With This Ring (Young Justice SI) (Thread Fourteen)

'so small' not 'to small'

'one of the other' not 'on of the other'

'with a lot' not 'we a lot'

Maybe 'a year later' or 'years later' not just 'year later'

'or a part of' not 'of a part of'

 

"Watch out, that shark is from Turkey!"

 

Thank you, corrected.

I'm sorry?

 

Maybe 'a year later' or 'years later' not just 'year later'

'or a part of' not 'of a part of'

Whose infant son did Wasp take and was he given back to his parent/s?

 

Thank you, corrected.

I don't think that's right.

Wildcat. And no, he wasn't. Ted only found out what happened when Killer Wasp told him.

 

Change "if" to "it".

 

The sentence 'a resident of a part of the nation of Atlantis' just sounds weird when I say it aloud.

It could be 'a resident, or a part of the nation of Atlantis' or just 'a resident of the nation of Atlantis' or just 'a part of the nation of Atlantis'

How is Wildcats relationship with his son now if the two of them know they're related, and if his sons followed in his kidnappers footsteps and became the Killer Wasp, at least for a time?

 

Thank you, corrected.

As far as I'm concerned, the sentence is fine.

Jake's dead. Killer Wasp is Yellow Wasp's natural son. His relationship with Tom is pretty good.

 

Did Yellow Wasp, or Killer Wasp, kill Jake?

How did that happen exactly if he, or his son, did?

 

According to Yellow Wasp's son, Killer Wasp, he and Ted's son were raised as brothers, in fact Jake was Yellow Wasp's favorite, while he performed human experimentation on his own biological son so he looks like this

So Killer Wasp killed them both.

 

Hardly the largest of islands. But to someone from the sea floor, I suppose it feels enormous...

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Appropriate. I wouldn't be surprised if they set the meeting up at the Temple of Poseidon, no less. The joy of a familiar culture.

Understandable. It'd be like the fear some people have of water they can't see the bottom of. Imagine a vast abyss, where anything could lurk in the depths. Where humans were not meant to tread. Just imagine the creatures such a place could manifest... And now I'm giving myself the willies...

Blinding to someone used to the ocean depths, I expect. It wouldn't help that everything would also sound strangely, if his ears were adapted to pick up the slightest sound underwater (Air being a very different conductor of sound than water...)

Completely underwhelming? I presume the 'silt' was clouds and ocean haze.

Brave lad. I wonder who outlasted him, whether it was someone of note?

I doubt she would be so petty. She'd probably have admired his headstrong nature and determination...

A fascinating outlook. Sensible and reserved. A rare combination in leaders.

Sounds like a good Dictator, in the Roman tradition. The kind to surrender his office after the crisis he was elected to resolve was ended. Of course, now he's King.

Another understandable thing. Anything you've had around all your life seems that way, as if it'll never be gone. But it will, inevitably as the sun rises. Homes, family, the popular people you like... Everything ends, sooner or later.

It's a matter of what he can offer the surface world. Poseidonis has a lead on just about anything he can come up with...

As if he feels the need to show respect for a rival? Certainly, it's not as hostile as some nations' relationships, but they'll never be close friends, I expect.

And yet he's still getting dragged into said internal matters. If only to swing his metaphorical dick in the political arena.

Oooh... Yeah, that's the kind of mistake that gets a 'sucks breath through teeth' reaction...

You're talking to that someone. Of course, he wouldn't have been there if Kaldur hadn't invited him and the others...

'Disarmed'... Pun not intended, of course. I doubt OL would be so underhanded...

Of course, Cyprian isn't the kind to get into that sort of fight anyway.

That's what happens. So many idiots get superpowers, and think they're invulnerable, or that people will be so cowed they won't fight back... Not in America!

Ah, business calls. This little break's over, it seems.

She's handling things on the Atlantean side, I take it?

Ah, the politics of who arrives first. I suppose if they're looking to be nice...

At least he's not going alone. I assume they're a mix of guards, secretaries and assorted bureaucrats...

Heh, you're not the first nation to split from its parent state in human history, and consequently wonder that...

Might be a little difficult right away, unless he gets some stuff shipped in. I assume OL would provide textbooks if asked...

Well, all nice and quiet so far. I expect next chapter will be the arrival on Themyscira, and our first look at Lady Ptra. The real meat of the episode will come along soon enough...

It is our culture as much as theirs.

 

Just as the Turks destroyed the Byzantines, so too will the sharks (Turks of the sea) destroy the Aqua-Byzantines.

 

Thanks.

So if Zoats version died in a car crash I guess Killer Wasp killed Jake and not his father.

 

I want to say that Atlantis isn't quite as bad as that, but King Orin does seem rather determined to see his country stagnate politically, even as OL has done his best to see it succeed economically.

 

Zoat when Cyprian told Paul he is no longer a resident of Atlantis he phrased it like he was no longer a resident of a part that is still a part of the nation of Atlantis.
If Venturia has ceded from the rest of Atlantis then it is no longer a part of its nation.
Changing it from 'of a part' to 'or a part' makes a bit more sense as he is stating that he no longer resides in the nation of Atlantis and he isn't involved in any part they play, but is still a resident and part of Venturia.

Sorry if I'm sounding like a grammar nazi, but the sentence just doesn't sound right to me.

Orin is also trying to solve this issue, but because most of his advisors were replaced after the purge following Orms reveal and the fact that he didn't grow up in Atlantis, and thus lacks some of the societal knowledge that Atlanteans get from growing up in their society and because said knowledge isn't most likely written down as Atlanteans figure they don't need to write it down as they'll learn it on their own, he is having a difficult time.

 

Thank you, corrected.

 

WTR is now an immense, sprawling, story. I at best vaguely recall Orange Lantern Savenlovich, though, I'll admit my memory for names is far from perfect. More generally, Green Lantern Savenlovich is the thing a search turned-up.

Not sure what I might suggest, though, having an author-approved wiki, that might be pointed to for not recently used story characters doesn't seem a terrible idea. Main thing is not expecting the author to do significantly more work, because 'they must', of course.

 

She is a Green Lantern.

After Hal and Guy got promoted to the Honor Guard she was made the second GL of sector 2814 alongside Stewart.

 

For some reason that feels like an ominous title.

 

I didn't really think much of Irredeemable, and the ending was just insulting.

 

Queen Hippolyta ?
I feel like the SI doesn't usually refer to himself as British but does point out that he is an Amazon fairly often.

 

As a heroic mortal favoured by the gods, he actually could be in the frame to take over from Queen Hippolyta.

 

The West Wing, underwater edition.

 

Either use:
you will know what it means to love someone.
Or
You will know what it's like to love someone.

 

The sentence feels alright to me.

 

And it feels wrong to me.
Maybe a regional dialect thing.
I grew up learning British English. Can we get a third opinion?

 

Either option would have a similar meaning but it definitely works best as is.

 

I grew up and still live in a British English enviroment and its fine to me.

Its implications are subtly different. Knockout is saying that her daughter has never felt even the slightest glimerings of any kind of love for another. it is a bit more extreme then your alternatives.

 

yeah, regardless of the excuses/justifications for his insanity,implying that Kal-El was literally that psychopath's reincarnation was in REALLY bad taste/an insult to everything supes is/stands for.
the whole thing REEKS of Napier's bullshit self-delusion about everyone being a broken psychopath like him >.<