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On a Pale Horse (Umamusume/Youjo Senki)

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Being X, being held down and ganked by the Three Goddesses: "I curse you— ouch! Sto— guh! Toonlyeverplaceintheoutergates— gah!"

And that is how Shirogane went to sleep like a baby, as though listening to a Nutcracker effigy being jumped by three ordinary uma musume.
 
WrandmWaffles said:
If worse comes to worst,
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This is the first time I've seen it written this way but it seems to make sense so I had to look it up. Turns out, 'worst comes to worst' is the original spelling, while this variant is popular in the US and Australia apparently.

WrandmWaffles said:
I imagine having Shirogane straight up fail here might be a bit unpopular, but I feel like I sufficiently telegraphed this outcome that it shouldn't come as a surprise.
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I don't mind at least, and with her chain of silvers it makes sense narratively to have her dip a bit to build up motivation and such. I'm still not sure where the story can really go though, it's not like this is a Shonen where she can determinator her way to victory in short races? Well, now that I think about it there is some foreshadowing for that but it still feels like there would need to be some justification for that still.

EVA-Saiyajin said:
This story is one of just two that has gotten me somewhat interested in the 'verse @WrandmWaffles
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Immediately after I found and read this story I checked out another Uma story and bounced off of it. Couldn't get interested without a crossover character in familiar with. What's your second story?
 
The more Shirogane's [Mood] plummets, the more terrified the next race's front runners get…

because that palpable agitation on the field becomes an anger that looks to them like she really is out for their blood.

Like the hint of her being instinctively irked at the finish line, where they're all lined up near neck and neck "- It's disorderly!" (Disgraceful), but then leveraged with real fury.

The instinct there leads me to believe she'll activate some final stretch last-second Terror debuff that makes all the place-contenders flinch as one on instinct, giving Shiro the endgame advantage she really needs to beat out late surgers.

The terrifying herd instinct of a herd leader or predator snapping/barking orders that their bodies try to obey a second before their minds, breaking the focus at the very end.

And since she always has breath to spare, speaking or shouting is well within her options.
 
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I mean I would have been more surprised if Shiro didn't place either last or second to last among the Tracen crew. I feel bad for Seiun, but she can probably qualify with a different race, and she has a good chance at the Satsuki Sho since Grass is dropping out.

That woman feels like she might be trouble later on.
 
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"She really never gets an inside gate, does she?" Steady murmured to herself, trying to figure out the odds of that happening. The extra distance itself wasn't that big of a problem for Shiro in terms of stamina, but it did mean that it made it significantly harder to get towards the front like she needed to.

Maybe the JRA just really didn't want someone trying for both circuits. Steady couldn't say why, you'd think it would make great television!
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My theories on why the JRA might not want Shiro to run in both circuits is because they can see that she does not really have a chance to win all 6 crowns so if they hype her attempt up on TV it will just end with her failing.

Also possibly while in real life foreign horse were prevented from racing in the triple crown/tiara during this time period, in universe those restrictions were loosened most likely because they couldn't justify them without blatant racism, but that doesn't mean an underlying racism of the organizers is completely gone. As seen by that Winning Live organizer lady in this last chapter.
 
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DerpyDragonTM said:
Fair warning, the community is mixed between Potential Man memes, people being upset bc of the vibes, and the small amount of people pointing fingers at how gay Stego is towards the MC.
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Yeah, basically…. By the way, currently the second one is on route there. so good luck to whoever's gonna read that next cause you're gonna read some crazy posts about their feelings.
 
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