With This Ring (Young Justice SI) (Thread Fourteen)

Ooh this gunna be good.

 

Troll grayven is best grayven, truly this feels like another star crossed episode already.

(Star crossed is the only reason I started to read renegade updates as well).

 

I bet the ponies never expected this eventuality

 

So were the Luna and Celestia that showed up the previous April Fools episode MUCH more powerful than this version?

 

If Twilight is an Alicorn already then the population has increased 200%, unless Cadance was already a thing.

It also means that everything leading up to fourh season happened inside a year or Sunset fucked up the temporal alignment.

Also does this mean that the Sirens are on Grayven's Earth now? In which case they either are morbidly obese from feeding on all that strife right now...or were killed by the first low level villain they annoyed.

 

Maybe want to put a hyphen before that last word. Unless this pony business is pushing your writing in a randier direction.

 

Cadance had already ascended. In the comic that is referenced as to why sunset is banish Candance is shown playing with filly Twilight as an Alicorn.

 

Dangit, I was off on the location. And I don't think you can do that in this position, Grayven, the equine body just isn't built for missionary position.

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Ah, going for a choke hold?

And you just ended up poking her in the neck. I bet she's a little confused.

Horse fights are nasty.

"Again with the energy blasts? Learn something new!"

Don't tempt fate, Sinestro!

Did she just pull of a magical girl transformation? No, no, not enough frills...

Easy mistake to make, when you're twice their size.

The armour, the big sword or both? Either way, you need to stop getting mauled like that.

Well, with enough enthusiasm, anything can be a throwing weapon. And telekinesis makes it a lot safer to thrust. Phrasing!

Grayven, please stop taunting happy fun princess!

My word, does Celestia know you know words like that? ... What does that even mean?

"Get off me, you perverted knave!"

I suspect she's not used to being physically overpowered like this. Given there are very few Ponies near her size in all of Equestria. It's probably been a while since she's had any sort of rough-and-tumble action...Phrasing!!

And the inner Brony peeks out again. Focus, Grayven!

Aw, someone's here to break up the fun.

Oh, boy, now she's got a reason to fight harder...

Hah, that's got to surprise the princess. Someone who doesn't recognise her on sight?

Patience, Sunset, a little work and you'll soon be the Alicorn of Ambition.

To answer Handlewithcare, Celestia and Cadence before 'Nightmare Moon', Luna and Twilight after 'Magical Mystery Cure'. That's a solid 100% gain.

I know this is a dream come true, Grayven, but control yourself, man! ...Er, Stallion!

"Indoor voice, Luna."

Because of course it's his fault.

"Rather a bad case of mistaken identity. Blame the mirror."

Heh, trolling someone who isn't even alive right now. Bravo.

And Luna goes "Wat." and bluescreens.

Aw, the fight gets cut short by the sensible ones. Still, at least nothing's broken. Like the Castle. As for the Sirens, Handlewithcare, Grayven attended to the amulets some episodes back. If someone could track it down?

 

Cracks Fingers.

Time to Trolling.

 

No.

She was. Sunset hated her.

Yes.

Well... Their remains are. Jon Haraldson killed them.

They call it the dolphin position.

Easier still when they're a fifth of your size.

No, he's alive.

 

I feel like Steve Rogers, because I got that reference!

Oh, hey Zoat, guess what? Your namesake is back! https://www.belloflostsouls.net/2020/01/warhammer-40k-lore-what-the-heck-is-a-zoat.html

 

Disappointing that that story doesn't have 69 chapters pages of comments...

Grayven's that large? Good grief, he must be fifteen feet tall...

For a given value of 'alive'. He'd be closer to a Shade or a Lich at this point, yes? He's currently drifting about the northern wastes howling about meddling ponies and such, isn't he?

 

No, but they're very small and he's very muscular.

"Cryssstalssss."

 

i honestly would have thought the other version of Luna and Celestia would be more powerful.
Paragon mentioned that Luna had and extreme level of magic power and seemed to be worried about what a fight between her and her sister would do to Equestria. So i thought they were at least capable of destroying cities up to an entire country, while this Luna seems to be having trouble against a single opponent who isn't even trying to hurt her.
Although she may simply not want to destroy the palace and the city and is holding back.

So the viking that became one of Odins warriors killed those Equestrian sirens?
Were they some of the things he tracked down to see if they could kill him?

 

So a Zoat is a Posleen playing as a Self-Insert in 40k?

 

Sunset is the MLP fandom when Twilight became an Alicorn, I'm just imagining this as a real life episode where this was the writer little meta commentary about the fans react to that.

But yeah, learning more is not going to be good for Sunset's emotional state or reunion with Celestia by a long shot.

Also Zoat I have to ask did you have that exchange planned from the start or did you add this in to tease your reader once they started to ship Graven and Luna?

 

Yes.

I wrote that passage months ago.

 

While I still rate the chapter as amusing, I am sad Zoat once again had to nerf potential foils to make Grayven look good.

 

He may not have nerfed them so much as having Luna hold back because she doesn't want to destroy the palace and the city

 

Oh this is gonna be hilarious.

 

Most Equestrian magic seems to work better at long to mind range, not in close combat, unless you are an Earth Pony Warrior. And Luna has always been way better at magic that hoof to hoof combat.

She does have Earth pony STR but she is not used to fight like they do.

 

You know, given that Grayven is currently an alicorn, I wonder what would happen if he started trying to use his New God powers.

 

Stay tuned to find out!

 

rereading the early story, and this stuck out at me.

What the hell is this about? Using CTRL+F, I've checked, but this is literally the first usage of the word 'joker' in the entire story.
What on earth are OL and Conner referencing here?

 

I thought Luna and Celestia first fought Sombra together prior to Luna's banishment, so Luna would know what Sombra looks like.

 

It was from the comics. Basically, a g-gnome somehow got into Mount Justice and makes Kon hallucinate the Joker's attack.

She knows what he used to look like.

 

intensifies

Thou

I keep having to hold back from correcting Luna's faux-medieval speech specifically BECAUSE it's faux-medieval. She's canonically wrong, so Zoat's correct already.

 

Thank you, corrected.

You can write the corrected version if you want. It will be intersting, if nothing else.

 

"And I have so many things to complain about. Confounded Ponies! They drive me to drink!"

Has anyone done a Sombra parody where he's obsessed with "Cryssstal Metthhh"? Because that seems like an obvious thing to do. Just imagine him running around the Crystal Empire snorting Crystal Pony.

 

So Sombra is this universe's version of Snowflame?