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With This Ring (Young Justice SI) (Thread Fourteen)

Discussion in 'Creative Writing' started by Mr Zoat, Jan 27, 2019.

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  1. Darko

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    Koriand'r to be exact.
     
  2. Threadmarks: Plutonian (part 7)
    Mr Zoat

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    12th April
    11:46 GMT


    I watch as the nascent fleet reaches orbit.

    Fascinating.

    Koriand'r frowns in puzzlement.

    "They seem so primitive."

    The Russian Space Fleet launched entirely without rocket blasts. Instead, they built magnetic subterranean launch rails and anti-air resistance force fields to shoot them off the planet, the ships' own main drive providing the extra thrust needed to make orbit. No one part of the design is new to me, it's just that most species who go into space don't.. use those sorts of methods. Usually, they either build their ships in near-planetary space or they've got sufficiently advanced drive systems that they can take off without special arrangements. Launch rails like that are pretty much… Just used for… Bases on low-gravity planetoids, where it's more efficient than strapping boosters on.

    "I think the most technologically advanced part of that whole arrangement is the launch system."

    The ships have railguns as their primary armament, and I silently thank the Russian government for not putting nuclear torpedoes on the things. Their guns already have the power to shred anything in the system built on Earth. They… Might even be able to take a fight with a Martian ship of equivalent mass, assuming they could see it. They're slower and less agile, but then Martian gunnery isn't anything to get excited about. Particularly at long range.

    "I was expecting… More."

    "Why?"

    "Some of the devices you carry are so advanced. Compared to what exists in Vega. I assumed that your ships…"

    "You knew that we didn't have any."

    "I knew that you hadn't built any for many years. There are species who are advanced but have no interest in travelling in space. Those are less advanced than the first ships my people built after settling on Tamaran."

    "Yes, but it's more progress than we've made in the last fifty years so I'm calling it a success. I've learned.. to accept baby steps."

    And I'm bracing for Russia to decide that they're no longer going to contract for NASA, which is going to leave the North American Space Agency entirely bereft of ways to actually get into space. Would the United States of America be prepared to put in the money needed to resume the space race? For an openly nationalist not-dictatorship like the Russian Federation this sort of national vanity project makes sense. It increases national pride and distracts-.

    I narrow my eyes and look down, glaring at the Director's Siberian research centre. There's a flicker of resistance from the basic wards the local shaman probably put up, then…

    The Director's not there. I move my attention to Moscow and try to spot-.

    Ring, compare that to the usual death rate in Moscow at this time of year?

    Substantial increase on seasonal norms.

    I mentally pull up a copy of police reports and begin checking people off. Yes, they're cleaning house. After the collapse of the Soviet Union, there was a substantial rise in criminal gangs all across its former territory. With the fire sale of national assets and various types of civil servant not getting paid, I suppose that it was inevitable. Back on Earth Prime the line appeared to be 'don't make waves and you'll be left alone'. But here, with the Director and the President both being pro-internal reform…

    The Russian mafia has drawn the attention of something infinitely its greater. Batman sent us a briefing document on the reform of the Russian Federal Police, but I didn't really pay it all that much attention. Looks like the mafia didn't either.

    Starting to think that I may have been working on the wrong continent.

    "Alright, nothing for us to do here. I'm sure that once everyone stops panicking we'll get an intelligent summary."

    Koriand'r blinks at me.

    "Are we not going to greet them?"

    "No." I consider who I'm talking to. "While I imagine that knowing that Tamaran exists will do wonders to spur on humanity's efforts at space exploration, those ships don't really have an easy way to take on space-going travellers. They've undoubtably calculated every mote of energy and thrust, and… This is a matter of national pride. If I start hanging around it's just going to annoy them."

    So, where next? Back to Themyscira, and lurk outside of the meeting hall like a ghost at the feast? Happy Harbour? There must be some people who don't know that the Mountain is operational again. Gotham?

    That's actually not a terrible idea.

    "Koriand'r, how about I show you the city where I live?"

    She smiles. "That would be most delightful."

    "That just shows that you've never been there. Follow me."

    12th April
    06:49 GMT -5


    It's early morning here in Gotham. Early morning joggers are out doing circuits of Robinson Park, though I've missed my usual meet up with the Nguyens. Some traffic noise but no screams, explosions or gunshots.

    Koriand'r appears next to me and looks around in fascination.

    "This is very different to Themyscira."

    "This is a bit more representative of modern Earth cities. At.. least, in the more prosperous parts of the world."



    "Some parts of the world. A plant elemental turned the whole place into a forest last year, and when we persuaded him to leave he replaced a lot of the foundations and pipes with plant growths as a peace offering. That's why… You see the bridge-"

    I point.

    "-over there, how the third support along doesn't look quite like the others?"

    "I see it."

    "It's actually made of a type of ultra-resilient wood. There was a huge argument between the city government, the state government and the national government about whether they should leave stuff like that in place, remove it due to safety concerns or remove it for study. They only left it there because no one wanted to pay for replacing it properly."

    "How..? Long did this take?"

    "What, the argument? About four weeks, I think."

    "How long did it take for the plant elemental to cover the city in a forest?"

    "The initial surge of growth was about… Four minutes? It kept growing until we negotiated an armistice."

    She turns her head to regard me curiously.

    "You are telling me that the plant elemental turned this city into a forest in four minutes?"

    "Roughly four minutes. Maybe a bit less. I wasn't monitoring it precisely."

    "And now the only sign that it happened is an oddly textured bridge support."

    "And some people scream if you sneak up on them while holding a plant." I snort with amusement. "And the sewer system is self-cleaning. Honestly, if Swamp Thing wasn't such an idiot he could make a fortune offering that sort of thing as a service."

    I turn to face the direction of Gotham Police Central.

    "Come on; let's see if Commissioner Gordon will let us ride along with anyone."
     
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  3. Darko

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    'Koriand' r' not 'Komand'r'
     
  4. Idkusername

    Idkusername I trust you know where the happy button is?

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    Yes, but Tangseid used an entirely different method, as I pointed out and Mr Zoat elaborated.

    I can't comment on this because I have little experience with the Sandman and Hellblazer side of DC, despite my interest.

    Ineffectual does not mean mutually exclusive or incompatible. A may not affect B, but both A and B can affect C.
     
  5. Citizen

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    This has to count as hazing one of his recruits, right?
     
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  6. Grimnar

    Grimnar Versed in the lewd.

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    What's 'that'?

    There seems to be a leap in logic and thought that isn't explained here.
     
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  7. Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    On Liberty. I was a callback to the first episode where the SI mentioned that despite the fact that she co-authored it with John Stuart Mill her name was never on the cover.
    Thank you, nearly.
    I usually post on the Story Only thread first and then read through the main thread. If there are a lot of comments then there can be a delay.
     
  8. Grimnar

    Grimnar Versed in the lewd.

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    I'm refering to me.
     
  9. Darko

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    Well this could be a way for Robin to meet Kori, but I don't think a romance is going to blossom between them.
     
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  10. Z000

    Z000 If this is trash, then find me in the dumpster

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    oh no, Earth Duty is more like punishment

    the planet is so whack that staying there for a weeks straight is more dangerous then some galactic war zone

    i don't think OL will haze his recruit with this place, probably something more educational then life threatening
     
  11. fictionfan

    fictionfan If you see a God on the road fuck it!

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    What would swamp thing want money for?
     
  12. Darko

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    He could negotiate for them to not tear down so many forests.

    He could also use the money to support his wife and daughter if they need help.

    There was this fic where Poison Ivy marries Bruce Wayne and makes a more advanced version of viagra.

    Starfire asks one of her teammates why she doesn't just patent any of the inventions she could make and just use the money to buy the forests so that she can keep them safe.
     
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  13. Ace Dreamer

    Ace Dreamer Questioning The Nature of our Realities

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    should this be a plural?
    'intelligence'?


    Nice episode showing the Russian space tech, DC Comics Russian politics, and the weirdness that is Gotham City.
     
  14. Slayer Anderson

    Slayer Anderson Orthodox Heretic

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    I know this is nit-picking to a crazy degree, but... I'm pretty sure that is supposed to be a plural possessive.

    Great chapter. I'm enjoying yet another alien trying to wrap their mind around Earth's... 'special-ness.'
     
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  15. Darko

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    Ohh, just call it what it is, bat shit crazyness.

    Though I'm sure a polite girl like Kori would never call the planet of the Illustres that in front of him, probably not even away from him, and she'll just say that it's a 'difficult' and 'unique' world.

    This episode could be about an alien trying to get used to life on Earth if Kori is going to be tagging along.

    Though I'm sure that her stay will not result in her going bat shit like the comic Plutonian.

    Hopefully.

    She does have experience in dealing with a shitty place, considering she's a Lantern in Vega.
     
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  16. AtomicGeneral25

    AtomicGeneral25 Insert Creativity Here

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    Apparently SpaceX isn't a thing in this continuity. Unfortunate, Paul and Elon would have a field day together! Also, is the North America Space Agency a DC thing? If not, NASA is the National Aeronautics and Space Administration.
     
  17. Idkusername

    Idkusername I trust you know where the happy button is?

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    It's probably too early for that.

    Oh. Okay, then.

    Considering the age gap, well...
     
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  18. Massgamer

    Massgamer Know what you're doing yet?

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    Yes, but actual space forces run by a government is actual progress despite all the super tech laying around.

    Here is hoping other countries get proper kick to rear to get own fleets into space now.
    DC earth has become quite good at rebuilding quickly after major events like that. I mean, Metropolis can look like a warzone on a good day with Superman vs one of his rogue's gallery and a week later it's good as new!
    Heh, ride along with Bullock and he can threaten people that he has two lanterns in his backseat.
     
  19. AtomicGeneral25

    AtomicGeneral25 Insert Creativity Here

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    Oh right, forgot that this is set a few years earlier. Still, now I can't get the image of an Orange Lantern Elon Musk out of my head!
     
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  20. Vaermina

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    Even assuming this was Real Life Earth, and not Young Justice 30 years more advanced then Real Life Earth Earth, the Space Shuttle would have only been retired a handful of months ago. (Which means they could just unmothball it.)

    But since this is Young Justice 30 years more advanced then Real Life Earth Earth, the shuttle wouldn't have realistically been retired since the tech would have been advanced enough when first building it that the same maintenance issues that ended up causing the retirement wouldn't have cropped up.

    Basically put, this paragraph makes absolutely no sense given the year it was said at and the world it was said in.
     
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  21. Darko

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    Also Kori may not stay on Earth all that much for them to develop romantic feelings.

    Vega is still rebuilding and requires Lanterns, while Earth is relatively stable and doesn't require to be rebuilt after having a tyrannical empire destroyed.
     
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    Thank you, corrected.
    No, a summary which is intelligent and well informed, not a summary from an information gathering organisation.
    Thank you, corrected.
    That's at least partly me not bothering to check, and also the SI emphasising its role.
     
  23. Chojin Patriarch

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    Amazing what people can do when they actually want to. Bet this'll be a kick in the pants of the Americans... Russia basically started a second Space Race. :p

    Despite what you may have seen, Kori, Humanity is primitive. We still huddle in tribes (just on a larger scale,) we argue and scream about the slightest thing we don't like (at least we don't fling actual poo, most of the time,) and we turn to violence at the drop of a fart. This fleet shows we can do greater things. o_O Or we're just going to bring our monkey ways into space with us...

    Not linear magnetic accelerators, are they? Just big metal poles to guide the ships out of the launch tube? So it's practically a giant mortar. :V

    I expect their sensory systems aren't up to much beyond visual range. I hope those guns are at least on turrets. Don't want to make the Mass Effect mistake of spinal cannons you have to move the entire ship to aim.

    The devices OL carries are made by people who are very specifically crazy, in a useful way. Seriously, it's amazing how many technological heroes and villains are a little cracked.

    But your people already had advanced technology. Humans are bootstrapping themselves with every advancement.

    Like I said, this may start a second Space Race. Not just between national governments, either. There must be private space-flight companies trying to get off the ground, as it were.

    Checking up on what the old warbird plans to use his fleet for?

    ...Oh dear, that doesn't sound good.

    The less legal businesses are getting cracked down on. And their police aren't playing nice.

    Ha! Imagine seeing that as an Alt-OL.

    At best, they'd consider it a polite escort. At worst, an armed escort. It's likely to trigger something that makes Batman yell at you again...

    Heh, knowing there's a planet of orange beach babes and surfer dudes out there might get Humanity Boldly Coming, but it might be a while before they get that far...

    ...You're showing her Gotham as her first major American city? Are you insa-... No, wait, you are, but this is crazy even for you.

    Oh, boy. Gotham has no idea what it's in for, does it?

    Huh, must be a real quiet day, then. Public holiday, maybe?:p

    "For one thing, there are more males..."

    Surprised some union or lobbyist group hasn't pushed to have them ripped out and 'proper' installations restored. :rolleyes: Naturally, their company would be putting forwards a reasonable bid for the project...

    So, Swampy couldn't help but try and leave the place better than he found it? He's something of a nice guy...

    Wow, that's lightning quick for government work. I'm impressed.

    Yeah, don't fuck with Swamp Thing. He's scary when roused in anger.

    Well, he might have been going slow, to avoid hurting people.

    Only outwards sign, yes. Damage control companies in the DC Universe work fast.

    I doubt Detective Bullock is even awake at this time of day, but maybe he'll be up for it.

    Well, this promises to bring on all manner of shenanigans. The criminals of Gotham are going to be having a long day, I think... Wonder if he'll find the time to introduce Kori to the team...

    Might you have meant 'built' here? The tense seems odd.
     
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    Ah, no. Let me change that.
    Thank you, corrected.
     
  25. RichardWhereat

    RichardWhereat Aia airëa Fëanáro.

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    How many times did he try that?
     
  26. Gantradies

    Gantradies Not too sore, are you?

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    ..... i feel physically sick
     
  27. Yog

    Yog Know what you're doing yet?

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    So, if Russia has mass producible air resistance cancelers (and damn, that's actually a terrifying technology), are we going to see it being used? I mean, super fast (multiple 10s of machs) and superefficient passenger jets and trains at least.
     
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    Welcome to the club. Bet you regret entering the club.
     
  29. Idkusername

    Idkusername I trust you know where the happy button is?

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    We get it. You guys don’t like Tangseid. You don’t have to leave a message that says the same thing in different words over and over and over again.

    You know what this is like? People bitching over Renegade updates early on in the story.
     
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    Ngamer11 I trust you know where the happy button is?

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    How many jaws are going to drop from seeing Kori? I am remembering an issue of Gotham Central where all the cops ogled Starfire when she visited; both males and females.
     
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