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With This Ring (Young Justice SI) (Thread Fourteen)

Discussion in 'Creative Writing' started by Mr Zoat, Jan 27, 2019.

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  1. moralrelativity

    moralrelativity Recovering pendant.

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    I could not disagree more with your assessment. That was GLORIOUS. The lines of the song so appropriate to what was happening. And the fact that Paul didn't get directly involved was a breath of fresh air given he's usually the main action figure.

    Mad props to Mr Zoat for this masterpeice.
     
  2. Dakkan Sall

    Dakkan Sall Random Encounter

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    Provided that the old version of his name isn't actually still valid to use, you have it several times in the chapter instead of 'Hephaestaean."
     
  3. 0zymandias

    0zymandias Making the rounds.

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    Lmao you've definitely not read enough myths if you think simply castrating someone is equal to Zeus level fuckery, it's really not. I mean part of the deal with Hecate was that Titans get freed which cuts off a lot of Zeus's power and Ares really isn't that powerful to begin with, like Heph dealt with him in seconds. Ares relied on Heph to make powerful weapons for him and that's not gonna happen anymore, without a strong enough weapon Heph will just turn it to rust like in this fight.

    So I wonder who the new Queen is gonna be? Or is he gonna go stag or smth? Will Paul get any rewards or anything a gift for giving Heph the throne? Pavlos Ophidia, God of Avarice and Change?
     
  4. Darko

    Darko Connoisseur.

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    That place is likely to see more attendees in the near future.

    I don't think Darkseid is that interested in Earth in this story.
     
  5. Darko

    Darko Connoisseur.

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    My bet is on Athena.

    I doubt Paul would accept, at least for now.

    If he becomes a god then he may be tied to Earth and could potentially lose power away from it, so he may want to still stay relatively mortal.

    Maybe in the future he'd accept such a thing.
     
  6. Rockinalice

    Rockinalice Versed in the lewd.

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    Don't forget guys that Aphrodite is a Titan not a God she is considered an Olympian but by birth she is the child of a Primordial which would have made her a Titan that joined the Olympians and just got God in their name like Hecate.
     
  7. Darko

    Darko Connoisseur.

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    If Zeus thought with his actual head as much as he did with his little head then he'd make Reed Richards, Dr. Doom, Azmuth, Doc Savage and a lot of other geniuses look like toddlers with an intellectual disability.

    Seeing as Zeus and Hera were married when he was born; she probably never met him before this.

    Well, maybe if he slept with his professors, as several people pointed out.

    Though it may be good to have a war god that can control themselves.

    This is perfection!

    Ares, God of Incels!

    I can see Heph potentially having this song played on the anniversary of his triumph.
     
  8. Darko

    Darko Connoisseur.

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    That's not necessarily the case here.

    For one thing, the Primordials and the Titans don't seem to be separate entities in this story, so she may be like the other gods.

    And for the second thing, it's possible that she wasn't born from severed genitals.

    In some myths she's the daughter of Zeus and Dione.
     
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  9. Sordid Snake

    Sordid Snake (Verified Viper)

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    If he'd had a few constructs singing along it would have been a proper greek chorus for a proper greek drama.
     
  10. LiamOfOrmonde

    LiamOfOrmonde Know what you're doing yet?

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    God of PTSD?
     
  11. Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    No, that's correct.
    Where and why?
    No, he can complete it. But that still only makes him God of Weather, in a world where they're building weather regulators.
    Yeah... Honestly, in my original draft, him singing that to Zeus was how the fight started. It came out of nowhere, massively insulted him and he started throwing lightning. Did come out like that when I wrote it.
    Thank you, corrected.
    I'd comment, but Rule 8.
    Thank you, corrected.
     
  12. Hell's Razer

    Hell's Razer Passive Member

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    A correction:
    "haft"

    A reminder for those who are surprised: No matter what Hephaestus is still a Greek god.
     
  13. TodaBruh

    TodaBruh Fiction is life's spice <( ̄︶ ̄)↗

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    Yes you can. Just because you know cats like pushing stuff off the counter does not mean you won't call your cat a bad kitty when it does it.
     
  14. Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    Thank you, corrected.
     
  15. preier

    preier I trust you know where the happy button is?

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    Given the color used I'm rather expecting heph to pull his blow...

    Only for Ares to be unconvinced as his balls have retreated so far back up that he'll need a surgeon to find them.
     
  16. B00ki5h

    B00ki5h Verified: Oddball, Lurker, and Dabbler

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    If you need an new war god my vote is for Enyo the Greek equivalent of Bellona.
     
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  17. Fouredged

    Fouredged Experienced.

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    Welcome to Olympus Online, the new web portal to the Greek Gods. Here on this innovative new worship resource you can access divinity from your home computer! You can browse our resource library to discover what god can best help you in whatever problems life or death has sent you, and what offerings and rituals are best to earn their favor. Network with your fellow worshipers, or eveb the divine themselves! Access plus members can even DM their favored gods and goddesses directly (Olympus Online takes no responsibility in the event of hubrictic downfall due to spamming a god's DMs. Artemis will smite you if you send a dick pic. Aphrodite will professionally grade it and post it online with a scathing review. Don't spam her for pics ether, just sign up for her onlyfans).

    Welcome all, to the new age of Greece!

    - side note
    How long until our new Greek overlord frees Promethius?
     
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  18. Z3r0Sama

    Z3r0Sama Not too sore, are you?

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    Then its your fault not the cats. You knew the cat would do that but didn't remove the items that would be pushed.
     
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  19. AidanMorgan

    AidanMorgan Essentially Overworked

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    I mean, Yellow is about acting to cause fear, yeah, but that doesn't make it the color of empty threats. If you want to be properly terrifying, you don't make threats or promises, you just state facts.
     
  20. Splinterface

    Splinterface Getting sticky.

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    I think while maybe the other guy who said that the song ruined it was bit far, I do think he wasn’t entirely incorrect, because it does detract from the fighting, but I think more importantly, it really doesn’t add anything at all. Most of the characters don’t seem to react to it, and I think you could fairly easily just remove the song wholesale and just be better off. I didn’t hate it because I know occasionally singing is what Paul does, but I expected it to be relevant. What I honestly was one of the gods getting ticked off and ‘attacking’ (more along the lines of “shut up” exclamation pointed by a strike) Paul and him using it as justification to be involved, as the scene kinda just portrays him standing off to the side and singing.
     
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  21. Splinterface

    Splinterface Getting sticky.

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    I also hope this, because like a previous person mentioned, if Heph2.0 goes through with it, it really feels like a “new boss, same as the old boss” pettiness that you can expect from the Greek Gods.
     
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  22. Tzeentch

    Tzeentch I trust you know where the happy button is?

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    How fitting for a goddess of wisdom, prudence and deep thought. Having read the Phantom Tollbooth in my youth, I wonder if her personality might be a combination of both Rhyme and Reason.....
     
  23. Tzeentch

    Tzeentch I trust you know where the happy button is?

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    With the existence of both Metis encouraging Thought, Reason, Prudence, Common Sense and Hephaestaean boosting Technological development to truly supernatural levels throughout the world, I think the Reach won't know what will hit 'em!
     
  24. Darko

    Darko Connoisseur.

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    That kinda reminds me of this.

     
  25. Ganurath

    Ganurath Apologizes For Nothing

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    Any bets on how many classmates Zeus will knock up in college?
     
  26. Khornelius

    Khornelius Overlord of the Underworld

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    (Walking towards Hephaestaean from the front door)
    Tech-Priest Khornelius 3:16: I for one rejoice for the victory of our new Omnisiah and suggest a celebration is in order.

    (Turning and heading towards Olympian equivalent of a kitchen)
    My lord, I shall begin the production of oil margaritas as refreshments for all divine, demi-divine, and exalted champions that will no doubt be visiting soon.

    (walking past a downed Ares, and briefly stopping)
    Tech-Priest Khornelius 3:16: Divine Lord of Eunuchs do you wish for me return with a power dildo or a augmetic cyber-dong?
     
  27. Doc Sithicus

    Doc Sithicus Not too sore, are you?

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    Kratos or Kratos?

    Probably all the hot ones. I can see Zeus becoming the most Dude Bro/Giga Chad on campus.
     
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  28. Darko

    Darko Connoisseur.

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    Are we including the male classmates?

    Zeus is bi and Greek myths have had men carrying children instead of women.

    Heck, in some myths, Zeus was the one that birthed Dionysus.

    Now I can't help but imagine that future rituals involving Heph's cult will involve his priests having sex with toasters.

    Ohh, and any future battles they have will involve singing.
     
  29. The Froggy Ninja

    The Froggy Ninja The Blade Will Never Die

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    This thought never got finished. Not sure if that's on purpose, but I was curious where he was going with that.
     
  30. webxro

    webxro Benevolent Bystander

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    Now think back to the people that Paul offered the position of ruler of Olympus, will they wonder would've happened if they accepted ? I meant at least from Hecate's POV he asspulled items that would've been outside of her realm of imagination.

    The lesson here, one that the greeks hopefully learned is that he offers you something then he's serious.
     
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