptian armies go out, kill everyone and destroy everything. Canis personally led at least one campaign of outright extermination and sees nothing wrong with having done so, so, compared to that, the activities of someone who has mostly done the same sort of work as us but in the service of a far less pleasant society is less evil."

    "So she is evil."

    "Well that's an interesting philosophical-."

    "Paul."

    "No, it is! Let's assume that as a fully indoctrinated National Socialist-"

    "Nazi."

    "-she sees absolutely nothing wrong with killing someone from one of their scapegoat groups. However, as a result of frantic genocidal purging before her birth she's never met one. Jews are extinct, gypsies are extinct-."

    She raises her eyebrows. "Niggers are extinct."

    "Actually, no, but I got the impression that Kaldur was the first black person she'd ever spoken to. The point is, though she would take part in a genocide if asked, she never has. Likewise, she hasn't ferreted disabled people out of hiding to send them to the camps because there aren't any. She hasn't had the opportunity to do the evil she'd be willing to do. What she's actually done is crime fighting and disaster relief. So is she evil-"

    "Yes."

    "-or a good person working for an evil state?"

    "Okay, kinda both. An evil person working for an evil state."

    "You know she did dinner-" Raquel grimaces. "-tonight, right? Look… Why do we arrest people?"

    "Yeah, I don't think Little Miss-"

    "She's thirty nine."

    "-Mz Nazi is gunna go join the Belle Reve Crew."

    "Of course not. She hasn't committed a crime here yet."

    Um. Except arguably wearing that red 's' symbol in Germany, where a very similar symbol was banned as part of post-war denazification and hasn't been unbanned. But fortunately America has much more broadly-phrased free speech laws.

    "But we perform arrests rather than summary executions-"

    "Because we're not Nazis."

    "-because we try to rehabilitate people, Miss Breaking-and-Entering. We support a system in which people who break the rules are placed in confinement and gradually re-socialised. That is what I would like us to do for Angelika."

    "I'm cool with confining the bitch."

    "You… Ah, you.. mouthing off to her might be a bit of a hard test of her willingness to play along right now."

    "Well excuse me, masser!"

    I frown. "Oh, don't even. I'm not asking you to calm down a little because you're black, I'm asking you to do it because, firstly, her seeing you as a rational person undermines what she's been taught about black people, and second, because it means that if I've horribly misjudged the situation she's less likely to kill you."

    "Oh, ah'm not going near her without my kinetic barrier-."

    "She has heat vision."

    She frowns. "Superboy didn't have heat vision."

    "It's a different form of hybridisation. She can't match Superman's peak output but it'll still incinerate you."

    She stands there for a moment with a decidedly disgruntled expression on her face.

    "Oh that's a great way to introduce her to the team."

    "Not… What I wanted to lead with. But I don’t need to tell you not to make rude jokes about Darkseid in front of Canis despite the fact that-."

    "Worse, yeah, I get it."

    "If you want to see what true evil looks like I've got a few thousand hours' worth of recordings from Vega you can go through. Mid-firefight cannibalism is a high point, and the Citadelian slave-cages match anything the Nazis managed. Or heck, you ever watched a cowboys versus Indians film?"

    "Yeah, but I never cheered the cavalry. Spotted that one."

    "What tribes used to live where Dakota City is now? You live there, work there, and I don't see you calling for the city to be demolished."

    "I wouldn'a invaded their land and killed them. She would."

    "Okay, look: you don't have to have anything to do with her. I'd appreciate it if you'd help, because at the moment you're one of two black people she's been introduced to and I think you disprove Nazi propaganda pretty hard."

    "Gee, thanks."

    "You're welcome. But you don't have to, and she's probably only going to be here for a week or two anyway."

    She sighs angrily.

    "What's Superman sayin' about this, anyway?"
     
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  28. Darko

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    Zoat this episodes says 92 at the beginning it should be 93
     
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  29. RichardWhereat

    RichardWhereat Aia airëa Fëanáro.

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    Damnit. I liked Peter.
     
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  30. thebishop8

    thebishop8 Umm, ackchyually...

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    Add "of" before "hiding".

    Add "to" after "need".
     
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