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ngl that emperor blade bit seems really interesting, cool chapter.
Looks like they are going straight to Siesta? I thought they would at least take the time to sight see through villages or cities. I suppose the cart provides all the supplies needed.
The cart gives unlimited food and drink, but they're just simple things like rice, meat, and some leafy veggies. This is to encourage the residents to go out and explore different cuisines on their own, while not starving them. Also, they can eat the stock they are given, and the money that they have collected so far is theirs to use. Arno and Niko bought some supplies that they won't readily have access to (like the tea snacks Niko likes) for the long haul.

Also, I'm...not exactly sure how the spread of villages work on Terra. So let's just say by coincidence that the Cart simply didn't meet any on its journey.
 
ngl that emperor blade bit seems really interesting, cool chapter.
Cart beats blade, I feel they just crashed into him at 99 kmh. Alternatively he got offed by a quick draw shotgun slug to the face.

Idea for new cart wares official licensed niko merch and sip upon refreshing upon premium goods as in the niko juice box. I don't know why but I remember the rat lady getting a bunch of windrunner's bar at her first visit purchase, is the rat lady bias real? Is Author cultured
 
I enjoyed the story, but I gave up after the Windrunner Fuel arc.

The slow start is fine, as it makes it look like a good 'lazy adventure' story, where the reader sees the impact of all the main character's little decisions, rather than immediate dramatic events. However, the main character's motivation is non-existent. I mean, you've just been kidnapped and lost everything, and you're okay with being made to work in retail for a pittance? Well, I doubt it.

The second problem is the finale of that arc. It feels too much like a deus ex machina, just a new factor that exists only to resolve the situation — it's not even a McGyver event. It also stinks of what modern corporations do now. It's as if you bought a piece of paper. You can write on it, use it as kindling, or even wipe your arse with it in a pinch. But you are contractually forbidden to do half of that, even though it is capable of doing it, and you paid full price. There would also likely be a loss of trust in Fuel after the finale, because, sooner or later, people would start asking questions like: 'What would happen if I needed it in an emergency and it didn't work because someone, somewhere, had decided I wasn't allowed to use it this way?' I wouldn't trust something like that.

Next, let's consider how factions reacted to the finale. I could see the 'criminals' and Rhodes reacting like that, though doubtful. But the law enforcement division? No way. Even in our world, in most law-abiding countries, there are plenty of ways for the government to strong-arm small businesses to get what they want. And when it's a more defunct organisation, it's even easier.

Besides that, it was a good story. Thank you for your work.
 

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