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With This Ring (Young Justice SI) (Thread Fourteen)

Discussion in 'Creative Writing' started by Mr Zoat, Jan 27, 2019.

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  1. Shotiegun11

    Shotiegun11 Getting sticky.

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    That may be one of the unofficial/meme ones.

    Along with Ame-Comi Violet Lantern Paul and Black Lantern Not-A-Vampire (Almost Blood and Chaos) Paul.
     
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  2. Ardy

    Ardy Not too sore, are you?

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    Yes. Someone fun, like Lex Luthor in a tiny mask where no one believes that he's really Lex but Paul who's so done he just goes with it.
     
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  3. Darko

    Darko Experienced.

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    Ardy there is this series of fics on Ao3 and Ff. Net where Bruce tries to tell people he's Batman and no one believes him, even the other members of the Bat family don't.
    It's hilarious:D
     
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    Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    Day 297
    Mid evening


    "Are you our Pa now?"

    I.. freeze in the act of tucking Wilykin into bed, and the slight rustling of the sheets suggests that his sister has squirmed her way out from under the covers and is watching me as well. I can't see her expression in this light, though I'm sure they can both see mine perfectly well. Their low light vision is far better than mine, when I'm not enhancing it with the ring anyway.

    "Why do you ask?"

    "'kit and 'kat wanted to know." Something else occurs to him. "Is it really them?"

    "Don’t you recognise them?"

    He squirms uncomfortable. "I dunno. They went away…"

    I nod. "I suppose that must seem like a long time for you. And they're a bit bigger now." He looks at me for a moment, then nods. "I can assure you that they are in fact your missing brother and sister. Your mother remembers what they look like extremely well."

    "Did you-" Wilytab wriggles a little further out of bed. "-use your ring?"

    "Yes, I used my ring. It's definitely them."

    Of course, I only did a DNA check. I haven't seen anything on this planet that could fake that, but given the vast range of levels of technical sophistication that exists here it wouldn't come as a total surprise if something like that happened. Or magic, perhaps. But I think I'll keep my fears to myself.

    "So are you?"

    While I fully intend to have a slightly more nuanced version of this conversation with Khoah in a little while, I think the kittens can have the simplified version.

    "I could never replace your father. But in his absence, perhaps I can substitute for him."

    "What does 'substute' mean?"

    I nod and smile. "You know how when I go away sometimes and people have questions for me, and your mother answers them?"

    "Uh-huh."

    "When that happens, your mother is my substitute. She's not becoming me, but she's doing my job for a little while."

    "So you're doing Pa's job?"

    I lean forward, kiss his forehead and ruffle his hair with my right hand. "Yes, I am."

    "Okay." He wriggles around so that he's lying on his side. "'night, Substitute Pa."

    "Goodnight Wilykin." I stand up. "Goodnight Wilytab."

    "'night."

    I smile at her, then turn around and walk out of the room, carefully closing the door behind-.

    "'Substitute Pa'."

    Wilykit and Wilykat are looking at me in a way which suggests that they're extremely dubious about me. These two kittens have been through the wringer since leaving home, and Khoah has been delighted to have them back. I make eye contact with each of them, then move my right forefinger to my lips in a 'shush' gesture. Wilykit glances at the door behind me and grimaces slightly while Wilykat glares at me with his arms folded across his chest.

    I lead the way down the corridor into a currently unused meeting room. This room has a battery powered electric light in the centre of the table, so I reach over and turn it on low as the older kittens file in behind me.

    "Will the two of you be staying once-?"

    "What are you doing with Mama?"

    I look up to see that Wilykit has joined in with her brother's mock scowling. Oh. No, that isn't supposed to be mock scowling. That's.. adorable.

    "Keeping the cats alive. Your mother's farm was far enough away from Thundera that the lizards didn't loot it. There was good farmland, but not enough people to work it. Plus, your mother had an excellent knowledge of farming. Starting the new settlement here just made sense."

    "No. What are you doing with her?" Her eyes momentarily widen. "Are you controlling her with your magic ring?"

    "No." I shake my head. "Yellow rings can't control people. And even if I could, I don't have enough power to waste on something like that." They're both watching me intently. "Khoah has been invaluable in making this place work. I'd be quite lost without her. Is… Something worrying you?"

    Wilykat starts. "You have people tied to posts! With signs around their necks telling everyone what you killed them for!"

    I nod. "And you don't think that Khoah would accept that."

    "You killed a guy for stealing food! We-."

    He stops talking, and his sister's eyes widen in horror. Ah.

    "Children, there's a big difference between stealing food because you're starving in a place that has plenty of food, and stealing food when you've been given as much to eat as everyone else in a place that has barely enough for everyone to survive. Khoah wasn't comfortable with it." For stealing food, anyway. No problem with the death penalty for slavery and murder. "However, she's lived on the frontier long enough to know that sometimes there isn't a lot of room for finesse in maintaining order. And generally, that's my responsibility."

    Wilykat frowns thoughtfully while Wilykit looks away. Wilykat then looks up at me as his brow smoothes.

    "Do you intend to stay? Or carry on travelling with Lion-O? I know that Khoah would like you to stay, and…" Huh. "I would as well. You're far too young to be out by yourselves."

    Wilykit scowls petulantly. "We're not by ourselves."

    Wilykat nods, arms folded across his chest as he juts his chin out defiantly. "Yeah. Lion-O never would have got to the Book of Omens without us."

    Whatever that is.

    I nod. "Alright. Please know that you have a home here whenever you want to return." They look at me suspiciously, then give me a small nod. "And you can explain why you're leaving to your mother."

    A pair of winces.

    "Now, I think you two should probably be getting to bed as well."

    "Hey." Wilykat tries to glare again. "We're adventurers now-."

    "I'll send your mother up to tell you a bed time story. How about that?"

    They look at each other for a moment, then turn around and file out.

    That appears to be going… Alright. They don't despise me, at least. I can't see the confrontation with Mumm-Ra lasting more than a few years, so I'll have plenty of time to build bridges with them later. I turn off the lamp and then head out of the room, turn left and down the stairs into the living area.

    Khoah looks up from the.. books she brought from her old home. She was going through them with the kittens a little earlier and I didn't want to disturb them.

    "How did the meeting go?"

    "Lion-O may be salvageable." I cross the room and sit down on the sofa next to her. "Cheetara was a bit useless, though. Apparently clerics here are very different to where I'm from."

    "Why did you want a cleric?"

    Oh, there's no point dancing around the subject any longer.

    "Because I love you and want-" She blinks several times in quick succession. "-to ask you to marry me, but I was concerned that you might still be in the formal mourning period for your late husband." I shrug. "Are you? I'll quite understand if you are, or if you're just not interested in me in that way-."

    "Um. No. Wilytom's… Death left a.. hole in my life I.. didn't know if I would ever fill. But youEverything you've done…"

    I lean forwards carefully and embrace her. She hugs me back, the right side of her face rubbing against my cheek.

    "I'm delighted to hear you say that."
     
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  5. init101

    init101 The Prime of Primes

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    Does the world of Thundercats have a different language? Can Paul understand anyone without the ring?
     
  6. Darko

    Darko Experienced.

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    'and is watching me as well' not 'and it watching me as well'

    'then nods' not 'the nods'

    'if you are' not 'is you are'
     
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  7. Handlewithcare

    Handlewithcare I trust you know where the happy button is?

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    Aww, Yaul is such a good Substitute Pa :3
     
  8. Williamthegreat

    Williamthegreat Fiction is life's spice <( ̄︶ ̄)↗

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  9. w34v3r

    w34v3r Versed in the lewd.

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    I am concerned about the long term government stability.

    With two of the three main officers being Cats there's only so long this can go before familiar rumbles start up.
     
  10. Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    Yes.
    Yes, but it's basically just Mumm-Ra.
    Thank you, corrected.
     
  11. FreeGod

    FreeGod If you see a God on the road fuck it!

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    I expect that he would have used it to teach him the language rather then constantly drain power to translate.
     
  12. Chojin Patriarch

    Chojin Patriarch Veteran Lurker, Rookie Proofreader

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    Ah, Children's questions. The bane of any adult's life. How to answer them without using concepts they don't understand yet? (And thus the idea of 'lies-to-children' was created...)

    Heh. Given some of the things we saw Mumm-ra do in the series... A very good question.

    And if their mother says it's so, then it must be true. QED :p

    Ah, 'magic' rings. I suppose that's what the children assume it is, no matter how many times it's explained otherwise.

    Something he's very good at, what with his Enlightenment...

    'Lies-to-children'. Making it easier to explain complicated things to children since humanity had language.

    Ah, too cute...

    See, that's how you explain it. plain and simple...

    Yaul will make a surprisingly good father... Though I pity any boy looking to date the girls... If they can withstand his shovel speech without wetting themselves, they're keepers.

    Boy, they really stuck to that naming scheme for the family, didn't they?

    And now for...

    ...The older kids. This is going to involve less lies, I think. At least they're sensible enough to let the kittens sleep.

    I've no doubt they'll end up leaving, but knowing they have somewhere to come home to? Much more motivating.

    They're gonna need a few years for that to not look cute...

    With Yellow light? God no. Now, Orange, you might have had a case for it...

    Yes, it's called a justice system. I'm sure you two are familiar with how that sort of thing works?

    No need to guess what they're thinking. You know Yaul can see it with his empathic vision...

    If someone's stolen food once, there's no guarantee they won't do it again if their stomach starts aching... Eventually, hunger overcomes fear...

    Already feeling those fatherly fears, eh, Yaul? And while Lion-O does seem the type to want to keep them safe, well... They are fighting an embodiment of evil.

    Eh, it's not important to you. You're kind of an NPC in Lion-O's story at this point, even if you are the main character of your own..

    Yes, I foresee some tough choices ahead. Hopefully without harsh words to go with them.

    And you do remember how early you usually have to start out in the mornings? A good night's sleep is always desirable.

    And deep down, they are still kittens...

    She's going to have too little time with the older ones as it is. Letting her enjoy it is a sign of a good guy.

    Like I keep saying. She may as well call herself a Paladin.

    Too bad he doesn't have any kind of ring suitable for it... Though I doubt the Cats go in for them anyway.

    She's been admiring him from afar, so to speak, for a while now. I'd say it's a safe bet they'll work out.

    That's another Paul locking in a romance option. I wonder how the people are going to react?x3

    And so our time on Third Earth comes to a pleasant close. A little more Pony fun and then back to old 'Orange Quotation Marks' OL...


    That avatar plus that quote... Perfection...:D I read it in his voice...
     
  13. RichardWhereat

    RichardWhereat Aia airëa Fëanáro.

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    I think that the moral of this, and the DCAU timeline is that Zoat wants us to buy him a cat.
     
  14. Darko

    Darko Experienced.

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    Now I really wanna see an episode where paragon and his Jade have a series of romantic moments, doesn't even have to have a point just a slice of life thing will do.
     
  15. Thewildwolfofwesteros

    Thewildwolfofwesteros Hedonist

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    I want more third earth how much.
     
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  16. Idkusername

    Idkusername I trust you know where the happy button is?

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    For some reason, this is the third time I haven’t received an email notification for Mr Zoat’s post.
     
  17. RichardWhereat

    RichardWhereat Aia airëa Fëanáro.

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    And maybe even a giant spider.
     
  18. Aeess

    Aeess I trust you know where the happy button is?

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    That doesn't work, he already tried learning ancient greek that way and only got a few words our of it.
     
  19. Prince Charon

    Prince Charon Just zis guy, you know?

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    Which post or posts was/were the S.W.O.R.D. SI in?

    I still miss Teekl.
     
  20. The Froggy Ninja

    The Froggy Ninja Everything I do is bittersweet.

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    So do we know of any local beings that could have substituted for Parallax or the Terror Thing for enlightenment purposes? Does Mumm-ra have fear powers?
     
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  21. GamingPizza1998

    GamingPizza1998 Verified Pizza

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    Or ladies of the night dressed as such.
     
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  22. Ace Dreamer

    Ace Dreamer Questioning The Nature of our Realities

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    So, you want (to be) a catgirl... The classic choices are biotech, cyberborging, magic, virtual reality and robotics. Talking IRL, biotech isn't up to it, the closest thing to effective cyborging is external prostheses, accessories and clothes up to fur-suits, magic doesn't obviously work, VR is things like Second Life (loads of catgirls...) and robotics is in its infancy.

    So, bar you getting out your soldering iron and sewing kit, few choices except VR... Sorry...

    Of course, discussing how much you need in distributed processing power, say Raspberry Pis and lots of racks of external radio-linked kit... Bamboo skeletons and air muscles... That would be something to go elsewhere for. :)
     
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  23. Pinklestia

    Pinklestia Experienced.

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    Unfollow the thread and then follow it again.

    Alternatively, follow the story only thread.
     
  24. NeoDarklight

    NeoDarklight The Final Observer

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    Also 40k. They have catgirls.
     
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  25. theaceoffire

    theaceoffire Know what you're doing yet?

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    PLEASE don't turn into a sad thing, like with some of the other MC versions.

    There is not enough happy people, even in our stories.
     
  26. Someguy Somewhere

    Someguy Somewhere The Critical Fumbler

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    But much like everything in 40k, they really aren't the ones you want.
     
  27. Idkusername

    Idkusername I trust you know where the happy button is?

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    Which apparently will be never
     
  28. Darko

    Darko Experienced.

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    Hey Zoat do New Gods, or at least Apokaliptians, have some sort of way to respawn themselves if they are killed, like with what the angels have?

    I think that comic book Highfather once killed Steppenwolf, but that he somehow came back to life.

    Also in the JL cartoon Darkseid seemed to be aware of how to bring himself back to life, or at least return to a physical form, so is that the same here on your version of Earth 16?

    When the First of the Fallen got his power back was he weaker than he was previously, despite still being perhaps one of the most powerful beings in the universe?
    I think someone in your story said that he wasn't as strong as before, maybe Rosacarnis or Mammon?

    Or did the First just lose some of his political power without losing his magic power?

    Do Earth demons have influence on alien planets?
    Was rereading the episode where angels invaded and Zauriel said something about them having connections to other worlds, and you said the First can travel to other worlds under his own power.

    Would every angel that is stabbed with the Sword of the Fallen reincarnate as a magically powerful human that lacks theurgy, unlike other beings who lose all their magic, aside from the ones keeping them alive?

    If an alien were to die on Earth and be a practitioner of a Source religion would they go to Heaven, or to their own version of the Source afterlife and not the one ruled by the angels?

    Was Zauriel turned into a mortal?

    Can Zauriel still use theurgy now that he is a mortal?

    Will Zauriel join the Justice League as a member?
     
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  29. Sorrow

    Sorrow Making the rounds.

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    For a moment, I thought this was a demon kid asking Graven.
     
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  30. Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    No, that's intentional.
    They don't even have the ways humans can use. Go directly to the Source, do not pass nirvana, do not collect enlightenment.

    Of course, you'd be amazed what they can survive.
    No, just as powerful. I don't remember saying anything to the contrary.
    No Earth-native demons currently have power on other planets.
    Yes, because the First isn't a demon.
    Yes, that's what I've shown happening to everyone it happens to.
    They'd probably go to the Silver City.
    No. Still an angel.
    He can still use theurgy.
    He might?
     
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