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With This Ring (Young Justice SI) (Thread Fourteen)

Discussion in 'Creative Writing' started by Mr Zoat, Jan 27, 2019.

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  1. Chojin Patriarch

    Chojin Patriarch Veteran Lurker

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    Hardly the most complex construct, but this Paul's got a lot of learning to do... And he's in probably the best place for it. Hmm... ;)What to call him. 'Xaul'?

    And the curiosity has been sparked. I wonder what Beast will make of this, given his doctorate in.. Physics, was it?

    Ah, the fun of pre-enlightenment Lanterns.

    Now, if it was something he wanted... Nay, needed to shape, it'd be damn near unbreakable.

    Ah, the challenge of making two guys sitting around sharing exposition interesting...

    Like dust in the wind. Sparkly orange dust, but still...

    Oh, wait until he works out the more esoteric levels of function... Imagine people's faces when they learn he can heal, given a sufficient level of anatomical knowledge...

    Good thing you two are alone. If one of the X-Men had seen that, I suspect there'd be trouble...

    Heh. Yeah, I bet Cyclops wishes he had that sort of safety function, the poor brain-damaged sod... :(

    Well, that is certainly a costume choice. Man must be damn proud of those abs to show them off like that...

    Never underestimate the desire to stay alive and unhurt... Guessing Mandarin tried to mind-whammy him.

    You have no idea. Just have be careful about how to mention the trophy he took from Mandarain... Though I expect he left the finger behind.

    He didn't realise he needed the help yet. Overconfidence is a killer for rookie Lanterns.

    Oh, I can just imagine the Wolverine nickname he earns... 'Fruit Juice'? 'Orange Crush'? 'Tang'? :V

    I suppose it needed to be said. After all, Xavier has a rule about prying. Though I bet he'll be surprised by how open Paul's mind is. And then get KO'd by the name thing... :rolleyes:

    Honestly, I thought that would reinforce the whole unity message... And the X-men have always been damn good when they've had non-mutant teammates...

    And yet that one gene can cause things like Beast's mutation (which is part of his powers in this setting, not because of him downing an experimental chemical.) Or Nightcrawler. There are any number of Mutants with severe physical changes. Even without Magneto's little public debut framing mutants in a bad light as happened in the comics, I doubt people are too comfortable knowing there are people out there with any number of crazy scary abilities...

    Mrrrow. One of the best reasons many teenage boys watched the show. After all, a hot southern lady in a spandex outfit so tight it's practically body-paint is hard to go past when channel-surfing...

    At the time, Rogue had no real name. There were teases, but I don't think any writer had settled on one until the Movie called her Anne Marie... And this Rogue's memories are so scrambled after her set-to with Carol Danvers that even she doesn't know it...

    Hmm... How is he going to sort out his name in this alternate? The usual 'go through a list until he passes out' method? Has he even realised his name is blocked? I mean, OL found it out within minutes...
    (And on the topic of names: 'Saul Talbot'? Kinda close to the real name. And it was in plain sight the whole time. ;) Nice. Interesting that he can think parts of it, but not the whole thing - Peter Wynne has the tail end of his real name, after all...)

    Thankfully without any momentary nudity. :eek: Gods help any Paul stuck in a Magical Girl setting. Especially one where transformations aren't instant, like Symphogear.

    Remember, he doesn't know specifics of the setting... Which means he doesn't remember the good parts of the cartoon. :p

    That's one way to put it...

    'Fifteen minutes' being based on the amount of time he can manage to focus? I doubt it'd be based on Ring Charge, unless the Ka Stone is really inefficient.

    Don't think we missed that momentary depression Black there, Mr Zoat. Understandable, though, given the drawbacks of her powers.

    :D Probably not the best way to show off the environmental shield, but hey...

    Setting quite the first impression. That scatter-brained-ness coming from the Orange Light running a little hot, making him more impulsive, I take it.

    Any second now, it'll hit her...

    Admittedly, I'm not certain how well it'd last during more... Intimate contact, but hey, it's a start...

    Wow, she really is touch-starved, isn't she? Even if they don't go the romantic route, she's just found herself a new best friend...

    ...Oh, my. Well, Gambit's just lost any chance of romance with her. Now, it's a matter of whether Paul's British properness can withstand her.. affections.

    Even if it doesn't work out romantically, I think these two are gonna be good friends. And I foresee her being a lot less.. tense in future, too. One of her biggest issues throughout her history has been isolation, and having someone she can touch safely? That's a damn big butterfly.


    "Blacklash survived the fall, but when I tried to grab him...
    ...but not directly breach them.


    Indeed. In the comics, he's had an occasion or two where he went into combat using an exoskeleton powered by psionic energy. Like during the finale of the Fatal Attractions event, where he joined the X-Men in an attack on Asteroid M. Even then, he was having to devote a lot of focus on walking...

    As for the telekinetic thing? That was largely a minor element of the Ultimate comics, from what I remember. Xavier has generally not shown any significant telekinetic powers elsewhere...
     
  2. RichardWhereat

    RichardWhereat Aia airëa Fëanáro.

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    And with, of course.
     
  3. WhiteNoise

    WhiteNoise Making the rounds.

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    You mean he's not putting them in pants for the first time?
     
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  4. Handlewithcare

    Handlewithcare Versed in the lewd.

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    Yeah, neither Jean nor Xavier should look into his head.

    Finding out they are comic characters to him would not go over well.
     
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  5. Bramble Thorn

    Bramble Thorn Verified Silhouette

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    Is there a piece of current events I'm missing here?
     
  6. Darko

    Darko Connoisseur.

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    Basically this.

    I saw Zoat post it when I was checking to see if this chapter came out.
     
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  7. Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    It's within that field. Don't ask me for the specifics.
    Fifteen minutes being about how long his charge lasts at full combat usage intensity, throwing up constructs and having them constantly destroyed.
    "I... I'm sorry, but I don't understand your name."

    With a full face mask on I can't read his expression, but I imagine he's sneering.

    "What's so hard to understand?"

    "Your lash isn't black, your costume isn't black, and... Well, you're not black. Where does the black come from?"

    To our right, Dreadknight snorts with laughter, and Backlash Blacklash jerks his head around to glare at him.

    "What, I can't be black if I'm not black?!"

    "Hah!"

    "You're not a knight!"

    "No, but I have a doctorate. Even after leaving Latvaria, I wasn't going to call myself 'Doctor Dread'. I have a horse and armour. It's close enough. You're not even a little bit black."

    "What should I have called myself, then?"

    "Whiplash."

    "The Lash."

    "Pink-" Dreadknight snorts again. "-lash."
     
  8. Darko

    Darko Connoisseur.

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    Well Tom Cassidy is also called Black Tom Cassidy, so you're not alone.
     
  9. CTrees

    CTrees Chasing the ring

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    Why wouldn't you use Bing for your porn searches? It's easily the best search engine for porn. Uh, so I've heard... Wait this is QQ, and I've commented on In Praise of Eros. Bing is definitely the best search engine for porn these days.
     
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  10. Darko

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    Either a telekinetic hold, metal claws or eye beams would have come his way.

    Maybe this Paul can help with that.

    He is a highly powerful and experienced telepath, so he may actually not be hurt by it.

    Either the list thing or he chooses one he likes.

    It's possible Saul tried to figure out his name and when he found some that he couldn't say he chose some that sounded similar.

    Violet Paul.

    He does that.

    Or it's just him.

    I'm betting that behind that British politeness there's a passionate, if awkward, lover.

    Some of the best romances start out as friendships.

    Apokalips did give him some telekinetic powers in the Evolution cartoon.
     
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  11. Massgamer

    Massgamer Not too sore, are you?

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    Rogue is touch-starved in the same way that Ratchet and other 'deviants' of his species were, but unlike them they is also minor sexual aspect to it since hard for her to get involved with people without touching.

    Maybe Paul can offer to over her in an environmental shield and let her hug her friends for once, it'd certainly be a nice gesture at least.
     
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  12. Prince Charon

    Prince Charon Just zis guy, you know?

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    Well, I'm pretty sure more than half the guys (and a few of the girls) that I went to high school with in the 1990s would have at least tried to tell her that under those circumstances, though some of us would likely have been very awkward about it. She was pretty popular.
     
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  13. PrinceJonathan

    PrinceJonathan Versed in the lewd.

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    "Feels like I'm wearing nothing at all."

    "Stupid sexy goose-brain."
     
  14. Mquz

    Mquz Versed in the lewd.

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    So... what if he gave her the/ a power ring. Would she be able to touch people? Would the ring make her indirectly touch everything at once?
     
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  15. FreeGod

    FreeGod If you see a God on the road fuck it!

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    I expect that floating is simpler and that means that he can put a bunch of cool gadgets into his chair.
     
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  16. Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    Yes, though the orange light wouldn't do anything good for her mental state. Or Carol Danvers'.
     
  17. Silverias

    Silverias Know what you're doing yet?

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    So...umm...hanging around Xavier means that his meta-knowledge is not going to last very long. If not Xavier, then Emma Frost. Xavier has very few compunctions about peeking when he feels it's necessary, and Emma...even less so.
     
  18. Poimenikos

    Poimenikos Your first time is always over so quickly, isn't it?

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    Oh... So. If that paul has problems with hes... "Wants" that mean that IF he gets involved with rogue he might have a problem. While having... Alone time with her he might think "we must not touch'' . But if he deeply truly comes to love her and he wants to have true contact ? it would take onky a secont lost in passiin and baaam. Rogue gonna get traumatized.
     
  19. Doccer

    Doccer I trust you know where the happy button is?

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    Do we know what his real last name is?
     
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  20. Darko

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    Tallowin.
     
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  21. Aelyx

    Aelyx It is I, Q, who are you?

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    This Xavier isn't comics Xavier, he's a bit more idealistic. Jean would be the safer bet, I don't remember if Emma goes to the mansion in the show.
     
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  22. Soul Shocker

    Soul Shocker Not too sore, are you?

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    Handholding at first meeting?

    .... lewd.

    EDIT: Lewd no2:
    Seems like environmental shield is like an ultra-thin condom, conveys touch both ways, but you're not actually touching
     
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  23. dxdragon

    dxdragon Experienced.

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    Paul x Rogue?

    Niiiice.

    I actually want a bunch more snippets from this world. Maybe have them be a 3rd point of view, like Renegade is his 2nd?
     
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    hance1986 A pitiful excuse for a man.

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    ' mutants '

    ' Institute." ' missed quotation mark.

    I kind of want this to be OL's thing a bit in the 90s Marvel universe he's known for by the villains. Don't let the orange one talk, because he asks those armor piercing questions that throw off villain team cohesion slightly, or make something sound ridiculous, or find some chink in the armor. What it does is kind of interrupt the flow. Like The X-Men are comic book style arrayed against Apocalypse and his Horsemen like in a splash panel and En Sabah Nur is monologuing about purging the weak and inferior and Paul says "Excuse me!" and says something that undermines the argument and Apocalypse just attacks because he doesn't want to answer, proving Paul's point.
     
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  25. nick012000

    nick012000 Gone for Good

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    Or, you know, having sex or being romantically intimate in general, once the lust causes enough Violet Light to disrupt his Orange Light constructs.
     
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    Lazurman That Others May Fap

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    Lust/Horny is Avarice/Orange. Love is... Love/Violet.
     
  27. Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    Emma Frost was barely in that series. And cartoon Xavier was a lot less of a dick than some versions.
    The environmental shield is up by default. A far bigger problem will be what happens if he starts to love her and the emotion disrupts his constructs.
    Which is pronounced 'Taal-owin', in case you were wondering.
    No, but she is in the Hellfire Club.
    I'd... Need to rewatch the whole thing to do that.
    Thank you, corrected.
     
  28. ChestBurster

    ChestBurster Getting sticky.

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    Ooh nice I've finally caught up with the latest update.

    Has anybody kept track of all the Paul Variations specifically the story-interludes?

    Mild curiosity here but since this is QQ is there an NSFW thread for all the sexy times? I'm fine with SFW fun times though this is just a wild thought I wanted to unleash

    Also I love what you're doing Zoat so keep up the good work.
     
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  29. Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    Accuracy not guaranteed.
    There's In Praise of Eros. It's sort of that.
     
  30. Ngamer11

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    There's also this page.
     
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