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With This Ring (Young Justice SI) (Thread Fourteen)

Discussion in 'Creative Writing' started by Mr Zoat, Jan 27, 2019.

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  1. jonasquinn

    jonasquinn I trust you know where the happy button is?

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    So if the next couple of chapters is He Man, is Old World Dudes Fallout?
     
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  2. dreaddragonking

    dreaddragonking Getting out there.

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    the ham in this is amazing
     
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  3. Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    Yes. Or to be precise, Hearst of Iron IV: Old World Blues.
     
  4. Darko

    Darko Connoisseur.

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    Can someone tell me what this Hearts of iron:Old World Blues is, i can't seem to find a description online?
     
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  5. TheEyes

    TheEyes Well worn.

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    The Zamarons, to the best of my knowledge, didn't have a Violet Central Power Battery, and were instead doing a sort of back-to-nature thing where they eschewed higher technology and social structures to instead be a tribe of ne-primatives who used the violet light to sleep with alien species and attempt to breed half-Maltusians. The Star Sapphire was the closest they ever came to a Violet Ring, and it didn't have anything like an AI to guide its use; hell it didn't even have a power filter to help protect the user from being overwhelmed by the power. This is the situation, I think, that still exists in the Renegade universe, since Grayven hasn't spent as much time trolling the universe as Paul.

    In contrast, if I'm remembering right Paragon brought back a Violet Lantern Corps member from another universe and that kicked off the Zamarons of his universe starting their own Violet Lantern Corps, possibly complete with Violet Central Power Battery.
     
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  6. jonasquinn

    jonasquinn I trust you know where the happy button is?

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    It's basically an extremely in depth mod for Hearts of Iron IV which converts it into a Fallout strategy game
     
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  7. Darko

    Darko Connoisseur.

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    Zoat is there a version of the SI that was sent to another universe not by a power ring but by something else?

    I once had a thought about the Matrix entity that bonded with Linda Danvers in the comics bonding with Paul and dragging him to another universe.
     
  8. Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    This:


    No.
     
  9. PrinceJonathan

    PrinceJonathan Versed in the lewd.

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    Grayven: "The blue one hasn't stayed still on the ground for a period longer than 10 seconds. My rings detect the pink one has forty cakes stashed away in her hair. (I'm not even going to ask). The orange one has apples on her flank. The white one hasn't stopped looking at my armor and muttering measurements and potential alterations to herself (I have very good hearing). I already know the purple one is a nerd. And everyone loves bunny rabbits."

    Sunset: "nice save."
     
  10. Chaoswind

    Chaoswind Lord of nonsense

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    That is the second hoi4 mod being referenced, are you a player Zoat?
     
  11. vali

    vali I trust you know where the happy button is?

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    I'm enjoying this episode a lot more than I thought I would.
     
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  12. Gantradies

    Gantradies Not too sore, are you?

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    EXCUSE ME, EVERYONE! DELIVERY DRIVER COMING THROUGH!
    did someone here, by any chance, order a laarrRRRRRRGEEE HAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAM?
    -Renpaul, on subtlety, probably.

    ... im..actually kinda wondering- would he be more likely to have a leg/hock of ham as a mark, or William Shatner's entire face, at this rate?
    .... or Shatner as Kirk singing an Operatic Dirge to a leg of ham (currently TVTrope's pageimage for "large ham, btw)- he's going pretty full- on with the overacting at this point...

    not Brian Blessed though- i think he'd need to kick it up a notch further to rate a picture of.......hmmmm...
     
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  13. Threadmarks: I HAVE THE POWER! Ring.
    Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    19th year of the reign of King Randor I
    Season of Sun
    207th day, 1st bell


    I sit on the floor of my chamber, power ring on my left ring finger and the Basophil Amulet on my right palm. It's a curious thing; when I first acquired it while wandering in the Sands of Fire it was violet, but when I first used it to charge the ring it shifted to orange. Does that mean that it used to be a Zamaron artefact? I do.. hope not, because having an enraged love goddess coming after me is the absolute last thing I want. But… If it was Zamaron in origin, there isn't any mention of that in any of the books which the Sorceress was kind enough to lend me on its history.

    And wasn't finding out that I'm on flipping Eternia a shock. Not that I have much in the way of out of context knowledge; what little I remember from my childhood television habits doesn't seem to match what's actually happening. Ram Man-. Krass -who knew he had an actual name?- is about three times the size of the diminutive figure I remember, and his legs are organic muscle rather than cybernetic springs. Captain Teela's substantially younger than I was expecting her to be and He-Man doesn't look exactly like Prince Adam after a barbarian makeover.

    Okay, let's see if I can get it first time this time. Picture in my head the orange light seeping through the fabric of the universe and pooling in every sent-

    There's a knock at my door.

    -ient being…

    "Coming!"

    I rise to my feet, slip the Amulet back into my pocket and stride over to the door. Opening it, I'm greeted by-. I look down as Orko backpeddals slightly. He's a.. little more disturbing to meet in person than he was in the animated series: the inky blackness concealing his face never wavers and ring scans return nonsense results when I try to scan him. He's like a flying black mage.

    "And what can I do for you this fine morning?"

    He backs off a little more. "I was just.. passing by, and… I was wondering how much progress you'd made using the Amulet."

    "I can reliably turn it on. That's about it. I think archmagedom is some way off, and frankly I'd rather stick with the ring."

    "Oh. That's a-." His eyes dart left and right. "A real shame. But… I thought you said that the Masters need a magician?"

    "Yes, they do, so… Ah…" How's my schedule for today..? "If you've got time… This afternoon? I thought I could have a crack at putting together a wand for you." He blinks. "That's what you need, isn't it? Sort of a stabilisation device so that you can control your magic?"

    His eyes widen. "You know how to make those?"

    "No, but I can make any physical object from a good enough description, so between you, the Sorceress's books on the Trolla and the remains of your old wand, I'm hopeful that we'll be able to make some progress." I smile and lay my right hand on his left shoulder, which has a bizarre… Almost oobleck-like feel. "After all, it's completely ridiculous that the most powerful magic user in Eternia is reduced to being a court jester."

    "Oh. Well. Thank you. Ah… Do you think we-?"

    "Orange Lantern."

    I turn as Captain Technically-Not-My-Boss walks-. No, stalks down the corridor towards us. Oh, delightful. What have I done-

    Orko backs up at speed. "I'll see you this afternoon!"

    -now?

    "Captain. Delightful to see you. What brings you to my corner of the castle?"

    "What happened between you and Krass?"

    I blink-.

    19th year of the reign of King Randor I
    Season of Sun
    205th day, 7th bell


    "Don't do yourself down like that, Krass." I pat him on the shoulder. "Ekra would be privileged to be courted by a man like you." He shuffles slightly, shaking his head. "No, seriously. You're polite, honourable, loyal to a fault, you've got a good position which you earned and you regularly fight some of the nastiest and most powerful people on the planet to keep Eternos safe. You're a good guy."

    "Ah…" He blushes faintly, then raises his right hand to scratch the back of his head. "If you think she's so great, why don't you go talk to her?"

    "Because -with the greatest respect to the noble profession of goatherd- I'm looking for a woman with whom I could share every part of my life. Someone who could keep up with us in a fight."

    "But…" He grins. "The only woman we know like that's Teela."

    19th year of the reign of King Randor I
    Season of Sun
    207th day, 1st bell


    Oh dear. "I've.. known Sergeant Krass for several months. A variety of things have happened between us. Could you narrow-?"

    "The night before last, at the tavern."

    Of course that's what you're asking about.

    "May I.. ask why you're asking?" I smile, but I'm obviously not fooling her. She knows full well that I know what she's talking about.

    "Krass was miserable all of yesterday. Look, if one of you got drunk and said something stupid-"

    19th year of the reign of King Randor I
    Season of Sun
    205th day, 6th bell


    Krass nods at the goblet in front of me. "Wine any good?"

    "No idea." I raise the goblet up slightly. "The innkeeper was kind enough to keep a small keg of unfermented grape juice in for me. It allows me to give the appearance of joining in the celebration without compromising my facilities." I look at his tankard. Water? Unexpected, but I suppose it was unfair of me to stereotype him. "Would you care to join me?"

    19th year of the reign of King Randor I
    Season of Sun
    207th day, 1st bell


    "It turns out that neither of us drink."

    Apparently, his reasons relate to a misspent youth and how he earned that skullcap of his. He didn't want to talk about the specifics, so I didn't press him.

    "-then that's fine, but the two of you need to talk out your differences. We have to fight side by side, and that requires that we trust each other."

    I'm getting the same lecture from a sixteen year old girl from the He-Man universe that I got from the He-Man animated series when I was six. There's something amusingly poetic about that.

    "No, neither of us said anything-. Ah… He… Made an observation, which -with the benefit of hindsight- I realise was supposed to be a light-hearted jibe."

    19th year of the reign of King Randor I
    Season of Sun
    205th day, 8th bell


    "Ah, no." I bow my head slightly as Krass frowns in confusion. "While the Captain is a splendid young woman with many admirable qualities… In my culture, it is considered… Extremely inappropriate for people with an age difference as great as we have to become involved with one another. It wouldn't quite be criminal, but it's close enough that I find the idea quite distasteful."

    "Oh." He shrinks back slightly. "Right. I hadn't-. Ah, sorry. I'll just…"

    19th year of the reign of King Randor I
    Season of Sun
    207th day, 1st bell


    "But, at the time, I.. wasn't sure, and so responded as if it were a… Serious observation. And so I responded in a serious manner, without.. giving any sign that I wasn't sure how it had been intended. Certain.. parts of Eternian custom.. still elude my comprehension, and it may be in turn that Krass believes that he has greatly offended me, when I in fact thought that he.. merely had a misapprehension which I should politely correct."

    "Then why didn't you say that at the time?"

    "He walked off, and I just thought that things might be a little awkward for a day or so then we'd both forget it. Should I..? Assume that he's taken it a little more to heart than I assumed?"

    She rolls her eyes, hands on her hips. "Krass takes everything to heart. He thinks he's massively insulted you, and he's going to keep thinking that until you straighten things out."

    I nod. "Then I will do so immediately and I apologise most profusely for not taking care of this before it came to your attention. If you'll.. excuse me?"
     
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  14. Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    Yes, though I've never played the vanilla game. It looks a bit bland.
     
  15. gustyeagle

    gustyeagle Know what you're doing yet?

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    Better than ponies
     
  16. Zeromaru2

    Zeromaru2 Versed in the lewd.

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    He-man?
    Sure why not
     
  17. thebishop8

    thebishop8 Umm, ackchyually...

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    Change "have" to "having".
     
  18. Queshire

    Queshire Not too sore, are you?

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    Part of me wants to see what a version in the new She Ra cartoon would be like, but the other part of me reckons that Zoat would not be kind to that setting.
     
  19. moralrelativity

    moralrelativity Recovering pendant.

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    your -> you
     
  20. AidanMorgan

    AidanMorgan Essentially Overworked

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    The Pony arc in a nutshell.

    Sunset Shimmer: Grayven no.

    Grayven: GRAYVEN YES.
     
  21. Massgamer

    Massgamer Not too sore, are you?

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    I loved Masters of the Universe and honestly wish there was more fanfiction about it.

    Hope we get more parts of this.

    I am curious what OL does in general to improve upon world.
     
  22. King of Frost

    King of Frost Wishing I was somewhere colder no doubt.

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    My entire knowledge base on He-Man comes entirely from memes. Specifically Skeletor memes and that one music video using clips of He-Man singing that "HEYYEYAAEYAAAEYAEYAA" song.

    He-Man and She-Ra are the same universe, right? Is this that newer She-Ra thing? I've been meaning to watch it since I've heard it's good, but I just haven't yet.
     
  23. RichardWhereat

    RichardWhereat Aia airëa Fëanáro.

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    Why? Gosh darn it, I wanted to see the Alicorn of Ham.
     
  24. Fellow

    Fellow Know what you're doing yet?

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    As interested as I am in the Equestria arc, I am very interested in this He-Man arc. Please post more of it all mighty Zoat.
     
  25. Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    Thank you, corrected.
    Haven't watched it, don't intend to.
    Hordak kidnapped Adora and brought her to a parallel universe. Contact is difficult and sporadic.
    One more tomorrow.
     
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    Massgamer Not too sore, are you?

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    Zoat can you give us some backstory about this version of the SI and what he has been doing?

    Are you going to do that in the next chapter?
     
  28. Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    Ended up on Eternos, grabbed the Amulet, joined the Masters, fought Skeletor's people. He's been reading everything on magic he can and trying to get the Sorceress to interact socially with people.
    No.
     
  29. Bigreader

    Bigreader Doom. Boom!

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    Man every told that's one of these alternate universe versions of Paul with a power rating. I end up wanting to have a completely separate story following that version of call cuz the antics of him in that universe and just as entertaining it's not more so than the one in the main story. So I wonder how he's keeping his ring charged. I read something about an artifact, but I didn't understand it since I didn't watch that version of He-Man. So what should we call this version of Paul Paul, man? He Paul or orange, man?
     
  30. Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    I don't think this sentence is what you meant to say.
     
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