Ignore the colour of my hands. Ignore the water beneath my feet. Ignore the voices. Ignore the call.
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Homecoming (Kancolle)
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Arc 1 Image - Sketch
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I think the shading and the shadows are a bit wonky, but all in all, I'm pretty happy with this, considering it's the first thing I've ever drawn that's not a stick figure. Now I just need to learn how to add colour. Well, that and finish writing Chapter 9.
The rigging isn't completely visible here since I can't draw well and the character pose occludes quite a bit. She's got a small Type 277 radar on the right side of her hairband and 20mm and 40mm AA guns along her right shoulder and upper arm.
I tried adding belt armour around the hips like Victorious and Ark Royal have in their canon forms, but it was pretty bad looking.
Also, you now know her class if you look at her flight deck.
F8F Bearcat
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So I was writing chapter 10, and Victor encounters an aircraft. I started describing the aircraft, then I started drawing the aircraft.
Five hours later, as I'm colouring it in, I realise I drew the wrong fucking aircraft.
The Northern Carrier fleet does not have any F8F Bearcats.
Anyway, here's what it would look like if they did:
Five hours later, as I'm colouring it in, I realise I drew the wrong fucking aircraft.
The Northern Carrier fleet does not have any F8F Bearcats.
Anyway, here's what it would look like if they did:
Northern Carrier Fleet Martlet
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The Two Story Ideas That Became Homecoming
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With Arc 1 now complete, I thought I'd throw out the two initial story ideas, and the first parts written, that eventually grew and coalesced into this story.
Homecoming
(Kancolle)
- Survivor gets captured by Abyssal princess and turned into an Abyssal.
- Escapes and tries to return home.
- Fights other Abyssals and Shipgirls on the way.
- Encounters human fishing crew, experiences overwhelming urge to kill them, hurts or kills them.
- Makes land and tries to get to hometown whilst resisting the urge to kill humans.
- Makes it home, only to find it unfamiliar and full of people they can't help but want to kill.
- "I don't belong here anymore"
- Returns to the sea and the Abyssal princess.
- "Welcome home."
The island was the same as I left it, dark, overcast, and crawling with Abyssals. Some looked up as I approached, none tried to stop me, they had no quarrel with a fellow.
The dim corridors were comfortable to my eyes, the cool air and stone to my skin.
I didn't need a map, Her presence was all the guide I needed, drawing me in easily now that I didn't fight it.
I reached the throne room. She was there.
My Princess didn't strike me down, didn't say anything, she just smiled, then approached with slow and confident steps.
I was frozen with fear, with longing, and she embraced me. It was cold, it was the Abyss, it was familiarity and welcome.
She released me, and I yearned for more as she maintained her smile. At last, she spoke:
"Welcome home."
This was the second idea that I had and it was standalone. There were no plans to expand this until I realised that it could be linked to the first idea. So, the first idea became Arc 3, and the second idea became Arc 1, then I started actually working on the cast, their history, and their characterisation. For a long time, seven months or so, this was the only thing that existed for Arc 1, right until I started writing Chapter 1 in August.
Now, the thing is, the story has grown around these seeds of Arc 1 and Arc 3, and there was no seed for Arc 2, so that's basically barren soil at the moment. I'm going to have to look for something to plant there.
Abyssal
(Kancolle)
- Princess is killed, MC then returns to land, again
- Still has the urge to kill humans
- Deals with discrimination, self hatred, and depression.
- Lots of conversations with a therapist.
- Later works with government to manage other Princess-less Abyssals.
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"Any luck on the job search?"
"No. Had a few interviews, one of them didn't end the Teams meeting the moment they saw me, didn't go anywhere though. Do you think being an Abyssal is protected by the Equality Act, and if so is this a race or a disability?"
"I don't think that's ever been tested in court. Would you be able to work in an office where everyone is scared of you though?"
"Still better than retail, and I think I'd prefer if the customers were scared of me. I've been looking at remote jobs anyway, I think there's too much competition though. Everyone wants a remote dev job these days, and the other applicants have Firsts from Imperial College, and aren't homicidal sea monsters."
"There are resources available, JSA, UC."
"Not for me, too much in savings and income. I'm fine, I get enough income as a landlord, as if I wasn't hated enough already."
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"How were you thinking about killing him?"
"Knife, one big slash up the front. Would it even work? Look at the size of him, there must half a foot of fat before I'd get to the organs. He's wheezing and he's not even standing up. I'd be doing the NHS a favour by killing him. Splitting him open, what would it look like?"
She let me vent my antipathy before continuing.
"Well, as long as your homicidal urges stay unrealised... Anyway, we've got another one, and as our most well adjusted Abyssal, we'd like you to be part of her introduction to society."
"I'm your most well adjusted Abyssal? That's tragic."
"Despite how much you fantasise about it, you're not killing anyone. You haven't killed anyone in months, even before you came ashore. I'll take these small victories."
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"Have you tried Sertraline?"
"I don't think that's indicated for supernatural hatred... Yes, it didn't do anything, even at doses that would kill a human."
"That's a pity, I know this is difficult for you and wish we could alleviate some of that, but you're doing very well nonetheless. That is interesting though, how some substances affect you like they would a human and others don't."
"Presumably the Abyss doesn't have an issue with me getting drunk, but would if you could just drug whole fleets into compliance."
"Do you think it'll ever go away?"
"That hate is intrinsic to my being, it's in every part of me, if it went away, I don't know how much of me would be left."
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"We're a mirror of humanity, all of its hatred and despair."
"What about our love and hope?"
"Ok Madoka, yes, all of that too, what little of it there is in your wretched species. Anyone who can look at human history and see anything other than an overwhelming amount of darkness is being selectively blind."
"You hate us then?"
"Of course I do."
"What about your human friends; Holly, Phoebe?"
"I'm a mirror of humanity, of course I'm a hypocrite."
This first idea was written in one night back in January in the aftermath of binging Spiresome's Frog Meet Scorpion. I was thinking about the now Abyssal Abby and her desire to make it home, and what it would be like if she actually got there. So I started writing about just putting an Abyssal in our mundane society. It was rather nebulous at this point and I wasn't sure whether the character was going to be a human turned Abyssal or just an Abyssal.
(Kancolle)
- Princess is killed, MC then returns to land, again
- Still has the urge to kill humans
- Deals with discrimination, self hatred, and depression.
- Lots of conversations with a therapist.
- Later works with government to manage other Princess-less Abyssals.
-----
"Any luck on the job search?"
"No. Had a few interviews, one of them didn't end the Teams meeting the moment they saw me, didn't go anywhere though. Do you think being an Abyssal is protected by the Equality Act, and if so is this a race or a disability?"
"I don't think that's ever been tested in court. Would you be able to work in an office where everyone is scared of you though?"
"Still better than retail, and I think I'd prefer if the customers were scared of me. I've been looking at remote jobs anyway, I think there's too much competition though. Everyone wants a remote dev job these days, and the other applicants have Firsts from Imperial College, and aren't homicidal sea monsters."
"There are resources available, JSA, UC."
"Not for me, too much in savings and income. I'm fine, I get enough income as a landlord, as if I wasn't hated enough already."
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"How were you thinking about killing him?"
"Knife, one big slash up the front. Would it even work? Look at the size of him, there must half a foot of fat before I'd get to the organs. He's wheezing and he's not even standing up. I'd be doing the NHS a favour by killing him. Splitting him open, what would it look like?"
She let me vent my antipathy before continuing.
"Well, as long as your homicidal urges stay unrealised... Anyway, we've got another one, and as our most well adjusted Abyssal, we'd like you to be part of her introduction to society."
"I'm your most well adjusted Abyssal? That's tragic."
"Despite how much you fantasise about it, you're not killing anyone. You haven't killed anyone in months, even before you came ashore. I'll take these small victories."
-----
"Have you tried Sertraline?"
"I don't think that's indicated for supernatural hatred... Yes, it didn't do anything, even at doses that would kill a human."
"That's a pity, I know this is difficult for you and wish we could alleviate some of that, but you're doing very well nonetheless. That is interesting though, how some substances affect you like they would a human and others don't."
"Presumably the Abyss doesn't have an issue with me getting drunk, but would if you could just drug whole fleets into compliance."
"Do you think it'll ever go away?"
"That hate is intrinsic to my being, it's in every part of me, if it went away, I don't know how much of me would be left."
-----
"We're a mirror of humanity, all of its hatred and despair."
"What about our love and hope?"
"Ok Madoka, yes, all of that too, what little of it there is in your wretched species. Anyone who can look at human history and see anything other than an overwhelming amount of darkness is being selectively blind."
"You hate us then?"
"Of course I do."
"What about your human friends; Holly, Phoebe?"
"I'm a mirror of humanity, of course I'm a hypocrite."
This first idea was written in one night back in January in the aftermath of binging Spiresome's Frog Meet Scorpion. I was thinking about the now Abyssal Abby and her desire to make it home, and what it would be like if she actually got there. So I started writing about just putting an Abyssal in our mundane society. It was rather nebulous at this point and I wasn't sure whether the character was going to be a human turned Abyssal or just an Abyssal.
Homecoming
(Kancolle)
- Survivor gets captured by Abyssal princess and turned into an Abyssal.
- Escapes and tries to return home.
- Fights other Abyssals and Shipgirls on the way.
- Encounters human fishing crew, experiences overwhelming urge to kill them, hurts or kills them.
- Makes land and tries to get to hometown whilst resisting the urge to kill humans.
- Makes it home, only to find it unfamiliar and full of people they can't help but want to kill.
- "I don't belong here anymore"
- Returns to the sea and the Abyssal princess.
- "Welcome home."
The island was the same as I left it, dark, overcast, and crawling with Abyssals. Some looked up as I approached, none tried to stop me, they had no quarrel with a fellow.
The dim corridors were comfortable to my eyes, the cool air and stone to my skin.
I didn't need a map, Her presence was all the guide I needed, drawing me in easily now that I didn't fight it.
I reached the throne room. She was there.
My Princess didn't strike me down, didn't say anything, she just smiled, then approached with slow and confident steps.
I was frozen with fear, with longing, and she embraced me. It was cold, it was the Abyss, it was familiarity and welcome.
She released me, and I yearned for more as she maintained her smile. At last, she spoke:
"Welcome home."
This was the second idea that I had and it was standalone. There were no plans to expand this until I realised that it could be linked to the first idea. So, the first idea became Arc 3, and the second idea became Arc 1, then I started actually working on the cast, their history, and their characterisation. For a long time, seven months or so, this was the only thing that existed for Arc 1, right until I started writing Chapter 1 in August.
Now, the thing is, the story has grown around these seeds of Arc 1 and Arc 3, and there was no seed for Arc 2, so that's basically barren soil at the moment. I'm going to have to look for something to plant there.
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