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With This Ring (Young Justice SI) (Thread Fourteen)

Discussion in 'Creative Writing' started by Mr Zoat, Jan 27, 2019.

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  1. Stsword

    Stsword Versed in the lewd.

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    It's not helpless, but in the comics it seemed to need a host to make full use of its abilities, it couldn't defeat Nekron until it had a good host, Sinestro wasn't sufficiently compatible, but Hal was.

    And since if it dies everything else in the universe dies because life becomes impossible on the conceptual level that's not really something I'd be blasé about.
     
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  2. Firewillreign

    Firewillreign Know what you're doing yet?

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    Yeah, but an argument could be made because nekron embodied its conceptual opposite, death. I guess there's no way to know for sure but I doubt it'd have as much trouble with something less opposed to its nature.

    Edit: Whatever happened to that Black Lantern druid or something who showed up way way back in Roanake Island with Klarion and co and after that with Arcane? I can't remember.
     
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  3. Ciber

    Ciber Know what you're doing yet?

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    When is OL going to use the power of friendship & vast wealth & a power ring to bring in some off world disaster relief?
     
  4. ch405_5p34r

    ch405_5p34r Getting some practice in, huh?

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    definitely could use some of that, but it’ll have to be handled with some tact so that it’s not too… imperialistic in nature.
     
  5. Radiant Knight

    Radiant Knight Phoenix Fire

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    actually that's a good question- how was Snowflame affected by the anti-life?
     
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    Handlewithcare Versed in the lewd.

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    So if the White Light saved then and Paul brought the light...does that make him Luc...actually, where was Lucifer in all this? Isn't he still on earth?
     
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  7. Ngamer11

    Ngamer11 Experienced.

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    According to WOG, he's past his bar owning phase, so it's possible he's no longer in this universe.
     
  8. Firewillreign

    Firewillreign Know what you're doing yet?

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    Besides, why would Lucifer give a shit either way?

    Dudes so far above anyone else in the setting that Earth 16 may as well be a slightly interesting petri dish.

    Edit: On the other hand, free will is kind of his thing….
     
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  9. Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    Thank you, corrected.
    It's very powerful, it's white, it works.
    Thank you, corrected.
    The Life Entity doesn't look particularly human.
    Thank you, corrected.
    That one is intentional.
     
  10. KenNM

    KenNM Actually 22

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    Well, we have WoG from Zoat that if Joker died, a fully restored, and sane Jack Napier would end up in Heaven because they take the insanity defense very seriously.

    Presumably, anyone that makes it to Heaven is purged of Anti-Life
     
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  11. Ngamer11

    Ngamer11 Experienced.

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    As I can see, the first sentence of the latest story part hasn't been corrected in this thread, only in the story only thread.
     
  12. Darko

    Darko Connoisseur.

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    True, but we're talking about racists here.

    They're not renowned for being logical or caring about facts.
     
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  13. Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    Thank you, corrected.
    Instinctive ingroup-outgroup differentiation can't happen with a thing that very visibly isn't part of your group.
     
  14. Ngamer11

    Ngamer11 Experienced.

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    I think what they mean is that some bigots will remember seeing a white being and learn that it channels something called the White Light, and decide that this justifies white supremacy regardless of how nonsensical that is. This will then lead to them trying to use the image of the Life Entity as a symbol for white power. Hopefully if someone actually tries this Paul will shut it down ASAP.
     
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  15. Darko

    Darko Connoisseur.

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    You're really giving them too much credit for their intelligence.

    Pretty much.
     
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  16. Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    Instinct isn't a matter of intelligence.
     
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  17. Ardy

    Ardy I trust you know where the happy button is?

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    Neither are Nazis, but their instincts say to listen to their bosses
     
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    Having the life entity be who Dr. Li saw is far better than what I initially expected given the high levels of radiation involved.

    No dealing with the magical super cancer entity today, that would be a rough one to rebound into right after a Darkseid invasion.
     
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    Coda Versed in the lewd.

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    effect (but the other one in the chapter is correct)
     
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  20. BR549

    BR549 This is filth! FILTH!!

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    IIRC, Dark Druid was imprisoned in the Tower of Fate, which considering John Quinn raises further questions.
     
  21. Prince Charon

    Prince Charon Just zis guy, you know?

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    Oh, dear. Yes, yes it does.
     
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    Oh, balls
     
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  23. Mr Zoat

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    Thank you, corrected.
     
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    Mr Zoat

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    18th February 2013
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    I sigh as the g-elves escort… An idiotic American college student in. He's dressed like an unusually sheltered middle class youth's idea of what a punk looks like, faux-leather bracers, three hundred dollar leather jacket and jeans that were 'ripped' with a pair of scissors. He looks up at me with a depressing combination of despair and hope. "Ah, Mister… Grayven?"

    "Perry.. Jerome.. White."

    I make a show of slumping slightly in my chair, elbows resting on my desk.

    "How..?"

    "Ah… Mister Grayven?"

    "A simple question, man. How on earth did you manage it?"

    "Well, I…" His eyes shift shiftily as he tries to work out what the right answer is. "I-. The book made it… I didn't even think it was real. Y'know?"

    "You, a rank neophyte, with no prior experience of magic, managed to summon up the Queen of the Succubae."

    To my surprise and mild satisfaction, he manages to pull himself up slightly.

    "Yeah."

    "Why?"

    "Ah… My last girlfriend dumped me a couple of months ago, and she-. I'm pretty sure she's been spreading shit about me with all her friends-."

    I raise my right hand. He stops talking.

    "I can well understand a young man being horny and without a partner. What I don't understand is going from that to selling your soul to Queen Triskele."

    "I just… Stopped reading at 'succubus'."

    I close my eyes.

    One.

    Two.

    Three.

    Four.



    Okay.

    I open my eyes.

    "If you'd stopped reading at 'succubus' then we wouldn't be in this position. So am I to understand that your aim was to summon up an idealised sexual partner and make merry, and worry about the bill later?"

    "I just… Figured she'd.. want… 'Vital force' or something?"

    "Mister White, Japanese pornography is not a reliable guide to demonology. Also." I close my eyes again and shake my head. "Triskele has the form of a giant skeletal snake with an androgynously beautiful face strapped to her skull. Now, I'm dating a horse, so I'm not going to criticise you for having extra-anthropological tastes, but…"

    "There were… There were, like, other pictures on the page, and I didn't really… I didn't know she was the snake, I just thought… I thought the bones were… You know, decoration."

    If I ever find myself in the room with the man responsible for World of Warcraft…

    "I hope that the rest of your studies are going rather better than the 'F' I'm giving you in demonology."

    "'F'-? The spell worked, didn't-?"

    "It didn't achieve its stated objective."

    "OW! Fuck you!"

    Mr. White winces as his wish is pushed into the room, bound hand, foot and neck with enchanted bonds of iron, the neck bracket attached to poles held by federal agents on work experience.

    One suitably nubile succubus, magically able and willing to indulge his every desire. Which unless I miss my guess probably started at the occasional mildly unusual sex act and quickly morphed into supportive girlfriend things that she'd find painfully boring but was too scared of her queen to say anything about.

    "Jer-ry! They're hurting me!"

    "Do you have your immigration paperwork?"

    "Wha..? I'm American."

    Improbable breast-waist-hips ratio, flawless skin without makeup, purple hair and… I sniff. Yes, a mild aphrodisiac scent. None of that is impossible for a metahuman, but a metahuman wouldn't suffer burns from the sanctified iron.

    "You're a demon. And while the two aren't necessarily contradictory, I had Mister Constantine go through your alleged paperwork."

    "Constan-?" … "Fuuuuuuuuuuuck."

    "Not quite sure what he's got that I haven't, but sure. Be worried about him." I gesture to the two agents accompanying her. "As you can see, the United States of America is a little better prepared to handle things relating to magic these days."

    "Ah, babe? I think we should probably cooperate."

    "But Jer-ry! The queen's gunna be super-pissed!"

    I shake my head. "You know full well that in four years it's not going to matter anyway."

    Mr. White looks at me nervously. "Why? What happen in four years?"

    "The pact isn't 'until death'. It's 'until Triskele gets bored'. Five years at most, then she drags you off to Hell."

    "…" His eyes widen. "F-uuuuck."

    "You can get out of it! Just make a new deal! It's like a mortgage!"

    Mr. White looks at me for confirmation.

    "Yes, if you can scrounge up a new innocent soul to sacrifice, that would indeed work. The last person Mister Constantine found in your position habitually kidnapped and sacrificed babies to fulfil the requirement."

    "Fuck."

    "Sure!" The succubus rattles her chains. "Just let me ditch these guys and I'll get right on it, and on you."

    I gaze levelly at Mr. White. "Seriously?"

    "I-I don't wanna murder babies!"

    "You wouldn't. You'd kidnap babies. The queen would kill them. And maybe not even then! Sometimes they just get trained as cultists, or sold on to other people!"

    I lean forwards. "May I assume, then, that I will have your assistance in un-fucking this situation?"

    He nods, while his succubus concubine just looks away, disinterested.

    "And you."

    "Whaaa-aat! You're ruining my contract!"

    "Yes, but let's be honest with ourselves: you don't actually like Queen Triskele. Do you?"

    "She got me this job.""So no, she suuuucks."

    If possible, Mr. White slumps a little further.

    "It was just one puppy! I have needs.""And wants."

    "So I intend to tug on your contract to get Queen Triskele's attention. Work with me, and you will avoid prosecution and eternal damnation both." I hold out my right arm. "Shake my hand."

    He shakes.
     
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  25. Rebu

    Rebu hey, little Anna, you're the one

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    EgyptianDio DAJAKU! DAJAKU!

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    Dear Presence… I guess in a world like DC there had to be at least one moron like this.
     
  27. Silverias

    Silverias Know what you're doing yet?

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    This needs to be linked to "Friends on the Other Side."
     
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  28. Lord Ernest

    Lord Ernest At the End...

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    Been a while since we saw Grayven, I was even a bit lost about what was going on.

    Is this convenient timing or has this Perry White (Luthor) Jr. been on this deal for a while and got caught recently due to Grayven's interest in Succubus stuff?

    Honestly, comic universes usually have more than one, more than a handful even, there's normally a whole lot of those available.
     
  29. moralrelativity

    moralrelativity Recovering pendant.

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    Improbably -> Improbable
     
  30. Ngamer11

    Ngamer11 Experienced.

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    That should say 'his'.

    What does the Renegade have to do to become even more terrifying than Constantine for demons? Will it only happen once he starts his Harrowing of Hell?

    That quotation mark should be moved to the end.
     
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