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SHINOBI: The RPG - Act 2 (Naruto/Fallout SI)

Discussion in 'Creative Writing' started by Fulcon, May 7, 2019.

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  1. Fulcon

    Fulcon Wim Hoff Method Initiate

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    Well, it happened, so here it is. :)

    ...by the way, everyone.

    PROGRESS REPORT: Chapter's done, will be posted tomorrow.

    ...I hope you like it, because my muse made me do things that I'm sure are going to get a side-eye from SOME people.
     
  2. MMMm

    MMMm Know what you're doing yet?

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    What are their lines on violence? There's lots of really bloody Worm fics that don't get moderated. I know you can't depict cannibalism regularly though.
     
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  3. Fulcon

    Fulcon Wim Hoff Method Initiate

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    I dunno, I was mostly just joking about the violence thing. :)

    EDIT: Is there a way to stop the alerts from clogging my inbox? I love hearing from you guys, a lot, but I don't want it in my e-mail.
     
  4. Becquerl

    Becquerl Getting out there.

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    I said farewell in the previous thread, but I’m here now.

    ...Does this make me a liar?
     
  5. Fulcon

    Fulcon Wim Hoff Method Initiate

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    Nah, man. It was a temporary parting. :)
     
  6. Warer

    Warer Shadowstep12 Sleep fucking is impoilte

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    I have re-read this story at least twice, including the cut parts,im in for the long haul.
    Didnt Daisuke get a feather loged in his eye early in the story?
    Dont know what to do about your inbox though, there might be an option for that somewhere in the settings, just seems like a thing that would exist. I manually check all the forums multiple dozen times a day and dont really use my email all that much.
    No it makes you a person of good taste and poor judgement.
     
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  7. MMMm

    MMMm Know what you're doing yet?

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    At the top of the thread, you can unwatch it and then rewatch it without receiving emails. It might be different for thread creators though.
     
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  8. Fulcon

    Fulcon Wim Hoff Method Initiate

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    I'm glad to hear that. :D

    He did. It was nasty.

    Not too much detail, though, which is how I didn't get dinged.

    Thank you so much, you're awesome. :D
     
  9. Kejmur

    Kejmur I trust you know where the happy button is?

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    Well, here I am. I will try to keep posting with my own suggestions and opinions like I did in both SV and SB threads ;).
     
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  10. Warer

    Warer Shadowstep12 Sleep fucking is impoilte

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    Forgot to mention that i have also downloaded this story and have it on my phone (act 1). I sound like imbragging to myself.
     
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  11. Fulcon

    Fulcon Wim Hoff Method Initiate

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    Do it, man. I appreciate your feedback. :)

    Now that is dedication! Have a cookie. :D


    EDIT: Missed a quote.
     
  12. Doc Sithicus

    Doc Sithicus Getting some practice in, huh?

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    Hello, fancy seeing you here. I've followed Mr Zoat to QQ after his Second (and hopefully last) Exodus, glad to have you aboard.
     
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  13. Fulcon

    Fulcon Wim Hoff Method Initiate

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    Glad to be aboard!

    Thank you for the warm welcome. :)
     
  14. l---erddad---l

    l---erddad---l [MASTURBATION][AGREEMENT][EJACULATION][AGREEMENT]

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    Okay, so, I have not read any of this, I'm going into reader mode right now, but I need to say this quickly: I would advise you to get back-ups of the rest of your story, just in case somebody from SB gets butthurt. I don't think the mods are all bad, or even most of them, but even a single one deciding to act like a jerk could screw you over.
     
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  15. Fulcon

    Fulcon Wim Hoff Method Initiate

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    I have all of my story on my computer right now and on multiple sites. I think it's safe, but just in case... How do you think I'd be 'screwed over'?
     
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  16. Twilight666

    Twilight666 Not too sore, are you?

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    FYI this is Act 2. There are 375k words in Act 1 before this part starts.
     
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  17. Galacticplumber

    Galacticplumber Getting sticky.

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    Well that was a thing. Following the new thread.

    Edit: Never posted here before. Is the message awaiting approval because short without warning of shortness or because new?
     
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  18. Krazyfan1

    Krazyfan1 I trust you know where the happy button is?

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    Nice to see this continue.

    ...The Adult type situations will occur when Daisuke isn't physically a kid anymore thought, right?
     
  19. Segev

    Segev Your first time is always over so quickly, isn't it?

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    Given what I know of hte author and his proclivities, I suspect the "adult" sections won't be "adult" by most people's standards, and that SB's management's reaction is more to the notion of Anko and Daisuke having a romantic relationship at all. I doubt it'll go beyond hand-holding, maybe up to *gasp* kissing.

    I obviously don't know this for sure, but actual sexytimes showing up in this author's stories would...surprise me.
     
  20. Galacticplumber

    Galacticplumber Getting sticky.

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    Daisuke's physical status is.... mutable. He could quite literally take any form he wants right now.
     
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  21. Fulcon

    Fulcon Wim Hoff Method Initiate

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    It's literally just to prove you aren't a bot. It'll go away after a second.

    ...probably lots of kissing. Adult beyond that? Uh...I don't know? EDIT: Actually, lets make that a most likely not.

    Yeah, I'm thinking no sex scenes. If characters did that, it'd be 'get in bed, then fade to black' sort of thing.

    The answer to 'is Daisuke 13, 24 or 37' is yes.
     
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  22. l---erddad---l

    l---erddad---l [MASTURBATION][AGREEMENT][EJACULATION][AGREEMENT]

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    I didn't know that you had it on other sites, lol.

    My thought was that if someone decided to delete your threads, then if you didn't have a backup then your writing would just be gone. However, again, I was an idiot and didn't realize you had it on other sites, even if you don't have a backup on your computer.

    IGNORE ME!
     
  23. Fulcon

    Fulcon Wim Hoff Method Initiate

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    But you're trying to help, I don't wanna ignore you! :D
     
  24. Neruz

    Neruz HISSSSSS!

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    While I am sure it is possible, I have yet to actually see a depicted sex scene that was actually necessary for story\plot development and could not be replaced with something suggestive and a 'fade to black' moment. That said, in this instance the issue is that one of the characters in question is technically (very technically) thirteen years old, and certain people would react poorly to even the faintest hypothetical suggestion of a 'thirteen' year old person engaging in any kind of romantic relationship at all, regardless of the circumstances.

    As it turns out I somehow even have an account here (how did that happen?), this is fine.
     
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  25. Draconm

    Draconm Your first time is always over so quickly, isn't it?

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    Wow, I forgot I had an account here. Well, here, have another one who migrated here with your story.
     
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  26. Fulcon

    Fulcon Wim Hoff Method Initiate

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    Being honest, the only reason to have it is for fanservice/to share your hormonal fantasies with the world.

    I...am having serious trouble ever seeing that as necessary for my fic.

    EDIT:


    Glad to have you! :D
     
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  27. Neruz

    Neruz HISSSSSS!

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    I'm sure it can be done, I am even willing to allow for the possibility that a plot-important sex scene can be written without jumping through hoops in the process, but I have yet to see that elusive white animal of fiction for myself.

    Certainly I see no need nor likelihood for it to appear in this story.
     
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  28. Rabid Tagger

    Rabid Tagger New to forum websites

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    It's probably not necessary unless you want a (semi) quick-and-dirty way to fish for likes, which wouldn't really be applicable to the main character, due to the somewhat ambiguous rules referring to his age.
     
  29. Fulcon

    Fulcon Wim Hoff Method Initiate

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    Can it be done? Sure?

    Do I want to do it?

    ...nah.

    I completely agree.

    Sex sells. But I don't wanna sell sex.

    ...but I do want my characters to talk about it. Frankly and intimately.
     
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  30. Draconm

    Draconm Your first time is always over so quickly, isn't it?

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    I think the Dresden Files managed to do that. Not just a sex scene, but a bondage sex scene that started toppling the dominoes to one of the biggest shattering of the status quo I have seen in fiction. If I remember correctly, Jim Butcher wrote that scene because he was told that you can't make something like that plot important. He is very big on being told that you can't do something, and making it work. His second series, The Codex Alera, came from being told that you couldn't write a good story when mashing up two cliched concepts, in that case Pokemon and the Lost Roman Legion.
     
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