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With This Ring (Young Justice SI) (Thread Fourteen)

Discussion in 'Creative Writing' started by Mr Zoat, Jan 27, 2019.

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  1. Handlewithcare

    Handlewithcare Not too sore, are you?

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    Nice.

    Bets on what will go horribly wrong while everyone still believes it's part of the game?
     
  2. nick012000

    nick012000 Versed in the lewd.

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    OL covered that in this chapter; if something goes badly wrong he'll either call the exercise off or handle it himself (presumably while using the bracers to inform the League of this fact).
     
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  3. Mquz

    Mquz Versed in the lewd.

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    As Zoat stated (last week?) this scenario is supposed to end with
    the Justice League winning, but with half of them “dead” and a large portion of the world destroyed.
     
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  4. Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    That's.. not.. quite what I said.
     
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  5. Mquz

    Mquz Versed in the lewd.

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    Close enough. I may have exaggerated.
     
  6. Pinklestia

    Pinklestia Versed in the lewd.

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    I will give an applause if he can make the YJ more competent than the JLA cartoon one.

    The comics one... Oh my God the comics one.... they are beyond hopeless. Any decent IT and segurity guy would tear them TWO new assholes.
     
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  7. DrThoth

    DrThoth Know what you're doing yet?

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    I mean, in an episode of JLU, almost every female member was successfully mind-controlled for what seems like longer than a few days, including Wonder Woman, so clearly they’re also dropping the ball a bit in terms of security checks. The Earth-12 League will at least be upgrading their competence in this story thanks to consulting their iteration of the SI (and in Doylist terms, being written by Mr Zoat and not by writers subjected to the practical and logistical concerns of writing for a long-running cartoon).
     
  8. Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    To be fair the women in question only disappeared for a few hours a day (which they forgot) and were otherwise normal. And there were only... Five of them?
     
  9. Flux Casey

    Flux Casey The Colonel

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    Please please please please please let this scenario play out this time. I need to see this!
     
  10. Zig

    Zig Getting sticky.

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    Not just HAM, he's metagaming it by trying to figure out who OL talked to to set it up, totally awesome.
     
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  11. Siiracai The Supernal

    Siiracai The Supernal Shadows and Balance

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    Can anyone give me the link to the time when OL was trying to train a bunch of Greenies before leaving the Sol system? I can't find it, and I don't want to scroll through all of the threads across three forums °~°
     
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  12. Aeess

    Aeess Not too sore, are you?

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    It begins here is it in the story only thread and here on the regular thread.
     
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  13. Pinklestia

    Pinklestia Versed in the lewd.

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    There is literally dozens of way of mind controlling or puppeting someone body.

    Now the most glaring point of failure on the comics league is that communicators and devices that let Leagues enter the Watchtower ages ago still work even if the person is no longer a member of the league. And that KEEPS FUCKING HAPPENING!

    Is hard to create an Injustice League. Is way easier to find a former member of the League, disable them and then use their Justice League communicator to either spy on the League or enter the Watchtower and bobby trap it.
     
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  14. Norgarth

    Norgarth Getting out there.

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    I think it's obligatory to post this in this sort of situation::p:D
     
  15. Gilhelmi

    Gilhelmi Getting sticky.

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    I love Plastic man, one of the more critically underused comic relief characters, whose investigatory talents are also underused.

    I am hoping we get to see more of him. But I am nervous about what happened to Green Lantern Jade suddenly happening to our Paul and Jade during the exercise. I really hope that happens after this is all done because I want to see this play out.
     
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  16. Siiracai The Supernal

    Siiracai The Supernal Shadows and Balance

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    Thank you.
     
  17. NightmareWarden

    NightmareWarden Know what you're doing yet?

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    Mirror Master is clearly intended as a minion, despite his experience, and OL clearly said there's a villain in this scenario. I'm going to predict that the villain will either be a mortal without superpowers (or a personalized super-gadget) or some obscure character that no one has ever heard of. I could be wrong, but OL has associated with such individuals quite a few times.

    Another prediction- the villain is going to be a problem that cannot be solved by face-punching. One way to accomplish this would be to ensure that the villain cannot be linked to any crime going on in the scenario. Oh sure, someone in the league will know they're responsible, it just can't be proved before law enforcement.

    Aww man, just thought of a fun idea for if Grayven was running such a scenario: the president is the villain! Dear lord, confronting such a scenario would be teeth-wrenchingly painful for the heroes! Too bad OL doesn't have a connection like Grayven does.

    Hmm. I wonder if Paul is going to use this scenario to uncover any suspected conspiracy that is beyond his authority to investigate. Heroes have a tendency to stumble upon villainous cults and crimes in the nick of time after all.
     
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  18. hkim

    hkim Making the rounds.

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    Man, I'm actually really looking forward to seeing how this plays out. Paragon is fun again!
     
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    Mr Zoat

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    2nd March
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    Ollie nervously confidently checked his surroundings once more before stepping out from behind the aircon unit and tiptoeing striding purposefully towards the next building.

    Yeah, okay. He was a big enough guy to admit that after last year's report cards he wanted to put in a good performance. And he figured that Paul was probably… Probably above deciding to break his own rules to prove his score right. But it wasn't like he ever fooled himself into thinking that he could handle the same sort of punishment some of the big guys and gals on the League could. And Paul did seem like the kind to treat everyone 'fairly'.

    Bats was still on the Watchtower, going through every bit of info he could get his hands on with J'onn and Katar. He'd told everyone else to head home and 'be ready', because the easiest way to get data would be for someone to walk into an attack Paul's 'Villain Team' had set up. He wondered for a moment whether there actually was a villain team, or if he'd.. just.. gotten...

    Would Arte have told him if he'd roped her into it?



    Maybe?

    He checked the quiet-sounding rooftops and streets of Star City once again, trying to remember if there'd been anything off about the way she'd been acting lately. No, no, nothing… Stuck out. But Paul knew a whole lot of people, so it probably wasn't the team. If only because the whole League actually knew stuff about the team and there's no way Paul would give anyone an edge like that.

    Huh. Okay. Whoever the boss bad guy was, he wasn't going to be able to just… Teleport a whole gang to anywhere, right? Teleporters like that took a whole lot of power. Icon did a lecture on it that one time. Easy enough to power someplace like where he came from, not so easy on Earth. And if Paul knew anyone with a power source like that, he'd… Heh. He'd have already dragged them to KordTech.

    Nothing much happening on the streets, though a couple of people spotted him and waved. He waved back distractedly warmly, without losing any of his hawk-like concentration. Nothing sneaking up on-

    He reached back and took the goggles Roy got him off the clip on his quiver and held them up to his eyes.

    -him.

    Another check, and no problem. Roy was pretty clear that there was some stuff it wouldn't show, but it was supposed to see through most types of invisibility tech. Nothing invisible, nothing-.

    His communicator chimes, and he raises his right arm to press the 'respond' button.

    "Green Arrow. Go."

    "There's a break-in in progress in the Platinum Flats district."

    He instinctively glances in that direction as Batman gives him the address. No sirens yet

    "Is it him?"

    "Does it matter?"

    Well… Kinda.

    He starts running, plotting the route across the rooftops which will get him there fastest. He may not be Batman -and Star City sure isn't Gotham- but he's been patrolling around here long enough to know his way around. If this is some random thief trying to make his Saturday morning a little lively, then this is going to be a cinch. If it's something Paul set up, then there's going to be more to it than that. Which could happen anyway, but it's guaranteed now.

    "Any progress working out what he's up to?"

    "He visited a wide variety of tech companies, as well as government and military officials and people publically known to be associated with League members. Presumably, he sought their permission to involve them in today's events."

    "That narrow it down at all?"

    "Not enough to tell me what the plan is. The range of technologies these companies are working with is too large for me to be able to narrow it down."

    "No ideas at all?"

    "I suspect that Orange Lantern will attempt to create a narrative of escalating intensity, but we can't rely on it. He's set this up so that even he can't predict exactly what will happen."

    So a guy who once turned the moon around can't exactly predict what the villain-.

    "You don't think he got an actual villain, do you?"

    "The location of each of his known criminal associates has been accounted for. Except for the Sivana family."

    He nearly misses effortlessly makes a jump.

    "Sivana? Marvel's mad scientist?"

    "Three members of the family are completely sane. And the younger children have never been independently psychologically assessed."

    "That's reassuring. Okay, you get back to it. I'll let you know when I'm there."

    "Remember to try and recover any evidence you can. This will be part of something bigger."

    "Got it, Bats. Green Arrow out."

    Hm. Canary or Red around? Because if Paul set up a challenge for the three of them and there was only one

    "Green Arrow to Pretty Bird. You wouldn't be anywhere near-" And roll "-Platinum Flats, would you?"

    "Black Canary to Robin Hood, no, I'm in Gotham."

    Someone had to cover for Bats. "You drew the short straw?"

    "Rock beats scissors. Roy's in Middleton. Looks like you're going to have to handle whatever this is on your own."

    "I've been doing this eleven years. I think I can handle a break-in."

    "Ollie… If Orange Lantern has decided to throw something big at you, just pull back-."

    "Yeah, I remember Ivo's and.. roid..."



    No. No, he wouldn't.

    "Ollie?"

    Would he?

    "I was just-. Yeah, I got it." The computer strapped to his arm bleeps, and he sees that the silent alarm has just been forwarded to him. The company wasn't one he recognised. Consolidated Applied Sciences, which… Could mean anything.

    Which meant that Paul could justify the villain team finding just about anything there.

    He could phone the manager and 'check' that Paul got permission to use the place. But.. that would kinda be cheating and a sign of desperation. Okay, the building is a little way that way, but-.

    He stops behind the roofline, ducking down as he sees what he assumed to be a lookout on one of the nearby buildings.

    Okay, yeah, that makes sense. A few guards on the outside, ready to call down if they spot something. And they probably report in regularly so knocking them out before they can say anything isn't gunna cut it. Need to find out exactly how many there are, then pull off some quick indirect shots…

    He winced. Those were never easy. But it was doable.

    He takes another quick look. No, no gas mask. A near miss with one of the stronger mixes would work fine. Try to be close to one to pick up their radio, try and work out how well organised they were. And he was also kinda interested in who Paul roped into doing this.

    He worked his way across the roof, careful to stay out of sight before dropping down a fire escape and heading around the block in an approximate circle around the CAS building. Tricky, but definitely doable.

    As he spotted a second lookout he couldn't help but wonder if he was missing something.
     
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  20. thebishop8

    thebishop8 Umm, ackchyually...

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    Ooh, alternative PoV's for this episode?

    *though instead of through
     
  21. Chojin Patriarch

    Chojin Patriarch Veteran Lurker, Rookie Proofreader

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    Oh-ho, a non-OL update? I suppose it's necessary to provide on-the-ground perspective.

    Good summary of the initial plan. Unfortunately, it doesn't account for the possibility of a Leaguer dying... No, knowing Batman, it probably does.
    Correction: 'and Katar.'

    'Arte'? Not ringing a bell. No, wait! Artemis. Took a second.

    Goes to show, Ollie isn't a complete idiot. He is actually a smart guy (having created most of his own trick arrows,) he's just never applied it much.

    Properly paranoid, too. Looks like Ollie's taken a lot of OL's criticisms to heart.

    Ah, quest hook engaged. Let's see how he handles it.

    Good point. Just because OL's running an exercise doesn't mean the crooks have taken the night off.

    Yeah, knowing it's coming isn't going to help him be ready for it, regardless. I find it nice that he's not concerned about local thugs at all.

    Of course, it would be rude to involve someone without permission. Also likely to be illegal, and OL doesn't want the League getting sued.

    And they're still looking for the easy cheat. No way OL would make it so easy.

    That depends on what you mean by actual... Well, we know what he means.

    I like that that's enough to shake him a little.

    So only Thaddeus Senior is classified as 'mad'? How amusing.

    I doubt the challenges are specifically tailored for group or single. I expect all manner of contingencies.

    Ha, familiar turf, I think?

    So long? That means he got started in what, 2000?

    So close, and yet so far. I expect he'll get extra paranoid when he takes down some mookbots.

    Ah, DC. Painfully generic company names to avoid ticking off any real businesses... It even sounds shady.

    Good to see he's choosing to play by the rules. After all, what reason would he have to check ahead? Besides the silent alarm...

    Good to see his experience kicking in. He's probably seen this a hundred times.

    Oh, is he in for a surprise...

    Now, did the lookout spot him or not...

    This is going to be fun, looking at OL and his plans through the League's eyes. Things are going to get crazy right quick as they second-guess themselves...
     
  22. Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    Thank you, corrected.
    Darn it. The wiki misspells his name on the timeline.
    No comment on the infamous Dead Cat Arrow.
    2001
     
  23. Grimnar

    Grimnar Versed in the lewd.

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    Heh, he's got them bouncing at shadows.
     
  24. Prince Charon

    Prince Charon Just zis guy, you know?

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    Is it Platinum Flats or Platinum Heights? The two are rather distinct.
     
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  25. Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    Thank you, corrected.
     
  26. Chaoswind

    Chaoswind Lord of nonsense

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    Funny how Olie though his way to the usefulness of a teleporter in this scenario and dismissed it because earth doesn't have the power generation to hook one of those to the power grid without causing a blackout.

    Earth is bullshit Olie.
     
  27. Mquz

    Mquz Versed in the lewd.

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    Plus, in this fic OL has already introduced to the public an open source power source capable of powering a city. String a couple of those together and you can power a teleporter. Plus... they know the Sivanas are involved, and they know they can teleport.
     
  28. Handlewithcare

    Handlewithcare Not too sore, are you?

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    Hehe. Every JL member: Hellooo paranoia. Did you miss me?
     
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    Steelplaza Making the rounds.

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    They don't know the Sivanas are involved. Only that they are acquaintances of Paul and not yet ruled out.
     
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    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    Sort of.

    The teleporter issue has been discussed by the Justice League, because there are obvious problems with the zeta tube network. Fixed end points are the big thing, but it's actually really expensive to set up and maintain. The best alternative would be a point to point teleporter like they use in Justice League Unlimited, but that requires a whole network of what are effectively spy satellites to be reliable globally and they aren't sure that the Security Council would sign off on it. The next best system does indeed use stupid amounts of power.

    For a superheroes it isn't really practical to plan for every possible form of bullshit. You can only really plan for the fact that there might be bullshit.
     
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