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A Texan Cowboy lost in th Sea of Time

Discussion in 'Creative Writing' started by MendicantBias219, Oct 30, 2023.

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    MendicantBias219

    MendicantBias219 Getting out there.

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    October 12th 2023 AD (450 AD Post "Event" Calendar)

    "Come on, hurry up!" That's all Dylan could say to himself while preparing his quad bike and made a double check in both his Colt and AR-15, preparing for a quick departure to the northern part outside of the fences of his family farm.

    After his vehicle and weapons were ready he accelerated, not caring for the consumption of his limited amount of Gas, he went straight ahead to give chase to Riley, his German shepherd, who had run out of the farm about ten minutes ago. This normally wouldn't have scared him this much if not for what he had seen with his drone the previous afternoon.

    Part of his mind was screaming at him for being this reckless, back at West Point they have taught him to be more prepared and to have a plan before acting, specially in life and death situations, but he let his emotions cloud his thoughts.

    After "The Event" as he has named it, Riley was the only family he had left, after he had lost contact with the rest of the world, and he would be damned before he allowed him to get hurt without him doing something.

    After riding his bike for what it feels like an eternity, getting past his farm fence and going for another ten minutes, he spotted something moving in some bushes and finally saw Riley hiding there, looking intensely at something in the distance, so he accelerated to get closer before getting off the vehicle and running after his friend.

    "Riley!" He said in what could only be described as a muted scream, although it seemed to be enough to get the attention of his friend who looked back at him and got closer. With his heart finally slowing down as he hugged his friend "don't do that ever again please, I thought those things had already got you" He said while refusing to let go of his friend.

    After a few seconds he grabbed Riley collar and tried to drag him back to his quad bike, finding resistance in the process "come on man, we have to get out of here" Riley didn't seemed to want to go, refusing to take off his eyes form the same direction and seemingly trying to pull Dylan back to the place, but Dylan knew they couldn't stay there for much longer.

    That's when he heard something that made him stop in his tracks, a woman scream and what he could only describe as unnatural feral growlings. He stopped in his tracks and thought about if for a moment, thinking about the pros and cons of going to check, but he realized that he was armed and there seemed to be a girl in danger, he wasn't raised to be a coward and he'd be damned if he started now and allowed civilian to get killed while he could have helped, so he attached the leash he brought with him to Riley's collar, adjusted his black cowboy hat and allowed his friend to lead the way.

    They ran for a few minutes, with Dylan keeping his rifle in his hands, until the sounds got more intense and Riley stopped. So, guided by his training, he dropped into a prone position and started to crawl until he got cover behind some bushes, with Riley following his example, he looked out just enough to see what was happening, and what he saw was something he didn't expect.

    About 20 meters away he saw about 20 of those creatures he saw last night through his drone footage. He had thought that dealing with coyotes and foxes in the Texas countryside was bad enough already, but what he saw was bordering monstrous.

    Through his rifle's scope he spotted what looked like big black wolves, just these were actually bigger than any he has ever seen at a height of about 2 meters, and the damned things were bipedal! Those were honest to real life werewolves. Those things had been too close to his farm last night, that's why he kept his farm animals indoors, armed himself and stayed up all night with his rifle ready to face those things if they even thought of attacking his home, fortunately they didn't even got near his fences.

    But what really surprised him the most, and that's saying a lot after watching freaking werewolves!, was the sight of a short blonde girl dressed in what seemed like a combination between a white dress and silver armor, fighting those same monsters with a golden sword.

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    Ok, he wasn't really that knowledgeable about swordsmanship, he has never seen a sword fight outside of movies and he has just seen swords as replicas in museums or toys in stores, but he knew that the way this girl was fighting seemed unnatural.

    What Dylan was looking at, was that blonde girl slaying the werewolves with what appeared to be superhuman capabilities, with speed and grace he had only seen in cartoons when he was a kid. He had seen army soldiers and marines displaying some actions that could be called human peak performance, but he recognized that what this girl was doing was far beyond that.

    By the time he had got out of his stupor, the girl had already finished 14 of the 20 beasts, with the remaining six growling and trying to encircle her. That's when Riley loudly barked at one of the creatures when it was trying to sneak behind the girl. That bark was enough for the girl to turn her head to their direction, a huge mistake, the werewolf using the distraction, hit the girl with its pawn with such a force that he could hear the sound of it from his position, lifting the girl from the ground and making her hit a three, she fell to the ground and didn't seemed to get up. Dylan saw some blood coming from her head.

    He knew that he needed to act right there, otherwise those things would kill the girl, they were already going after her unconscious form, so he took a long breath, aimed his rifle at the beast that was closer to the girl and pulled the trigger.

    The 5.56 mm bullet left the gun at supersonic speeds and hit the werewolf in the waist in a fraction of a second, visibly wounding the animal, but to Dylan's surprise the damned thing was still standing and its companions didn't flee.

    He has shot the beast expecting to kill it or, at least, heavily wound it. He has also expected (hoping really) that the other werewolves would run away after the first shot, knowing that many wild animals tend to escape after the sudden sound of gunshots. But unfortunately, that wasn't the case this time.

    Without hesitation aimed again and pulled the trigger again, this time, hitting the werewolf in the chest and the beast fell and didn't raise again. Without giving it a second thought he aimed at the other beasts and started shooting, three more beasts fell to their death, some of them took one shot to put down while others needed more than one depending on where the bullet hit.

    The only two remaining animals have already identified the smell and location of their attacker, so they rushed towards him, running incredibly fast. He knew that the distance was his only layer of defense against those things, after witnessing their speed and strength he knew that they would rip him apart if they reached him.

    With his heart pumping he aimed at one of his attackers and pulled the trigger hitting it on the leg and making it fall, but he realized too late that his magazine was now empty, and that the last beast was already too close, he wouldn't have time to reload. That's when Riley jumped into action and ran towards the beast managing to bite it's leg and shake his head with all of his strength managing to make the werewolf stop and growl in pain towards the canine. Dylan rapidly got up from the ground and pulled out his Colt Python from his holster, and, before the werewolf could attack his friend, he shot the thing multiple times until it got down.

    With his revolver still fuming in his hands and his rifle hanging at his side he got near the last beast that couldn't get up due to the bullet wound in its leg, but was still trying to crawl towards him. Dylan considered ending the life of the abomination with his knife, if only to save some of his ammo. He shaked his head, knowing better than to risk his well being by getting too close to a predator, so he just aimed his Colt and ended the last of those abominations with the last two shots, one to the chest and one to the head, blowing off part of its brain.

    After that he let out a sigh of relief he didn't know he was holding, with his heart beating hard in his chest. His first real combat situation was over and it wasn't against some foreign military attacking his home, an armed group in the middle east or even an armed robber in his home, but against some kind of freaks of nature.

    He realized something and could only say in a whisper to himself "I Almost die" the last two of those animals had gotten too close, he knew that if Riley wasn't there with him the last werewolf would have torn him apart. He didn't allow those thoughts for more than a few seconds though, he realized that he had more pressing matters when he saw Riley running to the wounded girl, so he ran to her direction and bent next to the girl to examine her.

    The first thing he noticed was that she was a really short girl, wondering how she was able to kill so many of those things with just a sword made of... was it gold? He shaked his head, it wasn't important right now "hey miss, are you ok? Can you hear me?" He asked, but there was no response, realizing that she was indeed unconscious, he noticed she was still breathing and rapidly checked her pulse, it seemed stable.

    He carefully continued to examine her head, watching some blood covering her factions, fortunately it seemed to be just a small superficial cut that has already stopped bleeding, she didn't seemed to have lost a lot of blood, but he wasn't a doctor and he knew that head injuries are complicated, specially if the person was unconscious.

    he looked around to see if there was someone around, but there was no one around, was she really traveling alone with these things roaming around? He realized that was probably the case and that there was no one nearby to help her besides him.

    He decided that, even if it was risky to pick a stranger, he could at least take her back to his house, disinfect her head wound, bandage it and wait for her to wake uo to explain her situation. So, carefully he lifted her and her golden sword (he deduced she wouldn't like to lose it in the woods), noticing that she was surprisingly light, and carefully he carried her back to his quad bike where he, Riley and the nameless girl mounted it and began their journey back to his farm.

    During his drive back home, after the adrenaline of the whole ordeal wore off and his mind could properly process the events of that afternoon, in Dylan's head there was only one question:

    "Where the he'll am I?"
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    So, I've been working on a story, inspired by the classic of Mark Twain "A Connecticut Yankee in King Arthur's Court" but with a change of setting, by being a person from the real world on the Nasuverse Arthurian Mythos and this man being from modern America, from the state of Texas and having different circumstances. So I thought of sharing this idea in here to get some feedback and advices from people who knows better than me about the nasuverse setting and mechanics.

    First of all, how different are the people from the Nasuverse Arthurian Legends be compared to a human from the real world? I don't mean in a cultural way, since apart from some anachronistic elements it would still be possible to determine that by doing some research. What I really want to know is how different they're in a more physical and spiritual way, I know that people from the Age of God's were basically superhumans that would just destroy a modern IRL man, but what about people from the Age of Fairies? That period of time seemed more like a transition between the Age of Gods and the Age of Man, so your average humans would still be stronger than modern people but would they be invincible superhumans or just above average modern humans? Since part of the story is about the exploration of the islands by the Texan and his interaction with the people there, that would be an important element to the story.

    Second of it, assuming that the guy is from a secular reality without supernatural or fantasy elements at all, could a he survive on the British islands before the Foundation and the fall of Camelot? I was under the assumption that modern people couldn't survive in places like Avalon since the amount of mana would be toxic and lethal to them, and the British Isles of the past, being one of the last places to make the transition to the Age of Man, may be similar to the secular modern human. I'm going by the idea that, despite being a human, the dimensional traveler is something different from the humans of the nasuverse and since he came from a reality without the supernatural his body simply doesn't react to mana and exposure doesn't really harm him.

    I also wonder how Gaia would react to this guy and the animals and plants that were transported with him? It would be somehow a grey area since they do share the genetic composition of their Nasuverse counterparts but they come from a different magicless reality. That would be a central theme as well with the OC, being a human but not a Nasuverse human, technically is an interdimentional alien but not an eldritch abomination neither.

    This won't be a story with a Gary Stu where he'll be able to destroy every enemy and win all the battles just because he has guns with him, he is just a guy with some military training, who has been sent to another universe with his family's farm with limited supplies, that will try to survive and maybe thrive in a world of monsters and heroes while trying to help the people of his new home, exploring the lands and getting into the the conflicts of someone being suddenly separated from his family, his home and everything he has ever known, feeling completely out of place in this new world. Domething that most isekais don't aboard these days.

    So, what do you guys think?
     
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    Either Gaia and Alaya ask the current bearer of Kaleidoscope to help these dimensionally and time-displaced travelers to go back to their Wordline or this happens...

    Gaia, watching a sunflower from real life staring at the sun: What? Why is it staring at Type SOL? Is it a being from Type SOL? What is this? This doesn't compute!
    Alaya, staring at the time-displaced cowboy: Human, or not to Human, that is the question...
    Type-Moon: I blame that Hikaru Genji planning time traveler!
    Aoko: I didn't do anything!
    Type-Moon, narrows eyes: Are you sure?
    Aoko: YET!
     
  3. davelll

    davelll Versed in the lewd.

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    Small sample size need more for further review.
     
  4. Jao

    Jao (Verified Lemon Drop Addict)

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    You need to threadmark the chapter, and the image is broken.
     
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    Jao (Verified Lemon Drop Addict)

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    Gas*

    Needs a space bteween the "," and the word "armed".

    girl*

    5.56 mm bullet*

    rise*


    Hell*





    You need to capitalize the first word in the dialogs.

    You should also keep the paragraphs under 5 lines so it is not just a big wall of text.
     
  6. MendicantBias219

    MendicantBias219 Getting out there.

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    Any thoughts or suggestions about the general plot? This was just a small piece to see what people think of the idea.

    I may post another small chapter to see what people think of this after going full for the story.
     
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    MendicantBias219 Getting out there.

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    Thanks for the corrections. Honestly English isn't my first language, so I think there would be some mistakes here and there.

    Do you have any thoughts of the story and plot? I posted this small chapter here to see what people think of the idea to develop it further later on.
     
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    Jao (Verified Lemon Drop Addict)

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    I liked it.
     
  9. ATP

    ATP Experienced.

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    He would die when he schoot his las bullet,unless blondie decide to save him.
    Changes - bigger would be 4 crop rotation and patatoes.It would be nice if he manage to mass produce good steel or blackpowder,but - not as important as new plants.
    Well,knew for old Britain.
     
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    MendicantBias219 Getting out there.

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    Well, he is in a Texan ranch, this guy and his family were well stocked with ammo and weapons and he would have the necessary tools to make more ammo, but it will be a slow process.

    Also, he will meet Artoria and befriend her, if it wasn't clear she was the blonde he helped against the werewolves, before working the complete story I might as well write another chapter with their first interaction right after this one.

    He'll have a lot of useful knowledge about agriculture and, since he was transported wit his ranch and this one is one of those big houses, he'll have a big library with a lot of useful information. Also, the seeds and plants he has are the ones of The 21st century which have been adapted over the centuries to be more nutritious and have a greater resistance to plagues, so they would be very useful for the people of the British islands.

    He won't be Gary Stu though. He knows how to plant with his equipment and more experience people, and he has lost the people and the fuel for the vehicles won't last forever, he'll have to ration it. He'll have to learn how to adapt and overcome his new circumstances.

    Thanks for your answering!
     
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    Fuel should be no problem,if he knew how to made biodiesel.And,with entire farm and library,if he do not die he could keep 1900 level technology.
    Another big change - he knew where Americas,Australia and roads to India and China are,if he library had plans for sailing ships like frigates,then Britain would rule the vaves 1200 years earlier !
     
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    Renko Look closer ~☆

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    I was so excited to read a possible OC/SI x Artoria fic! Those kind of things are either rare or non-existent in the Fate fanfic fandom.

    The lewds are going to be glorious!

    But then I realized this was posted in the SFW section! oof

    :eek:
     
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    Do not lost hope yet! master Yoda feel lewd,i mean force,strong in this story!
     
  14. MendicantBias219

    MendicantBias219 Getting out there.

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    I mean, there may be romance down the line, since it isn't the main goal of the OC in the story, being more concerned in going back home and helping people along the way. I haven't decided yet but I've always enjoyed a well developed romance in the stories I've read and writing how the romance between people from two different times, so different that they may be aliens to one another, would develop would be really amazing.

    Then again, the romance would develop slowly. Imagine if you, along with your house, was suddenly transported to another world and one as dangerous as the Nasuverse, getting laid would probably be the last of your concerns.

    How do I change that? It is my first thread in this page, I didn't realized I posted it as SFW.
     
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    True,i think that only suicidal idiot would try to get into Artoria pants after being send there.SI must survive,find allies/turning Artoria into ally is good idea/,try to return home,and,only if it become impossible become Artoria court Engineer.
    If they decide to marry later,it could be reasonable tactic - Artoria must marry somebody,but all nobles could try take power from her.
    SI could not,becouse nobody recognize him as King.
    And,his knowledge certainly would be useful.

    P.S Since you do not plan to write any sex scenes,then why change forums?
    Place for stories without lemons is here.
     
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    MendicantBias219 Getting out there.

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    So, I've updated the first chapter with your suggestions, using smaller paragraphs and correcting some of the grammatical errors.

    I'm still working on the second chapter before publishing the story. It's showing the OC contemplating the fact that he's been sent far from home and that it will be a while before he finds answers, but realizing that he can try to enjoy the few joyful moments in the Nasuverse, and the new friends he's made, while looking for a way home. But before this, I also want to share with you the summary I worked on for the story, so you can tell me what you think of it and if you guys think I could improve it in any way:

    "After being away from home, in the pursuit of knowledge and a bright future, a young soul is finally able to go back home to rest, to the sprawling vistas and warm embrace of his homeland. Yet, in an unexpected and mysterious twist of fate, without warning, this young Texan will find himself and all that he held dear thrown through the fabric of time and space, into a known, yet entirely alien new era.

    Finding himself lost in the sea of time between the palpable reality of his homeland and the arcane depths of a legendary past. Armed with nothing but his heritage, tools and an unyielding determination, see this lone cowboy navigate this uncharted territory on this new realm in the pursuit of answers and a way back home. Without realizing that his presence in this world will bring bigger changes than anyone could have anticipated."
     
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    Take your time,but remember,you must decide from the start if Artoria would be waifu,best friend,or both.

    All possibilities are good,but you must decide that now.
     
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