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With This Ring (Young Justice SI) (Thread Fourteen)

Discussion in 'Creative Writing' started by Mr Zoat, Jan 27, 2019.

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  1. Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    Not from the local people. They have other priorities.
     
  2. TheMidnightRook

    TheMidnightRook Well worn.

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    I thought there was, but haven't been able to find it. It's possible I misremembered.
     
  3. Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    No. While he might well not have been celibate, for the most part the Children of Dawn were his children in the metaphorical sense. No harem.
    'Freedom fighters'.
    Thank you, corrected.
    Wolf Krieger would never tolerate his God-Fuhrer being Canadian.
     
  4. PDV

    PDV Revelation That Uncertainty Is Itself An Answer

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    In mice!
     
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  5. Mastigos2

    Mastigos2 Versed in the lewd.

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    I'm wondering if the blood that DID fit was compared to that other blood. If the enhancile is that worker and deliberately got himself cut again as a way to explain why his blood was there.
     
  6. Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    No, but that's a lot clever than what actually happened. Well done.
     
  7. Valiran

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    D) Paul isn’t about to do something that will make it more likely the Nazis with Kryptonian tech will try to attack Earth-16. That’s the sort of thing which will result in significant casualties on the good guys’ side.
     
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  8. iamnuff

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    Nazis are always a hotbutton for everyone, but boiling things down to the very basics, I think most of us could agree that being brainwashed into what is basically an evil cult isn't, in-and-of-itself, an irredeemably immoral action.

    So long as you don't, whilst a member of said cult, go around murdering people, then morally you're probably in the clear. You're just... brainwashed into believing something that isn't true.

    By all accounts in story, Overgirl doesn't actually have innocent blood on her hands, if only because all the murdering was pretty much over with by the time she was grown up and brainwashed enough to take part.

    Of course, people don't want to feel sympathy for a nazi, so they're making stuff up in their heads about how she must have gone around killing people, even though Paul, and by extension Mr Zoat, have explicitly said that she hasn't.
    Not this version of her, anyway.
     
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  10. ForeverShogo

    ForeverShogo Not too sore, are you?

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    Also, unless they, like, deliberately pick a fight with Earth 10 . . . I don't really see one of the cliche and, frankly, stupid scenarios of multiversal invasions happening.

    They already have an entire goddamn universe to expand into. What the fuck is even the point of attacking alternate Earths when you can be secure in your power over the Earth you already own?

    If you have to do that shit, wait until you've got an interstellar empire going so that you have the manpower and industry of multiple worlds fueling your war machine. Then you can worry about finding another Earth that isn't as far along and picking a fight when you have, like, a trillion motherfuckers to throw at their billions.

    Or maybe they figure out time fuckery and how to clone Overman, and send copies of the pod and baby into the Nazi Germany's of other Earths. Plus whatever new bullshit they might have picked up along the way.

    Crisis on Infinite Nazi Earths.
     
  11. Siskulous

    Siskulous Know what you're doing yet?

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    It got silly the moment someone started talking about milking dryads for maple syrup. Fun, yes, but also very silly.

    To be perfectly fair, Grayven is basically a good person in that his goals line up with what most people would consider the greater good. "Asshole" and "good person" are not mutually exclusive. It's quite possible - maybe even common - to be a complete ass to people and still be working for the greater good. It's also possible and very common to be polite and genial and even apparently kind to people around you but still be a completely evil SOB. See most politicians for an example of that one.

    Meh, they don't enjoy Grayven and they're not excited about him visiting MLP land. They may dislike the Nazi stuff so much that they start frothing at the mouth over it (not naming any names, but at least one person here has had that sort of reaction) but they at least enjoy the story. They do not, however, enjoy Grayvan's antics.

    And me? I not only enjoy Grayvan, but I've been thoroughly enjoying that 12 Steps to Omnipotence story that Zoat linked last week (or the week before maybe?). It's a lot like Grayven only moreso (I even think at the point of the story I'm at Hyperion would be an even match to Grayven, and he's only going to get more powerful if his plans play out). I dunno, maybe I just like dickish, godlike anti-heroes.
     
  12. Sharp Card

    Sharp Card Getting out there.

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    I, for one, am actually looking forward to the pony episodes. They'll probably be quite interesting. :)

    I like the vast majority of Zoat's writing, it's very rare that he does something that annoys me.

    That said, a warning: One important trap to avoid falling into is "X is a belief of evil group Y who we know have false beliefs A, B and C. Therefore X is false.".
    Not all of the Nazis/Hitler's beliefs will be incorrect and immoral (the classic example is veganism).
    Similarly, not all brainwashing is to instill incorrect beliefs. The classic example here is belief in democracy that's drilled into children at school.
     
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  13. Darko

    Darko Connoisseur.

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    Brainwashing can be extremely confusing sometimes. Technically OL is trying to brainwash Overgirl into adopting a way of life that goes against everything she was taught to believe in.
     
  14. Mquz

    Mquz Versed in the lewd.

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    Which is a problem - democracy might be the best type of government, but there’s a lot of things wrong with America’s democracy and there is space to improve.
     
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  15. Coda

    Coda Versed in the lewd.

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    Of course he would be. "Shoot first, ask questions later" is the hallmark of bad judgment.

    She won't, but not for some fourth-wall reason. She won't because she's not mentally unstable. She's not going to "snap". She's basically a soldier, and if ordered she'll kill someone without losing any sleep over it, but she's not a crazed lunatic that's a hair trigger away from killing someone on a whim.

    He IS liable for her actions, though, as he has taken responsibility for her supervision and rehabilitation. And as we see, he actually IS taking that responsibility seriously.

    This is reasonable -- keep a potential threat contained for evaluation. It's nothing permanent, easily rectified in either direction if it turns out you were wrong.

    Kryptonite on-hand is also a good plan. And he has that.

    Brainwashing requires "systematic and forceful means." Persuasion isn't brainwashing. And brainwashing, like any other form of indoctrination, is intended to result in someone who uncritically accepts dogma as truth without reflection or introspection. OL is doing very much the opposite -- he's trying to induce the reflection and introspection that Overgirl's upbringing never let her have, in order to let her come to a different conclusion on her own.
     
  16. iamnuff

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    I mean, what people talk about when they talk about nazism is the actual nazism.
    Nobody mentions hitler being a vegan because that's really not the important part here. We're not doing the 'Hitler ate sugar' fallacy here. We're talking about someone being brainwashed into believing about the uebermensch and the untermensch, about how Joos are behind everything, and all the other bullshit that people actually mean when they talk about the evils of nazism.
    Not to say that veganism isn't also wrong and evil, because you're wrong and it totally is.
     
  17. Mr Zoat

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    Well... Were behind everything.
    But not because Hitler did it. Because of characteristics intrinsic to the creed.
     
  18. iamnuff

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    Obviously.
     
  19. Stsword

    Stsword Versed in the lewd.

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    You are seeing a contradiction where there is none.

    He had a harem. He had no children whatsoever off of said harem. So he settled for his metaphorical Sons of Dawn.

    Hugo was apparently pretty infertile.

    It was a plot point.

    His excuse for never being there for Iron Monroe was that it never occurred to him that he could get Anna pregnant. If you want to give him the benefit of the doubt that is.

    Although considering he planned on his Mighty Whitey campaign to end with his Sons of Dawn waging a genocidal campaign of world conquest that would kill more people than the Nazis of Earth-10, I'm not sure how many people will feel the need to give him the benefit of that doubt.

    Although considering you're having Fire be something of a fan, either you're really sanitized the man from the comics version, or history has seriously whitewashed the scumbag.
     
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  20. Darko

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    This is a diffrent universe, maybe he doesn't have his main universe counterparts more negative traits, and maybe he didn't have a harem in this universe because he was uncomfortable with the idea or just wasn't interested.
     
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  21. Mr Zoat

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    I don't know where you're getting this harem thing from? There was no harem. None.
     
  22. jonasquinn

    jonasquinn I trust you know where the happy button is?

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    I've got to be honest, Mr Zoat I'm shocked at how casual OL has apparently been about knowing that Lex has had access to the Danner Formula for a long time now between the fact that he usually pushes for human enhancement pretty heavily and would probably try and make it publicly available asap and the fact that it means that any random Light thug could be Danner enhanced and he'd probably push a lot harder for people like Batman to accept the treatment as a result
     
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    The same place I got his being an infertile genocidal lunatic from, from actually reading the Young All-Stars storyline which included him and the Sons of Dawn.

    If you interpreted "Although considering you're having Fire be something of a fan, either you're really sanitized the man from the comics version, or history has seriously whitewashed the scumbag" in anyway but my pointing out that there is already evidence from the story that implies Zoat changed Hugo's character, you interpreted it incorrectly.

    While it's not impossible that Zoat has Fire have nostalgia filter for a genocidal lunatic that would have buried her entire family under a mountain of corpses to build his Dannered utopia over, that seems highly unlikely.
     
  24. Maelgwyn

    Maelgwyn I trust you know where the happy button is?

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    I believe he isn't too worked up about it because unless you have a power ring and can convert a person's cells using the Danner formula, you're limited to the usual method of operation of the formula, i.e injecting a pregnant mother with the formula. Since Paul is hardly going to be volunteering to convert Light members using the Danner formula that means that he's got 16 years or so until Danner-enhanced Light operatives become a problem.
     
  25. Aeess

    Aeess I trust you know where the happy button is?

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    Except that Lex has scientists working for him capable of cloning full adults in a matter of months, Paul even informed him that cloning humans infused with the Danner formula would have been more effective than cloning Superman.
     
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    There are several points in favor of it.

    Alternate Earths, almost certain to be habitable, then most of space isn't.
    Travel time is cut down to almost nothing compared to space travel.
    That makes all sorts of logistics much easier compared to managing a conventional space empire.
    Also easier to defend from conventional spaced based non dimensional empires.

    Also, Earth is inhabited by humans, and not alien species. No need to deal with special accommodations for different body types or mindsets. What works on one planet can be implemented on another planet easily, since they are basically the same planet with the same native species.
    Also, easier to keep the empire cohesive.
     
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    Maxx Crowley I trust you know where the happy button is?

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    Given that earth has technology that shits all over constructs (The crumbler tech) and has several magical applications that thwart it, I really would not be surprised if Lex couldn't whip up someway to induce Danner enhancement in full grown adults.

    I mean, hell, Even with a power ring, OL mostly uses it to create various earth weapons (Railguns and various Earth forms of ammunition, crumbler tech, Captain Cold Cold-guns and the like)
     
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    And if Science! fails, there's always Magic. Lex might have difficulty getting competent mages and/or alchemists though, even with the Light's aid...
     
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  29. Threadmarks: Jungle Gym (part 9)
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    "…that he was in South America during the War." Angelika smiles excitedly as we look down at the Valmiki facility. "I had no idea that he had a son!"

    "How did your government know about him? He wasn't anything like as visible during the First World War as superheroes were during the Second."

    "Aunty Gerri's grandfather met Professor Abednego Danner at a conference organised by the American Breeders' Association. That was where he received a sample of his formula."

    "Does Germania have a lot of Danner enhanciles?"

    "No, hardly any. Just Aunty Gerri and Imperial Cross. The Professor… Some of his claims seemed a little… Strange. Of course, now we know that he knew exactly what he was talking about, but… There were some very strange people drawn to the National Socialist cause in the early days."



    She's not wrong.

    "It wasn't until after the Great War that he heard about Hugo's strength from the soldiers who survived his attacks. He had the vial, so he gave it to his pregnant daughter."

    "He didn't try to replicate it?"

    "Yes, of course, when he found out that it worked. But Professor Danner was dead and mass spectroscopy did not exist yet. He wasn't even certain that the vial he had would still work, and he couldn't risk the chemical experiments he would need to perform to try and work out what was in it."

    I suppose that makes sense.

    "What was Squire saying about the location?"

    I bow my head slightly.

    "When the All-Star Squadron fought Hugo Danner's Children of Dawn, that area is.. more or less where the last fight took place. Dying super strong children fanatically throwing themselves at war veteran superheroes." I snort quietly. "I'm not surprised that the Squadron broke up after that."

    "Why were they dying?"

    "No resistance to European diseases. They got infected as soon as they left the jungle, then it was just a.. countdown."

    "That is-."

    I narrow my eyes slightly. "I really hope that you're not about to say-."

    "I know that disease resistance comes from your ancestors having prior exposure, not from any greater destiny. But choosing a people who kept themselves isolated as his subjects was very poor planning. If he had recruited from the cities or other civilised areas he would not have had that problem."

    True, I suppose. I wonder why he did it?

    "What happened to him on your Earth?"

    "He attempted to take over the country, but they were allied to the Confederated States of America. Axis Amerika intervened in defence of the Brazilian government and Great Horned Owl killed him with poisonous gas. It wasn't until after his body had been destroyed that they discovered his identity. We could not reverse engineer the Formula from his remains either."

    "Or from your aunt?"

    "No. Which is odd, but-" She shakes her head. "-I am not a chemist. How hard is it to reverse engineer?"

    "I don't know. I used Hugo's own records." I start flying towards the facility entrance. "Come on, we shouldn't keep him waiting."

    Doctor Munro waves at me as we fly closer, frowning mildly as he takes in Overgirl.

    "Orange Lantern and… Overgirl?" She nods as she lands. "Paul, you remember Doctor Niang?"

    The woman whom I initially thought was LexCorp's plant turned out to be a noted Chinese researcher they headhunted, and she accepted the job largely for a fresh start after her divorce. I haven't had all that much to do with her, but the steadily growing violet strands suggest that Doctor Munro and her have a great deal to do with one another.

    I shake her right hand.

    "A pleasure to see you again."

    "Likewise."

    Dr Munro smiles curiously. "So what's this about?"

    "We have reason to believe that there's a formerly unknown Danner enhancile active in Brazil. They appear to have taken exception to the actions of a logging company."

    "If so, that's.. hardly surprising. My father spent a lot of time working with several tribes deep in the Amazon. It was always unlikely that.. ev-." He winces, and Dr Niang looks at him with concern. "That.. everyone he worked with died. There'd been.. expeditions into the jungle before. Some would have had some exposure."

    "And… There's no delicate way to put this, but you said that you might have inherited it-."

    "No-. No, that-." He shakes his head emphatically. "There wasn't-. Ah-."

    "That's fine. I just wanted to check."

    Dr Niang puts her right hand on his left shoulder. I.. hadn't realised how distressing he'd find the idea. "Might the survivors from amongst the people Hugo Danner augmented have had their own children?"

    "It's certainly possible. There are no publically acknowledged children of Danner enhanciles other than..- " I gesture to Dr Munro with my right hand. "-Doctor Munro, but then there aren't that many known Danner enhanciles. We really don't know what it does to fertility or virility."

    "Aunty Gerri has never conceived." I turn to Angelika. "Though I.. suppose that she probably hasn't tried."

    "In.. any case, any tribal groups probably aren't going to want to talk to me about one of the Children of Dawn attacking a logging camp. You, on the other hand-."

    "I-. I don't-. I didn't.. even go deep inside the jungle, just the.. farms that were already up and running."

    "Yes, but you're Hugo Danner's son. They're going to be a lot more willing to talk to their god's son than they are me."

    "And… What do you want out of it?"

    "I'd like some sort of reassurance that there won't be any further attacks. And.. to organise some sort of negotiation. Once random acts of violence are off the table my job is over."

    He gazes blankly at me for a moment, then turns to Dr Niang. They look at each other for a moment, then he nods.

    "Okay. I guess I.. should try talking to them. To stop making things worse. You wanna go now?"
     
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    Lex wants to be able to use the Danner formula legitimately. Cloning humans is very illegal, and he knows that if it turns out that someone has cloned Dannered humans the League will look for any link to him. He's considered it, but it's most likely that he's decided that it isn't worth it.
     
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