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With This Ring (Young Justice SI) (Thread Fourteen)

Discussion in 'Creative Writing' started by Mr Zoat, Jan 27, 2019.

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  1. Handlewithcare

    Handlewithcare Versed in the lewd.

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    Everyone is always on about superspeed soldiers when the real application lies in information processing.

    Imagine a corporation with a superspeed RnD team.

    Or even just a superspeed assembly line.
     
  2. Vaermina

    Vaermina Well worn.

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    Enter the real version of Velocity 9.
     
  3. DAT_NOOB

    DAT_NOOB Accused of writing in a far away land

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    or velocity 10 with renegrayven
     
  4. zerofarad

    zerofarad Know what you're doing yet?

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    Lots of experience? Or is this a dialect thing?
     
  5. TheEyes

    TheEyes Well worn.

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    ...now they totally will thanks to the Accala opening the Pandora's Box first.

    Mass-produced super-powered armies were like all other WMDs: no one wanted to be the first to let one off the chain (at least in a way that couldn't be construed as a reversible one-off), but now that there is one, being the second is perfectly acceptable, and seemingly inevitable.
     
  6. Simonbob

    Simonbob Really? You don't say.

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    I'm not sure that's entirely true.

    The atlantians, the amazons, the martians?

    I'm sure there are other groups out there who are self-contained supers, to some degree.


    I think the World isn't going to go berserk about this until the Accala or the like show just how insanely hard it is to stop such a group without a counter.

    It'll just be another curio tribe, another thing to keep super solder programs crusing along.


    When the shit hits the fan, perhaps that will change.


    Then again, this is DC.
     
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  7. Darko

    Darko Connoisseur.

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    Zoat is there going to be a chapter focusing on an alternate version of the SI tomorrow, aside from renegade i mean?
     
  8. Stsword

    Stsword Versed in the lewd.

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    It could be worse, Zoat could have been an I...Vampire fan.

    Russia could be mass producing super-vampires with no weaknesses thanks to the Russian Formula.

    Soldiers with superhuman strength, speed, durability, regeneration, shapeshifting, superhuman senses, and mind control.

    Vampires who can ignore sunlight, garlic, religious symbols, and finds stakes through the heart merely annoying.

    Not as fast as Garrick enhanciles or as strong as Danner enhanciles, but then again neither of them can fly around as giant bats or mind control people.
     
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  9. Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    Thank you, corrected.
    Not unless I have a brainstorm this evening.
     
  10. Darko

    Darko Connoisseur.

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    Vampire King Cain was really OP.
    Still I Vampire was a really great series.
     
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  11. RichardWhereat

    RichardWhereat Aia airëa Fëanáro.

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    Chess Notation? What do you mean by that?
     
  12. Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    Writing the moves used during a chess game. It only came up once.
     
  13. TheMidnightRook

    TheMidnightRook Well worn.

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    All three of those examples can easily end up falling into the "out of sight, out of mind" category. Each one is heavily isolated politically and economically, meaning that when one of their representatives engages in some high-profile, righteous face-punching, it's easy to forget that they're abilities are part of the standard package, and not the Platinum UltraDeluxe Metahuman model.
     
  14. Impartial Panic

    Impartial Panic I trust you know where the happy button is?

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    Oh no Wally is going to whip up batches of Velocity 9

    and now we're seeing the beginning of the superhuman armsrace.

    Looks Like we're going to get the metahuman trafficking issue a few years early.
     
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  15. Whenever Possible

    Whenever Possible Versed in the lewd.

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    >Russian Gov makes noises about more Garrick formula to Kid Flash
    >Kid Flash flexes alchemy chops to make temporary formula so that Russia can't give their entire army permanent superspeed
    >Russian Gov doesn't have to worry about super-powered defectors keeping their powers after leaving Russia and ensures that Russian metas given the drug are dependent on Russia for more of the drug as well as medical treatment for side effects.
    >Russian 4d chess


    Wait, wasn't this reasoning somewhere earlier in the renegade timeline?
     
  16. Darko

    Darko Connoisseur.

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    A metahuman arms race may happen, but probably not one that includes abducting children.
    Truggs took one of the HERO dials and was thinking of giving powers to mercenaries temporarily.
    Giving powers to professional soldiers who consent is a better plan than kidnapping children and forcefully giving them powers.
    The soldiers will be more loyal and are better trained, and they will depend on the one who gave them powers to keep them, so the chances of the person you kidnapped and made into a metahuman without his consent coming for revenge are removed, plus experimenting on someone without their consent is a taboo, especially if it is on children. This can seriously hurt any transhumanist efforts to enchance humans even if they are doing it in a safe manner. After WWII eugenics, even some of the more scientific type, became a taboo subject because of what the nazis did, so if someone tries enchancing humans in a criminal manner it can hurt the more benevolent people that are trying to improve people in a non-criminal way.
     
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  17. Chaoswind

    Chaoswind Lord of nonsense

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    None of them hold any relevance whatsoever in regards to the rest of the world.

    The Amazons are for the most part a bronze age army with a few dozens daughters of Hercules (probably weaker than the Danner enhanced), some advanced magic practitioners of with there is a very high emphasis of ritual and conjuration magic, so when it comes to magic they are bellow England.

    So Amazons would cause a negligible impact and they are already isolationist by default so no one needs to care about them unless a new leader takes over.

    Atlanteans are a bigger concern hence why the UN had a measure of contact with them that has greatly expanded after the Romanoke split world tragedy, but they have no mayor interest beyond cleaner oceans and the territory of their city states so they are easier to negotiate with and their economic impact is greatly reduced.

    The Martians are the other guys in SOL, but they are in MARS and are also HARD isolationist, so they don't really matter much either.

    All of them have absolutely no impact on the worlds economy and the inter relationships between nations, the Accala and their plans would have a super massive impact and their starting position as a threat is already much higher than the Amazons, and they are harder to hit than the Atlanteans (underwater nukes are no joke and the side effects to the rest of the world would be very limited).
     
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  18. Rafin

    Rafin Not too sore, are you?

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    Hey. I just got through the whole archive since back when I stopped at some point before the migration to QQ. Good stuff.

    I've got a question relevant to the latest chapters and I don't know if it has been answered/asked yet. Did Overgirl Angelika appear in the Renegade timeline as well? If not, why not?

    Speaking of that, does anyone remember what Blue!Paul -12 was up to in the Renegade timeline back when in the Paragon timeline he decided to pay Earth 16 a visit? Is Renegade!Blue's startingp the same as Renegade!Paul's/Grayven's, which led him down a path that never led to dimension-hopping? And if there ends up being a crisis of Pauls, should we or shouldn't we expect a crisis of Rene!Pauls to go alongside it?
     
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  19. Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    No, because she came from one parallel and went to another. There would need to be another Nazi parallel and another fluke event to bring her to the Renegade's parallel.
    No, he'd just be another alt.
     
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  20. Sceptic

    Sceptic Critical Irrationalist

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    Are we talking lead-free super solders, though?
     
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  21. Rafin

    Rafin Not too sore, are you?

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    Huh. So Renegade is not actually on DC Earth 16? Where is he then?
    Also does this mean that when Paragon!Paul's Doctor Thaddeus Sivana actually can contact Renegade!Sivana at any time?
     
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  22. jonasquinn

    jonasquinn I trust you know where the happy button is?

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    This is actually good for OL's goal of uplifting humanity, after all as super strength and super speed become more widespread there will be more demand for it and so on and so forth
     
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  23. GhostKing 666

    GhostKing 666 Know what you're doing yet?

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    So I was trawling though the DC wiki and it turns out there's a second group of amazons on Earth in the comics. The Amazons of Bana-Mighdall are apparently a splinter group that rejected following Hippolyta to Themyscira after Heracles and instead settled in their own hidden city(protected and hidden by a magical sandstorm by the Egyptian/Kahndaqi gods) in Egypt/Kahndaq. They rejected the gods of Olympus and apparently worship the gods of Egypt/Kahndaq(though they apparently are rather violent, surviving as secret mercenaries and master weapon-smiths), they even have their own champion called the Shim'Tar, who's armed with the Bow of Ra.

    I admit I find myself rather curious if Mr Zoat will use them(and how they and Adom will interact).
     
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  24. Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    Almost certainly not. Some Amazons left the island, but by this point their descendants are culturally identical to the people around them. If any of them were demi-goddesses then they might still be alive, but... Someone would have noticed by now.
     
  25. Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    Stsword Versed in the lewd.

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    I believe the story once referred to the renegadeverse as Earth-16b. If I'm remembering right.

    My assumption is that Zoat is using Hypertime, in which there are alternate universes based on the "every possibility that can happen does happen somewhere" model.

    Or he's borrowing from wildstorm, which I understand showed universes just popping into existence in the Bleed.

    You missed a third one actually.

    Dumb Bunny is half Amazon, her mother Princess Power coming from a subterranean city of Amazons.
     
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  27. Norgarth

    Norgarth Making the rounds.

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    I'm trying to recall, did OL plant Euanthe's seed when they got down to Brazil? Cause I think she'd be quite enthusiastic about helping the native grow back the jungle. If she mentions that Orange Lantern was the one who signaled her, that would likely make the natives happier with him (and the Government more upset with him)
     
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  28. Gantradies

    Gantradies Not too sore, are you?

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    *winces* the..Stolen Generation? yeah. i was..trying to..thinking of a tactful way to bring that up myself.
    took the fucking pollies.. what? 50? 60? what the fuck ever years to ADMIT that, maybe, just maybe, stealing children/babies from their parents MIGHT have been, just a little tad, wrong?
     
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  29. Threadmarks: Equestrian Girls (part 1)
    Mr Zoat

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    Equestrian Girls

    1st April
    22:17 GMT -6


    "So…"

    I lean back slightly and fold my arms across my chest as Miss Shimmer cringes, eyes darting left and right as her brain frantically tries to come up with a justification for what just happened.

    "How did the trip home go?"

    She brings her fists up to just underneath her chin and grins slightly manically. "Funny story."

    "Oh do tell."

    "Okay, so-." She shakes her fists, then blinks at them-. Ah, she's forgotten to open them, reverting to her hoof-use mannerism. She takes a breath and focuses on her fingers, forcing them to uncurl. "So, the portal opened again, and I used the gems to switch the anchor point to here-."

    "Yes, I was here for that."

    "I just wanna go through it all in order, okay?"

    I raise my eyebrows, sigh, then nod.

    "So I anchored it, made sure that it wasn't going to close on me again, and then I went through. It was night time there, and the mirror was still in the same place as it was a year ago."

    She hesitates, her mouth twitching a little. Ah. Yes. That probably means that no one bothered looking for you or even tried to work out where you'd gone. Uncertain whether to hug her or not, I settle for patting her limply on the right shoulder with my left hand. She reaches across with her left hand to lay it on top of mine for a moment, then pushes mine off.

    "And they'd.. locked the door. And hadn't changed the lock. Took me a moment or two to get used to using unicorn magic again, but the lock wasn't any harder to pick than it was last time I did it. It was dark outside, so I headed for my room, dodging the guards-."

    "Why?"

    "I didn't have time to bring all my stuff with me when I came here the first time. I wanted to see whether to not it was still there."

    "No, why did you dodge the guards?"

    She squirms.

    "Seeeee… Yeah, that… I.. might.. possibly..? Have left out a thing or two about… Y'know… It's a funny story, actually. Y'see-."

    "Miss Shimmer, just tell me." This Is An Order.

    "Ikindagotbanishedforlookingatevilmagicbooks."

    I take a moment to parse that. "Books that were themselves inherently malicious, or regular books that contained potentially harmful spells?"

    "Ah… Both? One of them was talking to me, trying to get me to raise an army of demon zombies." She frowns. "And I think it was written in blood."

    "Doesn't blood make really bad ink?"

    "… Magic? Anyway, I was really just trying to find information on the mirror, and that wasn't even a dark magic artefact."

    I frown. "Then why did they put it in the dark magic sect-?"

    "Can I just finish?" I nod. "So one of the librarians ran to tell Celestia, and she turned up and I… Said some things I.. probably shouldn't have. And.. she had the guards escort me out of the palace and you'd think she'd really have, heh, learned by now that two pegasus guards against a magic expert wasn't a remotely fair fight-."

    I nod. "You beat up the guards."

    "Stunning spells are perfectly safe, in moderation. And then I came through the mirror and had the most disorientating ten minutes of my life. So I didn't think asking the guards for directions was a good idea in case they remembered me, despite the head trauma. And I couldn't just.. run for it because I needed to come back through the mirror afterwards."

    "Okay, that actually sounds reasonable. Then what?"

    "I got there, and… It wasn't the same. I just sort of… When I walked in I was so surprised that I didn’t realise that there was a pony in my bed. Or… Her bed, I guess. I was just.. looking around in a daze, and she woke up and I panicked."

    I nod slowly, then turn my attention to where the young woman I assume is the human form of Twilight Sparkle is chained to a chair.

    "'Panicked'."

    "Mpmf!"

    "She was making a noise in a palace full of guards and Celestia! And I knew a spell for tying ponies up really quickly-"

    I look at the ball gag and raise my eyebrows.

    "-and it was a really instructive book! And so I used that, but I couldn't risk staying there and I couldn't let her tell anyone I was there. So I brought her back."

    She gulps.

    "So… You thought that bringing her back, from a civilisation that undoubtedly has all sorts of magic-based tracking techniques, was a better way to handle the situation than pretending that you were a maid?"

    "I wasn't wearing a maid uniform."

    "And she would have seen that in the dark how?"

    "I-." She looks away again. "Okay. Yes. That probably would have been a better plan."

    I sigh. "Okay, right, not the best way to handle things, but given that you were exiled anyway we can probably still fix this."

    "How?"

    "I go through, carry the portal to somewhere outside Canterlot and we go from there. No guards and no Celestia until we're ready. Okay?"

    "I.. guess… But what about-" She looks at Ms Sparkle. "-her?"

    "Well, assuming that she's adapting to her human body just as well as you did, she won't be able to move, pick things up, use magic or speak any local languages. So she isn't really a security risk." I walk over and kneel down in front of her. "I'm going to take the gag off now. I realise that this is a very unpleasant situation for you, and I intend to return you to Equestria just as soon as we can without compromising our objectives."

    "Mhra?"

    I smile. "Just so. Hold still a moment." I reach forward and undo the gag preventing Miss Sparkle from speaking. "I'm very sorry about this." I pull the gag from her mouth and hand it to Miss Shimmer, who takes it, notes the saliva and puts it down on the workbench before wiping her hands on her trousers.

    "Who are you? Where am I? What's going on? Why am I a monkey-? No, that's not right. No tail. Some kind of ape? But my hind limbs don't seem to have any grasping capacity? Maybe if I take these boots off-." Her chains rattle slightly. "Oh."

    "My name is Grayven, you're presently in the Challenger Mountain facility on another world accessible through Starswirl's mirror. It appears to turn ponies who enter from your side into an example of the dominant local sophont species: humans. Humans are a type of ape adapted for the savannah. As such, they have hair on the top of their head to act as a sunshade but not anywhere else as they generally need to lose heat rather than retain it. As they spent more time walking on their hind legs and not climbing trees they lost the grasping capacity but gained land speed."

    "Oh. So what other species are there-. Wait, another world?"

    "Yes, but don't worry, the portal's staying open this time. I'm going to nip through now, and all being well we'll be returning you within the next hour. Miss Shimmer-."

    "But another world!" Twilight beams excitedly, quite ignoring the chains. "That's amazing! I mean, I know Starswirl the Bearded wrote all kinds of fascinating spells, but I've never heard of one like this."

    Miss Shimmer rolls her eyes. "Yeah, Celestia puts anything not friendship-related in the restricted-do-not-read-on-pain-of-banishment section. How about I give you a tour while Grayven hides the mirror?"

    "Um." Miss Sparkle tries to move in the chains again. "That would be-." Miss Shimmer raises her right hand and clicks her fingers, a sympathetic effect causing the chains to unlock. "How did you do that?"

    "You girls have fun while I'm away."

    I stride towards the tape outline marking out this side of the mirror. How hard can being a pony be?
     
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  30. Razorfloss

    Razorfloss I trust you know where the happy button is?

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    Is it bad that Im more interested in grayven arc then Paul's at the moment.
     
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