1. Due to issues with external spam filters, QQ is currently unable to send any mail to Microsoft E-mail addresses. This includes any account at live.com, hotmail.com or msn.com. Signing up to the forum with one of these addresses will result in your verification E-mail never arriving. For best results, please use a different E-mail provider for your QQ address.
    Dismiss Notice
  2. For prospective new members, a word of warning: don't use common names like Dennis, Simon, or Kenny if you decide to create an account. Spammers have used them all before you and gotten those names flagged in the anti-spam databases. Your account registration will be rejected because of it.
    Dismiss Notice
  3. Since it has happened MULTIPLE times now, I want to be very clear about this. You do not get to abandon an account and create a new one. You do not get to pass an account to someone else and create a new one. If you do so anyway, you will be banned for creating sockpuppets.
    Dismiss Notice
  4. If you wish to change your username, please ask via conversation to tehelgee instead of asking via my profile. I'd like to not clutter it up with such requests.
    Dismiss Notice
  5. Due to the actions of particularly persistent spammers and trolls, we will be banning disposable email addresses from today onward.
    Dismiss Notice
  6. A note about the current Ukraine situation: Discussion of it is still prohibited as per Rule 8
    Dismiss Notice
  7. The rules regarding NSFW links have been updated. See here for details.
    Dismiss Notice
  8. The testbed for the QQ XF2 transition is now publicly available. Please see more information here.
    Dismiss Notice

Walk on the Moon (Naruto SI)

Discussion in 'Creative Writing' started by SixPerfections, Apr 6, 2018.

Loading...
  1. Dinya

    Dinya Know what you're doing yet?

    Joined:
    Feb 19, 2013
    Messages:
    179
    Likes Received:
    263
    So what's the book gonna be called and what is it about?
     
    determind, Grigori and gustyeagle like this.
  2. varoksa

    varoksa Getting sticky.

    Joined:
    Feb 13, 2017
    Messages:
    82
    Likes Received:
    433
    I did not expect this to ever update again pretty happy it did.
     
    Hanada likes this.
  3. zachol

    zachol Tomato

    Joined:
    Aug 7, 2017
    Messages:
    677
    Likes Received:
    1,170
    Yay update! :D

    Also very excited for the book!
     
  4. unLuckerII

    unLuckerII Getting out there.

    Joined:
    Apr 6, 2021
    Messages:
    11
    Likes Received:
    78
    Great you're back. This story of yours (and the one from Dresden files) really made my day! 9/10
     
    Hanada likes this.
  5. Milpld

    Milpld Not too sore, are you?

    Joined:
    Oct 18, 2017
    Messages:
    323
    Likes Received:
    1,060
    It speaks for itself that I didn't have to re-read the fic to understand what's happening. I remember Rei. I remember her relationship with Neji. I kinda remember her techniques.

    Any other fic, and there would be a good change I wouldn't remember anything after so long.
     
  6. paloswag

    paloswag Know what you're doing yet?

    Joined:
    Aug 27, 2016
    Messages:
    115
    Likes Received:
    816
    If you have a patreon, I'll throw a dono for the update.
     
    Last edited: Mar 9, 2024
    Ratton99 likes this.
  7. PlasticSoldier

    PlasticSoldier Experienced.

    Joined:
    Apr 2, 2018
    Messages:
    2,510
    Likes Received:
    8,358
    Cool. Let us know when the book's published. What'll it be about anyway?
     
    Prince Charon, IvanDead and Grigori like this.
  8. Ratton99

    Ratton99 Making the rounds.

    Joined:
    Apr 21, 2020
    Messages:
    41
    Likes Received:
    274
    If you got anything like a patreon account I’d love to pitch in. I’m always looking for more books to read so I’ll definitely check yours out but it feels bad to get all this content from you without giving you money.
     
    Last edited: Aug 11, 2021
    IvanDead likes this.
  9. LuridThrone

    LuridThrone Sitting On The

    Joined:
    Jan 11, 2015
    Messages:
    748
    Likes Received:
    5,173
    Is it bad that the notion of a book doesnt excite me, but i would pick up a patreon if it got me more Walk On The Moon?
     
  10. IvanDead

    IvanDead I trust you know where the happy button is?

    Joined:
    Apr 13, 2016
    Messages:
    756
    Likes Received:
    5,451
    Welcome back!
    of it’s very -> of its very
    or even perhaps even bitter -> or perhaps even bitter
    before it’s time. -> before its time.
    and it’s execution -> and its execution
    in any and -> in any way and
    in it’s implementation -> in its implementation
    Well, it would certainly be enlightening to know that she remembers exactly what the Kyuubi's murdering presence feels like.
     
  11. Abhorsen

    Abhorsen Making the rounds.

    Joined:
    May 24, 2015
    Messages:
    35
    Likes Received:
    232
    I'm so happy you're still writing! I love this story.
     
    Hanada likes this.
  12. defenestrator

    defenestrator I clearly do not know where the happy button is

    Joined:
    May 13, 2015
    Messages:
    1,421
    Likes Received:
    18,312
    The ancient writings prophesised the Queen's return
     
  13. magicdownunder

    magicdownunder Getting sticky.

    Joined:
    Oct 9, 2015
    Messages:
    87
    Likes Received:
    186
    I'm so glad this is back~ This and Ochimaru's daughter are my favorites.

    I think making the book free is an good idea, though having an option for donations would be nice kinda like Midnight Moonlight and Date a Angel.

    I remember reading 'Date a Angel' on FFnet then immediately buying both audiobooks right after (its a shame the third book never came out).
     
    Lord Cheddar and RichardWhereat like this.
  14. Sinnerlust

    Sinnerlust The bastard

    Joined:
    Apr 18, 2018
    Messages:
    25,205
    Likes Received:
    79,748
    I'm not really happy with the whole rock lee has a defective coils its for one go against the idea of lee as a character lee is talentless not disabled this completely changes his character because now it's just lee was born with a disability he isn't talentless he is just disabled. Lee is a person who isn't a prodigy and worked hard to compensate that's it. Not only that him having a defect raises questions how can he fight at all if he can't use chakra or water walk or use the eight gates which need the chakra coils. This is actually a problematic addition.
     
    Naberius and Prince Charon like this.
  15. Argentorum

    Argentorum Free Cat

    Joined:
    Apr 16, 2015
    Messages:
    1,215
    Likes Received:
    17,471
    Well worth the wait.

    Perhaps it's time for yet another reread :D
     
  16. Prince Charon

    Prince Charon Just zis guy, you know?

    Joined:
    Feb 20, 2014
    Messages:
    9,737
    Likes Received:
    38,239
    Huh. Haven't seen this in a while, but it remains good, so thank you for sharing it with us.

    Interesting fight, nicely creative tactics.
     
  17. Ratton99

    Ratton99 Making the rounds.

    Joined:
    Apr 21, 2020
    Messages:
    41
    Likes Received:
    274
    Him having underdeveloped chakra coils is canon. She changed the wording and how it works a bit here, but that’s just to flesh it out and make it more realistic(like most of the other changes here). He isn’t incapable of using chakra either here or in canon, he just can’t use ninjutsu or genjutsu like other ninja because his body is different. If it was just a lack of talent he would have been able to use those Justus in Naruto because he trains like a maniac, but he literally couldn’t learn it, so he settled on using taijutsu.
     
  18. Sinnerlust

    Sinnerlust The bastard

    Joined:
    Apr 18, 2018
    Messages:
    25,205
    Likes Received:
    79,748
    No it isn't that fanon that's never said anywhere A fanfic made that up and people actually believe it's real it's not he's just that bad at it, kushina was shit at ninjutsu as well she only could use sealing and her bloodline.
     
  19. steamrick

    steamrick Matter: protons, electrons, neutrons and morons

    Joined:
    Aug 29, 2014
    Messages:
    4,229
    Likes Received:
    7,630
  20. Sartek

    Sartek Not too sore, are you?

    Joined:
    Oct 16, 2016
    Messages:
    326
    Likes Received:
    840
    Yeah, not going to read the update before I re-read the whole story. I remember quite a bit, which is a surprise, but the bits I wouldn't recognize would stay to haunt me
     
    IvanDead likes this.
  21. Commonwealth1991

    Commonwealth1991 Thanks, I hate it.

    Joined:
    Aug 10, 2019
    Messages:
    376
    Likes Received:
    2,853
    This is a very accurate description of my mood the moment I saw the update. Points for reading the room.

    I think this points to an evolution within Rei's character that's not necessarily for the better. The last time Rei interacted with Lee in a meaningful way she possessed a truly neutral if somewhat encouraging disposition towards the taijutsu enthusiast. Now it seems as though it is merely for show, a mask she's put up to appear more benevolent than she actually is.

    Hopefully, whatever solace she's found in Hinata will prevent her bottled up emotions from exploding as they have in the past.

    Yes, this is an absolute must with Rei if you want to avoid an Anko fiasco 2.0, speaking of which where is the special jounin? I can't imagine her last spout with Rei had any positive effects on her psychology. It's possible that she's in an even worse place than before she meet Rei since her psuedo student really twisted the metaphorical dagger into her when it came to their war of words.

    Especially since unlike Rei, Anko doesn't have the benefit of sharing her deepest woes with someone who understands her on a psychological level.

    I guess this more or less clears up the mystery of how Kakashi managed to detect Rei before she got the jump on him. Also on the topic of ninja tactics that right there was easily A+ team work material, very reminiscent of early Naruto arcs. Hopefully, they'll continue to build on this dynamic and eventually involve Lee sometime in the near future.

    Minor correction: "figure out what drove and motivated her"
     
    Last edited: Apr 11, 2021
  22. paloswag

    paloswag Know what you're doing yet?

    Joined:
    Aug 27, 2016
    Messages:
    115
    Likes Received:
    816
    Sinnerlust
    Sure, Lee’s chakra coils might be fanon. But it’s a realistic fanon interpretation of a vague character flaw. He’s unable to use ninjutsu or genjutsu. Why? Because he’s talentless? That’s a bad shounen-flavor reason that really doesn’t hold up when you think about it for a bit. He would have to be mentally handicapped if he couldn’t manage an e-rank ninjutsu by the end of canon, something nameless adolescents can do regularly. Assuming he was talentless, I have a hard time believing that after 16 years of “hard work”, he couldn’t manage the bare minimum, unless he had some kind of biological handicap.

    And Kushina’s wiki states she was able to use ninjutsu. I’ve always assumed she just didn’t use any in the few chapters/episodes she was in.
     
  23. Sinnerlust

    Sinnerlust The bastard

    Joined:
    Apr 18, 2018
    Messages:
    25,205
    Likes Received:
    79,748
    No it doesn't makes sense, because he uses the eight gates a ability that uses the chakra coils in fact the gates are flooding his coils with chakra if lee had malformed chakra pathways this shouldn't be possible considering that the gates are taxing on the body to begin with you think it makes sense to say lees has malformed coils that can't handle doing ninjutsu but can handle a forbidden jutsu that is extremely rough on the body that's stupid. Yet you say this is realistic really.

    Not only that this fanon completely ignores context and adds new one for one lee calls himself and identify's himself as a loser some one who just can't learn ninjutsu if we go with the fanon that means he isn't a loser just disabled so the narrative is saying lee is a loser because he is handicapped and by default neji mocks lee for being handicapped instead of him just being shit at ninjutsu so that makes neji actually worse as person. So thanks for that. Look if you like this fannon fine I can't argue that but don't try to tell me it makes sense don't try serve me shit and tell me it's steak. I'm good with using fanon to fill in blanks but it can't make the situation worse.

    As for kushina honestly the story suggests they are talking about her chains but kishimoto can't seem to decide if it's a bloodline or what. So I'm going I have no idea and I shouldn't have used her as an example.
     
  24. paloswag

    paloswag Know what you're doing yet?

    Joined:
    Aug 27, 2016
    Messages:
    115
    Likes Received:
    816
    Hey man, I’m sensing some aggression. My disagreement is nothing personal. I just like to have good debates.

    But back to Lee. I always favored the fanon theory that the malformed coils only affected control and not use. Which is why he can empower his taijutsu and use the gates, because those rely more on unlocking power and less on control. He's releasing limiters rather than directing where he wants the chakra to go, because he can't. That's my head-canon, at least.

    And pre-Naruto Neji is kind of an asshole, imo. With the way he treated Hinata and Lee, I can only imagine what he would have said to a homeless orphan or someone suicidal, given his philosophy at the time.

    We could probably talk in circles about this all day, but that's the problem with shounen power systems. They never really hold up to scrutiny when you ask questions about edge cases.

    And to fanon theories in general, I've never seen the reasoning for how defensive some people are with canon versus fanon theories (albeit ones that are well thought out). A lot of works, not just manga, leave a lot to interpretation/subtext, and I do think they lose some of their impact when we decide to take the words at face value. To me, not thinking about “why” Lee can't use ninjutsu is little different from taking Gregor Samsa's transformation as is or watching the movie Inception from a single, linear angle. I'm not talking about you in particular, but I've been in a few heated back and forths with fellow manga lovers who take canon like gospel. And we've probably both met people in real life who take the words written in religious texts literally. What I’m trying to say is that the fandom creates an issue when we have an orthodox view of a work. If even we the fans don’t look for nuance and complexity in our manga, then how can we expect anything different from the random adults who flip through its pages and dismiss it as a childish waste of time. Maybe they’re right. It’s all just copium for juvenile world-building.

    To be fair, some people take it in the complete opposite direction. For instance, I’m of the opinion that Worm fanon completely wrecked that community.
     
    Last edited: Apr 11, 2021
    BookZone, azqs, Mendeleev and 3 others like this.
  25. Sinnerlust

    Sinnerlust The bastard

    Joined:
    Apr 18, 2018
    Messages:
    25,205
    Likes Received:
    79,748
    it's more of I'm annoyed at this fannon being argued as canon not you personally but it's been getting on my nerves for years but that's not on you. So I do need bring it down a bit and not sound so aggressive.

    I still don't care for it but to add to it let's say the malformation is specifically in his fingers so he has a hard time forming hand signs so he can't mold his chakra properly to cast ninjutsu.


    True but he didn't need to be more unsympathetic.

    True a lot of shounen don't fully flesh out how there power system works but in the case of lee it's never addressed what's going on beyond him being talentless.

    It depends on what it is some people straight up ignore facts stated in story for there own head canon I can understand this for something's like I personally completely ignore the manga ending to yu yu hakusho. I don't believe canon has to be gospel but the fanon actually has to make sense and it's different when people genuinely believe the fanon. And are making shit up that didn't happen.
    Agreed.
     
    Last edited: Apr 11, 2021
    paloswag likes this.
  26. unLuckerII

    unLuckerII Getting out there.

    Joined:
    Apr 6, 2021
    Messages:
    11
    Likes Received:
    78
    Actually we know chakra has physical and spiritual component. Given what it does Eight Gates uses probably only physical aspect of chakra (given that description is literary "removes body limits"). Lee can also stand on water. The reason why he cannot use jutsu is thus probably that his chakra coils don't provide spiritual aspect of chakra making most (but not all) jutsu impossible.
     
    Grigori likes this.
  27. Sinnerlust

    Sinnerlust The bastard

    Joined:
    Apr 18, 2018
    Messages:
    25,205
    Likes Received:
    79,748
    That's a interesting idea.
     
  28. Jade Isentry

    Jade Isentry Unshakable

    Joined:
    Dec 27, 2016
    Messages:
    155
    Likes Received:
    642
    Yes, it IS cannon. I would tell you to re-watch the anime, but really, who's got time for that. It is very CLEARLY and EXPLICITLY stated, multiple times that Lee CANNOT--not 'is shit at' but CANNOT--use ninjutsu, no matter how much infinate effort and training he ever puts into it.
     
    azqs and tarnishedsilver like this.
  29. Sinnerlust

    Sinnerlust The bastard

    Joined:
    Apr 18, 2018
    Messages:
    25,205
    Likes Received:
    79,748
    So he said he has abnormal chakra coils that won't allow him to use ninjutsu.
     
  30. Jade Isentry

    Jade Isentry Unshakable

    Joined:
    Dec 27, 2016
    Messages:
    155
    Likes Received:
    642
    Exactly. The author is coming up with an explanation to flesh out something that cannon writes poorly by saying 'just because'. Which I appreciate.

    Seriously though, Lee's disability is literally the main basis upon which his character and character arc is built.

    Oh yeah, love your tag by the way, you fucking vampire:D
     
    azqs, tarnishedsilver and IvanDead like this.
Loading...