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With This Ring (Young Justice SI) (Thread Fourteen)

Discussion in 'Creative Writing' started by Mr Zoat, Jan 27, 2019.

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  1. Ganurath

    Ganurath Apologizes For Nothing

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    Wasn't there also supposed to be a Violet Paul in the all female setting?
     
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  2. Wheenesss

    Wheenesss I trust you know where the happy button is?

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    That was gag omake not made by Zoat, IIRC.
     
  3. Pinklestia

    Pinklestia Versed in the lewd.

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    The Black Light Paul is gonna be trouble.
     
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    Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    28th June 2007
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    "You're out of uniform, recruit!"

    Locating Lantern Kilowog's class was easy. Hardly any of Oa was inhabited, so it was just a matter of scanning for Lanterns anywhere other than the Citadel or its immediate surroundings. Gardner's description of him hadn't ever really conveyed his bulk.

    She raises her eyebrows slightly.

    "I assumed that the uniform selection was a training exercise. With sufficient willpower power rings will generate just about anything."

    Or not generate something, because you're perfectly happy with the clothes you're wearing. Though she realised after reviewing Kilowog's students that their various uniforms are all lacking an actual Lantern Corps insignia, each having some variation on a white circle where one should be. She's just copied Alan and used a picture of a carriage lantern.

    Kilowog regards her for a moment.

    "You figure that out all by yourself, recruit?"

    "No, I've had two years' training from a man who's been a Green Lantern for over sixty years. The only reason I came to Oa at all was so that my ring would stop nagging me about it."

    "What Sector-? Two Eight One Four? That's Jordan and Gardner. They're not veterans."

    "No, but Green Lantern Alan Scott-" The construct of her mentor appears in front of him. "-is."

    Kilowog's eyes glow faintly, his ring presumably updating him on the situation on Earth.

    "No one called 'Alan Scott' has ever been part of the Green Lantern Corps."

    "If you don't bother keeping track of who gets your rings, you shouldn't be surprised when their names aren't in your database. I've worked hard to impress him."

    "If you wanna pass my class, poozer, you should work on impressing me."

    "But if I don’t want to pass your class -and I don't- then I don't have to impress you."

    Kilowog shrugs. "Sure, you can quit. All you gotta do is hand in your ring."

    She shakes her head. "I know perfectly well this class isn't compulsory."

    "Ah…" One of the other recruits, an alien from a species who resemble naga, nervously raises his upper right arm. "This isn't compulsory?"

    Kilowog's jaw tenses in obvious irritation. "Not if you don't mind dyin' real early."

    Jade senses weakness. Kilowog must have access to her logs and reports, which means that he already knows that she's competent at the very least. He can't have his authority undermined in front of his class, but has no way to know precisely how capable she is. Her ring has already told her that he's a veteran. Beating him might be difficult, but the Green Lantern Corps wouldn't expect a Sector Lantern to be able to reliably beat a member of their Honour Guard anyway.

    On the other hand, if they don't know what Earth is like…

    She smiles, challengingly. "No. The closest thing Jordan got to lessons was a few months following Sinestro around after he'd already had his ring for over a year. I honestly thought that Gardner got singled out for special treatment."

    Gardner hasn't woken up from his coma yet, though the rest of his injuries are well on their way to mending. She remembers that he told her that he'd been trained by Lantern Kilowog, and appeared to genuinely respect him. Mocking him-.

    There's a slight movement in Kilowog's jaw which her ring's body language analysis program tells her is a sign of irritation amongst his species. Excellent.

    "Hal took part in some of my lessons but frankly I wasn't impressed."

    "Not impressed, huh?"

    "Only a fraction of the inhabited worlds in my Sector have faster than light communications. I spent most of the last month transporting panic buttons to planetary capitals, something which he'd never bothered to do. There aren't any extraplanetary extradition agreements, no agreements on what legal power Green Lanterns actually have while on any particular world and he hadn't even introduced himself to more than half of them. Not that Gardner did any better."

    Kilowog leans back, cracking his neck first to the left and then to the right.

    "All right Green Lantern. You trying to convince me that you're ready?"

    "If I have to."

    "One test for you. You ready?"

    She doesn't nod. She keeps staring him in the eyes, her ring analysing his features and microexpressions for a clue as to what he's about to do.

    He floats back slightly, then raises his right arm and generates a fortified wall construct. It's huge, easily a mile tall and three wide, the construct designed to look like solid metal emblazoned with the Green Lantern Corps' symbol.

    "Break my wall, rookie."

    She doesn't believe that she can power through a construct created by a member of the Honour Guard. On the other hand, she's always found it easier to focus on active constructs than passive ones. If this is the whole of the test-.

    Much as she hated him, her time with her father left her instinctively suspicious. And unlike Alan, she doesn't know Lantern Kilowog well enough to suspend that instinct.

    Something is going to happen. But the wall still needs to come down.

    She doesn't move her hands, but a giant drill construct forms in front of her, rotates at steadily increasing speed until it's a conical blur and then slams into the wall.

    Kilowog regards the attack with apparent disinterest as his construct shakes very slightly, tiny flecks of green flaking off the impact point and evaporating. But she's watching closely. Closely enough to spot the iridescent green line dropping down to ground level and creeping towards her. Splitting concentration like that is hard for a Green Lantern; she can do it, but it generally results in unacceptably weak constructs. Multipurpose constructs are generally superior, but she understands why he's doing this. It demonstrates a level skill most of the recent recruits can't hope to duplicate, while simultaneously putting her in her place. And then she'd be ordered to fall in line.

    Unless she actually did break through the wall, but while she's making some progress it isn't going to fall to a construct-attack any time soon.

    And then the green strand leaps up from below, wrapping around her as Kilowog grins-.

    And then the holographic projection fails in a shimmer of grey-blue. Kilowog starts, his grappling construct fading as he loses focus. Her ring floats free in the air for a moment and then flies back towards her actual body. Her armour's stealth system disengages as she flies forward, letting the ring land on her right ring finger as she slams the crumbler gauntlet mounted on her right arm into Kilowog's wall!

    It doesn't fall apart, not completely. That by itself makes her momentarily consider applying for some sort of advanced class, because she's never been able to hold a construct together against a crumbler attack. If they even offer advanced classes. But a hole about ten feet in diameter has evaporated into green vapour, and she's easily able to fly through it.

    And then she folds her arms across her cuirass and waits silently in front of Lantern Kilowog.

    "Huhm."

    He flexes the fingers of his right hand, dismissing the great wall construct. She suspects that he wants to call that cheating, but sour grapes now would destroy his credibility. Grudgingly, he nods.

    "You thought I was going to try something before you got here."

    "I had an interesting childhood."

    "I know your species; at sixteen you're still a child-."

    "Are we done here?"

    "You got through, you pass the cla-."

    The universe cracks, the sky turns red and for a brief moment she sees a vast tuning fork, a red crystal floating between the tines, a hundred copies of her bound to one and a hundred copies of a man she's never met bound to the other.

    She raises a shield-.

    "Acquisition successful."

    And then she sees nothing.
     
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  5. Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    No.
    No.
    Buffy can be talked down if her initial instinctive heart-stake doesn't work.
     
  6. DrThoth

    DrThoth Know what you're doing yet?

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    Is this a cliffhanger or the plot of the next episode? Because I don't know how long I can wait if it's the former. I'm also not sure who the man is- presumably iterations of the SI, but also possibly John Dee or the man who did the multiple lives thing in the first place? It's been a long time since the segment with Red Queen Jade so I'll have to refresh my memory.
     
  7. thebishop8

    thebishop8 Umm, ackchyually...

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    The one chapter with Red Queen Jade is here: https://forum.questionablequesting....stice-si-story-only.8961/page-65#post-2686073

    She's doing something with Time Trapper Paul, but we don't know much about it or anything else.
     
  8. Handlewithcare

    Handlewithcare Not too sore, are you?

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    I have no idea what's going on.

    But it's fun.
     
  9. Ardy

    Ardy Know what you're doing yet?

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    I knew this was going to turn into a harem fic the second we switched to QQ!
     
  10. Chojin Patriarch

    Chojin Patriarch Veteran Lurker, Rookie Proofreader

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    And nearly two months late reporting for training. She's been busy, I bet.

    I suspect Alan would have vetoed the last of those costumes. Also, that thing must feel like having her backside flossed... The power armor, however...

    Oh, this is going to be fun. Drill sergeant nasty vs pro-trained sneaky ...

    Heh, Guardians really should have confirmed his position.

    Ah, they would be obstinate about it, I expect.

    Loophole abuse. Gotta love it.

    Only if you're not familiar with Ring use, anyway.

    Oh, are they in for a surprise. And we are in for a treat!

    And Jordan probably only got that because Sinestro or Saalak noticed he hadn't attended Basic.

    Given previous versions of his basic training (like the Movie version) I would not be surprised.

    Ah, I was right, she's been busy. And taking the job seriously, by the looks of it.

    I doubt his disapproval would mean much to her, beyond the Guardians recalling her ring.

    Size isn't everything, you know. It's about how you use it.

    Good idea, Kilowog's kind of sneaky when he wants to be. He just tends to favor brute force, so much so 'his ring is the only one to make a noise' as Jordan put it in Green Lantern Rebirth.

    Playing the dumb rookie move. Nice dissembling.

    Not the micrometer-wide filaments OL favours, though. He isn't that good.

    And that would have been the KO.. if she'd been a rookie.

    Like OL, she's thought about how to use Villain tech, I see. Does she also use Cold guns?

    Nice. Making a statement without a single word. I hope the rookies were paying attention. More likely they're just standing there with jaws (or equivalent) dropped.

    Yeah, he's no idiot. Wouldn't be Honour Guard if he was...

    Heh, this is taking her away from her sector. Though besides Earth, I suspect things are reasonably quiet.

    Buh?! What? What? What the Fuu-...

    Oh, I hope that cliffhanger gets picked up on later. And now I find myself wondering, who's wielding that device...
     
  11. Lucidum

    Lucidum Verifiably Bored

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    I'm not sure which way is up anymore after recent chapters, but I do know one thing. Paul or one of his iterations will eventually make everything worse better.
     
  12. thebishop8

    thebishop8 Umm, ackchyually...

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    I just noticed this in the table of contents:
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  13. Twilight666

    Twilight666 Not too sore, are you?

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    yeeeeaaah, we are closing in to this year's (2011) April 1st episode: Grayven does Equestria
     
  14. thebishop8

    thebishop8 Umm, ackchyually...

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    January of 2012 took 5-6 episodes. We're 6 episodes into February and we're only on the 18th. Expecting to get from February 18th to April 1st in 3-4 episodes seems like a very generous estimate. Not that I take the table of contents as solid proof of anything.
     
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  15. Grimnar

    Grimnar Versed in the lewd.

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    I'm just going to come out and say it... Zoat has a real tone problems. If it didn't tell me it was Jade in story, I would have thought it was OL. Everyone is precisely articulate, and they take efficent actions and it all feels very... samey. Where did the crumbler tech come from? I can buy the decoy, but that? It just smacks of sameness.

    Across dozen of characters nearly everyone has the same style of explanatory talking that I can't quite place, but it's just... samey. They sound and act the same. The only noticable differences is when someone speaks with an accent, but they still have the same underlying syntax, verbal idiosyncrasies aside.
     
  16. Ganurath

    Ganurath Apologizes For Nothing

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    This being the suspicious absence of Episodes 92 and 93?
     
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  17. Z3r0Sama

    Z3r0Sama Getting out there.

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    Oh shush. Anything for some moar o dat delicious Gravy.
     
  18. Sceptic

    Sceptic Critical Irrationalist

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    Time to speculate on what "Bended" might mean?
    Debbie Does Dallas, Grayven Does Equestria.

    Giggity.
     
  19. Sockmonkey

    Sockmonkey Know what you're doing yet?

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    Eh, I think it's that when you aren't actively implementing a speaking style, characters tend to default to sounding like the writer. In this case they sound a teensy bit British, which sticks out a bit to Americans, so it overshadows the rest of the speech patterns. The characters who are actually British sound like different people just fine.
     
  20. iamnuff

    iamnuff Connoisseur.

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    So where did this jade get crumble-tech from? She meet a version of OL?
     
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  21. Sceptic

    Sceptic Critical Irrationalist

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    Presumably Alexander Tuttle. It is the glove version, after all.
     
  22. iamnuff

    iamnuff Connoisseur.

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    Isn't he a bit too crazy to cooperate, and his tech only became noteworthy because OL went around stealing from all villains he knew of? Unless jade did the same thing, that Paul did.
     
  23. Mquz

    Mquz Versed in the lewd.

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    Jade would know quite a few villains through her dad.
     
  24. Mordart

    Mordart Getting out there.

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    I get the feeling Time-Trapper Paul and Dream!Jade are picking up all there alternate selves in order to combine the timelines into a single mass, thus making the TTPaul timeline the only one.

    Only they undoubtedly didn't account for P!Paul ability to, you know, subsume a piece of the Anti-monitors armor. or Grayven!Paul discovering the secret to becoming a damn New God. So expect that in.... oh 4-5 years mayhaps a "Crisis of Infinite Pauls" will occur. Though by that time I hope Zoat reverts to his earlier writing style. Hope springs eternal, like my hair regrowing.
     
  25. NightmareWarden

    NightmareWarden Know what you're doing yet?

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    Hmm. Was Jade on Oa long enough to recite her oath in front of the battery, empowering her lantern? I'm just a bit worried she'll be stuck with a single ring charge to combat the shenanigans ahead.

    Everyone's in agreement that Teekl is responsible for the disappearing Paul's, right? :p
     
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    Belenus Know what you're doing yet?

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    Obviously it's the Futurama crossover episode.
     
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  27. Jirachi

    Jirachi Not too sore, are you?

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    ...Are you doing an infinite crisis?
    It certainly looks like it.
    Thought we dodged that with destroying the armor, but it'll probably make more sense in time.
    Green!Jade is definitely fun...
     
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  28. Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    Of course he didn't coooperate. But due to Jordan's relationship with Alan she got access to his mission records.
    No, and it doesn't do that.
     
  29. Albert Scoot

    Albert Scoot Know what you're doing yet?

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    Yes, I'd assume she's been cribbing all of the villains' and heroes' weapons or at least tried to. Like she gleaned from Kilowog, these lanterns don't know Earth.
     
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    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    Somewhat. She only knows some villains socially. Plenty are too crazy or too iconoclastic to form the sort of relationship where Sportsmaster would introduce his teenage daughter to them. Mostly, she gets her gear from the Justice League's collection or Alan's trophy cabinet.
     
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