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With This Ring (Young Justice SI) (Thread Fourteen)

Discussion in 'Creative Writing' started by Mr Zoat, Jan 27, 2019.

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  1. Radix

    Radix Getting sticky.

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    He literally is able to reshape his body. Not to mention the fact that he allegedly had the soul ripped out of his body.

    Plus New Gods can pass as human, Darkseid got reincarnated himself in Final Crisis.
     
  2. Stsword

    Stsword I trust you know where the happy button is?

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    No, he possessed Dan Turpin's body and then had New God technology alter it.

    A possession which would be literally impossible becuase the universe supposedly destroyed his soul, remember?

    So again, we're back to it making no sense whatsoever for Fatherbox to have believed him beyond the single nanosecond it would have taken for it to scan him and check.
     
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  3. Darko

    Darko Well worn.

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    FatherBox may not have believed him but still chose to follow him since he was strong.

    This seems to be an Apokoliptian thing.

    And the Grayven in this story is actually partially human, what with Mortalla, his mother in this story, being a human kidnapped and altered by Desaad.
     
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  4. Stsword

    Stsword I trust you know where the happy button is?

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    That makes Mortalla a former human, not Grayven a half-human hybrid, unless Zoat actually changed things to add to No Biochemical Barriers, a trope he doesn't seem to like.

    He made kryptonians genetically incompatible with humans despite all the stories that's not the case. He made Blaze a 100% biologically human with a soul made up of demonic magic instead of a half human half demon hybrid. He wasn't even comfortable making Superboy transgenic instead of chimerical even though the latter option makes less sense. He made royal Almeracian powers genetic engineering and not interplanetary eugenics despite the entire point of Maxima coming to Earth being finding a mate who could give her children extra superpowers.

    And until post flashpoint, you know, the comics that don't exist according to Zoat, New Gods and humans were not genetically compatible.

    Weird in a setting in which Lobo has a half Durlan son, but it was explicitly stated in Mr Miracle's series that he and his human wife couldn't have kids because she was human and Scott wasn't.

    So if Zoat did make human New God hybrids biologically possible like Grail of post-flashpoint continuity, that's one of the handful of things he's taken from it over the years for this story.

    So I would be surprised. It's certainly not impossible, but it would be surprising.
     
  5. Mors

    Mors Getting out there.

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    Wait, I know I missed a few chapters in the course of the story but when the hell did the earth prime thing happen? Which episode?
     
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  6. Darko

    Darko Well worn.

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    Grayven is probably at least partially human.

    And Zoat has used that trope, like in this episode with Raul and Komand'r.

    It's been stated that if they use magic or tech then humans can breed with aliens.

    It wouldn't be that shocking if Desaad altered Mortalla to be able to have New God offspring.

    Just to be clear were not talking about the Prime Earth from the n52, but rather Earth Prime or Prime Earth is basically what the versions of Paul call their original world.

    I don't remember when it was first mentioned but I do remember that it was.

    Also I think Darkseid said something about Grayven taking a sojourn into the Bleed.
     
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    Mr Zoat

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    Komand'r glares at me, though given her current mood swings it's a lot less intimidating than it used to be.

    "Why not?!"

    "Komand'r, love of my life, mother of my children-."

    She folds her arms across her chest and looks away.

    "Child. You get one. I watched those videos and I'm not going through that more than once."

    "We don't know how many you're having this time."

    The corners of her mouth turn downwards, and her eyes widen as her head slowly turns back towards me.

    "That's wonderful-."

    She blinks, grimaces, then flies over to a nearby asteroid, which she viciously headbutts! The asteroid explodes, flying out across the void, a small number of fragments entering Zamaron's atmosphere below us.

    That-. That's probably not going to reach the ground.

    "Gah! Stupid rock!"

    "Komand'r, stop trying to injure yourself. High stress levels are bad for the baby."

    Her hands go to her abdomen and for a second her face is a picture of horror. Then she jerks her hands to her side and glares at me again.

    "No taking advantage of my baby brain!"

    "I'm not going to hit you whenever you start being nice to people."

    "You're being stupid." She rolls her eyes. "I know you're not strong enough to actually hurt me with your fist. You can use that electric rod thing you used in Polokistan."

    "I'm not going to-."

    "Why not? You used it on me before."

    Our one foray into bondage. It doesn't really work when one party is as tough as she is and the psychology is different when that party used to be an actual slave.

    "Komand'r, it only lasts a couple of months. Then you'll be back to normal."

    "But what if I've lost my edge by then?!"

    I float over to her, taking her hands in mine.

    "Komand'r, you have achieved a level of spitefulness which surpasses every Tamaranean before you. I assure you: you have more than enough bitchiness to get through this with your character intact."

    "You're being so nice about-."

    Her face twitches, then she raises her right fist and-.

    I wrap a construct manacle around her right forearm and pull it away with construct chains before she can follow through on her initial impulse to punch herself in the head.

    "N-."

    And then I grab her left forearm with another manacle.

    "No. Komand'r, stop."

    She tries pulling against them for a moment, but while she can make progress she can't make her arms move anything like fast enough to hit herself. After a moment she realises that too and sags in her bonds.

    I float closer so that our heads are level. She's looking down, avoiding my eyes. I reach out with my right hand and gently tilt her head back up, meeting my concerned gaze with an expression of tiredness. She looks wrung out, actually. It's a surprising moment of honesty; she usually hates showing weakness like this.

    "Komand'r, talk to me."

    "'m scared."

    "Okay. What about?"

    "You make me feel… Things. And that's… Okay. I didn't… I didn't like it to start with, but it's-. It's fine. But now my own body's doing it without you even being there. I've liked people before so liking you more isn't that big a deal but this is-. I don't like everyone. It's like there's this alien thing in me that's changing who I am. It's like the-."

    She squirms.

    "It's like the Gordanians."

    Ahh…

    Komand'r… Hasn't wanted to talk about exactly what happened while she and her sister were slaves. And since we burned their civilisation to the ground I didn't think it was worth pressing her over; violence is a great healer.

    It seems I was mistaken. That… Or we didn't kill quite enough, I suppose.

    "There might be a way to stop it. Some sort of hormone regulating impl-."

    "There isn't. And if there ever was it was one of the things that we lost when Tamaran got burned."

    A red ring… Might work. She'd certainly end up getting all of her anger back. But I'm not sure what the ritual would do to the foetus. The other alternative…

    "Do you not want to have this child?"

    She rolls her eyes. "It's a bit late-." She blinks as I raise my eyebrows. "Oh. No, no, I don't-. That's not-. No."

    "Okay. I want to have children with you. Do-."

    "And I want to have children with you!"

    She blinks, her hands coming up to cover her mouth and her eyes giving the impression that she hadn't intended to say that.

    "Was that you or the hormones?"

    "Iiiiiiiii think it was me."

    Hm.

    "Look, you know this isn't like what the Gordanians did, because unsettling though it is it's something that every Tamaranean mother has gone through at least once. I'm sure that you'll rise to this challenge as you have every other. Or are you going to keep whining about it like a little bitch who doesn't know what she wants?"

    Her eyes glow.

    "I'll show you who's a bitch."

    Glowing red horns appear on my forehead.

    "I'm not as fragile as I used to be."

    "Um."

    We both turn, and see the small crowd of Zamarons gathered to watch us.

    "We were going to castigate you about the meteorite. But this looks far more interesting."
     
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  8. Idkusername

    Idkusername Versed in the lewd.

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    Raul: Stop hitting yourself! Stop hitting yourself!

    Komand'r: No!

    Edit: Oh, do go on, the Zamorons won’t mind if you engage in hot kinky sex in front of them, though the mods might.
     
  9. hance1986

    hance1986 Not too sore, are you?

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    A healthy airing out of relationship issues.
     
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  10. Vaermina

    Vaermina Versed in the lewd.

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    Was it when he found out Fatherbox had been secretly reporting everything back to Darkseid?
     
  11. Doccer

    Doccer Know what you're doing yet?

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    Why were they having this argument o er the love Lantern's planet?
     
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  12. Darko

    Darko Well worn.

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    'and for a second'

    This is both kinda weirdly moving and weird as hell.

    About what you'd expect from a Paul

    'our heads'

    Maybe add 'sister were enslaved'

    And I see you changed it so that the both of them were enslaved here while in the canon material I think it was just her sister.

    Ya think.

    Ahh, they're going to watch them fuck each other.

    And Raul even has some horns for Komand'r to grab onto.

    Is the next episode going to be paragon focused?
     
  13. Darko

    Darko Well worn.

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    Either they were just flying around and happened to get near the place, or they wanted their help.

    Komand'r has been experiencing severe cases of extreme love right now and if she wants to get it under control then maybe the universes experts on love can do something about it.
     
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  14. Grek

    Grek (she/her)

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    Am I the only one who was expecting "Alright, we'll trade places and make ME the one who's pregnant with our child" as the resolution of this conflict?
     
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  15. Darko

    Darko Well worn.

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    And it honestly may have been possible here.

    Even if red rings aren't all that good for things aside from destroying things, there's still all sorts of advanced tech that could potentially allow them to remove the fetus from Komand'r and put it into Raul, and allow it to somehow develop.
     
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  16. Vaermina

    Vaermina Versed in the lewd.

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    We will likely never know... Since we're almost surely going back Renagade's more boring Atlantis storyline now.
     
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  17. Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    Thank you, corrected.
    Yes.
    I don't write anything about that issue any more.
     
  18. Chojin Patriarch

    Chojin Patriarch Veteran Lurker

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    Ah, Raul... You don't know just how bad it can get, you know. If you thought human women got a little crazy while pregnant, that's low-balling it concerning pregnant Tamaraneans...

    Now, I'd say he's getting ahead of himself, but given how bizarrely human biology interacts with other species in DC... We can't be sure there's not multiple babies coming.

    We'll see how you feel once it's done, you've shattered his hand from squeezing it and you're holding a squawling, messy little thing and it's sooo cute oh my god...

    "Why do you say these horrible things? Oh, sweet X'Hal, I'm dooomed!"

    Oof. Probably not the best place to be having this out. That might get someone's attention, after all. Or did she just run.. er, fly...at super-luminous speeds and this is where she ended up?

    Hey, be glad it wasn't you, Raul. To be fair, She probably might do some damage to his environmental shield in this state...

    God, this is hilarious, watching her swing from hot-blooded warrior to upset mother and back... :( And also painful.

    ...Did she ask him to do that? :p Because I can honestly see her asking him to do that in all seriousness...

    Besides, that's for the bedroom! :D

    :eek: ...I was joking... And honestly? I think she could probably have benefited from being the Dom...

    Honey, your edge runs so deep, if someone cut you, you'd bleed black. I'm honestly surprised you don't wear more black and red...

    :rolleyes: Such a sweetheart.

    Whoa, hey! No self-harm! Where do you think you are, the Dark Universe?

    And it says a lot that he's straining. Her anger makes her even more powerful than she usually is, after all...

    Man, really good thing you have Enlightenment... That burst of Love would have been awkward if your ring shut off... Though I suspect someone below just took note of it...

    I'm not surprised. She really doesn't seem like she's ready for parenthood yet. Still stuck in that teenage 'rage at the universe' phase, albeit for legitimate reasons.

    You should be, this is a big change...

    That's called Love, honey. It's amazing how it can worm its way into a heart hardened by rage and pain...

    Oof. That's a painful association...

    Unfortunately, that healing is sometimes just papering over the cracks and assuming it'll hold firm... Eventually, it breaks...

    Still the issue of whether it would affect the child...

    :confused: Yes, a half-human, half-tamaranean child whose mother was soaked in blood-magic and Red Light... That'll either result in a buddha of kindness or the universe's worst monster ever.

    Even without her own convictions, I have to wonder what Tamaraneans think of that line of thought...

    Well, now. That's honest of her.

    To be fair... You're floating over the home of the Star Sapphires. One of the most Love-saturated worlds in the universe... If you don't get such honesty as a matter of course, where would you?

    And deep inside, some part of him is grinning like a little boy in pride.

    :rolleyes: Raul, what did you just say about high stress levels?

    :sneaky: ...No. No, I am not going to say it. It's too low-hanging...

    ...Ah. Looks like they have company...

    "Please, continue, it should be quite educational for our younger students...

    Buuuus-ted. :oops: And just as they were getting warmed up. Still, it's interesting to see Komand'r isn't dealing with all this as well as she appeared to be earlier. But then, the girl has more issues than an entire news-stand. Going to be interesting to peek back into this over the coming months and see how things turn out. I foresee Raul getting quite vexed over some absolutely bizarre cravings... :V
     
  19. Darko

    Darko Well worn.

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    And Komand'r is already crazy, even without the pregnancy.

    I doubt she cares if she breaks the property of others or angers them.

    No, no.

    This version may not have tortured her sister like her pre Flashpoint self did, but it's better to not let such tendencies come out.

    'Legitimate reasons' isn't really a word that can be applied to Komand'r, given the things she does and the petty reasons she does them.

    With Komand'r as the kids mother, the second one may be more likely.

    If Kori gets involved however, then the Buddha one may happen.

    Or the kid may be one of those that grows up to be a kind person, even though his parents weren't quite so kind.

    I already said it.

    And I know you want to say it too.

    That's putting it mildly.

    Ehh, given what we've seen of Tamaranean eating habits in canon, he probably won't be so weirded out.
     
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    Senevri Know what you're doing yet?

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    Forgot what forum we're in, did you?
     
  21. Darko

    Darko Well worn.

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    I think you can only post smut on the NSFW side.

    And seeing as this isn't the NSFW side, they might mind.
     
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    Doccer Know what you're doing yet?

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    Are these possibly from the whole Trigon thing or the red Enlightenment?
    I forget if it was a Red Lantern thing.
     
  23. Darko

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    The horns appeared during one of the Crisis episodes, so it was before enlightenment and Trigon.

    Either it's some kind of battle state the ring gives its wielder, or Raul just likes doing it for some reason.

    It may be his inner chuuni.
     
  24. Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    By definition, outer chuuni.
     
  25. Darko

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    Pedantic as always, Zoat.
     
  26. inglorius

    inglorius Making the rounds.

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    This word is suspicious. Is he trying to not get punched or actually engaging in handholding debauchery? But red guy is not the one with psychic powers.
     
  27. The Unaligned Player

    The Unaligned Player A blank Page for any role you need

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    Thankfully for Big Raul and Komand'r’ssake she will be strong enough to exist with Love.
     
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    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    Thank you, corrected.
     
  29. Stsword

    Stsword I trust you know where the happy button is?

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    Maybe?

    Although if you are right there, then it's not me forgetting the incident in the story, but rather a case of me forgetting my initial response to it.
     
  30. Handlewithcare

    Handlewithcare I trust you know where the happy button is?

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    By human standards a relationship based on so much rage and destruction would be considered unhealthy.

    Eh, whatever.

    This is the first Paul we see to have a bio child, right? I wonder how that will turn out, with his original soulles status and technically extra-dimensional genes
     
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