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With This Ring (Young Justice SI) (Thread Fourteen)

Discussion in 'Creative Writing' started by Mr Zoat, Jan 27, 2019.

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  1. Norgarth

    Norgarth Making the rounds.

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    Iiiinteresting :) I wonder if this means the 2 main Pauls are going to meet? I suspect they would each have some commentary for the other's life choices.

    Palvos) "You're masquerading as a Prince of Apocalypse?!?"
    Grayven) "You merged with the Ophidian?!?"
    Both) "Are you bloody mad?"

    [​IMG]
    more seriously, it seems to be the same being that's been grabbing alternate Pauls and Jades from across the DC multiverse

    If time travel doesn't make your head hurt, then you don't really understand what's going on.:p

    Except there's nothing actually forcing to go back to those alt-Pauls excepta desire to write more about them. If he didn't want to write about them, then we simply wouldn't see anymore of them.
     
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  2. Siiracai The Supernal

    Siiracai The Supernal Shadows and Balance

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    I just really want to see Renegade and Paragon meet at this point, it would be completely hilarious.
     
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  3. Darko

    Darko Versed in the lewd.

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    Pretty sure that Zoat said they may not meet, but either he was lying or changed his mind.

    Granted paragon can meet the other Paul's, just not renegade.
     
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  4. Ace Dreamer

    Ace Dreamer Questioning The Nature of our Realities

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    Giant blue hand is obviously Doctor Manhattan? :)

    (This is a version that has nothing to do with New 52, of course.)

    He is obviously doing this as part of his research into why he has fleeting (future?) memories of being a blue pony. :)

    (One interesting question is what sort of targetting the abductors are using - what is it based on if it can grab a Clayface, but is good enough to go for Grayven while he's a pony?)



    As far as different SI meeting - one probably best avoided is OL and anti-matter OL. :)
     
  5. Maxx Crowley

    Maxx Crowley I trust you know where the happy button is?

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    Like...I would legit be terrified at the idea that a version of me was off kidnapping other versions of me to try and force them into some sort of plan.

    Because any version of me should know that, that shit dont' fly. Like....the level of "fuck you" violence that would occur would be staggering.

    A me trying to force another me to do his bidding? Are you insane, Me?
     
  6. Darko

    Darko Versed in the lewd.

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    Either the one taking them is desperate enough, or thinks he can take them on if they resist.
    Finger meets Sword not withstanding.

    If anyone wants to read a fic where the Isekai thing fails on the one doing it I recommend reading theirishdreamers Traveling Merchant on SB. There the mc is summoned to help those people that suumoned the JL in the animated show deal with the invading army and sorcerer.

    Does not work out for the witch, her father, or their society if the POV from that ork after the mc is banished is any indication.
     
  7. Pinklestia

    Pinklestia Experienced.

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    His stuff, save for the Ork one, is crossover overdosed, making it an awful read if you do not care about the crossover parts.
     
  8. lefthandturnsignal

    lefthandturnsignal Making the rounds.

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    That was renegade. Pretty sure paragon still has no idea... but I'm not sure his targets with the sword were all that common either.
     
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  9. Pinklestia

    Pinklestia Experienced.

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    Are you sure? Because I am quite sure he found human Klarion.

    And Grayven actually used the sword way more than Paragon.
     
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  10. Chaoswind

    Chaoswind Lord of nonsense

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    Paragon knows... There was a whole episode with that being a central element... Noriel the angel.
     
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  11. Darko

    Darko Versed in the lewd.

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    Paragon used the Sword on the First, Noriel and Zauriel.
     
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  12. Threadmarks: Repetition (part 2)
    Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    2nd April 2012
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    Ghia'ta limply raises her left hand, and wafts of orange mist drift from my borrowed ring.

    "It's.. a start. How does it feel?"

    She drops her hand and the mist vanishes at once.

    "I feel as if Queen Aga'po may appear at any moment to lecture me for this misdeed."

    "I mean, in yourself."

    "It isn't… I don't think that it really… Fits me."

    "Ghia'ta." I lean closer. "It's just you and me. Your ring isn't reporting on your actions because you're not wearing it. It's okay to want things for yourself."

    "I am aware of that; it is the exclusion of other feelings that feels unnatural to me." She takes it off and holds it out to me. "I doubt that you could change to using a violet ring any easier-"

    I'm already pulling my rings off my fingers.

    "-than I can-."

    "Pass it over, then."

    She blinks. And while that could be because since neither of us are wearing rings she's hearing me in English for the first time, I suspect that it's due to surprise. I haven't bothered ritualistically removing my ring for a while and she might well have assumed that I simply didn't take it off.

    "Pass it-? You intend to use it?"

    "Don’t know. I haven't ever tried using another colour ring before." I shrug. "But I wasn't born as an enlightened avarice mystic. I know the theory, and perhaps I'll be able to help you better if I know what you're used to working with." I shrug, shaking my head. "You don't have to of course, but we know that humans as a species can use violet rings without deleterious mental effects…"

    "You haven't tried a green ring?"

    "No. I asked Guy once and he looked at me as if I'd asked to borrow his testicles. Offered him my ring in return and he jerked his hand back." I shrug. "I could ask Alan, but I didn't want to risk his health."

    "I don't have a spare ring." She picks her ring up from the side table and awkwardly holds it out to me. "Please, be careful with it."

    No, not picking it up. Let's see. I wonder what Jade's doing right now?

    The ring rises unsteadily from Ghia'ta's hand and floats onto my right ring finger. Heh, well, eventually, but I wouldn't want Jade to get the wrong idea.

    Now…

    I flex my right hand, trying to see how the violet version of the environmental shield responds. It doesn't feel as natural as the orange light, but that's.. probably just me.

    Jade would hate me giving up a weapon like this.

    Glowing crystalline construct-armour covers my body as I rise into the air.

    "See? It's not so bad."

    Ghia'ta stares. Then she gets up and walks around me, still staring.

    Ghia'ta stares. Then she gets up and walks around me, still staring.

    Ghia'ta stares. Then she gets up and walks around me, still staring.

    Ghia'ta-.

    I frown. Wait, what?

    Glowing crystalline construct-armour covers my body as I rise into the air.

    "I don't have a spare ring." She picks her ring up from the side table-.

    No, no, what?

    I walk into the briefing room for my meeting with Ghia'ta, and I see that I'm already there.

    "No. I asked Guy once and he looked at me as if I'd asked to borrow his testicles."

    Time-? No, I didn't see this. Which could mean that this is an 'I hate temporal mechanics' situation, but I'm pretty sure-.

    "Orange Lantern, we need-"

    There's a figure in a purple robe standing a short distance from me. I don't seem to be able to move.

    Jade hates people controlling her, too.

    "-to leave at once-."

    SomethingShatters, and I regain control of myself.

    "What-?"

    A violet repto-insectoid claw grips the figure around the chest and slams it into the wall-.

    A violet repto-insectoid claw grips-.

    A violet repto-insectoid claw tries to grip, but I misjudged the distance and it misses.

    No, wait, I didn't. That just-.

    "What you are experiencing is temporal dislocation. I'm using it to hide us. Anyone looking into this timeline from outside will see the future you, rather than the you whose timeline you are now living."

    "I… Recognise you. We haven't met-."

    "No. We have, but the event was erased from your personal timeline. You're remembering it because I'm partially removing you from the normal flow of time. Please don't attack me again, I don't have a great deal of leeway and our need is great."

    "'Our' need?"

    "The fallen Guardian Krona is abducting versions of you from alternate parallel universes and discontinued timelines in order to pry apart the universe at a fundamental level. I was only just able to escape." He pauses. "Do you know who I am?"

    "The Time Trapper. I'm not exactly sure what that entails."

    "It means that I tried to manipulate time in an unwise way, and was rendered outside it for my hubris. I have my own reasons for stopping Krona, quite aside from what he did to me in order to put his insane scheme into action. Come."

    He turns and walks away.

    "We will need to travel. I need you for your power and connection to your parallel alternate selves."

    "Can I pick up my rings first?"

    The Time Trapper pauses, then the hood glances back at me.

    "You don't have your ring?"

    "No, I have Ghia'ta's ring which I used for the first time a few seconds ago. My rings are back in there."

    He stares at me, then lets out a peal of pained laughter.

    "Of course they are. And no, you can't. He's almost certainly watching for us. I can't risk breaking cover." He turns away again and continues down the corridor. "I hope that you're a quick learner, for all our sakes."
     
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  13. SemiAnarchist

    SemiAnarchist I trust you know where the happy button is?

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    So once this is all done, is Paul going to pop back to when he was, with apparent mastery of his new ring? Ghia'ta might be in for a bit of a shock.
     
  14. Darko

    Darko Versed in the lewd.

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    'neither of us' not 'either of us'

    'a short distance' not 'a shirt distance'

    So I was right it will have time travel and Krona.
     
  15. cerberus beasty

    cerberus beasty Getting out there.

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    showing up at the perfectly wrong moment, obviously a setup.
     
  16. Idkusername

    Idkusername Not too sore, are you?

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    Ha! I knew it was going to be a violet ring!
     
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  17. doug89

    doug89 I trust you know where the happy button is?

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    Well fuck, no armour, no crumblers, no mage slayers.

    None of his inventory, nothing from his database.
     
  18. Idkusername

    Idkusername Not too sore, are you?

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    Can’t Paul merge with the Ophidian without his ring? He could then simply fabricate a lamp and ring for himself, along with his other equipment.
     
  19. Handlewithcare

    Handlewithcare I trust you know where the happy button is?

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    Oh, typical. This is a twist truly worthy of comic-canon.

    I wonder if Paul will now crush on all the other entities other-Pauls crushed on.
     
  20. Darko

    Darko Versed in the lewd.

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    Don't know if Paul is capable of making a ring.

    He was able to make a lantern, but it was a poor piece of work.
     
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  21. Vhostym

    Vhostym Your first time is always over so quickly, isn't it?

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    Well, I suppose you can't critique Krona about not having good timing, because if there were to be a time to attempt to nab Illustres Paul, it would be now.

    I do have to say that I love how we're seeing more from the original universe now. Normally I vacillate between being enjoying and being lukewarm about the Grayven arcs, but the pony arc was something I thought outstayed its welcome. Not necessarily due to any part of it but the very awkward whirlwind romance with Luna, but mostly because I never watched MLP and so all the references go right over my head and failed to engage me like the rest of the story has. That said, it's nice to see things payoff and I like how we're moving into a crossover arc!
     
  22. Oglymogly

    Oglymogly Not too sore, are you?

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    Man, thats a good start to a arc. Also evil to poor Paul. No subspace pocket to use, poor thing.

    Its always nice to see how many ways you can disable Paul right before he starts a fight/arc. It hasn't happened in a while, but I didn't expect it for THIS arc.
     
  23. Sockmonkey

    Sockmonkey Know what you're doing yet?

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    Ooooo, this makes sense when you remember that Krona knew about Hinon chucking an orange ring into the bleed. He must have figured that multiple versions of it would pop out in multiple universes, and thus give him the hooks he'd need to shred the multiverse.

    Being enlightened, OL is immune from the violet ring fucking him up, but he'd have to master his new ring before he could create a lantern to charge it with.
     
  24. thebishop8

    thebishop8 Umm, ackchyually...

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    Change "going" to "doing".

    Change "weapons" to "weapon".
     
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  25. Darko

    Darko Versed in the lewd.

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    Ghi'ta could have hopefully taken the SI's advice about having equipment to heart and stocked her subspace area full of all kinds of goodies.
     
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  26. Redhawk

    Redhawk Getting out there.

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    Well that’s no good.
     
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  27. NightmareWarden

    NightmareWarden Know what you're doing yet?

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    I know better than to solely criticize something I’m experiencing for free. So I’ll focus on the positives.

    I enjoyed how trippy that time loop sequence was. The conversion from orange dragon claws to predator-inspired insectoid graspers is pretty good, but I wish the constructs were described as imperfect. I reckon we will experience a Paragon-Paul version of the Grayven-Harmony-Powerup revelations. Just as we saw a slight difference in the love Zatanna feels for her father versus her romantic attachment to Paul, we will see how solid or shallow paragon-Paul’s love truly is.

    hmm. I wonder if Paul is still going to feel any significant amount of love towards Jade after this. Like... the setup of this arc has a few different indicators that hilarity could happen, but I can foresee Paragon-Paul being too emotionally-drained to appreciate any of it.
     
  28. Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    Thank you, corrected.
     
  29. Flux Casey

    Flux Casey The Colonel

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    And now I'm remembering way back when, when it was discussed what if any other colour ring the paragon and renegade would get. If memory serves it was "Yes. Grayven's will make far too much sense. And OL's will be rather inconvenient." Or something along those lines.

    I believe we all thought that meant blue. Go figure.
     
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  30. thebishop8

    thebishop8 Umm, ackchyually...

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    That doesn't make sense unless Paragon is going to keep the violet ring after this storyline is over.
     
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