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With This Ring (Young Justice SI) (Thread Fourteen)

Discussion in 'Creative Writing' started by Mr Zoat, Jan 27, 2019.

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  1. Citizen

    Citizen Well worn.

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    One place, I think.
     
  2. Vaermina

    Vaermina Well worn.

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    Moral of this story, don't work with Supervillains.
     
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  3. thebishop8

    thebishop8 Umm, ackchyually...

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    Is "then" supposed to be "the"?
     
  4. Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    No, the board ate it again.
    Thank you, corrected.
     
  5. Belenus

    Belenus Versed in the lewd.

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    A sepia ring.
     
  6. jmartinez8089

    jmartinez8089 Getting out there.

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    that I take the lead
     
  7. Chojin Patriarch

    Chojin Patriarch Veteran Lurker

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    It's kind of suspicious, isn't it? It's not like the Red Queen could do... Oh, wait...

    Eh, DC Universe people seem to be jaded by people in colourful costumes flying around punching each other in the face... God knows what the Professional Wrestling circuits look like...:p

    Well. Mind Control, huh? Straight out of Professor Xavier's playbook, too. Perception editing.

    If you don't want them making it harder, try explaining it to them before you do it?

    At this point, they're better off hiding, after all.

    And yet she still can't take on a Maltusian? Try thinking up better super-formulas...

    Queen by name, queenly by nature, I see. And I don't think it's the good kind of queen either.

    Probably still feeling a bit hungover. After a bender like that...

    Wait for it...

    Despite being a Supervillian, he did have some good ideas... Pity he spent most of them trying to kill Superman out of jealousy...

    Huh, so Infinite Crisis happened as normal in this universe. Bet that was a fustercluck.

    Geez! Rude much?:mad:

    See, at least the Pauls know how to show some respect...

    And the fact she's suddenly so cavalier about risks ought to be a big warning light... Seriously, how has neither Paul caught the smell of the bullshit?

    Ah... She's kind of on Krona's side... Until she can stab him in the back. Typical Supervillain.

    And if that doesn't work, get more universes involved? Just keep casting 'Summon Bigger Fish' until you win? ugh...

    I know what Saul's trying to do, but seriously, she is just not interested in listening to reason...

    Sooner or later, she's going to snap and just yell at him to be quiet...

    One of those many superpowers she cheated her way into?

    Seems to be a common thing in DC Crises. Ah, for the day when just punching someone really hard was enough to end a fight...

    Kind of hard to work without losing your own Compassion focus, eh?

    Indeed. No wanting to set off another Crisis by accident...

    Best to stand somewhere out of sight just in case?

    Hey now! I know they're only human, but...

    Ah. The Mind Whammy is that strong, huh? And the smell increases...

    No making excuses, Saul. I don't care how compassionate you are, sooner or later, you've got to cotton on...

    Might be the first time he's ever gotten a proper Ring-to-Ring call...

    Ah, the Common Sense approach working.

    Seriously, Raul, you walked into that one...

    Well, there's something that hasn't happened for a while!

    Now, was that Red Queen panicking now that she's been exposed, or someone else noticing the Pauls?

    "And they will continue not to notice us?"
     
  8. SirKaid

    SirKaid Know what you're doing yet?

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    <Zoat> The SI doesn't know. </Zoat>
     
  9. Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    Thank you, corrected.
     
  10. Flux Casey

    Flux Casey The Colonel

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    Or perhaps rose-tinted.
     
  11. Ace Dreamer

    Ace Dreamer Questioning The Nature of our Realities

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    Thanks for this, interesting read. The Maud bits were particularly... different.
     
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  12. Darko

    Darko Connoisseur.

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    That's a light way of putting it.

    Still I really hope Zoat releases more of those scenes or at least does a supplementary chapter in the future with those scenes.
     
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  13. topin89

    topin89 Virgin Centrist

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    Well, that explains why Sinestro is a good guy here. Ah, I want more non-evil Lex fanfics.
     
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  14. Doccer

    Doccer I trust you know where the happy button is?

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    For some reason this reminds me of that scene in Jim Carry's Grinch movie when he reads his schedule and says he will solve world hunger and tell no one.
    Celestia=Grinch
     
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  15. Eponymic

    Eponymic Getting sticky.

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    Yes! I thought it when I saw Gold Lantern and Sinestro,and Oracle.

    That's one of my favorite fics. This is magic.
     
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  16. Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    I'm.. sort of writing it now, though it doesn't happen in that way.
     
  17. theaceoffire

    theaceoffire Versed in the lewd.

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    It hurt.

    "Sorry, something came up. Can I call you back?"
     
  18. AidanMorgan

    AidanMorgan Essentially Overworked

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    I actually got a lot of these snippets, but this one, I do not understand. Someone help?
     
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  19. Darko

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    Hope we see it soon.

    Still even if she doesn't try to attack them to show her magic I am sure it will be an interesting encounter.

    Now I really gotta wonder how Pinky and the rest of the Mane Six would have reacted if they found out Maud essentially tried to kill three Alicorns to prove some kind of point or discover something, and could have probably succeeded if Sunset and renegade weren't there.

    I think he means a Reach Scarab.
    An extremely powerful suit of armor that can allow someone wearing it to go up against a power ring wielder and potentially win and have a tendency to mind control their hosts.
     
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  20. AidanMorgan

    AidanMorgan Essentially Overworked

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    That doesn't seem right to me, since OL can handle Scarabs and Grayven is better equipped for one to one combat.

    I'm having trouble thinking of anything else that uses scarab symbology, though. I haven't caught any other Worm references so I doubt it's Khepri, and Imhotep from the Mummy just isn't threatening enough.
     
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  21. Darko

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    Paragon has gone up against at least one Scarab warrior when he helped those Darkstars, but I'm pretty sure renegade has never gone up against one.

    He may be better equipped, but that doesn't mean a Scarab warrior is anything to scoff at.
    There is a possibility that one can give him problems if he fights it.

    Though such a Cutie Mark can also mean the Reach has somehow infiltrated Equestria and is mind controlling some of its citizens.
    Renegade may be a powerful fighter, but the Reach have more recourse's than him and can overwhelm him if he doesn't have any backup.
     
  22. AidanMorgan

    AidanMorgan Essentially Overworked

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    Well, yes, but I still don't see why it would affect the cutie mark, is the thing. A Scarab Warrior would have the actual Scarab, wouldn't it? So it would be a pony in Scarab Armor. Cutie marks shouldn't change because of mind control.
     
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  23. Darko

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    Either something about the Reach's method changes it, or they got that pony well before they had a mark to begin with and that could indicate they have been there for a long time and may have some forces on that world.

    The mark would take the shape of Scarab to signify the fact that the pony now serves the Reach.
     
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  24. AidanMorgan

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    That feels like reaching, and I'm not sure why that's a flee on sight. If anything, it'd be a capture on sight so Grayven can analyze what was done there.
     
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  25. Darko

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    The reason for fleeing could be that he fears his otherwordly origin would be revealed and the Reach can figure out what he is and try to attack him when he doesn't have all his recourse's at his side.

    He may try to get rid of them at full power, when he is in his natural form and can use it for combat, but he isn't at full power right now and may honestly find it difficult to do so even at full power
     
  26. Doccer

    Doccer I trust you know where the happy button is?

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    Why?
     
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  27. Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    I don't remember, and since I didn't use it in the story proper it doesn't really matter.

    Of course, a scarab cutie mark wouldn't mean they had a scarab. It would just mean that they'd be really good with one.
     
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  28. Darko

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    That, or they may just really like scarabs in general and are somehow devoted to them.

    The insects I mean and not the pieces of Reach tech
     
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  29. Doccer

    Doccer I trust you know where the happy button is?

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    What does this word mean?
     
  30. DrThoth

    DrThoth I trust you know where the happy button is?

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    pan- means 'all'

    arcanic- related to the arcane i.e. magic

    so panarcanic is 'all-magic,' which refers to the well-rounded magic generalists that Renegade is thinking of, instead of literal one-trick ponies. Think the Red Mage from Final Fantasy (which I'm not actually familiar with, but that's the name of the trope on TV Tropes).
     
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