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With This Ring (Young Justice SI) (Thread Fourteen)

Discussion in 'Creative Writing' started by Mr Zoat, Jan 27, 2019.

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  1. Sojiko

    Sojiko Getting sticky.

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    "safer"

    Understatement of the century right there. Especially when you consider how different all of the Pauls are when they started from the same point before putting on the ring. I know they had different environments around them (except for SI & Renegade) but still.

    You'd be surprised! The SI's is capable of an amazingly moderate reflection on the behalf of someone else. People don't give him enough credit for his awareness of his abnormal thinking and his ability to work around it. He knows other peoples have different values and different modes of thinking and that properly advising them can only be done by taking those into account.

    Finally! It was about time someone got the Goddess of Wisdom involved.
    ...
    And I see that in her great wisdom, she has reached the correct decision. Let's do this!
     
  2. RichardWhereat

    RichardWhereat Aia airëa Fëanáro.

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    Zambi, Zanahary, or Zipaltonal?
     
  3. Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    Thank you, corrected.
    Thank you, corrected.
     
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  4. jaelin910

    jaelin910 habitual lurker

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    In the scenario you're engaging with, he decides to kill a billion people in response to being dethroned. That's pretty unstable.
     
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  5. Darko

    Darko Connoisseur.

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    Now I'm getting images of the Olympians from Fate Grand Order.
     
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  6. BartlettMagic

    BartlettMagic peekaboo, you fucks you!

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    oh fantastic question. first guess is 'amusing.' second guess is 'unfortunate.'
     
  7. Ngamer11

    Ngamer11 Experienced.

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    I thought he'd be surprised, as an insignificant mortal like Maxie is far beneath Zeus' notice.
     
  8. DAT_NOOB

    DAT_NOOB Accused of writing in a far away land

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    That kinda was the joke.
     
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  9. RichardWhereat

    RichardWhereat Aia airëa Fëanáro.

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    There are, what, 4 billion left after that? I'm thinking Gaea will ask him to step his game up.
     
  10. Radix

    Radix I trust you know where the happy button is?

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    Well except for all those people hitting on Paul without him noticing. He really has a notable weakness in modeling if they base their motivation on something other than desire. Such as his failure with Luthor that led to him sulking.

    He is generally only really good at modeling desires. When people moderate that for reasons other than contrary desires he is a bit off.

    Such as how he failed to model how reasonable Nabu could be or how suggesting the rotatiom schedule could give away the element of surprise.

    Or how completely insane his current plan has been. It is being carried by Hectate and Athena.
     
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  11. Noctus

    Noctus I trust you know where the happy button is?

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    L M A O

    Good to see this moving along though.
     
  12. WorstMirari

    WorstMirari the girl in blue

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    eeeee what an exciting time to get caught up!!
     
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  13. Vaermina

    Vaermina Well worn.

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    That assumes he survives the sudden unexpected depowering.


    LePaul takes back the Spear and Ring and the deal that requires they free the Titan's is dead in the water.

    LePaul is also the one who put the whole plan together in the first place. And part of that plan involved the deal that they free the Titans.

    So yes, it's all on him.
     
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  14. The Froggy Ninja

    The Froggy Ninja The Blade Will Never Die

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    It's explicitly not. A large portion of the responsibility is on him, but he's not the one deciding whether or not they follow through, or whether or not Hephaestus pays the agreed upon price. J. Robert Oppenheimer invented the nuke, but that doesn't mean President Truman holds no blame for using it. Yes, Paul could stop it, but so could Hephaestus, Hecate or any number of other people involved.
     
  15. 9adam4

    9adam4 No emotion, only "peace"

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    Much better than she is in some of her appearances in Greek poems and plays. I'm thinking particularly of Ajax.
     
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  16. BlueMangoAdea

    BlueMangoAdea Alive. For now.

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    Since Athena, Diana’s patron goddess, is also part of this, Diana can’t blame Paul too much. :V
     
  17. Rafin

    Rafin Not too sore, are you?

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    Minor quibble, but if a Greek person shortens a name to make it more familiar, they almost ways cut away or alter the front. The ending is needed to still have it recognizably be a name (or even just a noun). So I recommend changing this to "Phaestos" ("Phaeste" when calling someone if you want to be grammatically correct) and "Thena" respectively.

    In fact, while Hephaestus is not a a usual given name in Greek anymore, Athena is actually pretty common and Thena is the typical nickname given.
     
  18. Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    Not only will I change that, I'll also link to your post by way of explanation.
     
  19. Vaermina

    Vaermina Well worn.

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    No, it's MAD.

    And it's why you don't go around doing what LePaul does without first spending a very long time making sure the powerful being/race you're fucking over can't fuck you over in one last act of revenge.


    Given he promised not to kill Zeus and her metaphysics in this story embody truth?
     
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  20. Jaron

    Jaron Believing in fairytales

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    The link is broken.
     
  21. Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    Thank you, corrected.
     
  22. Threadmarks: Coup Data (part 21)
    Mr Zoat

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    28th October 2012
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    Mount Olympus isn't anything special. A little under three thousand metres at its highest point, it's tall for a European mountain but doesn't even make the top hundred tallest mountains worldwide. It's snow-covered for nine months of the year, though with global warming a thing of the past that might increase a little. The lower slopes are coated in forests and scrubland with significant biodiversity while the highest portions are bare rock. There are more Christian places of worship here than Hellenist ones; Greek Orthodox churches, shrines and actual monasteries are sited at several places, while the ruins of Hellenistic shrines can really only be seen if you know where to look.

    The idea of changing that has been brought up a few times, but the monks and priests are -understandably, if with a certain degree of bias- rather against it.

    There's no divine palace sitting at the top. No Zeus sitting on a throne.

    Except.

    I hold aloft a mug filled with the Cider of Discord, take a sip-

    And as I swallow I couldn't say what it tasted like only that it left me shuddering, and I have no idea whether it's good-shuddering or bad.

    -and then pour the rest of it on the scree-covered ground. Next, I drop a pile of small sticks and kindling out of subspace and set it on fire. Ah, add some petrol? Better. Drop a pile of cow organs on top of that.

    Because while I can't do magic, I'm perfectly capable of performing rituals that existing magic will react to. I've got no idea why the Olympians tied their rituals to the burning of animal organs but I'll admit that does make things simpler. Then I hold out the cup and wait.

    The smell's interesting. I mean, it's definitely beefy, but at the same time it's clearly different from the muscle-tissue I usually eat.

    I watch the pile blacken and burn.

    We decided on this method of entry because it's respectful and… Frankly, the alternative was to swap places with the Ophidian and… While she could exist in Divine Olympus, we're not sure that Divine Olympus could survive having her exist inside it. And in

    Hard. Rough. Unyielding.

    fact, I…

    I raise my right hand, my

    Gather. Flow. Bind. Life.

    tattoos… There. Their presence apparent even through my armour. Like my arm is an arm and a

    Lever. Holding. Grasping.

    tool at the same time. Welcome to the thaumosphere, or at least the bits the Olympians have formatted for their own convenience.

    I take a moment to look around

    Growing. Flowing. Reaching. Calling.

    and try to let the concept-objects just sort of… Flow over me, interface with me. The thing and the idea of the thing. It's not… Harmful, and…

    Hunger. Hunger. Hunger.

    There's that. I can actually feel it beat in my chest not at all like a second heart actually but that's the only metaphor that's even sort of accurate. I take a moment to press my hands to my chest, getting used to the essence of my own existence.

    And then I turn my eyes upward, to the

    Power. Greatness. Grandeur.

    of the Palace of Olympus. The path up is a path and the idea of a path

    Journey. Travel. Conveyance.

    and to put one foot on it is to step off it at your destination. Interesting thing about Olympus is that unlike Valhalla there isn't an elect class of semi-divine soldiers on guard duty. Ares might favour a warrior in life but once they're dead they belong to Hades. Unless they end up in the Elysian Fields, but that's still in Erebos. To get a soldier here they'd have to experience apotheosis and then they'd be a bit above guard duty. Some way off a group of women are sitting at a scroll-covered table, pens in hand and talking animatedly to one another.

    Nice gardens. I imagine that they stay like that because-.

    "Paul."

    I smile as a familiar woman approaches. "Calliope. How have you been?"

    "Well enough. I have been spending time with my sisters, since… I gained my freedom. I trust that he-. The criminal-."

    "Will be spending the rest of his natural life in prison. After that, it's not up to mortal justice."

    She nods distractedly. "What brings you to Olympus?"

    "I'm here to talk to Lord Zeus. It might be advisable to get to a safe distance."

    "Ah?"

    "If things go badly."

    "I-. I will pass that on. Zeus holds court through-" She points into the palace. "-there. I… Believe that he may be expecting you."

    "Thank you. Be well."

    Her face falls slightly as I stride off in the direction she indicated. Thing about the palace is that it's ancient Greek palatial, designed for a people who would have to use burning torches if they had no natural light. Olympus had to be created in that mode, so even though everything is exaggerated, it's not… Overwhelming. Or all that large. For example, having gotten this far, there's only a relatively small antechamber before-

    "Ah, Lantern! Come! Come!"

    -I'm outside the throne room, pushing open the door and walking inside with the owner's

    Majesty. Power. Presence. Caged lightning. Gar.

    permission. I think that ordinarily my eyes would be drawn to the empty throne at the head of the room, but Zeus has-. So much happening, the conceptual links so strong and clear that I'm-. Ugh. Feeling more than a little off.

    "Oh? I'm mildly impressed. Lesser mortals have been struck dead from seeing me like this."

    His physical form-? It puts me in mind of Hades, for obvious reasons. The structure of the face makes the relationship obvious, though Zeus's hair is entirely white. Not grey, not mostly comprised of white hair while a few still have colour, no; the whole head of hair and neatly groomed beard are white. He's wearing a blue doric chiton under a purple himation, both accented with gold stitching. The gold theme carries on to his gold bracers and necklace, as well as the diadem on his head. And

    Wealth. Prosperity. Success. Power. Status.

    I understand why he's dressed as he is. I'm not completely clear why he's lounging on a klinē in the centre of a room next to a table upon which appears to be a light lunch. He's too conceptually unsubtle for me to have the meaning shoved into my brain. Still, there are a couple of other klinē around so perhaps he's just finished a meeting.

    I bow. "Lord Zeus. King of Olympus."

    "Come!" He gestures to the seat opposite him, not grinning exactly, but certainly smiling. "Come, sit."

    I don't know what he's up to, but there's no sense in being rude about it. I follow his directions-. And see as I get closer that he's not above pettiness. Unlike Hades, who is a little larger than most men because he can't get smaller, Zeus is about nine feet tall and without appearing to have been stretched out in the way that very tall humans sometimes do. And the furniture is sized for him, which means that it's a little too large for me to sit comfortably.

    "Thank you, my lord."

    "So I understand that I've got you waxing wroth, mortal man." He leans a short distance towards me, and it's like seeing a storm coming towards me while I'm wearing conductive clothing. "What exactly is your problem?"
     
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  23. BlueMangoAdea

    BlueMangoAdea Alive. For now.

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    Zeus is so blatantly powerful, and Hephaestus(or the god that replaced Hephaestus, if his continuity of existence failed) is going to be even more powerful.
     
  24. Idkusername

    Idkusername Versed in the lewd.

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    Can't Paul just temporally make himself taller using the ring? He can use the environmental shield to bypass the square-cube law, unless he's refraining due to tactical considerations or because of diplomacy, which is likely the case.
     
  25. Brainwasher-Boy

    Brainwasher-Boy Flectere si nequeo superos, Acheronta movebo.

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    Ah, really leaning into the almost-alien weirdness that the gods have always been, under their human disguises. Looking forward to seeing how Zeus plans on getting out of this in one piece. They blended up a baby titan and had Heph do a keg stand, you can't just juice up a malcontent Olympian god and expect them not to stage a coup.
     
  26. Darko

    Darko Connoisseur.

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    Yeah, then it's up to either Hades or Mammon.

    Maybe it's a power play to show how he's not concerned about you.

    No, that will come when you inform him that you're planning on having him deposed.

    Gee, you think.

    You are, Zeus.
     
  27. iamnuff

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    I think the most interesting twist here would be that Zeus is actually just jovial and friendly, and the whole thing with Diana is just a big misunderstanding, and Paul just helped stage a coup based on second-hand information about a man he's never met, for basically no reason.

    "Oops."
     
  28. Old Knife

    Old Knife Not too sore, are you?

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    I had never considered Zeus being affected by multiple Mantles he's using.

    Might be a good thing to get him off them.

    Power corrupts. Absolute power?
    Absolutely. In this case? Literally.

    Gotta wonder though how powerful was he prior to the power up. Especially since we saw those Olympian exiles being rather weak.

    Zeus was strong enough to tussle with titans and that's not nothing.

    Also the parallel between him and cake lantern being high on power would totally make sense.
     
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    Vaermina Well worn.

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    Oh god... Zeus is being reasonable...

    This is hilarious.
     
  30. jasonh23761

    jasonh23761 Not too sore, are you?

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    I would be entertained by the idea but the payoff wouldn't justify the narrative build up in my opinion.
     
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