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On a Pale Horse (Umamusume/Youjo Senki)

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Well, I did it. It only took ten minutes of actual work to produce this evil. If something like this happens it's when Shirogane is recruiting for a post-school team of similarly intimidating frontrunners.

Pale Horse
Pale Horse
Pale Horse
Pale Horse

She rides across the nation
The icon of dismay
She got the application
That you sent her way

It needs evaluation
So let the race begin
A fall in mud, a show of force
A gate crash would be nice of course

Pale Horse
Pale Horse
Pale Horse
She's Death

The Team of Murder Runners
Is watching so beware
The grade that you receive
Will be your last we swear

So make the Pale Horse cheerful
And she'll make you her mare.

You're saddled up
There's no recourse
It's Hi-Ho Silver
Signed, Pale Horse
 
Killdread said:
Well, I did it. It only took ten minutes of actual work to produce this evil. If something like this happens it's when Shirogane is recruiting for a post-school team of similarly intimidating frontrunners.

Pale Horse
Pale Horse
Pale Horse
Pale Horse

She rides across the nation
The icon of dismay
She got the application
That you sent her way

It needs evaluation
So let the race begin
A fall in mud, a show of force
A gate crash would be nice of course

Pale Horse
Pale Horse
Pale Horse
She's Death

The Team of Murder Runners
Is watching so beware
The grade that you receive
Will be your last we swear

So make the Pale Horse cheerful
And she'll make you her mare.

You're saddled up
There's no recourse
It's Hi-Ho Silver
Signed, Pale Horse
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Is this a reference to Dr Horrible's Sing-Along Blog perchance?

View: https://youtu.be/VNhhz1yYk2U?si=PX_6sfaMpdZtMSa8
 
Killdread said:
Well, I did it. It only took ten minutes of actual work to produce this evil. If something like this happens it's when Shirogane is recruiting for a post-school team of similarly intimidating frontrunners.
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The one gripe I have is that the first verse doesn't follow the expected rhyme scheme of AAABB, instead going AAXBB.
 
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Chronometry said:
The one gripe I have is that the first verse doesn't follow the expected rhyme scheme of AAABB, instead going AAXBB.
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The original goes ABAB ABCC, and I'd already done the work of changing the first 2Bs and didn't want to figure out an -ay ending for a start of things. And since it's lyrics being able to match the cadence matters more imo. Especially since the second verse already breaks the pattern with line three being split.

Keeping it to the same tune means sacrifices must be made, and my time wasn't one I was willing to make.
 
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