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With This Ring (Young Justice SI) (Thread Fourteen)

Discussion in 'Creative Writing' started by Mr Zoat, Jan 27, 2019.

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  1. nobodez

    nobodez Bringer of Context

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    I think it’s a combination of medium and investment. A comic book has a monetary value beyond the time it takes to read, unless you borrowed it from a friend or library, and thus you may want to feel like you are getting your money’s worth.
     
  2. Prince Charon

    Prince Charon Just zis guy, you know?

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    In case anyone is unaware, Casino Royale was written in the 1950s, well before the monetary changeover in the UK.
     
  3. Gantradies

    Gantradies Not too sore, are you?

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    *audibly groans*
    is there any word if they knew, at the time still using mostly EARTH TECH,that the US were using robotic probes for first-through recon, given they had enough Intel about the American stargate program to time the activation to miss their own?
    ...
    i think that's the thing i find the most infuriating-that they intentionally set up a defense system that'd obliterate the base's ability to defend itself/hand it over to an invader on a silver platter, that could be circumvented by motion-sensing/remote operated UCV's made with period tech >.<

    ... i mean, nerve gas has a use-by date, like any complex biowar agent even if its still somewhat effective the chemicals change/degrade over time, if there's no countdown/delay its just BEGGING for a strategically vital project to be gutted with a single literal slip of a finger/subverted leader, would likely cause morale/loyalty issues in a large chunk of personnel....

    ..... its a contingency the SOVIETS would have dismissed as insane/idiotic, given the politbureau dismissed the original plans for Perimeter/Dead Hand on those grounds >.<
     
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  4. iamnuff

    iamnuff Connoisseur.

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    That it was an accident, obviously.
     
  5. Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    Thank you, corrected.

    No, Celestial Archer is about Artemis' age. And they are dating.
    I felt that I needed to re-establish between two characters who are the focus of the episode and haven't seen each other for a while.
    Not exactly the first time.
     
  6. Doccer

    Doccer I trust you know where the happy button is?

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    Please tell me you have a link?
     
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  7. Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    No.
     
  8. Zig

    Zig Not too sore, are you?

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    Honestly the slice of life chapters like this are probably the best part of the story. You are reading a fic that updates with around ~1k words every day. Most fics update far less consistently but with longer updates and definitely go more than 1k words of nothing happening within their 10k word updates.
     
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  9. DrThoth

    DrThoth I trust you know where the happy button is?

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    I don't think it's likely, exactly, but I wonder if Renegade's shared soul with Lynne will play some part in them returning to their present. The Source seems like the kind of thing that will transcend space-time.
     
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  10. Darko

    Darko Connoisseur.

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    Well she and Tao have a lot in common, at least compared to her and Wally.

    They're both archers, so they can share some interests, they were both raised with a bit more discipline than most people their age, Artemis her dad and Tao in the army, they're both in a similar line of work.

    But renegade is practically the New God of assholes.

    Ohh she may be vomiting, but it's spiritual vomit and renegade isn't mentioning the metaphysial vomit on his legs now.

    Ehh, she's a god of archery at this point so that's probably no longer an issue, and even before that she had some extreme training and trick arrows with all sorts of functions.

    Some of the skinny and emaciated slaves we see in the comics could have been full on gods that displeased Darkseid somehow.

    As God from the wonderful videos of Darkmatter2525 explained to Jeffrey how he's going to solve his problems.

    "Magic"

    In Doctor Who humanity practically looked the same even after trillions of years so it's possible that if there are humans in the Sheeda era they may still look human, possibly because of genetic engineering to maintain the human form we know.

    But renegade would so share all his dirty stories if he can make someone uncomfortable.

    The chance to see renegade act like a little child on sugar?

    Yes please.

    That hasn't stopped some of the other Paul's from doing some inappropriate things with underage girls.

    Yeah Paul didn't go too far with Zatanna, but lying about his age and some of the activities they engaged in, like him brushing her hair and kissing her on New Years Eve even if he was uncomfortable, are still kinda inappropriate.

    Well it may be kinda hard to believe that a rookie would decide to enslave a guy on what was essentially his first day.

    Killing them by accident?

    Sure.

    Enslaving them to the spiritual level?

    Kinda hard to fathom.

    Unless the formula allows them to control he person they are injecting.

    Circe turns men into animal hybrids and gives them enhanced strength.

    The Columbians are probably nowhere around.

    The Sheeda may exist, but either they didn't detect the two of them, or are sending someone to observe, or they're being watched but don't know since they're methods of detection, the Box and ring, aren't working at full capacity.
     
  11. DrThoth

    DrThoth I trust you know where the happy button is?

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    Both Renegade and Eros-Paul have revealed their ages far earlier (and the Eros story explored the consequences of that quite well, in my opinion), while Paragon goes to a lot of effort generally to maintain the facade. I do hope he actually comes clean with that at some point, there doesn't seem to be any real point to it now, and Zatanna already knows (which I'm glad finally happened). I'm not sure if his reluctance is some consequence of his enlightenment and semi-inhuman mindset, but I don't think that makes sense.

    I think Paragon should also have made his age clear to Jade before beginning their sexual or romantic relationships, not after; not because I think it would have changed her opinion, but it's basic information she deserves in order to make a valid decision. Especially considering that Common Sense Paul is dating her mother, which I just remembered upon a random re-read (would be fun to see that relationship and family dynamic).

    At this point, though, does no one who he hasn't already told suspect the truth? If Batman knows or suspects, I'd assume he'd have confronted Paragon before now, possibly in the post-Nabu interrogation.
     
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  12. Darko

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    I think that Paul may not really care anymore about revealing his age.

    He may think there's no point to it anymore and is worried others may dislike him for keeping it a secret.

    Diana and Bruce most likely suspect something, but I doubt that they consider him to be a thirty year old, but probably think he's just a few years older than he is.

    Really hope we see an interlude of that version in the future.
     
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  13. Mr Zoat

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    The SI told Jade after he returned to Earth.
     
  14. Darko

    Darko Connoisseur.

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    Yeah, but if I remember correctly she found out about that after they had sex and started a romantic relationship, not before that.
     
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  15. Pinklestia

    Pinklestia Well worn.

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    I stopped to count how many updates have stories that are boring.

    Worse is that I just know Zoat would have done the same story way shorter when this fic started. But nooo he has to drag it for over twenty updates nowadays.
     
  16. Doc Sithicus

    Doc Sithicus Not too sore, are you?

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    I will always be grateful for introducing me to "The Sun is Also a Warrior" all those years ago.
    I coudn't get my hands on actual CD but I've bought the digital edition of Avalon is Risen in 2016.
     
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    Stsword Versed in the lewd.

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    In Post flashpoint and YJ continuity yes, his cybernetics include a 'box- a fatherbox.
     
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  18. Valint

    Valint I trust you know where the happy button is?

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    Or this.
     
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  19. Cuchulin

    Cuchulin Versed in the lewd.

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    I'm Batmane.
     
  20. Darko

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    Prepare to feel the righteous hooves of justice.
     
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    Mr Zoat

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    One Foot in Front
    Of the Other


    "What about Texas, then?"

    I hold my seventh attempt at a coral arrow up and look it over with a critical eye. Straight, smooth, with a somewhat pointy tip. I think it'll do.

    "Probably vote for Knight, unless I can talk Jon into going to a gun show. Which isn't very likely."

    I pass her the arrow and she takes a moment to get a feel for it.

    "I'm not talking about the election. We're pretty sure Luthor was up to something and you're supposed to be keeping tabs on him."

    "Yes, he made a big hole in the ground. I went to see it."

    Getting the giant space ship may have been the primary objective, but Lex wasn't going to waste his investment for a ship he was giving to someone else.

    "The only thing special about it is that it's lined with a simple kryptonian crystal."

    "And you didn't think that was worth mentioning?"

    "What, that Lex has a bit of a Krypton-fixation? I rather thought you knew." I shrug and then slice a new section off my coral-block with my daiklave. "He wasn't just working on ways to kill Kal-El. He wanted to develop kryptonian technology as well. Dumb programmable crystals-"

    Were a gift from Karsta, who's hiring every Tamaranean childminder she can.

    "-are just one of the things he learned to make."

    And I'm not telling her the truth about that, because I am planning on getting home. Not entirely sure what I'm going to use a few hundred kryptonian marines for yet but I'm sure that something will present itself.

    Artemis puts the new arrow on her string and draws it experimentally.

    "What does it do?"

    I shrug, strands of coral falling to the ground as I slide the block I'm working along the edge of my blade.

    "It's strong, absorbs radiation and grows where it's told. That's about it. Nothing clever."

    "So it's not a weapon."

    "It works as armour but it's not a very effective weapon against things in our weight class."

    She smiles. "Oh, I'm in your weight class, am I?"

    "If you can shoot holes in space, yes. I don't suppose you can do time, can you?"

    "Ahh… No."

    She sights and looses her arrow at a nearby coral wall, the arrow becoming thirty arrows in transit with all of them embedding themselves into their target. She nods, satisfied, and strolls over to recover them.

    "This should do."

    I hold up my complete arrow as she checks them for impact damage and stows them in her quiver.

    "So I can just stop?"

    She shrugs. "You can keep on going if you want."

    I hold up the half-finished arrow before me, shrug and toss-.

    No. Ugh. Thanks, brain.

    I bring it to my mouth and bite the end off, chewing… Yeah. No. We can't live off-

    "What are you doing?"

    -this stuff.

    "I wondered if we could eat it." I turn my face away from her and awkwardly spit what is basically rock out. "In case you're wondering: we can't."

    "Ah, yeah?" She frowns. "How hungry are you?"

    "Not rock-eating hungry." I pull my daiklave out of the ground and attach it to my armour. "Can your rainbow bridge arrow thing take us anywhere?"

    "Anywhere on Earth… If this place even counts. But I can't go to a place I don't know, and I don't know anywhere-"

    "In this time." / "-around here."

    I nod. "Right. And… Yes, I can't think of anywhere that would be similar enough five billion years in the future to bypass that. So I guess we're back to plan 'pick a direction and keep walking'."

    She nods, and we turn in to direction we were walking before our brief stop and keep walking.

    "How come Luthor didn't use that kryptonian crystal stuff for his space ships?"

    "Because those ships are designed for agility and stealth. Kryptonian warships were flying bricks."

    "Didn't help with the Sheeda."

    I smile. "What, you mean those empty hulls we left on the ground so they'd be a nice and obvious target?"

    She stares at me. "What?"

    "Yeah. The on-site bunkers were made of kryptonian crystal, but… We knew that the Harrowing was coming up and we didn't think we'd have time to finish a big enough fleet to protect the whole planet. So we… Kept a nice obvious target out in the open. Sure, the Sheeda would know that we were working on space ships, but if they thought they knew where all of them where and saw them all being destroyed, they'd stop worrying."

    "You wanted them to commit."

    "Yep."

    "And… Then you get aboard the Castle and assassinate the Queen?"

    "No. We get aboard the Castle and disable the time drive so they can't get away. Then the actual fleet flies in from the actual shipyard on the far side of the moon and destroys everything that's left."

    "The actual-? No." She shakes her head. "Green Lantern would have spotted it."

    I shrug. "Advanced sensor stealth and magic wards. One of the local Greenies might have found it if he looked really hard in exactly the right place, but that wasn't very likely."

    "So Lex Luthor's.. got a space fleet."

    "Unless we badly miscalculated and he's-. Uh. Well, if we're in the future then he's certainly dead, but since he was on board the Pax Lex it's possible that we miscalculated and he died that day."

    "Pax L-? Of course he called it that."

    "Actually, I picked it. He finds it embarrassing." I smile. "One of our Chinese employees asked if Lex's family name was 'Pax'."

    But it didn't give him a bout of paranoia, which means that his therapy sessions are actually working! He gets to name the next battle cruiser, but I suspect that he intends to be boring and give it a sensible name rather than a pun based on my name. Either that, or do a pun that no one but him will understand.



    How am I going to tell the difference?

    "And that's it? The ships fly in and destroy all of the harvest ships-."

    "And the fliers and monsters. Our ships can all operate in an atmosphere, so fire support isn't a problem. Any surviving Highborn might be a problem, but that's what the League's for."

    "And they don't need you for that?"

    "No, just for nobbling the Queen. I-."

    "Hhhkkkkkkk."

    My daiklave's out and Artemis's coral arrow is on her string as the horde of zombie children charge out of the murk!
     
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  22. Darko

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    Well there is that war with Apokalips you're planning.

    Remove the " from 'this stuff'.
     
  23. hance1986

    hance1986 A pitiful excuse for a man.

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    Zoat, can you give a rundown on the New Gods Grayven has made and what abilities they have or have developed out of being New Gods? Artemis is...what? New God of the Hunt like the Olympian Artemis? Her New God abilities revolve around marksmanship and being a true sniper? She made one arrow in flight multiply into many arrows and she learned a divine teleportation technique from Tao.

    What about Kid Flash? And Kaldur? And Renegade Zatanna and Green Arrow? What new God abilities have they developed?
     
  24. Darko

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    I think he made everyone aside from Robin, who didn't want it, a New God.

    Artemis is more like a god of archery and her abilities are supernatural marksmanship.

    Kid Flash had his speed increase to the level of the Flash and he lost his hunger.

    Kaldur lost the gills he had on his neck and maybe the webbed fingers and toes and is most likely some kind of water god now as he's been shown as being able to manipulate water much more easily and without his water sword things.

    Zatanna is a much more powerful magic user now and I think Green Arrow may develop the same powers as Artemis as Tao, although his may be weaker since I think he only got a partial Awakening, but I'm not fully certain on that.
     
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    aaa001 Your first time is always over so quickly, isn't it?

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    "I heard in times of hardship, the pioneers used to eat coral"
     
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    Thank you, corrected.
     
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    They ate just about everything else, Heck some people COMPLAINED if their water didn't have enough sediment/silt in it.
     
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    Senevri Not too sore, are you?

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    Well, as long as they don't explode....

    Worst scenario, this is some sort of a post-anti-life time, but since something slightly similar happened in the DCeased miniseries / Marvel Zombies ripoff, or whatchamacallit, it seems unlikely.

    Gotta say, I've forgotten a lot of the details of Renegade timeline.
     
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    Dang late. Guess that's what happens when you get stuck into a costume creation session on Champions Online...

    Let me guess, using his daiklave or the Sword for a whittling knife? Assuming his fingernails aren't sharp enough...

    Funny, but I doubt she's that interested in politics. More like LExcorp's little project.

    "Quite a nice hole, overall. Very good echo."

    Well, I suppose if there were something Kryptonian there... But what would the chances of that be? :rolleyes: <innocent whistle>

    And it's entirely believable that Lex could reverse-engineer Kryptonian tech, because Lex.

    I see the Kryptonian cloning is going well. Rapid development or not?

    Not the best of ammunition, but you take what you can get, I suppose.

    Huh, using the Daiklave as a tool, eh? I suppose it's easier to use, what with the Sword's drawbacks if you nick yourself...

    If it eats radiation, it'd be quite useful for cleaning up reactor accidents or maybe radioactive waste. That's quite the winner...

    You would need about three of her to match Grayven's weight class... And while that sounds like a fun party, someone's going to feel left out...

    Not yet, anyway. Don't underestimate her growth potential...

    Okay, now that's a useful trick for re-arming. Something Celestial Archer taught her?

    Don't give him an opening like that, you never know what he'll do with it.

    :eek:... Well... I suppose that's one way to test it, without a Ring.

    Not without much stronger teeth and a lot of sauce.

    Good question. Given we saw Tao shoot a bridge to the Moon and get there in a minute or two tops...

    Aw, it's like a Fast Travel power, then. You still have to explore the map the old-fashioned way.

    Trudge, trudge, trudge... If only montage powers worked in reality...

    And big to boot. Kryptonians didn't do things by halves, did they?

    Heh. As if they'd do the building in such an obvious place. And let everyone with a telephoto lens see every step of the process?

    A nice, big chunk of bait. And the Sheeda pounced on it, not thinking it could be a mousetrap...

    It's Grayven, no way could it have been that simple.

    Oh, please. Anyone with a little magical knowledge can beat Ring scans. The Paragon knows that well, even if the Renegade hasn't run into it that often.

    You make that sound like a bad thing. He's reformed... Mostly. Thanks to Grayven hanging over his head like a beefy Sword of Dmocles.

    To be honest, calling it something like the 'Pax Alexander' might have sounded better. Draw parallels to Alexander of Macedon, and all. Though that still has its issues...

    Probably a sneaky pun on Gray, yes. I can just see him chuckling to himself as he works out really subtle ones...

    Joy of not being a tenth-level intelligence. That's what you hire the smart people for.

    Let them have some Righteous Face-punching fun, of course. I can just see Superman stewing over the fact that Lex's fleet saved the day. And Batman being paranoid about it.

    And you still didn't manage that, either... Oh, well.

    Bugger, looks like the DM's bored. He's hit the 'Get on with it' button: random encounters!

    Finally, something other than talking. Don't get me wrong, character moments like this are fun, but a bit of biffo is always good. :D And I think the thread might have started lighting torches if it was three in a row. Roll for initiative!

    ...as I slide the block I'm working...
     
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    About as big as the chances of Lex having unresolved sexual feelings for Kal El, which given the fact that Kon exists are extremely high.

    Well maybe it's more like his staff that did this.

    Lex may be smart, but this version may not exactly be the omni disciplinarian scientist that his comic self is.

    In this fic on SB called The Traveling Merchant and Wandering Mage the MC picks up a bunch of crossbows for his dimension hopping ship.

    The reason he does this is because while guns and lasers can be more powerful they can also be easily disabled, like and EMP pulse for the electronics and something like that Sontaran thing that stopped bullets from firing in Dr Who, but arrows can't exactly be stopped like that and if you're stranded somewhere without any advanced equipment the primitive option may be the most useful since you can easily fix a bow and arrow while doing the same with a gun or laser in a primitive place would be impossible.

    Another reason he picks up the crossbows is that because they travel through other universes they may end up in one where the lasers don't work due to the local laws not being all that sci fi and allowing things like laser weapons to work.

    He either shot it literary to the moon or just aimed at the direction of the moon and opened up a portal to the residence of the gods, but it wasn't on the moon and what we saw was just something like an illusion.

    It kinda is a bad thing, if renegade isn't around to hold Lex's hand then he may go off the deep end and now he'd have a whole fleet to enact his crazy plans.

    Well wouldn't you be mad and paranoid if a guy that belonged to a group of psychopaths and sociopaths that committed horrible crimes against innocent people, like torture, murder, enslavement and a whole lot of other things, and was never punished for it, and is actually getting more power and wealth, is being hailed as a hero and has his own fleet
     
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