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Machine Spirit (PA/Multicross SI)

Discussion in 'Creative Writing' started by Lazurman, Feb 28, 2016.

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    Lazurman

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    Machine Spirit (PA/Multicross SI)

    A/N: Some of these stories have a little thing that makes them unique. Drich was the first, the pioneer. Torroar has a Unit Cap. Me? I start my adventure in hell.

    Chapter 1

    ROB, contrary to popular belief, was not always a dick. Most of the time, assuredly, but not always. I’d used him several times as a matter of fact; it usually turned out kind of okay for the victims. My ROB was actually a pretty cool guy. I’d patterned him after myself. But the ROB that did this? Whether it was a cosmic version of me or not? Most definitely a dick. You hear that? Fuck you, ROB. Fuck you so hard.

    Bit of an odd way to start an audio-log, isn’t it? Heh. Whoever’s listening to this probably doesn’t even know what a ROB is. To put it simply, a ROB is a literary device used by the authors who inhabit a particularly peculiar series of forums I used to frequent. They’re an odd bunch, and I already miss them terribly. It is an acronym that stands for Random Omnipotent Being. Or Bastard, depending on the dickishness levels, which totally applied here.

    Whenever an author wanted to explain the unexplainable, or create a scenario otherwise impossible or unfeasible by normal means, they used the explanation, “A ROB did it.”

    From the perspective of those ‘ROBbed’, they were eldritch, unfathomable beings that molded the forces of reality to their liking, without a care given to the concerns of lesser beings, mortals and gods alike. All were equal targets in the eyes of ROB. They are an answer to the age-old question of, “What would one do with unlimited power?” The answer was anything and everything they pleased.

    And today, I had just been ROBbed. In a very particular way.

    I’d seen this kind of thing happen before, only with the safety of a computer screen and the walls of the multiverse between me and the action. The many tales I’d read of for this exact scenario were so utterly fascinating. Self-Inserts, authors who inserted themselves into various works of fiction, transplanted into the bodies of 15-meter tall brutally efficient self-replicating mechanisms of war, Commanders from the video game Planetary Annihilation, for the sole purpose of using their awesome and terrible foreknowledge and newfound power to unfuck the various universes they find themselves in (and entertain their ROB audience, but that was a given).

    You know how the saying goes. It’s all fun and games until someone gets turned into a giant robot. Something like that, anyways.

    This was my life now. I’d been sitting behind a computer screen, rereading the story of the first and most famous of the Commander Inserts, when the universe suffered a blue screen of death and was replaced with a formless darkness, infinite in its emptiness. I’d been too shocked to scream. And then it was too late. I didn’t have a mouth to scream with. Or lungs. Or even a brain. All of it replaced by my new chassis, constructed of hyper-advanced super-materials designed by an ancient, warlike progenitor race for the singular cause of doing battle on a galactic scale.

    This was the Progenitor chassis, a broad-chested and sleek bipedal design, painted steely grey and light blue, with a nano-constructor array on one arm and a heavy-duty pulse cannon on the other. A Commander was expected to be dropped from orbit to a planet’s surface, and promptly raise endless armies of killer-robots to drown the enemy with by force of sheer numbers. Or swarms of nuclear missiles. Or strapping titanic engines to lunar bodies and dropping them on the enemy. Or blowing up planets with the help of a moon-sized Death Star laser ripoff.

    Point is, Commanders are walking-(not)talking murder-machines of doom, perfect for the art of waging war and not much else. I was now, to put it bluntly, one rather killy sumbitch. In most universes, I’d win against just about anything that wasn’t a literal god with just a few days of build-up.

    But the place I was in?

    A myriad of sensor arrays, some used by modern humans, most incapable of being imagined by human minds, had not been idle in the ten or so seconds I’d spent contemplating my new existence. Oh yeah, that there was another perk of being a hyper-advanced machine: time dilation. I’d instinctively spent upwards of a few hours internally going through the stages of shock, grief, wonder, all the crap new SIs had to deal with, and the sudden ability to see all of the everything within my not inconsiderable range, all in the span of just ten seconds. Almost like my own pause button. Neato.

    So, yeah. While I was regaining a semblance of calm, I’d been recording what my sensors were telling me. When I finally took a look at the data, I didn’t want to believe it. I did not want to believe that my ROB could have been so cruel. But he had been.

    <Traitors! And cowards! Will be shot! Forward, you maggots! Forward! Charge! Die a glorious death! Die for the Imperium! Die for your Emperor!>

    That was the first radio broadcast I heard. It was not the last of its type. Calls for fire support and evac, orders being bandied about, interspersed with litanies of hatred and prayers of fervent religious zeal; all of it, and the armies of drab-armored lasgun-toting infantry and spiky, screaming, blood-coated cultists fighting in the burning city in front of me decorated with skulls and other such Gothic iconography all pointed to the setting of my unasked-for adventure.

    Warhammer 40k. The place good little robots like myself did not deserve to die in. On a scale of one to Bad Time, I was having a Very Bad Time. I would have been crying, had I the ducts.

    …You know? In a way, the raw morass of terror, despair, hopelessness, and helpless rage helped make my decision for me. Do I do my utmost best to commit suicide and spare myself the horror of the brief remaining stint of my life? Or do I keep calm, praise Teh Emprah, and do what Commanders do best?

    Again. Fuck you, ROB. Fuck you, so, so hard.

    I laughed internally, long and bitter, and so very, very pissed. Off.

    In the grim dark future of the forty-first millennium, a Progenitor Commander builds a metal extractor…

    Sooooo many heads were about to roll.

    XXXXX

    AN: *glances at hands* Et tu, Muse?

    Eh. Nothing for it, then. Here goes another one.
     
  2. Lazurman

    Lazurman That Others May Fap

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    The World List

    1. Warhammer 40k - For the foreseeable future.
    2. Halo
    3. Mass Effect
    4. Star Wars
    5. Pacific Rim
    6. Metal Gear
    7. Worm
    8. Crysis
    9. Starcraft
    10. Transformers Prime
    11. Planetary Annihilation - The Game
    12. James Cameron's Avatar
    13. Half-Life
    14. Asura's Wrath

    Might be more, might be less. I really need to increase my other-than-fanfiction intake to add more.
     
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    Chapter 2

    It had already been remarked on by all of my forebears, but it bore repeating nonetheless. Commanders were pure, concentrated, bullshit. I was not kidding when I said that a Commander, left unchecked, could conquer a solar system within a matter of hours. It took me only a few seconds that begin constructing the economy that would let me do that.

    A glowing green stream of nanomachines spewed out of my arm to a spot on the ground my sensors were telling me was most efficient place for the purpose of extracting metal. A sturdy structure that could, simultaneously, dig up deposits of metals, refine them into a useable form by Progenitor standards, transmute all of it into a weightless, massless energy-form, and beam it all into a subspace inventory accessible only by me. Flawless mass to energy conversions. And back again. All in just a few measly seconds.

    An energy plant followed that. Then another one. Then a few more extractors. Then some storage structures. Then some turrets…

    I paused as I looked back at the number of structures I’d just built. It was surprisingly easy to get carried away with this. All the better for me. Now the armies could be raised.

    The Enemy had made a mistake in giving me five minutes of free time. My body went on auto-pilot as I continued setting up my base. My newly upgraded mental processes were busy going over anything (which was everything) I could pull from the radio broadcasts flying everywhere. This world did not have an internet. And that was just plain unforgivable. It also made my attempts at getting a good info-dump futile. All I could pick up were Imperial Guard tactical commands over the radio. And the identity of the attackers.

    Khornates. Cultists and daemons in service to the Warp god of bloody murder, Khorne, versus the flashlights and can-do attitude of the Imperial Guard. The IG was losing, badly. Looks like Chaos would be the first to suck on my guns. This group of fuckers in particular were probably going to love fighting me. “The Blood God care not from where the blood flows, only that there is blood!” and all that rot.

    Let’s see how long that attitude lasted. Probably until I murder all of Chaos’s worshippers and cut the Warp off from the Materium with Necron-tech.

    The bot factory finished construction. Then the other one. And the Doxes started churning out in the dozens.

    See, this is another part of the reason why Planetary Annihilation units outclassed those of so many other settings. The Dox was the single weakest infantry bot producible by Commanders. They had basically no armor to speak of, and tended to explode like so much popcorn in the face of most opposition.

    In PA, that is.

    Not so much here. Every single Dox was of a height and weight with the venerable Space Marine Dreadnaughts, and leagues more mobile. The guns they toted were nothing to scoff at either. And these blocky little robots came in swarms.

    My weakest units were peers to some of the most powerful infantry forces fielded by the Imperium. This made me smile inside.

    I immediately directed a detachment of fifty to the city as soon as they were all done. It gave me somewhat of a giddy feeling seeing them form up and start sprinting to the fight, the ground rumbling as they went. ETA: fifteen minutes. Primary directive: Ensuring the safety and well-being of all human forces. Secondary objective: Elimination of all Chaos forces. Collateral damage acceptable in the pursuit of aforementioned objectives.

    They’d make a difference in this fight. All I could hope for was that the outrageously xenophobic humans wouldn’t start shooting at me at first sight, too.

    Oh, would you look at that. The air and vehicle factories had just finished as well. Now the fight was about to get even more lopsided in my favor!

    XXXXX

    I split my attention between expanding my economy and plunking down more walls and defense turrets, and micro-managing my Doxes. That was another thing I could do; fork myself. Even the best and fastest PA players were limited to whatever their screen could show at one time. I didn’t have that problem. From the Commander unit I was installed in, to the growing fleet of fabricator bots scurrying about, to each and every single Dox about to slam into the unprepared forces of Chaos, I controlled all with equal levels of attention paid to each.

    Was this what Skitter felt like? Unlimited multitasking really was the most broken power ever.

    I could hear the confused radio chatter as my small army thundered in.

    <And for the love of the Emperor, will someone tell me why the ground is shaking?!>

    Good a time as any to say hello. I cut in through the chatter. <That would be me.>

    <What the- WHO IS THIS?! How did you crack this frequency?!>

    That was encrypted? Whoops. My bad. Another point in favor of Progenitor-tech.

    This was a good time to raise the question of how I would interact with the Imperium in the days to come. I dialed up the time dilation to buy time to think.

    When I said the Imperium was xenophobic, I was not kidding. I was a nonhuman. That was grounds enough to get a bolter round to the face. Even worse, I was also an artificial, sorry, abominable intelligence, in their vernacular. Ever since an early attempt at AI soldiers had gone bad and subsequently pushed in humanity’s shit, AIs were banned, feared, and reviled.

    And I? I was the most dangerous AI the Imperium would ever know. Even the most progressive and forward thinking members of the Imperium would think me an existential threat. To be fair, I was, but intent mattered a hell of a lot.

    But, aside from all of that, I was human. Whether or not my skin was made of metal, I was, first and foremost, human. For all of this fucked up galaxy’s many, many flaws, I could not stand idly by and let my race die. Not when I had the power and will to help.

    Nothing for it, then. I’d just have to do my best to be friendly, and if they still shot at me, well, fine, I’d deal with that then. Wasn’t like I couldn’t afford the losses. “We have reserves” literally defined my combat doctrine.

    <I'm a friend of humanity. Brave soldiers of the Imperium, reinforcements are at hand. Allow us to take it from here.> Should I add it? Couldn’t hurt. <The Emperor Protects. Now let’s kick these sons of bitches off this planet!>

    With that, the first wave of Doxes crested the hill obscuring them from the city. And as legions of killbots started pouring fire into the unguarded flank of the undisciplined hordes of murderous traitors, loudspeakers fit enough for the Noise Marines embedded in each Dox boomed, “FOR THE EMPEROR!”

    Today was a good day to keep calm and purge the heretic.

    XXXXX

    AN: Ave Imperator!
     
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    Lazurman That Others May Fap

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    *poke poke*

    Anyone there?

    I feel so alone and unloved.

    Save for you, macdjord.You rock.
     
  5. TKB17

    TKB17 Lemons are amazing!

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    I like it. I'm a sucker for well done SI's anyway, and I like this.

    A few (minor!) issues though: this seems very impersonal, and distant. That may be the writing style you were shooting for, but it reads kind of flat. I get almost no idea of your personality, or what you're doing (which makes sort-of since. You did timeskip the development of a base.)

    Also, the combat (or prelude to combat) felt a bit dry. I would have liked more information on the IPG's situation, and what they were facing.

    I'm looking forward to more, though. Sorry of this seems a little harsh, I'm more used to heavily charecter driven pieces.
     
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    Lazurman That Others May Fap

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    Thanks for the review. I can understand why you'd see that. Suffice to say, the tags are there for a reason. ;)

    All of this will be commented on later, once there is absolutely nothing pressing going on. The SI would much rather focus on the easy bits (purging heretics) than spending even more time genuflecting.

    And it was only a fifteen minute timeskip. Didn't really feel like rehashing "And he built this thing, this thing and this thing too, and a few more of those things," etc.

    This fic will be an exercise in writing large-scale warfare. Hopefully the combat itself won't seem too dry.
     
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    TKB17 Lemons are amazing!

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    Yeah, the tags made me laugh.

    As far as details go, maybe not 'he built this thing and this thing' and more 'he built a mining rig surrounded by defensive structures'. Not a ton of detail, but more then nothing. Enough that the reader can picture it.

    I'm looking forward to seeing the combat as well, though I'll freely admit I'm typically more interested in charecter interaction then fighting scenes, so take my advice/criticism with a grain of salt. (My preference for combat leans more towards Dresden Files, then, say, a Tom Clancy novel. Not necessarily the fantasy aspect, but more for the writing style if you get what I mean.)
     
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    mizzet Connoisseur.

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    I have no idea about PA. Though so far it reminds me of Supreme Commander.

    Sending incredibly over powered units against Chaos had me grinning. The question is only whether you can make more of the punch everyone's face in premise. than just that.

    So far I like the start.
     
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    kinglugia A Randy Avian

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    Snehk? When snehk pornz plz? :p

    But seriously, I've heard of this until today XD
     
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    Lazurman That Others May Fap

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    It'll cum, lugia. It'll cum. Later rather than sooner, unfortunately.
     
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    Crepscularity I trust you know where the happy button is?

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    How you will integrate biological snek stuff is beyond me, but I want to see more serial escalation. I also want to see Empy revived and ready to remake the Imperium.
     
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    Guardian Box Theocratic Capitalist

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    A Commander in 40k, that's certainly something I wanted to see but didn't get a chance. Count me interested.

    As for the Imperial AI hate, many AI's are tolerated and some are venerated (in Titans most often). The most important part which determines if it's a hated abominable intelligence or a venerated machine spirit is whether or not a human mind is involved. In Titans, a human pilot (princeps) mind-links with the Titan's AI, so the Titan AI's are all cool with the Imperium.

    And besides, you aren't an AI. You are a mind upload. You have forsaken the weakness of flesh for the purity of metal. Presenting yourself from this angle, as someone who achieved the Mechanicus wet dream might be more conductive to peaceful relations with the Imperium instead of having a crusading fleet launched against you. Goodness knows you'll have your hands full with that shitfest of a Galaxy as it is.
     
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    Chapter 3

    My Doxes slammed into the enemy like a tide of unstoppable steel, spewing hatred-filled balls of plasma. Every one of the rapid-fire shots meant a melted cluster of enemies, every step meant a daemon ground beneath my giant robot feet. A horde of screaming barbarians, most armed with scraps of fabric attempting to be trousers and a sharp piece of metal or a crudely made autogun, didn’t even compare to the types of enemies Commanders were meant to fight. There were a lot of them, though, and they weren’t the real threat. They were just the meat shields for the real troops.

    Daemons. Warp-borne entities composed of emotion, usually negative; very negative. Khornates were the servants of the god of war and murder. Every act of bloody violence committed in anger strengthened him. Which was something of a problem for me.

    I did not consider myself a violent person. I actually tried my best to avoid conflict. I liked making friends much more than making enemies. I’d gotten to the point where even the shittier kinds of people in high school smiled and greeted me with a hearty “Yo Archie! What up?”

    But, all the same, I hated Chaos. The sheer scale of its malevolence, the eternal torment of the poor souls foolish enough to follow them, the pointless, unchanging, unending hell they perpetuated in this fucked-up galaxy; I hated it all so much.

    And it felt good to destroy the things you hated. Very good. That was a problem when it came to Khorne, something the Imperium, with all of its litanies espousing the virtues of hatred, had failed to grasp for so long. Humanity was its own worst enemy when it came to Chaos. It was why Khorne had the most power out of all of the dark gods. Humans were so very good at hating, and killing, and all too willing to do so.

    I refused to give Chaos an inch. Give them an inch, and they’d take everything, and leave nothing but pain and suffering. Thusly, there was only one thing I could think of that I could do.

    ‘This mustn’t register on an emotional level,’ the combat doctrine.

    I wasn’t human in form. Unlike a human, directed by chemical impulses and brain structure, I was a machine. Everything I was, was now so much streaming lines of code. Code could be edited. Hatred was optional.

    It was a drastic step, modifying myself like this. But when the choice came down to not doing it, and enjoying the carnage to come, giving even more strength to the strongest Chaos god, or doing it, then it wasn’t really a choice at all.

    I hoped I was making the right decision. God, I hoped so.

    Here goes nothing.

    Accessing root personality matrix.
    Saving current personality matrix, codename: Prime.
    Establishing new personality template, codename: Warface.
    Establishing if/then personality template clause: If engaged in combat with the possibility of Chaotic influence, then exchange personality template Prime for personality template Warface.
    Deleting emotional matrix ‘anger’.
    Deleting emotional sub-matrix ‘hatred’.
    Deleting emotional sub-matrix ‘lust for battle’.
    Suppressing emotional matrix ‘fear’.
    Updating primary objective: Preserve the physical and emotional well-being of sapient, non-Chaos lifeforms.
    Updating primary objective: Destroy all Chaos forces in such a manner that does not violate the aforementioned primary objective.
    Save personality template: Warface.
    Applying.
    End access.


    And that was that. I let out a metaphorical breath. I felt calmer. More rational. The horror of my situation wasn’t gone, but it felt a great deal more manageable. Useful as this was, I couldn’t become reliant on it. Didn’t want to risk irreparably damaging my psyche.

    I wouldn’t destroy Chaos because I hated them. I would destroy them because they stood in the way of peace. Khorne would draw no strength from battles with me. My machines were soulless, and thus could not be sacrificed. No blood, only metal and circuitry. No joy in battle, only clinical detachment and cool logic. Perfect professionalism.

    I didn’t hate Chaos, now. I pitied them. From my perspective, it wasn’t their fault for being so fucked up. It was ours. The humanity from my world had created it. Games Workshop had designed this universe to be a parody, the epitome of grimness and darkness taken to the most absolute of extremes. If pressed, I could not come up with a setting more messed up than that of Warhammer 40k.

    And now it was my job to clean it up. And clean it up I would. I pitied them, yes. But that didn’t mean I wouldn’t crush them wherever I found them. I had my goal. I would drag this galaxy into a Noblebright future kicking and screaming if I had to.

    I watched dispassionately as howling squads of cultists and Bloodletters were vaporized by plasma, each shot calculated for maximum effectiveness with no unnecessary overlap. This ungodly level of multi-tasking made my efficiency of warfare obscenely high.

    There were tanks and other daemonic engines of war on the field as well, contesting with the Leman Russes and Chimeras of the Imperial Guard while corrupted Valkyries on strafing runs wove between streams of flak emitted from IG Basilisks. Their plasteel and ceramite frames were holding up surprisingly well against plasma. Well, better than their fleshy infantry had so far. Yoinking imminent, once my fabbots arrive. See what I did there? Fabricator bots? Fabbots? Eh? Ah, whatever.

    Daemonic engines of war adorned with skulls and the eight-pointed stars of Chaos trundled forwards into battle, powered by madness and blood and firing munitions of the same. Mortar-like tanks fired arching gobs of the sanguine liquid that boiled with a heat greater than magma at my army. It seeped into their frames and sought to wear away at the joints like acid, but the sturdy construction of the Progenitors held firm, and such weapons found no use against my Doxes. The engines equipped with melee weapons died before they could close the distance. It was the tanks that did any lasting damage. Shots here and there impacted against the armor, denting and tearing in some places, lucky hits blowing off limbs. Immaterial. I felt no pain. My units were expendable.

    With Chaos caught on two sides by the armor of the Imperial Guard and my Doxes, the battle, which had promised to be a long and grueling exchange, quickly turned into a rout. Enemy infantry simply couldn’t survive in such a hostile environment, with bullets and plasma flying through the air thick enough to be mistaken for walls of death. They were liquefied first. The enemy armor didn’t last much longer than that. With the ground clear, my Doxes could calculate the flight paths of the enemy air-power, and they set to filling the sky with plasma as well. It was even easier than sniping Banshees with a Scorpion in Halo.

    It was as the last of the fighting was dying down when a tank on the IG side fired a shell at my forces and blew the head off of one of my Doxes. It remained standing. Wasn’t like anything important was in there except for the optics, anyway. To a unit, my remaining forty Doxes froze, and very carefully did not point their weaponry at the twitchy Imperials.

    I allowed a trace of annoyance to color my tone as I addressed the Leman Russ responsible, as well as broadcasting the transmission across the entire local IG battle-net. <Nice shot, soldier, but would you kindly direct your fire elsewhere? I am not your enemy.>

    A hatch on a larger than average Leman Russ popped open and a grizzled man dressed in a uniform that at first glance appeared to be an old-timey set of dress blues interrupted whatever the pilot of the guilty tank was going to say, his gruff, commanding voice riddled with suspicious wariness as he spoke into a hand-held Vox-caster. I didn’t blame him for it. <This is Tank Commander Abraham Cook of the 17th Mordian Iron Guard. You say that you are a friend of humanity, but your forces are clearly inhuman in design. What cause have I to trust you?>

    Huh. I was more than mildly impressed. He’d asked a question before shooting. That deserved a prize of some kind! Later.

    <I have not shot at you. Nor do I plan to. You have no cause to believe me, Commander, and that’s fine. Believe what your eyes are telling you now. I could have just as easily stayed out of this fight and let you grind yourself down on Chaos, but I didn’t. I value the life of sentient beings as precious, not something to be thrown away. I’m here to help save this world. Please, Commander. Let me.>

    Please please please please please be a reasonable authority figure!

    <...Fine. But give me a reason to regret my decision, and I swear that there will be a reckoning…whoever you are.>

    <Thank you, Commander Cook. I promise on my life and honor, I mean no harm to the Imperium, and I will gladly surrender myself for questioning once all this is taken care of. But for now, every moment we dally is another moment the Enemy is slaughtering defenseless civilians. There is work that needs doing.>

    And oh yeah, that’s right. I needed a name. It just didn’t feel right to use my real name. Drich and the other Commander SIs used their webhandle, but Lazurman kinda, sorta, lacked gravitas. Tiki and Torroar used their Commander designs as names, but that wouldn’t work for me here either.

    I dialed up the time dilation. I’d probably be thinking about this for a while.

    …I was horrible at naming things!

    But aside from that, I was ecstatic on the inside. Peaceful first contact! I had my foot in the door! Now, all I had to do was drive Chaos off the planet, and then I could sit a human-sized avatar down with them and we could see about helping each other even more! Yes!

    Oh, hey, the base defenses and the reinforcements were done. My new armies utterly dwarfed that first force I’d sent out, with a mix of Doxes, tanks, bombers, and fighters. Now to start upgrading to T2 structures and setting up some orbitals so I can take a look-see at what we got going on up there…
     
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    Bloodshifter The Bio-Armor Lover

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    Oh you poor soul better put up a Umbrella before that...
     
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    kinglugia A Randy Avian

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    Call thyself Master Snehk plz?
     
  16. mizzet

    mizzet Connoisseur.

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    Ahh thinking of names, I hate that as well.

    I quite like the way you write and found the humor entertaining.

    Can't say much about the actual content, due to lacking knowledge about both settings.
     
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    Lazurman That Others May Fap

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    Thanks for the review! I aim to please. I try to write with fans who don't know anything about the series in question in mind. If something new ever comes up in-story, I'll be sure to take an info-dump for you.

    To summarize both:

    Warhammer 40k: Shit be mad fucked in the 41st millenium, yo!

    Planetary Annihilation: Giant robots be fucking up the galaxy, yo!
     
  18. Threadmarks: Chapter 4
    Lazurman

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    Still not quite content with this one, but, you know how it goes. C'est la vie. Maybe you guys can think of the thing I haven't thought of that I need.

    Chapter 4

    The first things I’d sent into orbit had been a few small, insignificant Hermes space probes. Tiny little things, they were fast, and could give me a better look at what was going on space-side.

    To put it mildly, space…wasn’t looking good.

    The shattered wrecks of once mighty vessels tumbled in orbit, all that remained of the forces of the Imperial Navy defense fleet. A mere handful of the redoubtable Imperial vessels still contested with Chaos warships for space superiority. Judging by the profiles…a single battlecruiser, a light cruiser, and three frigates were all that was left, and none of them were in anything even resembling good shape.

    And opposing them were the ships of Khorne. They hadn’t emerged unscathed from the conflict either, but there were still three cruisers and six frigates left. Not good.

    Luckily for me (or unluckily, depending on how you sliced it), unlike his fellow Chaos gods, Khorne despised sorcery and trickery of any kind, much preferring instead to use his vessels solely as chariots to bring his bloodthirsty hordes to the next fight. What that meant was that while they didn’t have as many special tricks and gimmicks as other Chaos warships, the great vessels were relentlessly ferocious, charging into opposing ship formations to overwhelm them with boarding craft in order to slaughter them in their vessels to satisfy the endless sanguine thirst of their dark god.

    From what I could tell, most of the damage taken by the destroyed vessels had been exactly that; the Khornate fleet had used their guns to bring down the Void shields, and then swarms of boarding craft had penetrated the hulls to disgorge Khorne’s assault troops.

    Crystallized blood seemed to glitter in the rays of the orange sun as one of my probes maneuvered through a wreck. There were…a lot of bodies floating up here. A lot of bodies. And there would be a hell of a lot more if I didn’t do something.

    But what?

    I wasn’t sure how much help I could be up here. Where Planetary Annihilation outdid its contenders on the ground, so too did Warhammer 40k surpass theirs in space. No one else had quite a reputation for building big like the Imperium did. Imperial ship-building doctrine revolved around putting a giant gun in space, slapping some heavy-duty armor and engines on that gun, adding another metric fuckton of guns, and building a fuck-mothering cathedral on top of that, and calling it good. Some ships had been in service since the Horus Heresy, 10,000 years ago, some from possibly even further back.

    For fuck’s sake, their godsdamned frigates were over a kilometer in length. That was bigger than some settings’ dreadnoughts. The biggest ships I could create were barely a few times bigger than their fighters, and none of my units even had shields. So yeah, I was in a bit of a pickle. It didn’t matter if I owned the planet or not; if I couldn’t establish an orbital foothold and turn the fight around in favor of the Imperium, everyone would die all the same. Plus, there was the not-insignificant problem of, "Still gotta convince the Navy not to shoot at me either!" Le sigh.

    Fortunately for me, again, ROB had done me a solid, compared to the other Commanders. (Didn't even come close to making up for me being in Warhammer 40k, but I'd take what I could get!) He had given me the schematics for every single unit that had ever been released in the game. Not just the original Planetary Annihilation units. He had given me the Titans expansion pack, and everything in it. Even the designs for a Metal Planet. And the Annihilaser that came with it. But, alas, that wasn’t meant to be in this fight. Too expensive, and too time consuming, and coming from me, that was saying something. I also had the strangest feeling the natives wouldn't take kindly to me turning their only moon into a planet-busting superweapon...or maybe they would. I’d bring it up later.

    No, another schematic would have to suffice here, instead.

    The Helios. The invasion Titan. The one space-capable Titan in PA’s arsenal, and possibly my most major contribution to a space battle.

    Had this not been 40k, I’d have said it looked like a giant flying Starmie. A giant flying Starmie that shot some impressively-sized artificial lightning bolts and had a teleportation beam in the empty center. Perfect for bringing the wrath of god (and your waiting army) to an enemy planet-side. With a little work, I didn’t see why I couldn’t make it start blasting opponents in space as well. And the teleporter! I could think of more than a few ways to use that thing offensively. Might even make for a good trump card.

    But there was a problem. This was 40k. And thusly, the Helios didn’t look like a Starmie to me anymore. It now looked kind of like the eight-sided star of Chaos. And considering that, if I wasn’t mistaking my canon for my fanon, the Men of Iron had been corrupted by Chaos because a spot in their circuitry happened to resemble said star. (On that note, I did a quick check of my systems for anything similar; nothing turned up, so there was that going for me, at least.)

    You really could not be too careful when it came to the possibility of Chaos corruption, ‘cuz it was some bull. Sheeit.

    If Chaos got their grubby little mitts on me, the Imperium, and the rest of the galaxy, would die. I wasn’t about that life. The current schematic needed to go.

    So, I opened up my handy-dandy unit designer and made a few minor tweaks. The initial design had been, for the most part, purely aesthetic, with some functionality. It needed spires for the lighting attacks, and an enclosed ring for the teleporter. So, I shaved off a few spires, branched the others off until it resembled more of a high-tech snowflake instead of a star of EVUL, turned the circle into a square, and bam, problem identified and solved in a few microseconds. I could be bullshit too!

    I needed to step up my production. Aside from a few raids by Chaos that had been rapidly discouraged by massed laser-turret fire and nanobot swarms dissolving them into more resources, things had been all quiet on the home front, allowing me to build in relative peace. And I sure needed it; my economy was not nearly big enough to field the multitudes of warships I would need.

    Miles upon miles of unclaimed ground were repurposed for the much more important fight in space. More metal extractors and energy plants were built and upgraded to T2 to feed my hungry war machine. Nuclear missiles were assembled and stored in their silos, awaiting my fatal command. They would be the first strike against the enemy’s Void shields. Anchor defense satellites spread out over the planet, sniping enemy troop dropships as they flitted about; what few managed to dodge my fighter squadrons, that is.

    My orbital launchers launched my orbital fabbers into orbit, which then proceeded to fabricate an orbital factory. (In orbit. In case you couldn’t catch the redundancy thing I had going on here.) Then ten more. In those factories, Artemis railgun platforms and Omega battleships were queued up by the dozens; Avenger space-fighters, by the hundreds. My forces may have been massively outsized in space, but by the Emperor, I’d make up for it by outnumbering them a hundred to one, a thousand to one if I had to!

    An entirely imagined chill ran through my circuits as my Hermes sent me an urgent ping. My mad scramble in the planet’s orbit had not gone unnoticed.

    Uh oh.
     
  19. Blargh

    Blargh I trust you know where the happy button is?

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    This is an fun read, its always fun to think about how SupCom or TA or now PA would do in many other universes. Since you seem to be able to make your own designs you should be able to get your hands on the designs for void shields and other Imperial tech at this point with your ability to hack their systems which would majorly increase your capacity in space. For avoiding chaos corruption you could start putting symbols of the Emperor on all of your stuff, not sure if it will work, but it can't hurt and it protects some Adeptus Mechanicus technology.
     
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    Crepscularity I trust you know where the happy button is?

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    Well, as you said in your earlier posts, you are a soulless war machine. Not much foothold for Chaos corruption there.

    And YES. Finally the Commanders have a weakness. Of course we expect Le Commander to fix that soon, though.

    It's time for the Omnissiah 2.0 to rise!
     
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    mizzet Connoisseur.

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    The followers of Khorne have to be pretty disappointing to fight so many enemies without blood or skulls.
     
  22. Fellgar

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    Fun read. Can barely wait for more in the future.
     
  23. NavigatorNobilis

    NavigatorNobilis Follower of the Second Star

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    Unfortunately, soulless also means he has no defence against warp-shenanigans - including such things as tele-frag, tech-jamming, possession, etc - until he figures out how to make anti-Warp tech.

    Incidentally, this is a good reason to assimilate some imperial aesthetics and take on crews of prayer-choirs for psy-defence. Or, at least, that's how I would do it.

    Anyway, watched - FOR GREAT JUSTICE!!!
     
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    theqwopingone Journeyman rationalist wannabe. Gone for Good

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    or just drop down onto a planet and take off with all the psykers they don't want,or find out how the Tyranids do without,or talk to the Eldar about getting there help to grow one in return for terraforming/moving a maiden world for them.
     
  25. NavigatorNobilis

    NavigatorNobilis Follower of the Second Star

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    Well, in order;
    • Just stealing away a bunch of Psykers before you have those psy-defences is basically just asking for trouble, not to mention likely to fuck up your relationship with the Imperium. They tend to be suspicious, for good reason, and few things are as suspicious as an apparently alien race of robots stealing a bunch of psykers for purposes unknown.
    • The Tyranids have a soul - it's called the Hive Mind, remember?
    • The Eldar are arrogant snots, and generally have a hard time dealing fairly with others, as opposed to manipulating and exploiting them. And they would likely be leery of giving away any of their advantages to a potential enemy. But if you manage to find some half-way fair Eldar, and can wrangle an agreement with them, then yes, that is probably the best option. They'd probably be more interested in an endless supply of expendable troops than terraforming a few worlds, though.
     
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  26. Fellgar

    Fellgar Connoisseur.

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    Considering you nerfed your commande heavily your going to have to nerf chaos down to reasonable standards.
     
  27. Lazurman

    Lazurman That Others May Fap

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    How so? The orbital units? They are PA's least impressive part, in my opinion; no nerfing involved, they came like that. Someone over on the SB thread estimated the Omega battleships to be about 130 meters. The Helios Titan? 400.

    The Imperium's Sword-class frigate, of which there are two in the defense fleet, are 1600 meters in length. Literally everything else is bigger than me. I am hilariously outsized in space.

    Now, whether that size disadvantage remains after I nom the shattered hulks floating in orbit remains to be seen... And I can build a lot faster than anyone else in the galaxy can, save perhaps the Tyranids.

    And no. No nerfing of Chaos here. If anything, I'll be trying hard not to make them too game-endingly OP. My greatest defense and weakness right now is that I lack a soul. Chaos can't see me...for now. But once they do, I'll have no natural defense. No Manton field. This needs to be corrected.
     
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    theqwopingone Journeyman rationalist wannabe. Gone for Good

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    i wonder if it would be possable to recrute the Orks.
     
  29. Lazurman

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    Rest assured, I have plans for the greenskins.
     
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    kinglugia A Randy Avian

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    Does it involve playing with the snehk in their pantsus?
     
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