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With This Ring (Young Justice SI) (Thread Fourteen)

Discussion in 'Creative Writing' started by Mr Zoat, Jan 27, 2019.

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  1. Assblaster5000

    Assblaster5000 I trust you know where the happy button is?

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    The main issue I see with it being Starbreaker is that he's the adult form of a Sun Eater, which don't exactly have genetics, not as we understand the term at least.

    You are probably right though.
     
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    Mr Zoat

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    Lord Caeryg has actually turned out for this one in person. Quite why he decided to turn it into a social event rather than keep it top secret eludes me, but there are Highborn representatives from several other Sheeda cities along with their escorts. Servants are moving around the demonstration area with platters of edible beetles, and a small cluster of flesh shapers are making final checks on the booster beetle.

    They've even put out some glow flies, though it's still dingy as heck here. I suppose that explains the full face helms the Sheeda who were part of the Harrowing fleet wore: our bright light must be blinding to them. Caeryg hasn't been quite daring enough to grow back his severed limb, but this is effectively him 'coming out' as a Queen-doubter. I imagine that Sheeda politics are about to get very interesting.

    I take a moment to check the etchings on the booster beetle. Since it's a reasonable assumption that the 'vampiric' effect will get stronger as we get closer, this beetle will effectively be integrated into my armour's soul circuitry. Not fully; the Sheeda don't have the ability to make the materials I need for that. But a close enough resemblance mixed with a little magic make something which sort of works.

    All looks fine to me

    I pat the carapace, though I know full well that it's far too insensitive to feel it, and far too simple-minded to understand the concept of familiarity. And since it's almost certainly going to die in the next few hours that's just as well, really.
    Flawless Posture.
    On the launch pad, Artemis stretches, eye stalk arrows ready to be plucked from their unfortunate donor. Telepathy is unknown to the Sheeda, but psychometry clearly isn't.

    I nod to the flesh crafters, and they ignite their sigils and lead the booster beetle towards the launch platform.

    "Ladies and gentlemen, Highborn of the Sheeda, scholars and warriors, today I and my faithful steed take the first glimpse at the universe beyond the mist shrouding the Earth."

    I make a circuit of the viewing area, making sure to make eye contact with at least the leaders of the delegations.

    "I wish to take in the state of the rest of the universe! And I wish to share that knowledge with all of you, so that you will have less reason to doubt my intentions. Each of you has had the opportunity to check the equipment; each of you knows that what you see will be what I see. What is actually there. And perhaps it will go some way to solving the mystery of your situation."

    Or if I'm really lucky, get me to somewhere from which I can boom tube away, recharge my rings and build up a decent production centre. If I'm less lucky, then whatever's keeping the red giant away only extends as far as the edge of the mist and I'm about to get horribly burned. Or the beetle could blow up and I'll get horribly burned from that.

    My tested level of resilience is why Artemis is staying on the ground rather than taking her chances on the beetle.
    Fortify.
    I head towards the beetle, smiling to myself as a couple of magic-focused Highborn get their fingers burned by the sigils they were using to covertly monitor the magics in my body. Could be they think I'm a novel Highborn created in Caernouid at Caeryg's instruction. If he's bringing people in at this stage I assume that he's got his story and approach sorted out for bringing them around to his point of view.
    Fortify.
    I walk down the short series of steps that lead underneath the booster beetle and pull my armour's goggles and seldom-used face covering into place. Then I take a firm hold on the carapace's handholds.
    Fortify.
    "Artemis, ready?"
    Fortify.
    "Whenever you are."
    Fortify.
    The idea of using the beetle to get off the surface was a non-starter. A beetle acting as a rocket would have to be the size and composition of a rocket, and survive having me hanging off it as it powered up to escape velocity. And if something went wrong or if the Vampire Sun doesn't act in the way we tentatively think it does, we'd be rogered.
    Fortify.
    Ping.
    Fortify.
    I activate my aero-discs and rise, slowly lifting the beetle off the launch pad. Learning to keep the aero-discs functioning under ground-level disruption took… A while, as measured by Artemis's beetle clock. But I took it up to the upper levels of the miasma and with a map memorised I'm confident that I can avoid falling on anything too important.
    Fortify.
    Once I reach eye level with Artemis I nod. She draws, and looses the first shot.
    Fortify.
    She can only bridge to places she knows, but she can fire an arrow pretty much any distance. If she fires an arrow with an eye on the end? We're back in bridge-business.
    Fortify.
    The rainbow explosion goes off just above me and I rise. It's not fast, not compared to ring-based flight and even compared to what I managed with aero-discs back in the past. But as Artemis sends an arrow through the bridge ahead of us the booster beetle and I are accelerating at a slow but steady rate.
    Fortify.
    And then space gets peculiar for a moment and we're… Not all that high up, actually. With a quick glance I can still just about make out the lights of the city below. But we're about as far up as fly-mounts can take their riders.
    Fortify.
    Then the bridge behind me closes and a new one opens in front of me. Keep going.
    Fortify.
    This one opens further up. The ground is fully shrouded and the sky above me similarly obscured. I can see my hand where it's gripping the beetle, but not much further than that. I don't see the arrow that creates the next rainbow bridge, but fortunately the bridge itself is bright enough that I can still aim at it.
    Fortify.
    I feel a momentary kinship with the early hot air balloon aviators getting caught in a cloud. At least the beetle's carapace is surviving having its entire weight pressing on my hands.
    Fortify.
    Up again, and this time while I can't see anything at least the clouds above me are bright enough to let me know that I'm going in the right direction. They don't shine white, of course; it's red light all the way and really does put me in mind of the fire pits, when the fug from the forges gets really bad and the overseers have to move their lowlies into shelters or lose the whole lot of them.
    Fortify.
    Up again, and this time there's a shape to the redness. I can see the outline of the sun, the baleful glare strong enough to trigger my goggles.
    Fortify.
    And up again. The clouds are wisps, the sun disturbingly large in the sky, and… Ugh. I can't see stars, but I can see that there's enough dust in the system that they could well be blotted out. The sun itself… I'm no expert in solar dynamics, but it looks like an early stage red giant in the growing phase. What I'd expected from the illumination but not from the chronology. Red giants don't grow particularly fast, but they grow faster than this. Once things get hot enough to evaporate all surface water… But again, the surface of the Earth isn't all that hot.
    Fortify.
    And now I'm standing in what passes for its full glare I'm not that hot, either. Oh, at this distance a red giant wouldn't do me measurable harm, but I would feel the distance. Light without heat? I'm not feeling as if I'm being drained at an accelerated rate, and my armour feels just as functional as it did at ground level.
    Fortify.
    I can't see the moon…
    Fortify.
    Wait. Don't I remember that in the comics the Dominators blew it up? But Earth was the centre of human civilisation in that comic, whereas I've had it confirmed that it isn't here. Won't be, here. Then again, there is a lot of dust. Maybe they do?
    Fortify.
    Mother Box?
    Fortify.
    Ping.
    Fortify.
    Good show. I turn away from the sun and trigger the booster beetle. And after a brief delay, its internal gas bladders undulate and release the thrust plume that propels us forward.
    Fortify.
    Ahead is… The dull glow of light from the sun reflecting off a billion billion particles of dust. I can't see any object of any size, which makes sense. This beetle is an organic booster rocket. It doesn't have a faster than light drive, if only because there are very few organic non-arcane faster than light drives and they all require substances we don’t have. But the thrust is constant, my armour is replenishing my air and I'm not being harmed. I could pretty much just go to sleep here and wake up when we've gone far-
    Fortify.
    Ping.
    Fortify.

    -enough… Really? Already? And you're sure that it's New God?
    Fortify.
    Ping.
    Fortify.
    That's lucky. I switch the setting of my goggles to pick up anything that touches the Source.
    Fortify.
    Let me know when we're close…
    Fortify.
    Enough…
    Fortify.
    Oh.
    Fortify.
    Dimly through the dusty miasma I look left and right, up and down, at the outlines of the titans whose imprisoned forms make up the Source Wall.
     
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  3. The Unaligned Player

    The Unaligned Player Agony that desires to meet Extinction

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    Well. That’s terrifying.
     
  4. DeathlessProficiency

    DeathlessProficiency Know what you're doing yet?

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    So the Earth has been moved to the edge of the universe, by the Source Wall?
     
  5. Assblaster5000

    Assblaster5000 I trust you know where the happy button is?

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    Right then, this is... interesting.

    Still a small bit too soon to call what exactly we're dealing with, but it's likely a New God.

    Probably.
     
  6. Darko

    Darko Connoisseur.

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    'she can fire'

    remove one 'for its'

    either 'that comic' or 'those comics'

    That Effigy guy was made to be able to travel faster than light with science.
     
  7. Silveraith

    Silveraith Argent Phantasm

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    Have we finally reached the point where Grayven yells at the Source Wall? That tidbit was leaked to us years ago.
     
  8. Darko

    Darko Connoisseur.

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    No, I think Zoat said he's going to yell at the wall when his story ends and I doubt it's going to end here.
     
  9. Assblaster5000

    Assblaster5000 I trust you know where the happy button is?

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    I don't know, this is feeling sufficiently "Final Boss" to me. Grayven doesn't have his rings charged, Mother Box still doesn't seem to be doing all that well, and he doesn't have any backup.

    Honestly, what were the devs thinking? Having a quest like this at, what? The mid-game? I get that they wanted to model things as closely as they could to the source material, but this is insane! What if you stumbled into this quest chain as an Entrepreneur build like Peter? You'd get crushed instantly all because of the Dynamic World code they put in making you fight an end-game boss just a few years in!
     
  10. BlueMangoAdea

    BlueMangoAdea Alive. For now.

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    By a Controller. Not exactly your normal species.
     
  11. PrinceJonathan

    PrinceJonathan Versed in the lewd.

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    I was thinking the DC Universe has shrunk by the time of the Sheeda to where it's only large enough to contain the Earth and whatever the hell the Vampire Sun is.

    Titan Stuck in the Wall: "Welcome to God Burger, Source of the God Burger. May I take your order?"

    Grayven: "Yes, I'll have a Double Stack 4-for-4, with coke and BBQ sauce. No onions please."

    -5 minutes later-

    Grayven: "I SAID NO ONIONS!"

    It can't end here! Grayven hasn't married Best Princess yet!
     
  12. Darko

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    Zoat also said his final opponent will be Darkseid...and given the Source Wall this may very well be Darkseid.

    I know that, that's why there are very few non arcane organic FTL drives as the renegade said.
     
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    "Nothing up my sleeves, as you can clearly see... Now let's see if I can pull that rabbit out of this totally empty hat!"

    You know... There's some sentences that only make sense in the context but take them out of it... :D

    What? Sheeda cannot build you Starburst equipped beetle? For shame. Maybe they should subcontract it to the Builders.

    Oh? That was fast! Is he about to meet his future self? Does vampirism count as STD? Where's Luna?

    ...

    I am very confused. Is Sol sys surrounded by the Source Wall? Or did someone break it and the 'bricks' decided to hang around the Sun of all places for some reason?
     
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    I couldn't help it.
     
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    BlueMangoAdea Alive. For now.

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    Hm. If the universe was shrunk to such a small size, the average temperature of the universe would be very very high. Maybe the vampire sun is a desperate attempt to drain the energy so that the universe's temperature is bearable?
     
  16. Assblaster5000

    Assblaster5000 I trust you know where the happy button is?

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    It seems like there's a portal to The Source Wall, rather than it physically being in Sol. That's how I understood it at least.

    Certainly possible, but it brings up questions about why The Seehda don't have records about that, why it has a portal(?) to The Source Wall, and what cuased this whole mess int he first place.
     
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    Oh... are they on the wrong side of the source wall? like some kind of bubble?

    That could be bad? or at least incredibly strange.
     
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    If that was the case then we'd either be in n52 territory which is... no as far as Zoat is concerned, or they'd be in The Source considering they aren't just in a white void, which is also rather unlikely.
     
  19. Zig

    Zig Not too sore, are you?

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    Sounds more like the source wall has contracted and surrounds the Earth but not sure.
     
  20. Chojin Patriarch

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    So... He's going up to orbit to get a good look at things himself? I wonder just how long that took to arrange...

    Hopefully not too noisy, though. The last thing Grayven needs right now is getting dragged into a war of succession. I mean, he might well have to take a hand and end up conquering the lot.

    Let's hope it holds up. Last thing you want is it going kablooey when you're hitting the edge of the atmosphere. Otherwise it'll be a short, hot trip back down.

    ...Ew. I'm guessing her Rainbow Bridge technique will be involved in this launch, then.

    A noble goal. I wonder how many of them actually buy that. No doubt many have their suspicions.

    Oh, this is going to be fun.

    Yeah, I don't think she'd take a fall from near-orbit quite as well as you can, even with her 'Just Cause'-style grappling shenanigans. Never mind all the other risks.

    Heh. Yeah, New Gods are quite a bit higher-octane on the magical scale than they are. With any luck that eases their nerves just a little. Instead of making them more paranoid.

    Flinging himself into orbit using a giant beetle (some modification of a bombardier beetle?) a rookie New God's arrow transportation techniques, and more than a little luck. Bet he didn't see himself doing this when he went to interview Harley Rathaway back when this all started.

    Translation: "Frankly, being sodomised by whatever it is would probably be much less painful than whatever we're headed into."

    Operation 'Grayven-pult' is a go, repeat, go!

    As one of the nobles comments, "You know, I thought this would go faster..."

    Like taking a flying leap in Seven league Boots.

    Would have killed the plan if he picked it up, and it promptly cracked open and slid down over him... Bet it would have earned a few laughs, though.

    Let's hope it isn't too close. As amusing as it would be for him to come flying into orbit and smack head-first into Starbreaker's nose or something...

    Things are just getting weirder and weirder. More and more physical improbabilities...

    To be honest, even if they did, Humanity would probably have managed to reconstruct it later on, given the quite variable level of technology assorted future eras showed off. Plus, five or so billion years... Anything could have happened to ol' Mundus Luna.

    Hmm... Was that 'Moon's still there... I think.' or 'We're high enough, you can stop now.' I wonder...

    Ah, I see, the beetle is his extra-atmospheric manoeuvring gear.

    And miss this view? Well, probably, yeah. It does not sound particularly picturesque...

    ...What. Oh, this should be good.

    Just watch for overload. Whatever's out there, it could be very, very big.

    And it's enough to render Grayven speechless. This must be amazing.

    ...What. :confused: Wait, has the universe contracted or something? :eek: What's going on? o_O There are so many questions!

    I'll be honest, I don't think anyone was expecting this, in-story or in thread. Seriously, what. The. Ever-loving. Hand-holding. Fuck. I doubt Grayven's going to be yelling at the Source Wall tomorrow, but there better be something...

    Godspeech:
    And he's also calling 'Fortify.' between nearly every line after that. Wow.
     
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    Assblaster5000 I trust you know where the happy button is?

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    The main issue with that is The Source Wall exists, traditionally, outside of the regular multiverse, so it exists beyond space-time. Which would mean that if it's contracted to surround Sol in The Sheeda's timeline it would have done the same in every timeline.
     
  22. Fellow

    Fellow Know what you're doing yet?

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    This seems unusually risky of him. Shouldn't they have at least done a test of some sort first before attempting this? He says he's resilient, but he barely survived a nuke way back when and that was with a fully functioning power ring.
     
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    According to Artemis they spent some time there that she slept several times, so as far as we know they could have been there for weeks or even months.

    I doubt hope is something they can feel.

    Fun and interesting in the Chinese sense of the word.

    Seriously if Melmoth was telling the truth and all Sheeda are evil then maybe giving them the opportunity to travel to outer space isn't such a good idea, seeing as they may try to try being space raiders instead of time raiders.

    Or it does worry them, since if they are evil they may think that beating them and torturing them after this is over will be harder.

    To be fair few people see this happening.
     
  24. Darko

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    True, but now he's much, much more powerful than he was back then, so maybe he figures he can survive it.
     
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    Like what? Sending a dog a Highborn strapped to the beetle rocket first?
     
  26. Fellow

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    They could've attached a really long tendril to the beetle, sent it to space, then reeled it back in to see if it survived or something.

    Edit: Granted the tendril would have to be 100km long, but I'm sure there could be some simpler method.
     
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    Earth is stuck in the source-wall? Or the planet was towed to near where the source-wall is?
    ... Or more worryingly, was the source-wall pushed all the way back here by something external?

    Edit: The sun not being hot makes sense. It drains energy, not radiates it. Why would it output heat?
    Frankly, it's more surprising that it even puts out light.

    The really strange question is 'if the sun isn't outputting heat, why hasn't the earth frozen over?'
     
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    Mquz Versed in the lewd.

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    True - but if you sum the lengths of all blood vessels in a human body, you’d apparently get 100,000 km of tubing.
     
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    Mquz Versed in the lewd.

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    I mean - it’s Dynamic World code. This quest is obviously class and alignment locked and only available to people who missed out on the Sivana family get-together event. Say what you want, but this is still less of a threat than Darkseid getting personally involved.
     
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    Assblaster5000 I trust you know where the happy button is?

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    At the moment we don't know that is isn't him, and you've kind of made my point for me, if an Entrepreneur build, or, Elementals forbid, a build that takes place in a universe where the Sivanas don't exist get blindsided by this it won't go well for them.

    I can only hope that this level of quest can't happen sooner, otherwise you could a rookie Psionics build like early Fallout!Paul getting hit with an End Of The Universe scenario.

    Not saying I don't like the Dynamic World code, it's quite frankly amazing, I'm just saying that it might need some work to make it properly balanced for the Orange Light Shaman start at least.

    Edit: Though I will admit that I would pay good money to see Tangseid get hit with this because of his alignment.
     
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