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With This Ring (Young Justice SI) (Thread Fourteen)

Discussion in 'Creative Writing' started by Mr Zoat, Jan 27, 2019.

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  1. Slayer Anderson

    Slayer Anderson Orthodox Heretic

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    He tends to lose on screen against the primary Earth-based superheroes, yes, but win against everyone and everything else, up to and including offensives by the entire Green Lantern Corps.

    Also, it's less like he 'loses,' and more like he 'doesn't get to completely win' since he usually retreats in pretty good order with minimal important loses.

    I tend to regard the 'Book of Fate' stuff in DC as pretty hard-core stupid nonsense.


    I think this AU is pretty interesting. I'd really like to see the knock-on effects of what the SI's been doing and whether or not there's something like the Justice Underground full of former villains turned freedom fighters running around under the radar.
     
  2. Idkusername

    Idkusername Versed in the lewd.

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    Well, if you want be pedantic about it, you're right, but you get what I mean.

    What you describe though wouldn't be returning their original personalities to them, it'll just be that functionally. They'll be more like a third personality instead of the original one, and even that would be murder, ethically if not legally, because the new personalities are still distinct individuals.
     
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  3. Darko

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    Seems like there is, or at least he suspected there is if he wanted to find out who else she told about him.
     
  4. Ngamer11

    Ngamer11 Experienced.

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    That's one silver lining I guess. He's limited to Earth, at least for now.

    Thank you for the reading recommendation.

    Since no one wants to coin a name for this version of Paul, I am suggesting Lighter Shade of Darkseid, or LSD for short. This is just so that we have a name for him, and not have to call him evil Paul all the time. I am also certain that we'll eventually see another evil Paul in the future, so this is to differentiate the evil Pauls.

    Also, would Darkseid think this Paul is good enough to be one of his servants? This is because he is sorta doing what Darkseid wants to do to the whole universe.
     
  5. Darko

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    Paul is an enlightened Lantern and has experience in manipulating peoples desires.

    This version may think that he has completely gotten rid of their personalities, but they may be still floating around in the back, so maybe paragon can bring them back. Hopefully.

    No problem, but be warned that the grammar may be a bit of a problem.

    This story, The Traveling Merchant, is a spin off of another story of his called The Dark Shard, which is a YJ SI story.

    Also I'm not sure that this version is doing what Darkseid is doing,as while both of them are evil, Darkseid is trying to essentially crush all hope in the universe, while this version of Paul isn't trying to do that.

    Though yeah both are pretty close as they want to have the universe follow their every whim and are willing to destroy its ability to fight them.

    I also don't think this version would make a good servant for Darkseid as while his servants will scheme and kill each other at the end of the day they are still loyal to Darkseid and may find it difficult to even think of overthrowing him. Remember that scene in the Superman cartoon with the slaves help him.

    This version of Paul wants to be the one in charge so he would most likely make a poor servant unless Darkseid mind whammied him.
     
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  6. nogoodnames

    nogoodnames Getting out there.

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    Looking up Eye of Zoltec it is literally called the Eye of Evil from a British comic series, according to comic vine it was used as a mind control mcguffin so no wonder Annoying Orange is so evil. It is definitely a good thing this Orange Lantern never merged with the Ophidian. When Paul was gaining enlightenment mass mind control was one of his minor desires so not as surprising to see one of his alternatives went to the extreme.
     
  7. Darko

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    Yeah I think that the guy that was in charge of the British metahuman department or whatever, and fought renegade when he went to Morgan le Fay, had the Right Eye that made him invulnerable.

    So this version could have started charging his ring with the Left Eye, like He Man Paul is doing with that love amulet, and it warped his mind, kinda like Sybarite and his eating of demons, but much, much worse.

    That or he found it after a while and maybe because he lacked the protections the other Paul's had, like souls, spell eaters or godhood, it was easily able to make him into a mind controlling sociopath.
     
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  8. Taisei

    Taisei Unsung Supporting Character

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    I like how this Paul has some of the usual personality markers but is otherwise an unrepentant monster.

    Say what you will about him, but by god can this Paul murder people and replace their vegetative corpses with orange light puppets like nobody's business! Don't know why it's necessary to do this, exactly, but he's certainly great at it!
     
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  9. Darko

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    Paragon: The next time someone tries to tell me my priorities are warped and misplaced I'm gonna point you to my counterpart that considered mind controlling and raping good people to be necessary.
     
  10. Hidden Variable

    Hidden Variable Know what you're doing yet?

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    Phenomenal job here Zoat. It takes quite a lot of skill to make a villain this good. One you know is truly evil, but he’s so charismatic you almost find yourself liking him.

    He almost seems sane, so close to being rational that those who aren’t infatuated are profoundly unsettled. One of those villains you never want to let talk, as they might actually turn you.

    A stark reminder of the evil that man is capable of. And by far the most dangerous villain paul will likely ever encounter.
     
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  11. Darko

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    Hey even Luthor and the Joker sometimes seem sane and look as if they have a good point, and a great and talented author like Zoat can certainly write someone that is a total nutcase and evil, but seems like he has a good point and could potentially convince you of his intentions, even if deep down he's just a evil bastard.
     
  12. Idkusername

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    Necessary for him, not the general good.

    I'm fine with monstrous protags, as long as they don't lie to themselves about it. We haven't seen enough of LSD for me to form a conclusive opinion, though he does seem to teeter close to unaware self-justifications.
     
  13. ForeverShogo

    ForeverShogo Not too sore, are you?

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    Interesting to see just how horrified people are by this particular incarnation of Paul. It's just so much more visceral than usual.

    I do wonder just who has figured out he did what he did, and sent in Empress. He seemed quite convinced he had managed to subvert the Justice League undetected. At least until Empress failed to free Wonder Woman because there was nothing to free.

    Though I will say this new Paul doesn't really come across as insane. Like Zoat said. He's an enlightened tyrant. He has probably genuinely made his world a better place. He's also selfish enough to get . . . enjoyment out of his thralls.

    It's actually disturbingly sane/rational even if morally reprehensible.
     
  14. SaltyWaffles

    SaltyWaffles I trust you know where the happy button is?

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    Zoat, how in the world did this Paul manage to subvert the entire Justice League with Orange light without the GLC noticing? Especially since the League has two GLs on it.
     
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  15. Chaoswind

    Chaoswind Lord of nonsense

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    Uff that was a ride.

    Now I wonder what was LSD doing during the fight with Krona, he probably was competent enough to hide his greed from the stronger lanterns like Paul and Lord Protector, but considering how most of the orange lanterns did during that fight since they were in general a lot less powerful than the main ones and I have to wonder if that fight highlighted his combat inadequacy...

    I mean common sense Paul felt inadequate during the battle, so I guess the same could be said about most of them.
     
  16. DAT_NOOB

    DAT_NOOB Accused of writing in a far away land

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    Might I introduce you to Tales from the Dark Multiverse
     
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  17. Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    He's mostly thinking about other students, there.
    Doesn't exactly roll off the tongue. What's wrong with Orangeseid? Or Tangseid?
    When they met, this version of the SI pointed out that while they were both tyrants, the forms their respective tyrannies took were irreconcilable. Which was fine for him, but would permanently limit Darkseid's growth as God of Tyranny.

    Darkseid was displeased in the extreme.
    No no. As he observes, they're not vegetative. They possess many of the same psychological characteristics as the people they replace. They have to, because they have to be able to replicate their surface level behaviours and he knew perfectly well that they'd lose most of their usefulness if they couldn't make decisions without referring them to him.
    I'm a little surprised too. I mean, it was what I was going for, but he's not doing anything about a tenth of the protagonists down in the NSFW section don't do in the first story segment.
    The Warhammer version did that as well. It's just that the people he did it to were evil beforehand.
    I'm not sure.

    For a start, I haven't decided which version of the DCU he's on. There might well not be any Green Lanterns based on Earth. Or the Corps might not exist. Or he was sufficiently subtle that it hasn't produce any overt changes in their behaviour.
     
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  18. Darko

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    Either someone close to the League who he wasn't able to control or didn't consider it necessary to saw something was wrong and it escalated from there.

    He may also not be controlling every single metahuman in his service, just those at the top, while those at the lower levels think that nothing is wrong.

    Just because someone isn't frothing at the mouth and trying to bite off the face of the person next to them, that doesn't make them sane. Plenty of people appear to be sane and composed, but are deep down just utter monsters.

    Serial killers, despots and the like can appear to be charming, but deep down they're still monsters.

    Ted Bundy and Hitler were both apparently charming men, yet both of them are murderous monsters.

    Even if this version has improved his world there are methods that don't require you to engage in evil in order to do so, like wiping out the personalities of villains and maybe just nudging the heroes a bit, but not wiping out their personalities, or engaging in sexual activities with them after you've done so. It would have been unethical to a degree I admit, but I think most people here would have found that more easier to accept than what this one has done.

    I know the Fantasy one did something similar with the dark Elfs, but they were extremely evil before he changed their personalities and he was hesitant to have a sexual relationship with them.

    Sybarite was also uncomfortable with Roulette thinking that she has to sleep with him so the two can work together and accepted that Tuppence no longer wanted to have sex with him.

    If this version hears the word 'no' then I'm sure he'd just increase the mind control thinking that anyone who opposes him is fundamentally wrong and needs to be corrected.

    Zoat in the first He Man interlude there is a sentence that says 'first time this time'

    Think it should be 'right this time'
     
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  19. Mr Zoat

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    No. I realise it's not good grammar on his part, but it is what he thought.
     
  20. Darko

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    One of the reasons for this may be because no one here expected this kind of behavior from a version of Paul.

    We've seen various versions of Paul do some questionable things, but at the very least they weren't evil bastards.

    Even Baul, who is a criminal, doesn't engage in this kind of shit and if he has to do something bad he may still know what he is doing is bad and can feel regret about it.

    This one on the other hand has mastered self justification to a fine degree and doesn't feel regret over what he does.

    He also doesn't need to do some of the shit he's done to accomplish his goals or keep himself safe.

    it's similar to the reason that people dislike Renegade.

    Because we mostly see this from the point of view of paragon we tend to judge the renegade by comparing him to the paragon.
     
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  21. ForeverShogo

    ForeverShogo Not too sore, are you?

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    Just because someone is evil doesn't mean they're insane, Darko. You can be both monstrous and sane.

    Morality aside, this Paul isn't really being irrational.
     
  22. geniusboi

    geniusboi Your first time is always over so quickly, isn't it?

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    The fuck is the left eye of Zoltec?
     
  23. Darko

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    While it is true that you can be both evil and sane, wearing a ring that influences you to be more avaricious and having a magic item that can encourage you to mind control people doesn't exactly paint a picture of sanity.

    This Paul also is irrational since he thought that the best way to improve the Earth was to mind control everyone that so much as disagrees with him even a bit.

    The likes of Baul and renegade had the excuse of essentially being forced to continue to do bad and irrational things in order to survive. Baul was essentially forced by the Syndicate to work for them and after its fall he was a wanted man that would have been killed without a trial, renegade needed to keep pretending to be Grayven in order to not earn Darkseids ire.

    This version probably just thought that since they weren't adopting his methods right off the bat he should mind control them and utterly destroy their old personality to serve him. Plus we know that various versions of Paul can be arrogant and stubborn and consider themselves right most of the time, so it wouldn't be a surprise that a version that had his worst characteristics take hold would be even more arrogant and consider anyone who even so much as disagreed with him to be someone he should mind wipe.

    Some people may believe his methods were necessary to improve the planet, but I don't think they'd consider him turning the heroes into sex toys to be a necessity and there is no justification for why he would do that or why they should let him continue to do so, and they may oppose him since while it is true that even bad people can have good ides, the Nazis and the whole anti smoking thing, that doesn't mean you want them to be in charge of anything, or for them to have any power.
     
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  24. The Unaligned Player

    The Unaligned Player Agony that desires to meet Extinction

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    Gonna be honest my reaction is mostly “This is so far from Uplift I can’t see it through all the gravity wells therefore I request that you die and would make you do so should you not comply.”
     
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  25. Rahvin

    Rahvin Getting out there.

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    I really like this version of Paul as a character.

    He gives us a visceral look at what someone with all of Paul's munchkinry and none of his morals could have done if given an orange ring out of nowhere, with all of its horribly overpowered orange ring abilities. It's a great counterpoint to the other Pauls, and lets us see exactly how much he could cut loose if he wanted (but never would).

    Obviously if you're one of those people who conceptualise fictional characters as real people and can somehow find a way to personally dislike/hate an imaginary person, you're not going to have a fun time with this. But I like what this viewpoint/parallel lets us explore story-wise, and I hope we get to see more rather than just leave it as "exhibit A of evil Paul".
     
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  26. Darko

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    I just noticed something.

    This episode is called Plutonian.

    In the comics there is an evil Superman expy called the Plutonian.

    In an episode named after an evil version of a good character we are introduced to an evil version of this stories MC.

    As long as we get to see him get taken down then I'm all for seeing him again.
     
  27. Idkusername

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    These snippets of alternate Pauls get their own titles, and this is named after Voltaire's 'When you're evil'. The chapter name has nothing to do with these snippets.
     
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    Oh... He's uplifting the place. Amazing what happens when no one can refuse you. This alt is ahead of the Renegade when it comes to space infrastructure and human on human wars don't happen any longer.
     
  29. Darko

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    Zoat introduced an evil version of Paul in an episode whose title sounds like the name of an evil version of Superman.

    That may not be a complete coincidence.

    In the last episode, that was titled Low Politics, he showed several versions dealing with political issues, like Lord Protector with Thunderan rule and Anti Green with Kaznian safety.
     
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    This is not Uplift. A magic child soldier has realized what this grown man hasn’t: Do not make your world an extension of you.
     
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