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With This Ring (Young Justice SI) (Thread Fourteen)

Discussion in 'Creative Writing' started by Mr Zoat, Jan 27, 2019.

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  1. Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    Thank you, corrected.
     
  2. Senevri

    Senevri Not too sore, are you?

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    On the other hoof, she's immortal, so what's the rush? You can only go to high school with your friends once.

    OTOOH, if she's not in the same school, or didn't have friends, what's the rush? She can always come up with a fake ID and go through high school later.

    Still, saying things like, "I can't wait to get out of HS, it's a waste of time" is SUCH a juvenile thing to claim...
     
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  3. Sorrow

    Sorrow Getting sticky.

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    Uhh... >_<

    Wha-at did I just read?
     
  4. Pez

    Pez Spaceman

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    It hasn't been mentioned. The all mighty Zoat mentioned he might try to fill in the gaps from Artemis's/the Team's perspective (regarding the 'mind control' comment). She's a vastly different person now, so I'd assume that whatever brought her and Tao together might not still be there.

    Plus... she did just run off to ponyland.
     
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  5. Pinklestia

    Pinklestia Well worn.

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    Basically don't do things you do not want to do because they feel wrong. But make sure you are not doing those things because is something you don't want to do, not because is something you are were told you should not do.
     
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  6. Darko

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    I think Zoat mentioned both her and the renegade are going to try and get back into their respective romantic relationships, so she may still be dating Tao.

    Also going to Equestria isn't an indication that she broke up with him.

    People can want to have some time away from their loved ones, but that doesn't mean they don't love them anymore, or that they don't want to be near them for a long time.

    Her going to another place most likely means that she wants to go to a place where she won't feel so much stress, not that she wants to leave her life on Earth behind.
     
  7. rkyeun

    rkyeun Cabbitus Maximus

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    You literally redefined an entire society by shooting arrows at a star. And killing that star.
     
  8. Flightless Man

    Flightless Man Versed in the lewd.

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    I was wondering if we were going to find out the Paragon timeline Sheeda are infact the ones Grayven and Artemis conquered. Doesn't seem like its the case.
     
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  9. Darko

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    Zoat the title for this renegade chapter is called 'Otherworld', but it should be called 'Cold Iron', like the previous one.
     
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  10. Threadmarks: Cold Iron (part 15)
    Mr Zoat

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    26th June 2012
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    That'll… Do.

    Far enough underground for shelter against low-power weapons, masked against most commonly used forms of sensor, tough enough to withstand intermediate assault for long enough for the energy shields to rise. Interior is low-price-civilian-home, which… Is adequate for our purposes. No overt sign that the locals are aware of us, but without knowing more about their society I can't be completely sure what that would look like.

    "Orange Lantern, you about ready?"

    I nod at Jordan's head as it floats over my ring.

    "Temporary shelter ready to receive refugees."

    "We'll be down in a minute."

    "Is the rest of the ship secure?"

    "I think so. The rest of the crew are just trying to stay out of our way."

    "We don’t really have the facilities to take them prisoner." I look around. "I could build one down here, but… We don't have anyone who could stop them using magic. So I guess… Smash the bridge and drive and leave them there?"

    "Or we could talk to the local government about taking them prisoner."

    "'We' or 'me'?"

    "If this 'Malvolio' guy is real, I need to be there."

    "I'll use my armour's stealth systems and actually find the local authorities while you bring the refugees down."

    "Don't start anything without me."

    "I'm not Guy, Green Lantern."

    "Yeah. I can predict him. GL out."

    Right then. I drop my construct armour and alter my armour for improved stealth. Then I go invisible, and use my armour's flight systems to head at speed towards the closest settlement. It's not actually all that far away, but it's a small village with a small airport and some farmland. Less chance of sophisticated monitoring equipment than somewhere larger. It should let me get a better idea of what they're like before risking further contact.

    The thought occurs to me as I accelerate to near the speed of sound…

    We've… Won.

    Without Sivana's help… Further help, cleaning up the Sheeda holdouts could take a long time, but without the Castle Revolving, that's it. When their initial attack bounced I was convinced this was inevitable, but now it's… Happened. Gloriana played her hand, and her strongest warriors couldn't stand against the League. If she'd limited herself to some harvesting and then returned to the future she'd probably have managed it, but…

    I'm reminded of the first White Dwarf battle report when they released Battlefleet Gothic. The man playing Eldar forgot the 'run' part of 'hit and run' and lost an escort squadron to a bombardment by the Imperial Navy. One of the other members of staff had to write 'hit and run' on a piece of paper and wave it at him to remind him, then he woke up and didn't lose another ship. Even managed a draw by disengaging his fleet once the Imperials closed the distance.

    The point being, of all the sensible and rational-based-on-incomplete-information things she could do, Gloriana did this. That… Suggests a mind incapable of comprehending that she might be… Not in the moral wrong, but in the practical wrong. If she were running a hundred metre sprint, she could be ninety metres behind the field and still be completely confident that she'd end up taking the gold. She's incapable of backing down, not because she's so proud that she'd rather die than lose, but because she can't conceive of any situation where she might lose.

    I bet it would be fascinating to look inside her.

    I slow as I approach a low wall, my ring notifying me that Jordan is entering the atmosphere in as covert an insertion as a Green Lantern carrying passengers can manage. The wall marks the outer border of the settlement, a small stone-paved path encompassing the settlement. But… The wall is faux-stone, small gullies pretending to be mortared joins actually just moulded indents in larger single pieces of synthesised stone, with a strip of light paint to aid in the illusion.

    Yeah, this looks like something I could see a space resort doing. Pre-assembled walls are easier to put together centrally than cutting local stones and making mortar on-site. Probably needs less maintenance as well. And the pavement is a sort of faux-stone mat?

    I sigh. It is going to be tourists, isn't it?

    I fly over it, further signs of plasticization metaphorically leaping out at me as I look around. A small pond fed by a hose, fake fish tied to the bottom by a string which produces movement by rotating the plate the string is attached to. Synthetic grass sheets laid down over the local soil, a handful of local succulents poking through here and there at the edges. Reed sunshades made of printed reeds, a single piece made to look like it was woven but actually held together with staples.

    It's like a space package tour. I… I'm less sure that this is a product of Malvolio's imagination. If only because a man of his era would find it easy to imagine a proper stone wall.

    I float upwards slightly, spotting a family of the species I scanned earlier in the fields… Picking some sort of round purple fruit from a short tree. This clearly isn't an agricultural production centre, so the only thing I can come up with is that it's a back-to-nature holiday home. The adult male has a bucket and is working his way along the line of fruit trees while the adult female is riding herd on the children, who appear completely fascinated by their environment. City children getting their first taste of nature, I assume.

    I fly onwards, heading towards the centre of town. The other villas are more or less the same, but the structure near the airfield has substantially more advanced technology inside it. That should be the best place find out more.

    The building… Looks a bit more natural, a bit more honestly weathered than the rest, even though its brutalist design probably wasn't meant to. Maybe it was repurposed from an earlier role? A female white alien is sitting in an office, doing… Actual paperwork, and they don't appear to be entirely at home with using a pen. Which is what I'd expect of someone from an advanced civilisation who's being forced to slum it. Goodness knows that my handwriting is far worse than it was when I was in school. They're probably the best person to talk to if we get that far.

    I phase through the back wall and look at the villa complex's computer core for a moment, check my surroundings, then phase in and connect myself to it.

    Oh.

    It's literally just a local management mainframe. It isn't connected to a global data network and doesn't have a social database. No alien films… I've got names of current and former residents… Nothing about government or civil organisation. Not a total shock; it's not like most computers on Earth have a full copy of Encarta Populi in their hard drive. The lack of a data network is a little strange; that suggests that these people are fairly hardcore about their isolationism. Which is a little at odds with the walls, but… Aliens.

    Can't get anything useful here. It looks like I'll have to either go to a larger settlement or ask. Ask. Manually ask a question like some sort of unusually verbose caveman.

    I switch over to my less intimidating light armour and head towards the office.

    "Excuse me?"

    "Just a moment!"

    I stop, standing at parade rest as the tour operator puts her pen down, stretches her fingers, then gets up and heads out from the office.

    And stops dead when she sees me.

    "Hello."

    "Hiiiiiii. I… Didn't know we were expecting any guests today."

    "You're not. I'm-."

    "Great Torch, is this actually an invasion? I-I didn't read that part of the manual! I don't know what to do!"

    "I'm not invading you. But certain… Things are happening, and I need more information-."

    "And you're going to suck it out of my ears?!"

    I frown. "No? Why would you even think that?"

    "Oh, you're just ruining all of my alien abduction fantasies!"



    "Sorry?"
     
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  11. Mr Zoat

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    Thank you, corrected.
     
  12. RichardWhereat

    RichardWhereat Aia airëa Fëanáro.

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    Don't ruin her fantasies OL, give her ear a lick, and suck, and a nibble or two.

    Then maybe grab her bodily and bite her neck, sucking on it while you hold her in place, and nibble back up to her ears, and suck on them harder.

    Pull her body against yours. Grasp her by the back of the head, and around her back. Abduct her thoroughly.

    It could set the tone for interspecies contact, for generations to come.
     
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    I love everything about this... interaction ["You're... not going to abduct and probe ravish me?"] but I can't help but note this expression. Nope, not Malvolio at all. ;)
     
  14. Dur'id the Druid

    Dur'id the Druid Know what you're doing yet?

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    ......... Your drawing a lot of inspiration from that Star Trek TNG episode where Riker was caught on an under-cover mission on a non-warp civlization, and helped by that alien with an overactive imagination of alien sexual encounters, aren't you?
     
  15. Sceptic

    Sceptic Critical Irrationalist

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    So they're just horsing around? :p
     
  16. Joelseph14

    Joelseph14 Know what you're doing yet?

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    Probe her probe her probe her probe her. Fulfill her fantasies
     
  17. Vice Xarno

    Vice Xarno Versed in the lewd.

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    episode name pls
     
  18. Chojin Patriarch

    Chojin Patriarch Veteran Lurker

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    Not bad for something largely intended to be temporary housing.But OL never does things by halves, does he? That's going to make for some very confused archaeologists somewhere down the line, though. :D

    So they've basically pacified the Castle Revolving?

    And if Hal's been practising his shit, that's literally one transition away...

    Sensible, given what they've seen the heroes, especially the Lanterns, doing to any opposition. Presumably Glory-bra's pulled her forces back in hopes they'll get bored and wander off.

    Wouldn't really do to leave a bunch of sado-masochistic space elves with a taste for torture and murder hanging around unattended. Smacks of irresponsibility, really.

    At least OL will be there to moderate how the scenario plays out? Hopefully things don't go quite as pear-shaped as original Canon.

    No, OL never starts fights. :rolleyes: Not unless he's got absolute superiority in firepower, positioning and surprise, anyway. It's a pity other people don't feel the same way.

    ...Ouch. True, but ouch. After all, you know how Guy will react in most situations, especially with Will Enlightenment. OL seems to change tacks on a whim as he realises moment-to-moment desires...

    Well, he did say they were about modern-day in terms of tech. If it's anything like Earth... Our Earth... Then they're not likely to have any equipment capable of detecting him in any way, outside of some remote high-end science lab...

    Feels like a let-down, huh? You were expecting it to be harder, maybe? But the Sheeda aren't ones for long-term conflicts, from what we've seen. They go in, hit hard, and finish up with minimum wastage of bio-mass...

    She couldn't keep her eye on the bigger picture, could she? She got bogged down in the insult of people actually fighting back, and winning, against her.

    For the layman, think 'space navy combat game' with a high granularity of simulation of physics. Eldar ships are corsairs, fast in the right conditions but prone to struggling when things turn against them, lightly armoured and crewed with potent weapons. Imperial ships, by the Emperor, are bricks of massive armour and armament, best at presenting broadsides or carrier operations. If the former get in the line of the latter's guns, they go away fast...

    And what we've seen of her bears that out. She's been drinking her own Kool-aid, basically believing she is a goddess, and that all other life exists for her entertainment. Such hubris fills her that she cannot comprehend anything she orders done failing, unless it's a deliberate act of betrayal. The ultimate in narcissistic self-aggrandisement.

    "Oh, my..." </Takei> But seriously, I doubt she can hold onto any particular desire for long. It'd be a whirlwind of fleeting wants and passing fancies, too shallow to be more than a puddle. You'll probably feel like you need a shower afterwards, though...

    Huh. So, 'modern' construction pretending to be something much older. Moulded concrete or similar, dressed to look 'old-fashioned'. Probably alogn the lines of sixteenth- or seventeenth-century English manors, I bet.

    No more real than Disneyland. The airport is probably a good indicator it's not particularly functional as anything but a holiday park.

    I still suspect he probably forged the planet and its people out of will or transmuted matter a century or two back, and let them go, content to watch their daily lives like some cosmic voyeur. I wouldn't be surprised if he considers the place to be like an an antfarm - a flurry of activity and beings living out their lives, but ultimately fake.

    Some things truly are universal, it seems. Children will be children, whatever the species... Presumably the airport and its environs is the management centre for the 'park'...

    Presumably filling out forms that have to be handwritten for some arcane bureaucratic reason. I bet she's just a middle manager, stuck out in the boondocks on this funpark and wishing she were anywhere else...

    Disappointment ensues. Note very computer can be a quantum-processing ultra-CPU one power surge away from sapience, with a collective database of its' makers' entire knowledge base...

    So, closer to the Eighties in terms of infotech. They probably have to send floppies off with weekly updates in the mail with whatever regular flights turn up out here.

    Why, OL. I thought you'd relish the chance to interact with a new species. Besides, you can't just hack every database you come across. You miss out on such fascinating things that way.

    She's probably assuming it's a visitor she hasn't met yet. There's probably enough traffic to allow that...

    Yes... Did you actually describe the locals as anything other than 'flat-faced' and 'white-skinned'? Because I'm guessing they aren't nearly as Human-like as I'm picturing...

    Well, she's taking this rather calmly at least. :p No screaming, after all! Yet.

    :eek: They have a manual for first contact with an extra-planetary race? How forwards-thinking of their government. And that does indeed sound like a reference to the Golden Satellite... It probably serves as their sun in this pocket dimension.

    o_O ...What sort of movies has she been watching?

    Okay, someone cue up the Tennant Whats, please?

    :confused: Not quite what i was thinking, but it works.

    Yeah, we could hear the record-screech in the conversation all the way out here, OL. This is going to be hilarious...

    Well, I don't think that's what any of us were expecting, was it? The question is, is she just quirky, or is everyone there like that? Tomorrow should be very interesting to see.


    ...fake fish tied to the bottom by a string...
    Double-space there.
    ...that suggests that these people...
     
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  19. QuiescentQueste

    QuiescentQueste Not too sore, are you?

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    >I bet it would be fascinating to look inside her.
    Wow dude. Lewd.
     
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    I'm not actually sure, just remember the plot. Starts with Riker getting seriously injured, and being discovered to be not a native at a hospital.
     
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    Isn't a bit premature to celebrate? If the Sheeda still have control of the bridge and drive... You're just asking to be caught with your pants down when Glory-bra pulls a Janeway and triggers self-destruct after hitting you all with Hold Person and Dimensional Anchor. If she needs to ritually sacrifice her entire bridge crew for it to stick she will.

    My thoughts exactly. Even if all of this isn't one big illusion along with dream characters made real (well as real as "people" of Mundus are) it could still be Malvolio's equivalent of Sims game (he conjured a world and brainwashed any visitor that stumbled into his prison/realm). The only thing that sticks out as extra weird is that the local seem to be aware of space aliens being a thing and even have contact with them (probably catering to space alien tourist). But I guess it could all be merely a response to OL's expectations.
     
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    maybe 'assault long enough for'

    Harsh, but true and fair.

    maybe ' of the staff'

    I'm betting she'd get on real swell with Vandal, given that they're so similar.

    Or she might decide to kill him.

    Sometimes being very similar to your romantic partner is a negative instead of a positive.

    'she'd not 'she's

    'she'd rather'

    'staples'

    maybe 'I float slightly upwards'

    maybe 'touch'

    So Paul is more of a Kirk than a Picard, given all the alien girls that want him.

    Granted Picard also had some impressive game.

    It was called First Contact.

    It was the 15th episode of season 4.
     
  23. Darko

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    Paul is like a cocaine addicted chipmunk, you never know what he's going to do.

    Malvolio may have come from a time where some magic was used, so there is that.

    Melmoth was telling the truth about her.

    Just like Vandal Savage.

    Damn it Takei!

    Eh, Paul has looked into some pretty disturbing places before.

    Also she may be able to hold onto her greater desire of causing pain all the time.

    And all the while he watches from above, gently sipping on a glass of octopus urine.

    Now I can't help but imagine a hentai world with its rules.
     
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    This is a weird world.

    Isn't this some kind of pocket universe? So why do they even know other worlds exist and expect an invasion?

    And if they do have access to the wider galaxy...why is Mavolios space station here?

    And that faux naturalism crap...

    Could it be that the entire world is just meant as entertainment for the prisoner? To prevent him from going insane?

    Or even a form of therapy? Make him stare at a peaceful society 24/7 till he becomes peaceful too?
     
  25. RichardWhereat

    RichardWhereat Aia airëa Fëanáro.

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    There's no evidence of sapient alien life in this universe, and we've got people who claim to have been abducted. It's not so weird to have people expecting an invasion.

    Let alone people who want to be probed.
     
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    Thank you, corrected.
    Since when?
    Whatever humanoid species, possibly.
    No, it's to maintain the primitive theme.
    Thank you, corrected.
    First Contact.
     
  27. Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    No, I think those are fine.
    Thank you, corrected.
     
  28. moralrelativity

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    Agreed. I'm just waiting for the other shoe to drop. Is it going to be Tom Marvelo Riddle or the Sheeda or both?
     
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    Both naturally. Thou I am not sure if the Sheeda are the Death Eaters or House Elves in this analogy?
     
  30. Darko

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    Well renegade has been in contact with someone from another setting for a long time now, so I guess it's time for paragon to also get in on the action.

    They're both naturally.

    The elves always seemed more evil and devious to me.
     
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