Oh yea good catch, edited! I was thinking something else when I wrote that line, but now I realize that even if it makes sense to me due to knowing the background plot, it doesn't make sense to readers, and anyway, contradict makes sense and still suits the plot I have in mind. Thank you for pointing it out!
OK but how? There was no transition, its ridiculously jarring. At lead have him go to sleep or something first.
Oh fuck no, sentient systems, especially asshole types, always suck.
That's really weird. Those all sound like skills, not classes. And making them exclusive is even weirder.
What? I can see them keeping his body healthy but the rest makes no sense, especially when you already made it a point he has no memories from before the second transmigration. And he hasn't shown any understanding.
Sure, cause the guy who just woke up from a lifelong coma would know what he needs or what they cost in this era.
Respect, gotta respect the hustle.
So why bother with the multiplier? This is such a stupid nerf. Why even bother naming the story after the cheat if you're just going to get rid of it the second time it comes up?
So I guess being the strongest in his previous life mean nothing. All his combat skills are gone because he is now a "dragon" and his personal skills are just gone.
Uhhh, he did go to sleep.
It's definitely not decided at the last moment. There's a big ass plot related to this I made before even writing the first chapter.
It's a fantasy world. Treasures were used to make sure he has the rest as well along with a healthy body. Maybe I should remove the fact that he inherited no memories since I also later wrote that 'understanding of the world' was instilled in him through treasures. Thank you for pointing this part out. Really.
Umm...earlier he was given basic information. Did you consider that all such basic stuff would be covered?
I haven't gotten rid of it? Purely in terms of progress of power, he is still at 100x boost. Its just the other aspects which I've nerfed, like the shop, and in the long run it'll make sense too since the shop comes under the sentient system's authority (has a plot behind it). The impartial, no awareness, robotic system covers the evolution aspects so you won't see any ridiculous prices there, he has an advantage in draconic evolution since no 100x tax.
He was the strongest in previous life due to reasons mentioned later in the chapters. And honestly, he was strongest in combat, what does monster hunting skills have to do with it? Two unrelated fields. Its like asking a football top scorer why can't you spot a bug in the program code of a game.
Fair enough but it was still too abrupt. He woke up in his second life, looked around a bit, went to sleep and woke up in another world.
I guess but it doesn't excuse how it was written. A future plot point doesn't make the current events make sense.
My point was more as to why would they? Im sure any world with magic could but that feels like brainwashing.
How would the basics cover detailed training? Does basic knowledge cover what you need to study to be an engineer?
So he has 2 systems? Ugh, this just makes the sentient one even more unlikable. But okay, just so long as you don't inflate the draconic stuff too.
What? If he was the strongest combatant then fighting should be easy for him. That includes things like battlefield awareness, coordination, and reflexes. They are not 2 completely unrelated fields. Didn't you say cultivators needed to hunt for rare treasures? That would usually require some monster hunting, no?
He only had 2 skills below heaven? That's insane for the world's strongest. Especially when his heaven ranked ones are so simplistic.
While I will admit some of my points were nitpicky, most were valid criticisms that I simply failed to word appropriately due to how annoyed I was by them. I stuck at putting into words exactly what I mean but if I had to summarize its the story feels half done. You're trying to set up future plot points without actually addressing the current plot. Look back at most of your responses, you repeatedly said its for a future plot point or arc.
So umm, I'm interpreting that there need to be some transition period between going from second world back to main world? According to the plot working in background, he needs to be asleep/unconscious for him to return to cultivation world. Is there an example you would mind giving? Because otherwise, at the moment (maybe I'll need to think more about it later), I really can't think of anything other than - sleep then back to cultivation world. This might be the second or third time I'm getting this input so I really might need to work on it. But the thing is, the first chapter already feels too big at 2.7k words. It might not be that compared to other novels but my usual chapters are 1k-1.2k so comparatively its already big, and I wanted to put all the major hooks in the first chapter itself. Maybe all of that fast paced scene changing got too jarring. I'll see what I can do about it without expanding the chapter even more, in the meantime, any edit would be welcome.
Fair. I'll think about this one too.
Noooo. You only asked about the cost right? I'm pretty sure a basic guide would cover the cost of basic needs. If it still feels out of place, I'll expand upon that 'understanding of the world'. Also, I don't think it's brainwashing if the information is objectively stated without any personal bias.
Not two systems technically, but yes you can interpret it like that for the ease of things. Also, the draconic stuff was just around chapter 16 17 something I guess? See it for yourself. Those are dirt cheap.
Might as well tell you now what I already wrote in later chapters. He relied on the sword to become the strongest. Without it, he was at best, above average among rank 9.
This. Is. In. The. Later. Chapters. Too. Takes a deep breath to calm down.
If there are more apart from ones you've talked about, please let me know so I can address them.
If this is about recreating skills in a different body, I've explained it.
I don't understand the first part. I just need mc to take an active part and discover the 100x cost instead of being passive and discovering it only when he asks the system for the price. Is this it? About the second part, I just need to make kaizen look more annoyed? Sorry but I am having difficulty understanding what you wrote here.
Already explained why he can't have the cultivation skills. He can swing a sword and everything just like in the past, fight like a person with countless years of experience and so on. But if it comes to using Qi to execute genuine cultivation skills, no he can't do it.
No issues. I like readers who comment, although I must say I like flattery more. But nevertheless, this wasn't too bad so I guess I won't go to bed with a frown. With how late it is, mum will wake up anytime and I might get a reaaaaaal bad scolding. Thank you for your opinions. I'll make the changes tomorrow, its sleepy sleepy time.
Without knowing what the background plot you have is i can't really help here. My best advice would be to give him more time in the first world. Give him a week there at least.
I asked how would he knew what to ask for if he only got basic knowledge. There are surely multiple things and ways to go about it so saying its basic knowledge makes no sense. He should have asked for information on what he needs to train artifactung and what tools.
At higher ranks but at lower ranks he would've needed to use his normal senses, no? You're putting too much weight on his Skills (qi powers) and ignoring his skills (technical skills).
I didn't read that far, my comments were from earlier chapters.
Okay, that should've been explained in story when he tried to recreate his old skills.
Haven't read more yet so I've got nothing new. Hopefully there won't be anymore.
Pretty much. He's too nonchalant about it. Wouldn't you be annoyed if something decided to charge you more? He says one line and moves on. Your writing a character, he needs to act more like a character and not some npc. Its also a good way to show the readers about the system. If you had I wouldn't have had a reason to complain about the nerfed cheat. I don't know how to explain any simpler than that.
Sorry if repeating myself here but we definitely got off topic with a bit of a misunderstanding. My point wasnt about his cultivation skills (i was just pointing out how annoying that was too) but about his skills (real skills, not fancy qi powered bullshit). So he can tight like a master swordsman then he should have the knowledge on how to fight monsters (even if it wasn't a focus he should've fought plenty in his first life). He should still know enough to be on guard and alert while in the forest hunting. He should still have his relfexes (muslce memory isn't a body thing but a mind one despite the idiots who can't use google to check say). You made him act like a noob with none of that just cause he lost his previous qi skills, that is what I'm talking about when I say he should have his skills.
Like I explained, I wanted to put everything in the first chapter itself. Giving him a week in a world which doesn't have any significance to the plot makes it seem like a filler. I'm still contemplating how to make it less abrupt though.
Introductory book on artifact refining covers everything about that topic. And I feel like you're really just nitpicking about the memory thing now. I already explained why I wrote what I did. It was a convenient plot device.
I can add the fact that he was still a bit out of touch with technical skills since it had been a long time. He had to get used to the fact that he was now at a lower realm.
Do I have to explain every single thing down to last details every time I introduce some things? There's only so much I can explain at one point without making it feel like an info dump. I gotta space out the damn explanations so that the story actually moves forward without me stopping to explain everything being introduced. It also wasn't as if the explanation was hundreds of chapters far away and I kept the readers in dark for so long. It is explained just some ten or so chapters away.
Thank you. I'll do that.
Wait, when did he act like a noob without Qi skills? I've mentioned several times how efficient and deadly his fighting style was. That if they were other rank 1s present instead of him, they would've run out of Qi far earlier than him. I also wrote how easily he dispatched the beasts. His side effect of chaotic thought interferes sometimes but overall his combat capability is still strong as fuck.