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With This Ring (Young Justice SI) (Thread Fourteen)

Discussion in 'Creative Writing' started by Mr Zoat, Jan 27, 2019.

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  1. Silverias

    Silverias Know what you're doing yet?

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    Yeah...that was BLATANTLY suspicious and OL is acting REALLY dense, especially in the face of suspicious suicides.
     
  2. The Vale

    The Vale Know what you're doing yet?

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    Sure, but as an investigator he has the equivalent of a witness/record of the deceased and didn't ask any kind of relevant question.
     
  3. Mastigos2

    Mastigos2 Versed in the lewd.

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    except of course the fact that this has been going on longer than the dude (or at least the presented body) has been alive
     
  4. Handlewithcare

    Handlewithcare Versed in the lewd.

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    Ardy's right, it's pretty obvious: he shows people, deliberately or not, what they are suppressing and the alread stressed young people can't handle it.
     
  5. iamnuff

    iamnuff Connoisseur.

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    Bodyhopping or it's a family business.

    There's no excuse not to make the connection and look into this dude, but then maybe Paul is just trying to get away from the telepath before talking with the rest of the team about this guy.
     
  6. Sceptic

    Sceptic Critical Irrationalist

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    I blame the parents.
    Consciousness.
     
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  7. Chojin Patriarch

    Chojin Patriarch Veteran Lurker

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    Doable solo, but seriously, not easy to manage. Instant yellow flag there.

    Yeah, movies may not show it much, but a shotgun blast to the chest would hurt. And unless he managed to hit the heart close to square (not easy because of the bones arrayed to protect it) it would be slow, painful and scary bleeding out... That's a red flag.

    Not unless there was something very hinky keeping the soul around...

    Jeez, show some effort, girl. I know your angelic half isn't happy about the suicide stuff, but seriously.

    Oh, that isn't creepy at all, nosiree. Danger alarm should be on Yellow alert at minimum.
    Correction: 'and I feel'

    To avoid the obvious mismatch of words and mouthflaps, I take it? Kind of hard to be covert when you look like a badly dubbed anime.

    Red alert! Creepy kid who flat out admits he's probing your mind? Big red flag!

    Oh, we got a live one here, folks... Seriously, OL...

    o/~ "I'm just a teenage dirtbag, baby..."

    And he has no passive shields of any kind? No way not to see all the dirty little parts of human thought? Oh, he's gonna be right round the bend...

    So far around the bend he's tied into knots... I think we got a prime suspect here.

    And apparently still human enough to care about good grades. Probably because he gets praised for it...

    Don't rule out restraint, at least...

    I suppose that's one way to describe the process of gaining an Emotional Enlightenment...

    No! No, no, no! Bad idea! Especially if he Wants it that badly...

    There are not enough Facepalm emotes. Have you learned nothing, OL?!

    Oh, gods... I think he's just made you his new best friend, OL. You do not want that.

    If he wasn't underage, I'd ask if he wanted a cigarette. Ew.

    At least put some kind of trace on him, man! How can you not pick up that he's almost certainly involved?:eek:

    Seriously! What? I know he might not seem all that threatening, but ... What?

    Okay... Calming down. I sure as hell hope OL doesn't just ignore him. Even Bizarro could tell this kid is significant...
     
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  8. Prince Charon

    Prince Charon Just zis guy, you know?

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    Does Nigel have some kind of anti-suspicion field?
     
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  9. Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    Thank you, corrected.
    I don't think so. Why?
    Thank you, corrected.
     
  10. Nugar

    Nugar Not too sore, are you?

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    My best friend from high school killed himself with a shotgun like that. He was paralyzed from mid chest down from a wreck and generally pretty depressed anyway. He used one of his reachy squeezy claw grabber sticks to push the trigger away from him. Humans are a tool using species after all.
     
  11. Prince Charon

    Prince Charon Just zis guy, you know?

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    ... that needs a Hugs rating.
     
  12. Khettien

    Khettien Perpetually confused

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  13. Pinklestia

    Pinklestia Well worn.

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    Yeah... there is a reason why I am only still reading due to the Grayven chapters
     
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  14. Prince Charon

    Prince Charon Just zis guy, you know?

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  15. Sceptic

    Sceptic Critical Irrationalist

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    Or Zoat missed a word or two and it's Paul's conscious rabbit. But that would be a little weird given that we haven't seen a Chekhov's rabbit earlier in the episode.
     
  16. Ngamer11

    Ngamer11 Experienced.

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    After this is all over and they realize that kid is part of the problem, I hope Batman gives lessons on how to be suspicious of everyone while on a mission.
     
  17. Stsword

    Stsword Versed in the lewd.

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    If Zoat is keeping with the comic book
    The Sheeda Circus of Maggots crashed there, awaiting the opportunity to metamorphose into Spineriders. Whether he was a latent telepath to begin with, or if the Sheeda can just grant telepathy is unclear, but he's a symptom, not the cause.
     
  18. DAT_NOOB

    DAT_NOOB Accused of writing in a far away land

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    Doesn't paul have genre awareness?
     
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  19. Buggy123

    Buggy123 I trust you know where the happy button is?

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    Okay while admittedly a telepath coming by someones grave and explaining why that person killed themselves is a tad suspicious, he's nowhere near old enough to be the cause.

    And if he was some sort of ancient telepath in the shape of a kid, there's no particular external indicators and there's two sorcerers and a empath looking right at him.
     
  20. PrinceJonathan

    PrinceJonathan Versed in the lewd.

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    He can't see the low resolution forest for the high definition trees.
     
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  21. farsan

    farsan Ambulant Reader

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    I feel that the two things are related. What if they are killing themselves because something is eating the fear of death and pain?

     
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  22. Huttj509

    Huttj509 Getting sticky.

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    Agreed.

    A) Kid's too young to be the ultimate cause.
    B) He's not an *imminent* threat to people. The suicides are a low level background increase. It's not like the kid needs to be immediately put into a telepathic Faraday cage.
    C) Jumping the gun without prep could set the kid into panic mode. Also, since this is a training mission, it's *really* worthwhile to discuss plans unless there's an *imminent* threat.

    I will be very surprised if next episode is "well, that kid was weird, I'll see about a tutor or something and he will never be mentioned again."
     
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  23. Handlewithcare

    Handlewithcare Versed in the lewd.

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    Wait, he was in OLs head. What if he literally does?
     
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  24. Ace Dreamer

    Ace Dreamer Questioning The Nature of our Realities

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    From memory, in a number of European/Continental languages the word for 'conscience' and 'conscious' is the same, due to historical development of ideas about the mind. This little detail can really trip people up, when English is not their first language...
     
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  25. Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    But it's a song lyric. I even linked to the song.
     
  26. hkim

    hkim Know what you're doing yet?

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    All this time posting web serials and you still expect that people read what you actually wrote instead of trying to cram their headcanon in? For Pete's sake, Mr. Zoat, this is a thread that Vaermina posts in.
     
  27. ForeverShogo

    ForeverShogo Not too sore, are you?

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    Maybe that kid used a sawed off shotgun to pull it off?
     
  28. fappingtoyourpost

    fappingtoyourpost Know what you're doing yet?

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  29. Rebu

    Rebu hey, little Anna, you're the one

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    Uh...

    [​IMG]

    ...I don't know how to respond to that.
     
  30. Vaermina

    Vaermina Well worn.

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    No. He traded that in for his empathic vision.
     
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