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With This Ring (Young Justice SI) (Thread Fourteen)

Discussion in 'Creative Writing' started by Mr Zoat, Jan 27, 2019.

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  1. Darko

    Darko Connoisseur.

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    The first one most likely.

    He could probably kill everyone in a week at most.

    He probably left them alive to suffer knowing that their world is now a literal Hell.
     
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  2. Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    Thank you, corrected.
    Okay, I'll change that so she just starts with a regular magical metal lasso.
     
  3. jaelin910

    jaelin910 habitual lurker

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    If he was possessed by Simon Culp, maybe they got to him that way; either Simon being more vulnerable or rendering Richard vulnerable?
     
  4. MacShimi

    MacShimi Getting out there.

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    Typo - replace “… Not is good health…” with “Not in good health…”
     
  5. Sojiko

    Sojiko Getting sticky.

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    Indeed! That would be most dreadful.


    Also, this from the archive:
    The second link here is dead. I'm pretty sure that this is the image that used to be there. I'm not sure if you care about updating old dead links, but the option is there if you're interested.

    Maybe there's a turn of phrase that I just don't know, but this doesn't parse right no matter how many times I try. I think it should be "make it look like it needed to look like".
     
  6. FourthPear

    FourthPear Frequent Flier.

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    Aww, for a second there I thought we were finally getting Raven…
     
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  7. DougA

    DougA Getting out there.

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    Not in good health.

    Edit: Ninja'd.
     
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  8. Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    Thank you, corrected.
    Thank you, updated.
    I think it's fine.
     
  9. AmericanNumbers

    AmericanNumbers Not too sore, are you?

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    Pissed off Shade would shift the balance against anything short of Darkseid so i imagine it's of the good to get him cured of demonic influence.
     
  10. Bud-E

    Bud-E Stand up so I can push you down!

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    If Raven existed on this Earth I don't think there would be anyone left alive on it.
     
  11. Michael Vonica

    Michael Vonica Know what you're doing yet?

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    But what about pissed off, half dead Shade?
     
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  12. Sojiko

    Sojiko Getting sticky.

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    More potential corrections for old posts:
    That should probably either be "that they did form a connection" or "that they formed a connection".

    The Louvre's website has changed, so the link is dead. I think that you could use this one instead.
     
  13. Vaermina

    Vaermina Well worn.

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    Zoat nerfed the character massively.
     
  14. Threadmarks: Past Participant (part 21)
    Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    16th September 2012
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    "Her Imperial Majesty, Queen Morgan the First!"

    Overman and I stand as the Queen strides imperiously into the room. I used the magic detection stone when she approached so I know perfectly well that she is a powerful magician. Still, to my eyes, she is slightly blurred. I do not know if a pure human would notice… Something to do with the spells protecting her? Or perhaps the actual Morgana is one of the other people in the room and this person is wearing some sort of illusion. But since we don't intend to hurt her it should not matter.

    And if she wants to hurt us, we're both wearing wards which do not exist on this Earth. Either of us could tear down this entire palace.

    Karl bows to her, and I decide to do the same. My current uniform doesn't include a skirt, anyway. The queen's clothing is made of green and purple cloth, and looks decidedly dated. Much like the castles. She stares at us for several seconds before deigning to speak.

    "You're not the possessed one. Where are you from?"

    Morgan does not return the favour. Karl and I straighten, and without referring to one another our posture changes from mildly deferential to mildly confrontational. The sort of thing we do with minor party officials who have forgotten their place.

    "We come from a parallel Earth. People from this Earth are opening portals to our home and attacking us. We have come to stop the attacks at the source."

    The queen does not appear to be impressed.

    "And why have you come into my kingdom?"

    "Your kingdom seems to function better than the wastelands we have seen elsewhere. I hope that you will be able to share information with us that would allow us to achieve our objective."

    "You expect me to help you prevent demonspawn leaving?" She shakes her head. "Then you have sadly misjudged the situation. I hope that they all leave, so that my world can be free of their influence."

    Karl shakes his head. "Removing their ability to bridge the gap between worlds would not be enough. They know we exist, and the knowledge of how to reach us also exists. Unless the threat is destroyed, we cannot know that we are safe."

    "But you could buy yourself a great deal of time. If I allied my kingdom with you, I would receive no protection against the wrath of those you fought, while you would be safe upon your own world."

    Karl looks down for a moment before giving her his full attention.

    "Are you familiar with the concept of karma?"

    "Where magic is concerned you may assume that I am familiar with a great many things. If you are about to claim that you have a duty as a hero, that would be dharma. And if you consider your first loyalty to be to a single nation, you would not breach it."

    "No. I have a great moral debt to pay. A very large number of people died due to my wilful ignorance. I would rather die than allow something like that to happen again, whether to my people or yours. If you wish to test my resolve with your magic, you may do so."

    She raises her right hand and makes a curling motion, keeping it raised as the spell renders its judgement. Kryptonians cannot see the souls of the dead, and it did not occur to me to ask if the souls of the dead of the Second Great War cling to Karl in a literal sense. Whatever she sees, she appears satisfied as she lowers her hand.

    "Your other self's possession was the start of it. Do you have a plan to fight someone who can do everything that you can do and more? Who has an army of possessed superhumans under his command?"

    "Only the outline of a plan. My world makes little use of magic. The idea of casting a spell to remove a demon is completely foreign to us. But Overgirl had made friends upon another Earth. The people who made-" He takes out his spell eater and holds it up. "-these. They have the knowledge that we need."

    I nod. "They also count two angels among their number."

    Queen Morgan's eyes narrow with spite. "Angels have proven to be extremely unreliable where he is concerned."

    "They have had a number of shocks to their faith lately. It has made them more dependable as allies."

    "Ours have been conspicuous by their absence. Do you share your father's guilt?"

    "No, she does not."

    But I do. Perhaps not to the same degree, but for everything I assumed without giving credence to what he experienced… For every untruth I spoke uncritically. Yes, for those things, the fault is mine.

    "Perhaps I do not, but he is my father."

    "My son slew his father. But ours is not a usual family." Queen Morgan draws herself up slightly. "That is your plan, then? Confront Superman with the magic of angels and burn the demon magic out of him?"

    Karl nods. "Or kill him, if that is necessary. I would understand if he preferred to die, knowing what has been done with his powers."

    "Very well, then. I will not give you material aid, but I am content to share information if it is to the end of permanently removing Superman. What do you wish to know?"

    "None of the people I have seen here have the demonic presence of those bound to Demon Superman's service. The wide jaw, the fixation on his crest… They do not have it. Who are your people? What makes them immune?"

    "These?" Morgan glances at the closest guard. "These are hobgoblins. They are partly of Earth and partially of the Fae. Demon magic does not capture their minds so easily as it does mortal men."

    "And your human subjects?"

    "They remain either in my realm of Camelot or in shielded fortresses. The greater part of the countryside is overtaken by those devoted to him."

    "You are evacuating to Camelot?"

    "When possible. There are few stable gateways and fewer magicians of sufficient power to shield them while they move. And my armies are not large enough to defend the entire realm."

    "Is it impossible for you to remove the demonic presence from those infected with it?"

    "It's impractical. The process requires me to pull a form of magic energy out of someone in an environment that is full of it. It's like bailing out a boat that is already underwater!"

    "Do you know who is attacking my world? The Demon Superman… He did not appear to be interested."

    "The Marked frequently arrange themselves into cults, led by the most fanatical or the most powerful. Opening a gateway to another world would require them to have maintained their intellect and initiative as well."

    I frown. "We met humans unaffected by the demonic taint on Zandia. They claimed-."

    "Hah! Yes, that their god protects them. And the Marked say that Superman is a wonderful god as well."

    My frown deepens. "I thought they were Christian."

    "No, though they do like to maintain the pretence around outsiders. And from what little I've seen of their rituals they like to ape those of Christianity as well. But they worship something far darker and with far more ambition than a demigod who just sits in the middle of a ruined city."

    Karl nods. "Who is the leader of the largest group of Marked outside of America? We will deal with them, and perhaps gain useful intelligence."

    "That is an easy question to answer. His name is Wolf Krieger."
     
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  15. Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    No, that's fine as it is.
    Thank you, updated.
     
  16. hance1986

    hance1986 A pitiful excuse for a man.

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    Should be ' fanatical '
     
  17. Ngamer11

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    There is a missing 'it' there, so it should say: 'and it did not'.

    My guess is that they consider Earth a lost cause and have given up on it.

    I wonder how Overman and Overgirl will feel about kicking the ass of someone who's an unrepentant Nazi? I bet he added his own Nazi spin to the Superman cult he leads.
     
  18. Mr Zoat

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    Thank you, corrected.
     
  19. Darko

    Darko Connoisseur.

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    Maybe 'castle'

    Welp, this should be quite the meeting.

    Ohh boy, looks like Trigon may show up soon.
     
  20. Darko

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    Not necessarily.

    Zoat mentioned Job in a post of his, so the Angels may view the situation as being a good test of faith for their followers.

    Overman may feel slightly grateful since he can actually fight someone that embodies the things he hates without being conflicted about it.
     
  21. Ancalador

    Ancalador Know what you're doing yet?

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    Maybe there's a Rachel Roth here hiding out and willing to jump worlds?
     
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  22. Vaermina

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    I was going to say Darkseid... But if it's Trigon they're fucked...


    No... You don't bring Rachel Roth anywhere...

    Her existence is a direct anchor for Trigon to enter whatever dimension she exists in...
     
  23. NightmareWarden

    NightmareWarden Versed in the lewd.

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    Remind me, did Wolf Krieger get a Magic School Bus ride through the hounds of Odin, or was that honor reserved for Savage?

    What do we think is more likely, readers: the local Swamp Thing or a Lord of Chaos aiding in a battle against demons/cultists/Nega-Superman?
     
  24. Chojin Patriarch

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    Back with Karl and Angelika, then. And a royal audience with Morgaine le Fey. And I would not be surprised if she were remotely viewing the encounter, with a puppet decoy speaking her words. Only logical given the risk of a Kryptonian in her presence.

    Hmm... Morgaine taking a moment to feel them out mystically before she greets them? Sensible.

    The kind of teamwork that comes from long years of working together, I see. And Morgaine will have noticed that shift...

    Given the lack of leering Superman cultists, she's got nothing to do with it, after all. Probably wondering why you've come to her.

    And you'll keep hoping, I suspect. I don't see her being inclined to play nice...

    Yeah, if they don't find a third option, neither of them will get what they want...

    It's a nasty choice, isn't it? Condemn her people to a slow death, or let the daemons keep attacking his. Surely there's another way though...

    Karma and Dharma, for the curious. Complex concepts for a complex situation. And they're concepts that made it to the West a long time before Nazis came about, so I'm not surprised Karl has some knowledge of them...

    Necromancy, I see. Not the 'raising dead bodies' stuff, that's just something conflated with it. He has courage letting her do what she likes, though I expect he trusted Angelika to act if it seemed risky.

    I expect works like that would be very interesting to Morgaine. Either as a personal defence, or as a threat to her ability to control people...

    Or they have their own plans in motion. A test of faith... Shoring up the defences of the Silver City... Schematics for a new world...

    Not in terms of blood on her hands, literal or figurative, but...

    ...Guilt is rarely a rational emotion.

    That would be Mordred, and only in some versions of the myth of King Arthur... But it's definite in the DC version.

    Well, it's not an outright denial. Probably the best they could have hoped for.

    And there's that question answered. Probably forces she brought with her out of whatever fae realm she's been hidden in.

    A large-scale ward bound to the walls of those castles, I expect. That can't be a lot of survivors...

    Even travelling between realms would be risky, I bet. With every day that passes, the portals might grower less and less stable as demonic energies taint the earth...

    A good analogy... Made especially harder since she's probably got limited sources for power to replace what's leeched out. Take too much, and they'd die, after all...

    That would take considerable magical precautions, or an extremely strong will... Or someone already so corrupted the new taint is a drop in the water.

    That god would be Trigon, If I remember right. Though depending on the timeline, he may already have been rebuffed by Raven and the Titans...

    Given that their founder was a corrupted crusader, I'm not surprised.

    I bet Karl recognises that name. After all, he was around during the war. And there's probably a bit of him looking forwards to killing him again.

    That little revelation suddenly makes things just a little clearer. Wolf probably has enough skill to open portals to another world... And what better world to raid than one already aligned to National Socialism? I don't know if Wolf was a true believer or not, but I could see him wanting to take advantage of the people's ingrained submission to authority... I suppose we'll find out soon enough.
     
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    Is there a reason Paul suddenly stopped speaking with enlightened parentheses? Or did Zoat just not put them in yet?
     
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    SemiAnarchist Versed in the lewd.

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    The latest chapter was Overgirl, not Paul.
     
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    Gotcha, I was wondering why Paul mentioned his uniform not having a skirt.
     
  28. moralrelativity

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    This bit confused me at first because the 'return the favour' part is so far away in time "several seconds" from the bowing part.
    Maybe move "Morgan does not return the favour." to before the sentence mentioning several seconds?

    Also, was Paul speaking at all here? There's nothing with organge quote marks.
     
  29. Darko

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    I'm not sure what you mean here.

    I'm guessing the Krieger comment and Odin thing is him going to Valhalla when he dies, but the Savage thing doesn't make sense.

    Savage hasn't shown any connection to the Norse gods in this story aside from briefly working with a worshipper of theirs, and he probably wouldn't worship them since he considers himself superior.

    Krieger was killed by the Hitler clone.
     
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    Assuming Karl was the one that killed him back on his Earth.

    The one on Earth 16 certainly was.
     
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