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With This Ring (Young Justice SI) (Thread Fourteen)

Discussion in 'Creative Writing' started by Mr Zoat, Jan 27, 2019.

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  1. Darko

    Darko Versed in the lewd.

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    In fairness to Manga while Paul is attractive his personality may sometimes leave some things to be desired.

    Also is anyone getting any Kochin and Dr Wheelo vibes with how things are going to go.

    The Abridged versions I mean, with Kochin being made as a hilariously senile lunatic who constantly makes things worse.

    I predict that Paul is going to try to convince Manga to try and reason only for the sapient gas cloud to misinterpret every word and do something worse.
     
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  2. Pinklestia

    Pinklestia Experienced.

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    While funny, Oh El understands Greed.

    And the guy is hilariously easy to convince of things, to the point a salesman from the eighties who is a loser can Con him.
     
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  3. Darko

    Darko Versed in the lewd.

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    Maybe, but that doesn't leave out the chance that shenanigans can ensue.

    Paul understands greed, but I don't think he's ever dealt with anyone quite as hammy as Khan here, usually he just kills them.
     
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  4. WereDragon

    WereDragon Bookwyrm

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    …so the nutter is losing his Ring right? And possibly his corporeal form?
    This is not the sort of entity a multi-national peacekeeping force can tolerate within their organisation.

    Unlikely, Dox is supposed to be intelligent. OL is very much the sort of person who will tolerate a lot, but once they reach their limit there is no such thing as a measured response.
    Also antagonising someone who must actively work to not accidentally overthrow you is a very poor idea.
     
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  5. Darko

    Darko Versed in the lewd.

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    You're probably right and Dox does have a good reason for sending Khan there.

    Still that doesn't mean he isn't enjoying OL's current problems.
     
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  6. Gantradies

    Gantradies Not too sore, are you?

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    Yeah- if he ever catches wind of that one, he’ll blow a GASket

    ...:. sorry. I know that probably left a Foul taste in the air- I , I mean your mouth- been fighting the urge to pun for days t-t
     
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  7. Handlewithcare

    Handlewithcare I trust you know where the happy button is?

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    I love him.

    Khan I mean.

    His enthusiasm is hilarious, you write "funny" quite well Zoat.

    Also, going by his employer management...systems I can already see a way for earth to defeat him: HR requirements as part ofe every contract.

    Kill them with (contractually enforced) kindness and all that.
     
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  8. nobodez

    nobodez Bringer of Context

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    Well, since nobody's done the important part of this joke, I'll do it.


    Xelloss got the day of the week right, though I do wish Mr. Zoat had set this episode on the 3rd or 10th, to properly get the reference right.
     
  9. Darko

    Darko Versed in the lewd.

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    Zoat is Devlos Ungol going to show up in the renegade storyline?

    Is the renegades final relationship going to be with Luna, seeing as things with Blackfire didn't work out because of incompatibility with her adopting a more violent method than the renegade and Supergirl doesn't trust him enough?
     
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  10. Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    Yes, but not for a while as the Renegade isn't looking for him.
    I have no idea.
     
  11. Steelplaza

    Steelplaza Custom Title

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    In the comics, L-Ron ends up joining the Justice League. Seriously.

    These guys are great; I'm grinning so much at Mr Zoat for taking them out of their late-eighties/early-nineties toybox and blowing the dust off. I don't know if we'll see the Scarlet Skier, though. He might be too silly for even Zoat to touch.
     
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  12. Darko

    Darko Versed in the lewd.

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    Maybe after all this is over L-Ron will take over ClusterCorp and start a business relationship with Earth, but in a more reasonable way than Manga.

    He could sell advanced tech and other equipment to the League.
     
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  13. DrThoth

    DrThoth Not too sore, are you?

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    I'm a bit disappointed he and Blackfire didn't work out, it would have been a nice thematic parallel to Paragon's cooling relationship with her, and a reversal of their relationships with the Jades. Though I'd be happy with any of my Paul/Constantine crack-ships being a thing, especially after the wonder of King Shark/Constantine in the most recent DC Animated Movie (even if I'm not a fan of any of the recent stuff).

    In terms of the update, hopefully the Green Lanterns or Paragon can deal with these outsourced extraterrestrial mercenary groups that some places on Earth apparently hired.

    All this galactic stuff is really straining my credulity on the Kroloteans and Rimbor stuff happening five years later, even if it is a big galaxy/universe. I feel like things should be accelerated to some degree thanks to all that's changed due to Paragon's exploits.

    Actually the Renegade should already know about all of the above after taking over the Light, but I don't think that's come up in-story? I just recall Mr Zoat saying he'd pay off the fine, but that was a hypothetical and not something that's actually happened yet, as far as I'm aware.
     
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  14. Darko

    Darko Versed in the lewd.

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    Good point about Rimbor.

    The best explanation for that is that it's extremely isolated or the Light may be blocking the rest of the universe from discovering about it.

    In Life Ore Death they had the help of Apokalyps in doing that.

    The Green Lanterns may not be able to do much if the mercs follow the letter of the law.

    Remember they're just ordinary cops in the Corps and have to follow the rules.

    OL on the other hand is a different matter.

    Provided he can be bothered to do something.

    Now I have to ask a genuine question.

    Does anyone think Constantine started a relationship with a shark graft when he went to Atlantis and is now crashing at their place?
     
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  15. RichardWhereat

    RichardWhereat Aia airëa Fëanáro.

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    Video doesn't work here, what is the important part of the joke?
     
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  16. DrThoth

    DrThoth Not too sore, are you?

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    We haven't seen anything to contradict this so far, so I'm onboard (pun intended) for this being true until proven otherwise.
     
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  17. Chaoswind

    Chaoswind Lord of nonsense

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    Renegade attacked before the light could sent the league to wreck shit, in the Paragon they were sent, but I think it was a few hours less than young justice Canon.
     
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  18. Coda

    Coda Not too sore, are you?

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    It's just a clip of the movie (Street Fighter (1994)) that's the source of that line.
     
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  19. RichardWhereat

    RichardWhereat Aia airëa Fëanáro.

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    I didn't think that was an obscure reference. My age, it burns.
     
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  20. Gantradies

    Gantradies Not too sore, are you?

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    ... if OL’s able to manage this well, this could be exactly what he needs to light a fire under the entire planet’s ass-A wake-up call that forces the breaking of the status quo similar to klarion’s child-mass murder spree

    earth is outright lucky that this is -only- A (relatively restrained- obnoxious or not he hasn’t opened fire!) commodore perry-style attempt to forcibly open trade- they could be facing what earth got slapped with in Troy Rising (one of Ringo’s books)After spending years ignoring the unregulated/restricted wormgate built by a third party in sol’s outskirts, Getting extorted into paying the Danegeld under threat of resumed kinetic strikes against population centres, coupled with being used as a testing ground for Biowar agents...

    they’ve known about the existence of alien interstellar powers for decades, and they’ve left the planet/high orbitals prettymuch undefended aside from a literal handful of individuals, almost all unwilling or incapable of using lethal force in a invasion scenario....
     
  21. DrThoth

    DrThoth Not too sore, are you?

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    I think I knew that but keep forgetting, thank you.

    I remember now that Mongul showed up in season 2 as a consequence of the League being put on galactic trial, but I wonder if he'll show up earlier, either on Earth or some other place we've seen in-story, searching for the person responsible for the loss of his Black Mercy plants.
     
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  22. Gantradies

    Gantradies Not too sore, are you?

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    .... you know, if Comic King has the business savvy to be persuaded/nudged into considering setting up a SHIPYARD for relatively simple, civilian-grade craft in orbit or slightly in/out system, assuming he’d be carrying the materials/equipment (or be able to acquire them), he could rake it in hand over fist In a manner that would strengthen the local economy in the mid-long term rather then destabilise it-

    running/renting access to the sol-system’s first commercial shipbuilding yard would...

    itd be expensive and time-consuming at first,And the initial market would likely be limited to skywatch/small patrol craft and a smattering of asteroid mining/survey designs due to the lack of offworld presence/ventures at start but the potential long-term profit if he maintains ownership/a controlling interest would be massive-Especially since it’d give him easy access to the constant stream of bizarre/potentially paradigm-shifting technology that is constantly showing up on earth-both for export designs AND smaller-scale products...
    I mean,
    the applications for cooling/heat management Improvements alone from snart’s technology, given how much of a problem thermal management is with “normal” tech....... and I’m positive that that literally-perfict Conductor the magitech guys are working on could turn more then a few heads.....

    the sort of thing you could build a genuinely huge, galaxy-spanning business empire off...... and building your craft outside of the gravity well (assuming access to the asteroid belts/offworld resourcing) would potentially let the paragon timeline’s space industry leapfrog past Renegade-Luthor’s fleet-in-progress in the mid-long term- IF the pollies of various Un nations are willing to be reasonable....
     
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  23. Cuchulin

    Cuchulin I trust you know where the happy button is?

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    Simply setting up a business that lets Earthlings visit the rest of the solar system via smallish automated ships that cycle back and forth would be great business as then people like Bruce Wayne or Lex Luthor could set up mines on Mercury or in the Asteroid belt and potentially sell vacations to Mars.
     
  24. Mquz

    Mquz Versed in the lewd.

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    No, L-Ron is Completely and totally not related to Hubbard in any way shape or form, And has no resemblance tot the latter, particularly since Scientology is a horrifying religion that is known to sue anyone misappropriating their trademarks... except that he totally is.
     
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  25. thebishop8

    thebishop8 Umm, ackchyually...

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    The Renegade is going to keep the piece of the Anti-Monitor, isn't he?

    Destroying or keeping the Anti-Monitor fragment seems very much like a typical Paragon/Renegade choice, at least.
     
  26. Darko

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    Even he isn't that reckless.

    Probably.

    He might keep some of the armor Devlos wore, like Paragon is doing.
     
  27. Vaermina

    Vaermina Versed in the lewd.

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    By the time the Renegade finds it it's unlikely that will just be a piece of the Anti Monitor.
     
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    Gantradies Not too sore, are you?

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    i could see that paying massive dividends over time- as a standalone project or in conjunction with something like my suggestion!

    set up a 'yard in a more optimal location then in Earth orbit regarding material/fuel availability (closer to, say, either the asteroid belt, or one of the gas planet's if you're doing fuel/resource extraction there), and fund a moderately-priced transport system- both intrasystem in general, and providing competitively-priced access to a yard/any other major facilities that spring up-as long as the pricing model for the service, wither its a shuttle-bus style or transport rental is favorable compared to building a network from scratch,and the urge to pricegouge is resisted, its the kind of thing that pays and just keeps on paying-

    ...
    .....
    at least, thats what my experience with TTD/OpenTTD tells me, anyway XD
     
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  29. Threadmarks: Low Politics (part 7)
    Mr Zoat

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    7th April
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    "Are you..?" Zatanna looks me over, blushing under her makeup, then averts her eyes. "Are you sure about this?"

    "It was this, or go and work at Taco Whiz for a week with Diana and Kon."

    I straighten my bustier.

    "I've made my choice."

    "Y-es, but I thought-" She fiddles with her helmet. "-you were going to wear your armour again."

    I shake my head. "No, it's too big and bulky." Plus, I don't have the Praexis Demons any more. "Is my hair alright?"

    "Ah… Yes, it's got really nice… Volume?"

    "You know, I used to have long hair. Before I came to this Earth."

    "You did?"

    "Saved a fortune in hair dressing." I shrug, an action which makes my breast sway in a way that I find slightly unsettling. "I assume. I don't really know what they charge on account of never using one."

    A Games Workshop staffer comes into the room, eyes half fixed on his mobile phone. "We're about ready, if yo-" His eyes widen. "-uuuuuuuuuu…"

    I roll my eyes. "It was this or Azazel, and I'm no good at tails and I couldn't move the miniatures with a claw."

    "O-kaaay. Right. You got your-?"

    I take the tray supporting The Blissful Scream out of subspace. I'm not a great modeller and I can't paint for toffee but power ring awesomeness stretched to a fully custom Emperor's Children warband. Plume-helmeted Noise Marines with guitar-shaped sonic blasters, double-guitars for the blastmasters, drop pods which unfold into stages, metalhead cultist mobs for objective camping with a Chaos Lieutenant and Cult Icon Bearer to make sure that they don’t run away and a Sorcerer Lord leading a squad of Terminators all with sonic weapons as roving heavy-hitters.

    And I made this army legal and sort-of competitive when I wrote this edition. Unlike whatever fun-killing git wrote the previous one.

    "Yes, I've got it."

    "Alright. Ah, follow me?"

    I strut after him as we leave the staff area and walk out onto the stage they set up for the demo game. I spent several hours trying to learn to walk in these high-heeled boots, and after getting no help at all from my sensibly-shoed female colleagues turned instead to a drag star of Diana's acquaintance. Zatanna doesn't strut but instead marches, helmet in place and bolter at the ready.

    "…Lantern and Zatanna Zatara!"

    There's clapping, but I don't look much like myself at the moment. I based this appearance on the hermaphroditic 4th edition Daemonettes, combined with Mad Donna. I even bit the metaphorical bullet and added in a dozen or so piercings.

    Raquel was a little too cheerful about helping with that. My right nipple does not like me at the moment.

    I hold my arms out to the side with a saucy grin, and bikini-clad construct 3rd generation daemonettes (the ones which are actually attractive) materialise, taking hold of them to escort me to the gaming table. That gets a bit more of a response, and I note there are a good deal more journalists here than would normally be the case at a gaming convention.

    Zatanna's armour got a little reworking as well. There's a gold sash to mirror her yellow original costume's waistcoat, white paint to create a visual link to her dress blouse and quite a lot of black. She stops in front of the crowd, removes her helmet and mag-locks it to her right pauldron before reaching up with her right hand and pulling her non-regulation hair free.

    Then her face hardens and she spins, her boltgun coming up and pointing right at me. I dive out of the way as a bolt round literally and figuratively rockets into one of my daemonette escorts, lifting hir off hirs feet and then exploding, shattering the construct. A moment later she switches target and destroys the other as I pull myself to my feet and hold out a miniature case as a shield.

    A little laughter, a few woo's, a smattering of applause… And more than half the crowd watching through their camera phones. Such a modern audience. I shrug and toss the case to Zatanna, who is just about able to stow her bolter fast enough to catch it. Then I saunter over to the gaming table.

    The baseball player who… Okay, be fair to him, he is actually a fan, is about a quarter of the way through setting up his green tide Ork army. So we've got about half an hour to wait there unless we all pitch in. The fourth player is an actual tournament winner, and he's brought an Imperial Guard tank company. Which probably means that someone told him to go easy on us, because while tank companies can utterly destroy slow moving armies due to no one taking enough anti-tank in a balanced list for that sort of thing, they die easily enough to deep striking anti-tank or fast assault units. And the lack of anti-tank in balanced lists isn't even an issue here, due to the fact that his team mate has an all-infantry force.

    My guys aren't great against armour. Sure, I've got melta bombs in a few places and enough krak grenades that I should be able to kill them eventually, but most of my force is specialised for anti-infantry work.

    Zatanna's force, on the other hand…

    "Edasurc ecrof, etaidemmi tnemyolped!"

    Frateris Militia artillery is an often overlooked option, and not just because there's no official model for it. Representing a mob of irregulars grabbing any old field gun they can and sticking it on the firing line, it isn't going to threaten most things. Unless you deploy twenty of them to back up the Exorcists you've taken because you know your team needs something that can do more to tanks than stun-lock them with psychic powers.

    See how things go, because it might be more efficient to use their explosive shells rather than their anti-armour shots, given that Frateris Militia have BS2… The original plan was to deploy them at either corner of our deployment zone to ensure that we could enfilade them and hit their side armour from somewhere, but looking at the terrain I don't think that's possible.

    And Zatanna's spell agreed. Clusters of guns with their ablative Frateris Plagas are sited at each point that has a good enough line of sight, while her counter-attack force are in their concealed Rhinos and Immolators well behind them. The Exorcists -being more mobile- are deployed in position to maximise their ability to fire at the Imperial Guard tanks opposite.

    "Nice costume, mate."

    "Costume? Oh honey." I grin with a mouth that no longer complies with human physical limits, and extend a tentacle tongue to lick the air. "I'm going to role-play this entire battle."

    He blinks, then holds up his hands and shakes his head. "Ah, 'kay?"

    "Just ignore the heretic if he annoys you." Zatanna rolls her eyes. "I'll purge him later."

    "Purge me long and hard, sugar plum."

    I lick my lips, the tip of my tongue flicking from left ear to right ear.

    Zatanna gulps.

    "Now. Where to position Slaanesh's most expendable?" All the good vantage points are taken, but really I just need somewhere that won't block the field guns' lines of sight. "Here we are. And…"

    I use my ring to send the radio signal, and the scale replica of a Slaanesh-corrupted Battle Barge drops down from the ceiling and flies over to hover above our table, prompting another round of chatter from the watchers.

    "Drop pods incoming."
     
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    thebishop8 Umm, ackchyually...

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    Change "though" to "thought".
     
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