Nekraa
Nekraa
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I actually thought that it was a possible interpretation of the title of the story, yes. But when thinking about the PRT case worker she mentions the one in cannon, which isn't quite right. Probably.
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I actually thought that it was a possible interpretation of the title of the story, yes. But when thinking about the PRT case worker she mentions the one in cannon, which isn't quite right. Probably.
Might want to check the thread tags, too.
I may be mistaken, but I was under the impression Vista had seniority over all the wards at Worm's start. So, shouldn't Aegis and Gallant not be here yet?
It was probably the best decision. While I wouldn't have been put out by having a full cast of OCs minus Vista, I was somewhat surprised how much I liked the others being there.This already came up, and Cyclone helpfully found the appropriate interlude and quoted it here. Essentially Missy was the longest serving of those that survived Leviathan. Whether Carlos and Dean were there first or joined later then comes down to fanon. In this case I made them both come first because I wanted the BB Wards to feel fairly familiar to readers.
I might do some Dallons perspective to elucidate on what happened, but I don't think I'm spoiling too much just giving a bit of Vicky's head space. The simple answer is, Victoria doesn't 'get' her aura. She didn't get it canon, so I doubt she's got any healthier of an understanding less than six months after triggering. While she can somewhat enforce high or low on specific targets, it's all one aura and usually responds based on how she sees them and how they see her. (Amy triggered in '08, assuming Victoria really did trigger at a high school basketball game and within a year, that season is usually Nov-Feb or so giving us a likely Dec/Jan trigger. Chapter 1.5 takes place April 4th)
Basically, Victoria knows it can be a weapon during a fight, but in social situations it's just 'putting on the presence' since it's always there at least a little. Also she's almost always around, socially, people who like or look up to her. She's a Hero and a surprisingly powerful and successful one despite her youth. To the people of Brockton Bay she's an icon of good, and that gets into their subconscious on some level. Sam doesn't have that view of her. Sam sees her as a reader of Worm and it's many fanon interpretations, as an irrational and possibly dangerous powerhouse who, unintentionally admittedly, undermines the wills and desires of everyone around her. Basically, a walking catastrophe she has no desire to spend any time within ten meters of.
So Vicky sees her sister behaving unusually, Amy hates touching people, with an unknown parahuman that unintentionally touches on many of the nerves from her trigger event. (Being ignored in favor of more interesting powers, 'being replaced' due to how Sam is a blond like Victoria but has E rank charisma making her cuter than is technically humanly possible, and feeling a bit left out because she's honestly pretty bored with the venue while Amy's been quite happy just browsing books and taking reading breaks.) Add a touch of involuntary disgust at Sam's spider portion... Well, basically she decided to solve the problem the way she has everything since gaining her powers. 'Put on the presence' and go impress Amy's new friend and take back the center of attention.
But her target isn't already impressed by her, and Victoria isn't all that happy with them, so the aura's effect on Sam isn't 'awe', it's 'fear me, peon'. When I finally get the character sheet updated, the perks will make it more obvious why she wasn't paralyzed in fear and instead went 'super battle mode'.
So basically, it was an accident... But one that could have been easily avoided if they treated her aura with the seriousness it deserves as a strong, even if not directly permanent, stranger effect rather than a minor detail of how awesome she is.
That was adorable!
Hm... I wonder how her physiology will interact with Taylor's powers.
Anyway, looking forward to more.![]()
...Not at all? She has a human brain. It's her lower body that's a spider.
Taylor's power isn't about insects - it's about brains that fall within a certain band of complexity. That's why she can do crabs and whatnot.I doubt this will come up barring a timeskip, but I think Taylor would, arguably, be able to seize control of her lower half. IIRC, she controls their nervous system, not direct by brain, doesn't she? I may be entirely wrong on that, but that's what I remember. I think they'd interact by Taylor being able to manipulate the spider bits, but not the human half.
Sorry for only commenting on this now, but I only just read this. It's a really interesting story, and I can't wait to see where you are going with it.
I can't find the exact quote, but IIRC it was complexity of the nervous system. Basically, however SamPardi wants to run it, they can run it that way; I can see it going either way. I just mentioned it because I thought if a time skip did happen, it might make for interesting plot later on if the author decided to draw upon that.Taylor's power isn't about insects - it's about brains that fall within a certain band of complexity. That's why she can do crabs and whatnot.
The noises of the park that had been barely audible a moment ago were now playing in stereo but without overlapping and last of all she detected the distinct scent of pheromones and it was getting stronger.
I feel this would sound smoother if you specified that she moved to protect the other girl.
='She reversed their connection'? English isn't my native language, but I don't think 'to reverse' is reflexive. At least not in the dialect I've studied.
Do you intentionally imply raw lust rather than awe and admiration here?she caught sight of the adult-matinee the girl's mind had become
Would sound smoother if it were 'back door into her head, Sam's mind', imho. Original wording reads like 'her' and Sam may be different people and 'her' is no longer hidered by the link to Sam.Without the back door into Sam's head her own mind was downshifting from its particular method of handling what should have been absolute terror.
Insufficient emphasis on how scary and threatening Sam became, reaction appears unjustified. Maybe throw in aggressive posture and hissing?
Poor wording. What does stereo have to do with increased sensitivity of hearing or her ability to discern each individual sound? What kind of pheromone did she feel and from what source? Very unclear.
I feel this would sound smoother if you specified that she moved to protect the other girl.
='She reversed their connection'? English isn't my native language, but I don't think 'to reverse' is reflexive. At least not in the dialect I've studied.
Do you intentionally imply raw lust rather than awe and admiration here?Would sound smoother if it were 'back door into her head, Sam's mind', imho. Original wording reads like 'her' and Sam may be different people and 'her' is no longer hidered by the link to Sam.Insufficient emphasis on how scary and threatening Sam became, reaction appears unjustified. Maybe throw in aggressive posture and hissing?
Great story so far, but I'm kinda wondering about the stats of your character. What is the red number and what is the number in brackets?
Great read so far.
Wouldn't Gamer's Mind have just no-sold Vicky's aura before it could make her fight-or-flight?
Also, if I read the last chapter right, it seems like PanPan will be immune to her sister's aura for a while, big ol' butterfly right there.
Wouldn't she have eight eyes rather than four? The rear four would just be covered by her hair. And finally, multitasking feels more like a skill than a perk, with more levels allowing more ongoing tasks, rather than a perk (not sure how that fits in with programing, either, tbh)
Edit: maybe change the perk to "parallel processing" and have it double her multitasking ability so she can grab multitasking at a later date.
Unless it is drastically changed from the "The Gamer" version it: