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With This Ring (Young Justice SI) (Thread Fourteen)

Discussion in 'Creative Writing' started by Mr Zoat, Jan 27, 2019.

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  1. Duke Long

    Duke Long Glomerulus

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    Technology just a little beyond IRL. Seems like all those superscientists helped a little, but not much.
    ‘god’s’
    ’The issue’?
    I realise this is probably just a meltdown or something, but my first thought was that Mister Atom was betraying them, since he can emit gamma rays. If it was him they’d probably be ashes, though.
     
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  2. Signaller

    Signaller Know what you're doing yet?

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    Would a plant meltdown have been designed as a trap for Mr Atom?
     
  3. Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    Thank you, corrected.
    To the best of my knowledge, nuclear reactors are designed to fail safe. That doesn't help if one gets hit by an earthquake and then a tsunami at the same time, but I don't think that the workers wandering off could cause that.
    That would be like trying to kill an ocean by pouring boiling water on it.
     
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  4. Clell65619

    Clell65619 Making the rounds.

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    You want Hulks? Because that's how you get Hulks!

    Oops, wrong universe
     
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  5. Steelplaza

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    Fun fact, "plenty of countries" includes the United States of America! That's right, we have no central policing database that all the individual police departments report to. Oh, they can exchange information on things like wanted criminals, but there's no place where "there were X robberies" and "there were X murders" is reported every day. There's a sort of voluntary disclosure database that some departments report to, but it's usually about a year behind on the data.
     
  6. Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    Do state police have a database like that, or does every different police department have completely separate records?
     
  7. Steelplaza

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    As you might imagine, 50 states have 50 answers to that question. I checked and my states does maintain a state crime database from local departments, but I believe reports are made monthly and I have no idea what the compliance rates or accuracy actually amount to. Data collection of this sort is notoriously hard in the US because even when you actually have authority to pass a law about reporting (as state governments do) they are not administratively in charge of any random city's police department. The state police can't go in and fire the police chief of some county if his department hasn't done a good job with reports.

    None of this very relevant to the story, of course, I just thought you might be interested to know that crime reporting has been a long-standing problem in the US. I understand there have been various attempts to improve matters in recent years.
     
  8. Mr Zoat

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    My instinctive response is 'why not', but then realised that I don't know if the British Home Secretary can do that with any police department other than the Metropolitan Police. And the current head of the Met led a mission a few years ago where none of the police at ground level knew what their target actually looked like.
     
  9. Stsword

    Stsword Versed in the lewd.

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    Not necessarily-

    Incredible Hulk vs Superman

    Batman vs The Incredible Hulk

    I have wondered what an Alt.Paul in the Marvel/DC crossoververse would get up to.

    But I guess that doesn't interest Zoat.
     
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  10. Ciber

    Ciber Know what you're doing yet?

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    This really seems like the kind of situation that calls for just dropping in a few bleed torsion generators.
     
  11. Sockmonkey

    Sockmonkey I trust you know where the happy button is?

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    Huh, I just remembered that he can clean up nuclear disasters by eating the radiation, so this is all fixable without OL ringing everything better.
    Yeah, or copies of Starman's cosmic rod.
    If Thanagar ever wanted to annex Earth, this would be the time, because this was the wake-up call to end all wake-up calls and the whole population is gonna demand defenses once everything is rebuilt.
    Hmm, the Controllers can make planets, so it would be kind of trivial for them to rebuild Earth's infrastructure better than it was. I actually wanna see the whole uplift aspect take off.
     
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  12. KenNM

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    Well OL had no problem making copies of Rocket's belt without her permission due to how useful they were for the team, he made up with her about it and compensated her for it later I think (I forget what he did, maybe he Danner'd her?), so something as versatile and powerful as Star Girl's belt and rod would be a welcome addition to the regular gear.

    Plus, if the League's moved on to a "small elite force that can handle any big emergency that pops up" while fostering the formation and growth of more local and less elite forces of heroes, mass produced gear like the cosmic rod and belt would do wonders for that.

    They're not quite Power Rings, but they give their wears good Flying Brick, Flying Artillery, and Shield powers, and enhanced sense too I think. Perfect for a more standardized super force

    Sure, mass producing and standarizing equipment like that for the sake of efficiency and effectiveness kinda kills the wonder of a superhero's uniqueness and function as an icon, but OL's never given a crap about that right Mr Zoat ? Regardless of having epiphanies in seeing JSI Scott or toning down his anal retentiveness about whitewashing Nazis by stubbornly reminding everyone to call them the National Socialist Party.

    From rereading the Uncomplicated Good Works arc and the preceding ones, it's obvious Paul's lost sight and touch with why superheroes bother rescuing and helping people as individuals save for their loved ones, and just focuses on the numbers and cold calculus of things behind a goal of "most good for the most number".

    Paul being surprised at how uncomfortable he got at seeing JSI Scott's decisions in Feasability Study is probably the only reason he isn't trying to argue that the Justice League take control of the reigns for the affected countries for the sake of efficiency. I don't get why he doesn't. It's pretty obvious he very much dislikes the "golden agey superheroism" that Superman and Captain Marvel do as inefficient, and wasteful regardless of his token platitudes.

    If Paul had the tech the Light used in canon to forcibly awaken metahumans, he'd take it and spread it around, likely after working out the kinks to reduce chances of failed awakening resulting in death since Earth could use the increased firepower.

    At the end of the day he's a pragmatic utilitarian with a fundamentally alien morality and viewpoint based on avarice that believes he knows what's best. The only reason he listens if his loved ones correct him is because they're his loved ones and are the exception due to the warpiness of his mind due to Orange Light, and even then, Condescending Compassion + Pragmatic Utilitarian sums up a lot of OL's MO and personality. Want the ends, want the means and all that jazz.

    If increasing productivity and effectiveness on policing the planet in the aftermath of a wave of Anti-Life means destroying superhero culture as we know it with an organization of superpowered police he'll do it in a heartbeat and not feel bad.

    It's why Eris is his chosen patron after all, OL is gonna improve the efficiency and productivity of Earth by disregarding and browbeating the nay sayers and opposition, and the nameless masses that resist the change are gonna be disregarded and ignored for the sake of the greater good and progress, unless said minority affected negatively includes his loved ones.
     
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  13. Threadmarks: Reconstruction (part 3)
    Mr Zoat

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    They just took the interior of the reactor apart with picks and hammers. The bodies are piled up around the edges of the room where they were dragged after they keeled over and the others wanted them out of the way so that they could take their turn.

    I don't know what they were-.

    I've rebuilt the shielding, put the radiological materials back in place and repaired the reactor. Now-.

    Recognised, Mister Atom, asterisk.

    He steps out of the construct zeta tube, raising his hands. My ring can't entirely decipher the mechanism, but I can detect that radiation is being sucked into him. No matter how little sense that makes.

    "Have you identified any major leaks?"

    "Some fuel is missing. I'll follow up on it right now."

    "The time allotted is five minutes. If you cannot locate it within that time, notify local authorities and proceed to your next city."

    I nod and transition myself out of the power plant. Lots of lovely radiation-blocking metal and concrete around here. Honestly, we're lucky that Darkseid thinks that nuclear bombardments are too quick, or a lost fuel rod would be far from the worst thing that happened today.

    Worst ongoing thing. Those men having burned themselves to death with fuel rods is… Pretty bad. I don't know if it would be better to believe that they died under the effect of the Anti-Life or that they died after it left. They'd have been more aware of the pain… But maybe it would be better to die free as yourself?

    Strong radiation trace that way. Towards the riv-.

    Transition.

    "Uuuuh."

    A man whose skin is more blister than skin is weakly reaching for-.

    Stick that in a construct box, purple healing ray and shoot him with it.

    "Sir, don’t try to move. You're-."

    Sufficiently close to death's doorway that I'm a little surprised that you're alive.

    "You're in a bad way, but we can fix you up."

    Ring, signal Mr. Atom.

    Compliance.

    "…hurts…"

    "Yes, and I'm sorry, about that, but I don't.. want to risk introducing drugs into your system, and your brain is in somewhat less than pristine condition."

    On the… Other hand, I… Should be able to remove the sensation of pain. Because that has to hurt.

    I extend my environmental shield around… Dr. Li. Oh shit, this is a man whose nervous system doesn't need me poking it for… At least two minutes while the purple ray does its work.

    "Two minutes, and then you should be healed enough for me to give you a painkiller without killing you."

    "Not important. People… Safe."

    "Got to be honest, I'm impressed that you're still alive."

    "White God."

    Um..? "What do you mean by that?"

    "We were… Commanded. Spread radiologicals." He shudders. "I got..." He manages to weakly raise his head and look at the river. "This close before I fell. Then… I saw the White God, and the... My mind cleared. Tried to throw it away, away from the water. Live to shout for attention, warn… Someone. MostImportant thing."

    "The White God. It looked like-"

    I generate a construct of the Life Entity.

    "-this?"

    There's something odd in his expression as his eyes lock onto it. He nods, stiffly.

    "You saw it?"

    He nods again, still staring at the image.

    "That happened yesterday?"

    Another nod. He lived that long with those radiation burns… Not impossible, but… Unlikely.

    I dismiss the construct.

    "I understand that the government of the People's Republic of China is not in favour of religion. While I personally know that all of the Earth owes the being you saw a great deal, it might be a good idea not to talk about it too freely."

    He looks up at me and nods stiffly. There's some actual skin on his face now, which is a significant improvement. So… He drew on the white light. Not much, but enough to keep his body alive while he tried to get the fuel rod away from the river.

    I know that the Life Entity can empower people. That's why Nommo's still alive after all this time. But that isn't common. He described the process as reaching into the furthest limits of the Earth's thaumosphere through meditation. But… If the Life Entity is… Occupying the space Mannheim created rather than where the Guardians put it…

    Then it would now be easier. And we can't really have a bigger target painted on the planet than 'successfully opposed Darkseid'…

    Well, if we can then we now do. And if we can't then we can't.

    Alright, Doctor Li looks recovered enough not to keel over. I numb his extremities and… Use ring power to accelerate the rate of repairs, patching up the parts that are too badly damaged for the purple healing ray's regeneration enhancement to affect. Only a few more moments pass, then he's back to full physical fitness. I reach out to offer him a hand up.

    He takes it, looking a little stunned as he examines himself.

    "Thank you."

    "I can fly you back to the power plant if you like?"

    "Thank you, no. I would like to take the time it will take to walk there to think things over. I… Am not sure, of a great many things."

    "Rightoh."

    I transition back to the power plant, next to Mr. Atom as he closes his radiation absorption vents.

    "I got the fuel rod and the scientist, but we might have a problem. He saw the Life Entity."

    "Yes."

    "You're not surprised?"

    "Initial interviews suggest that the closer a human was tied to the Anti-Life, the clearer and more intense their vision of the Life Entity was. They do not understand what it was they saw, but they know that it was part of what freed them."

    He takes the fuel rod from me and eats it.

    "Create a new zeta tube construct. I am needed elsewhere."
     
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  14. Vaermina

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    So... Paul's plan to save Earth worked, but now put all life in the universe in the crosshairs of various evil beings.
     
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  15. LiamOfOrmonde

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    Wait what? I thought Mister Atom had a grill-mouth. How did he eat a fuel rod? Then if he does have a mouth-mouth, how did he eat the rod? Did he just open up and drop it in, or did he eat it like a normal person eats a Footlong sub?
     
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    That should either say 'They just' or 'The Justified'.

    If we weren't aware of the Life Entity, that statement could've been taken in a very different way.

    Not sure if people seeing the Life Entity like this is a good or bad thing overall, but it's good that Paul is now aware that some people have seen it.

    I wonder how many people will start a new religion worshipping the "White God". I also hope they think of a better name for the Life Entity.
     
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  17. KenNM

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    Agreed. First thing to come to mind when I saw White God was Dresden Files' name for the Big G. It's a pretty catchy one all told.

    So, we've got multiple people with visions of the Life Entity, and Paul knows Earth got an even bigger target painted on their back.

    Yeah, it definitely seems like part of the rebuilding process is building a superpowered army to resist the inevitable invasion force.

    Rocket's belt, and Star Girl's rod and belt, along with the Danner formula are a good start for a uniform, military and police force
     
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    BlackCoat13 I trust you know where the happy button is?

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    Doctor Li: "I saw the White God."
    Snowflame: "My brother you have seen the one true god as well!"
    Paul: "Not... that White God..."
     
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  19. Lord Ernest

    Lord Ernest At the End...

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    Mr. Atom is the robot. Major Atom, or currently President Adams, is the energy-manipulation superhero usually known as Captain Atom, that can absorb radioactive energy and materials into himself. Most people remember him now because of the Justice League Unlimited animated series, I think.
     
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    Given that Paul addressed them was Mr. Atom, and Paul's distate and anal retentiveness about not using codenames, he'd have called him President Adams or something if it was the guy.

    Sounds like Paul brought over the robot, which does beg the question of how they can eat a fuel rod.
     
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    Crunch crunch crunch.

    Like eating a florescent light bulb, but spicy.
     
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    "are too"

    Yeah, now I'm worried that racists are going to use that as justification for their shit.

    Maybe a new name could be the Light.

    Ironic, I know.
     
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    Well, it's also fitting.

    It is the Light that came into existence when the Presence said "let there be light"
     
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    Okay, yeah, that would wreck shit worse than mere inattention. Though you have to wonder why? I mean, the 'how' is obvious enough: Anti-Life sent them crazy and their local 'master' was evidently a murderous lunatic.

    Surprised he's accepting the need to take time away from his console, but he's probably got a continuous feed from here.

    Super-science. Doesn't have to make a lick of sense, especially if it's Earth bullshit.

    Well, okay. I get the need for haste in the clean-up period, but five minutes? To be fair, a Lantern should be able to handle this in one.

    Still insane that they were ordered to pull a fuel rod out anyway. Especially if it came out 'hot'. And judging by their damage, it was very much so.

    Ah, I see now. Polluting and poisoning the river that feeds the city, and all those downstream. Pain and suffering followed by many, many deaths.

    I'm guessing he carried it here. Amazed he's still alive, as nuclear fuel rods are not happy fun toys.

    Hopefully flushing any residual radiation out of him in the process of healing. And keeping an eye out for potential cancer outbreaks in his system.

    ...Methinks the White Light played some part in that. The Life Entity does things for unknowable reasons sometimes, after all.

    Calling in the good news, I assume. 'Rod accounted for, one casualty being healed.'

    And the Ray is busy enough dealing with the radiation effects.

    ...Is he meant to be someone important, or is that just caution?

    They are now, yes. I'm guessing he tried to make the rod safe after the Anti-Life was repelled. Even if he might have been the one to carry it here in the first place beforehand...

    ...That sounds like he got a personal visitation by the Entity... And I suspect he won't be the only one on the planet who did.

    Making amends for what he was forced to do, eh? A story that will likely be repeated elsewhere too.

    Careful, OL. Don't go flashing that around too much.

    Probably a sense of 'it doesn't compare to the real thing, but close enough.'

    Now, what to do with him and that knowledge?

    Unless a higher power wanted him to survive for its own inscrutable reasons.

    In other words, keep mum or someone might take issue with it.

    That might explain the surprised expression it had. So it's out of the safety bubble the Guardians put it in? That might be troublesome.

    At least the fellow isn't flying around with a ring and a natty silver-and-white costume.

    Given he was at death's door not three minutes ago (and only because the Entity was holding it shut,) that's not surprising.

    As long as it's not still 'hot'. But Mister Atom has that handled, methinks.

    Though I would expect OL to make a note of the guy's details, figuratively speaking. Plant a tracer or a Ring bookmark or something, that sort of thing.

    Wonder if anyone else has reported similar visions. Perhaps this isn't news to Atom.

    "This is not the first such occurrence the League has made note of."

    So there could be hundreds, even thousands of people worldwide who saw something like an 'angel'. Those with strong Abrahamic beliefs might just think 'Oh, God did it', but there's bound to be some who want to look deeper.

    Weighing in in the Atom eating the fuel rod thing: Most of his depictions do have a human-like mouth, or at least something recognisable as a mouth. Even if there's a grill inside his 'lips' he can probably retract it to insert objects. As for the visions of the Entity, I expect some may attribute it to their own deity's messenger or similar, but some will be curious. OL might want to watch out for that.
     
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    The -> They
     
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    Lord Ernest At the End...

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    My bad, I just assumed it was a typo. Mostly because absorbing radiological elements is Major Atom's main schtick and I didn't recall that Mr. Atom could do it as well. And I know it probably doesn't distract the robot as much, but still seems weird to occupy the (at the moment) main coordinator for the League in something that, while dangerous, doesn't seem that important.

    Oh, and if Mr. Atom can consume the rods for energy it would make sense if he can properly open his mouth.

    Is it? I don't know if something post-New 52 came out, which I wouldn't care about, but I was under the impression that Emotional Entities were the first living beings within a universe to connect with their respectice emotions, which is why they became embodiments of it.

    With the Life Entity I would presume that, whatever they are, they were the first living being to properly experience the joy of life or something like that. I'm not sure that there is any particular connection with The Source or The Presence or any other divine being.
     
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    The White Light Entity isn't really an emotional entity. The White Light Entity arrived in the universe bringing the concept of Light and Life with it, exiling Nekron, which turned him into cosmic Get off my lawn man.

    Which is why Nekron's ultimate goal was to destroy the White Light Entity, with it gone, the concept of life would go with it, instantly killing everyone and freeing Nekron to return home.

    A connection to the Source/Presence can be inferred, but was never actually stated that I'm aware.

    Well before flashpoint anyway.
     
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    BR549 This is filth! FILTH!!

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    ‘Lots’
    I wonder how it feels for them to appear in the afterlife. Does the Anti-life just disappear? I wonder if that makes appearing in Hell better or worse.
    ‘whose’
    or
    First ‘skin is’ extraneous.
     
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    Are we really worried about the Life Entity specifically though? It's basically a more powerful Emotional Entity than all the others put togethere, and I doubt it suffers from the same weaknesses.

    The biggest threat is to earth, not the source of all life.
     
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