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With This Ring (Young Justice SI) (Thread Fourteen)

Discussion in 'Creative Writing' started by Mr Zoat, Jan 27, 2019.

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  1. rkyeun

    rkyeun Cabbitus Maximus

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    You're the embodiment of avarice. Wanting it is necessary and sufficient for you to speak with no vocal cords or lips. Rings manage it, so can you.
     
  2. Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    Briefly, but he decided it would be cheating.
     
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  3. Darko

    Darko Experienced.

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    Not sure.

    Maybe he wants to experience school like everyone else and then go on to be a full time superhero.

    I remember he was shown in the A Week in the Life episode where they investigated the place Dream was kept.

     
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  4. Agent Orange

    Agent Orange I trust you know where the happy button is?

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    In the immortal words of Mr Catmanez: "No no. If you cheat and fail, you're a cheater. If you cheat and succeed, you're savvyyy."
     
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  5. Fellow

    Fellow Getting sticky.

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    Does Mr Zoat share his secrets with you or something? You seem to have an encyclopedic knowledge of this fic that is quite impressive
     
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  6. Darko

    Darko Experienced.

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    Thank you, but no I just remembered it.
     
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  7. Lord Ernest

    Lord Ernest At the End...

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    I think Darko also spend a long time asking a bunch of questions about minutiae and details of the fic, so there's that.
     
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  8. Doccer

    Doccer Know what you're doing yet?

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    Ah, she's giving you a hard time and so you are going for broke and going to show her your giant orange snake?
     
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  9. rkyeun

    rkyeun Cabbitus Maximus

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    Yeah, not getting more of those was a mistake. Paul really should just assimilate all of Hell.
     
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  10. Darko

    Darko Experienced.

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    That...may be difficult.

    I also think Paul once said that the reason he didn't assimilate more of them was because he discovered he can be harmed through them by use of demonic magic.

    Yeah I did, but this one I just remembered from reading the chapters.
     
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  11. rkyeun

    rkyeun Cabbitus Maximus

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    [​IMG]
     
  12. Darko

    Darko Experienced.

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    Other people can also use demon magic in this story.
     
  13. Vaermina

    Vaermina Versed in the lewd.

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    He also spends a lot of time just making stuff up, and then when shown to be wrong, declair's very loudly that Zoat doesn't have to listen to that and can do it his way instead.
     
  14. Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    While neither are perfect grammar, both are things it's reasonable for the SI to say.
    That is a reference to the SI's previous line.
     
  15. Lord Ernest

    Lord Ernest At the End...

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    I think what the rabbit meant is that Demon Magic can only be used because Hell exists and Demons exists. If all Demons are assimilated, from where would mortal magic users use demon magic? Only the Illustres, if he assimilated all demons, would be able to use Demon magic.
     
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  16. Darko

    Darko Experienced.

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    Other magic users could just use the magical energy from Hell to use hell/demon magic, without needing to deal with demons.
     
  17. Vaermina

    Vaermina Versed in the lewd.

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    You remember that Hell has Anti-Paul stuff going on right?

    He goes back down there things will likely go really badly for him.
     
  18. Ardy

    Ardy Not too sore, are you?

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    Not if he assimilated Hell too
     
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  19. Darko

    Darko Experienced.

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    I guess if he uses FEED ME on a 1000% he could potentially do it.
     
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  20. Ardy

    Ardy Not too sore, are you?

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    Now you’re thinking with MINE!
     
  21. Darko

    Darko Experienced.

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    Zoat did Paul build a temple for Hades on Tamaran like he did on Karna?

    Tamaran doesn't have a death god, or probably even an afterlife, so it would make sense for him to do it, and I bet the Tamaraneans would be willing to let him do it.

    Introducing Helios to them could also be productive, seeing as he's a sun god, so some of them may become interested in what he has to offer and start worshipping him.

    X'hal doesn't seem to interact with or do anything for the Tamaraneans so they may be interested in a god that does.
     
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  22. Vaermina

    Vaermina Versed in the lewd.

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    The Tamaraneans already have a Goddess...

    Her name is X'Hal.
     
  23. Threadmarks: Faed Away (part 16)
    Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    5th May
    03:13 GMT -5


    Left fist left fist left fist!

    Focusing on keeping my blade from her face, Aurakos can't react as I stop trying for a pin and settle for just punching her in the chest plate. As I somewhat-expected the blows don't do a great deal and my crumbler gauntlet fails to activate, but-.

    "I don't know?"

    She tries to stamp on my bleeding foot but I crouch slightly so that my left knee prevents her hitting her sword. She stamps on the side of the boot instead, which-.

    "Try it!"

    She doesn't break the armour, but a super strength stamp's opposite reaction results in her body jerking upward and my reflexive grab with my left hand results in me going with her. We hit the ceiling together and she brings her feet up to try and push off me. I latch my left hand onto her shoulder to prevent her changing angle, keep my right hand's blade pointing at her face and bend my left leg back-

    DRHHHHHHHHHHHH!

    -which causes her sword to drop out. OOOw!

    "Canis! Catch it!"

    Canis darts forward even as we both fall back towards the cave floor. The sword goes out to the side as Aurakos and I awkwardly wrestle for position, and Canis grabs it and pulls back just before we slam-

    HUGGGGGGGGGHHH!

    -back onto the ground! I land on my right side and Aurakos tries to break my hold to clamber on top of me.

    Ophidian.

    But the weight of this armour against the floor is nothing like enough to stop my arm moving and while she's wrenching at my left hand I stab with the blade on my right! She tries to evade but I still manage to slash under her helmet and cut through the flesh of her neck. I retract-

    A Sheeda maggot stumbles down the stairs, eyes glowing orange as its puppeted by my wraith. Not what I asked for, but-.

    The maggot collapses, and its bloated stomach undulates and writhes.

    -the blade and swing my right arm into the floor. Not a big swing -that just isn't possible from this position- but it's still enough to get me more or less upright while she's awkwardly hanging off me.

    Ophidian.

    The maggot bursts, and a wraith-possessed Spine Rider flies my way while Canis waves his Mother Box at his newly acquired sword.

    Ophidian.

    It's not that I can't feel her. There's definitely something there, but I can't feel anything like the level of responsiveness I usually get from her. Nice that she finds the Corps so enthralling…

    Without her aid, I try to feel Aurakos's connection to the orange light myself. Depending on her level of remote control, there might not be anything other than the direction which Melmoth is providing her. And it's… Working. I see a cage forcing the orange light to move-.

    "Wait." Melmoth's voice sounds uncertain. "What are you?"

    Aurakos copies me, bending her knees and swinging her feet against the wall with enough force to knock us into the middle of the room. Not wanting her to land on top of me I kick out with my right leg, hitting the floor and sending us careening-.

    She grabs my left gauntlet and yanks, finally separating us. I hit the wall near the stairs, drop, then roll onto my f-feet. She lands.. on her hands and handsprings onto her feet nearer the centre of the room.

    Break the Cage.

    The light from her forehead shimmers between sigil-yellow and avarice-orange, causing her to stagger and her eyes to unfocus. I could try charging her down and stabbing her, but that risks her desires aligning with Melmoth's desires, which would undermine my work. Interesting that she's still got significant desires in grundy form. Also interesting that this challenge system thing considers my armour's healing potion dispenser to be equivalent to her regeneration; the wound in her neck is gone with only a small amount of grey blood clinging to her where it once was, while my foot is considerably less painful.

    "Why do you obey your murderer!? Why do you obey the backstabber who murdered your father!?"

    Who do you Want to Kill?

    "Heroic resolve never ceases to be tiresome."

    Aurakos jerks as her sigil glows brilliant-white, the light-

    Wraith, now.

    Yes, Master.

    -shining from her eyes, presumably a sign of Melmoth asserting full control. But as the wraith-possessed Spine Rider lunges for Aurakos's neck, my environmental shield re-engages because apparently she can't use her New God powers while like this.

    Something's happening with her body, her armour shuddering in response to forces I can't see. But that doesn't matter, because my power rings are working again. I form a small construct crumble gauntlet, duke it under her helmet and push it in the direction of Melmoth's sigil.

    The lights from her head go out, and-.

    The armour covering her right arm explodes as the limb within expands to grotesque proportions! The skin has torn in several places, grey blood dripping through the tears and muscles visible beneath! The limb is about eight times its former thickness and-.

    The rest of her body is doing the same, armour failing under the internal pressure as whatever Melmoth just did causes her to grow. If I'm going to.. preserve her, I need to stop this. With the armour gone there isn't anything to stop my ring-based abilities, so-.

    A construct-claw grabs her helmet, severs the straps holding it on her head and pulls it off. The enslaved Spine Rider takes that as its cue to dart in, dodging her expanding shoulders to stab her in the swelling neck.

    "Wraith, cut her brain's connection to the rest of her body."

    Two dozen strands of orange light connect me to her grotesque and mostly naked body as I try feeling the magics being applied to her and feed on them.

    "Master, I do not know that I can."

    "Do your best. Canis, if you can help, do so."

    "Cutting off her arms-."

    "Canis."

    "We heal back mundane injuries. Though I suppose her current.. state may impact that."

    I remove my spell eater and attach it to Aurakos with a construct necklace.

    "Let's not do anything we can't repair. I meant New God abilities."

    "Are you.. giving her to me? I did not think-."

    "Canis, less… Less Apokolips. Alright? We're trying to help her."

    "Then we should destroy her. Being twisted into something other than what we are is a most supreme torture for a New God." He comes a little closer, looking at the twitching abomination before us with… Actual distaste rather than the fascination he usually shows in situations like this. "I think that is what New Genesis would do."

    "If she wants to destroy herself once she's back in her right mind, she can. First, we try and help her."
     
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  24. BR549

    BR549 This is filth! FILTH!!

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    WWNGD?

    Something Canis has likely never asked himself before.
     
  25. Prince Charon

    Prince Charon Just zis guy, you know?

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    Reasonable.
     
  26. Ngamer11

    Ngamer11 I trust you know where the happy button is?

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    Nice. Melmoth lost his secret weapon and Paul might gain a useful ally/tool, assuming she doesn't destroy herself later. Are we going to see Paul use his Avarice flavored Godspeech more in the future?
     
  27. Darko

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    Maybe remove the -

    Careful, she may decide to leave you for someone else, like Ragnar.

    Women love a man that likes to fight and has a name that sounds vaguely viking like.

    Maybe 'near the center'

    New Gods can regrow lost limbs without medical assistance?

    Maybe 'looking at'

    To be fair they probably do that to Apokaliptians and turning an Apokaliptian into something that isn't an Apokaliptian is probably one of the most noble things you could do.

    Zoat did Paul build a temple for Hades on Tamaran like he did on Karna?

    Tamaran doesn't have a death god, or probably even an afterlife, so it would make sense for him to do it, and I bet the Tamaraneans would be willing to let him do it, seeing as he basically freed them and killed their enemies.

    Introducing Helios to them could also be productive, seeing as he's a sun god, so some of them may become interested in what he has to offer and start worshipping him.

    He can certainly offer more to a race like Tamaraneans than he can offer to humans, seeing as they absorb sunlight for their powers.

    X'hal doesn't seem to interact with or do anything for the Tamaraneans so they may be interested in a god that does interact with them and do things for them, and they can also potentially get an afterlife to go to after they die.

    Maybe 'if I can'

    Good news for your SI.

    In the part 5 chapter of Deadly dealings of It's an Unliving the SI in it now has what will most likely be a worse relationship with his version of Melinoe than your SI and his version of Melinoe, and it all happened a few minutes after meeting her.

    edit:Just read the part 6 that was released an hour ago and I may have been wrong.
     
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  28. BlueMangoAdea

    BlueMangoAdea Alive. For now.

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    It's complicated.
    Hype!
    That's fortunate. You should take out one of your rings, just in case.
    Orange italics text is fully acting as OL's equivalent of Godspeech, apparently.
    XD Canis is trying his best.
    Because that's what heroes do.
     
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  29. Darko

    Darko Experienced.

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    In the words of Kite Man.

    "Hell yeah!'

    Yep, pretty much.

    It's adorable when he tries it.
     
  30. Z000

    Z000 If this is trash, then find me in the dumpster

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    the fact that he trying say alot

    Earth have finally gotten to him

    he growing some amount of brain from exposure to all the sheer weekly bullshit
     
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