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Munchkin Ninja [Naruto, SI]

Discussion in 'Creative Writing' started by Bool1989, Mar 20, 2019.

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  1. Bool1989

    Bool1989 The Face of a Murderer

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    If you was hoping other wise, this is not going to be a creepy pedophile fic!
     
  2. Galler

    Galler Making the rounds.

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    It's good to see the SI using some creativity in his attempts to find the root anbu.

    Considering the Anbu left so quickly I would assume that he knows he was made, this will probably make Danzo want the SI even more.
     
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  3. Akuma-Heika

    Akuma-Heika The Devil Exists Within

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    Thank God.
     
  4. Edifier

    Edifier To rectify, be my cause. To blithe, be my purpose!

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    Most naruto fanfiction writers forget that it's a shounen anime and turn it into a seinen horror or thriller or something deathworld or whatnot. No saving princesses and ending dastardly plots for them.
    Tho dem tragic back stories, like every character had one of those batman parents killed scenes... Except Sakura, pretty sure she had no issues whatsoever.

    Light Yagamis security system - from death note? Kazuto is the best! Tho the graphite thing, I don't recall the last addition being used there. Mhmm. He improved it?
     
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  5. Bool1989

    Bool1989 The Face of a Murderer

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    No, Light Yagami used it. you should go back and read the manga/ watch the episode.

    The anime is on netflix, if you have it.
     
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  6. awkane

    awkane Getting out there.

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    He kinda did I think, remember his two lieutenants is Yamanaka dude and the other is an Aburame with special insects. Though to be fair I don't know how he managed to recruit them.
     
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  7. Bool1989

    Bool1989 The Face of a Murderer

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    Probably not as kids.
     
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  8. Bool1989

    Bool1989 The Face of a Murderer

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    Ah, didn't see this earlier.

    Yeah, I think you will see a lot of things in this fic that you won't see anywhere else in Naruto Fanfiction.

    That will come later, tho
     
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  9. Tired

    Tired I trust you know where the happy button is?

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    I don't like fics where the SI gets into the spotlight of powerful factions at the first ten chapters but I will continue to read this just for you. But this type of fics are starting to become a cliche. When I read marvel fic like this, MC does something and Shield or Hydra immediately gets notice of the MC. Next chapter? Hello Mr. MC sir, My name is Agent Coulson. Can you answer few questions for us?
     
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  10. kabs

    kabs Getting sticky.

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    So why didn't the Anbu leave when the door was first opened? Or through the window?

    i assume Danzo has Root look through the boarding orphanage every year for promising kids to put in a 'special program'?
     
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  11. Yinko

    Yinko Versed in the lewd.

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    Why would anyone in their right mind get close to something like Naruto Uzumaki? The only possible justification is that by manipulating him into considering you one of his "precious people" you can gain the aid of a future powerhouse. There are however a few major errors with this idea, mainly that he was not introduced to that idea until Haku ingrained it into his orkishly thick skull with his own suicide, and there is no guarantee that Naruto will ever become all that powerful once you interfere with his life, what with the butterfly affect.
     
  12. awkane

    awkane Getting out there.

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    Naruto is a completely lonely kid, be his friend and he will treat you like you are his brother for life look how far he went for someone like Sasuke, besides even if canon doesn't go normal you just need to teach kage bushings and it's "secret" to Naruto and he will cheat his way to be overpowered, in three weeks he managed to do rasenshuriken the Pinnacle of chakra nature, something that would take a jounin years to develop, imagine Naruto training like that since he was 13y or sooner.

    I honestly hate that kishimoto came with this idea because it makes ppl like Kakashi and Jiraya idiots for not coming with it sooner, if he were to train like that since the day he first learned kage bushin there would be not plot because he would curbstomp anyone in his path
     
  13. Tasoli

    Tasoli Know what you're doing yet?

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    Heterosexual life partners actually. ;)


    As a Tabletop game than tragic backstory was 5pt flaw that had no bearing on the game so everybody took it. Sakuras player was a noob tou so she didn't and that is why she was never able catch up to Naruto and Sasuke.
     
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  14. Sceptic

    Sceptic Critical Irrationalist

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    He's high enough profile that Danzo might hesitate to disappear you without a compelling reason.
     
  15. Yinko

    Yinko Versed in the lewd.

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    Danzo disappeared an Aburame with the unique ability to use microscopic bugs, a Yamanaka, and he recruited Kakashi, Itachi, Shisui and Orochimaru before exterminating the Uchiha clan and ordering Orochimaru to engage in human experiments on children. I really don't think he gives the slightest of fucks.
     
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    Sceptic Critical Irrationalist

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    Compelling reasons. He's not disappearing a bunch of high profile nobodies there.
     
  17. Bool1989

    Bool1989 The Face of a Murderer

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    We don't know that he disappeared an Aburame and a Yamanaka. I once read a fic where those clans chose to work with Danzo for Mutual benefit, and as far as I know, there are no details as to how that Aburame and that Yamanaka came to work for Danzo.
     
  18. wigg55

    wigg55 Getting sticky.

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    The problem with Danzo is that hes somehow very competent offscreen and 10/10 stupid evil onscreen. AKA a convenient scapegoat to show how not-evil Konoha is and how its all just Danzo's fault. Remove him and its all rainbow's and friendship. Instant justification for how Konoha is really the hero-faction.

    For him to be a compelling character you need a healthy dose of AU tossed his way.

    Good stuff so far tho, keep it coming.
     
  19. CrazyGuy

    CrazyGuy Sanity is for the weak

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    Realy liking this thus far, it’s actually quite hard to find a Naruto SI that isn’t in a clan have some ability ect, I just want to see a normal ninja with the mind of some one who knows what’s possible, knows how to maximise the advantages that they have and make use of all the op stuff that normal ninja have access to but never take advantage of out of ignorance or laziness

    good job, keep it up
     
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    Felius Versed in the lewd.

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    It's probably good training for when you are a ninja. Too much modesty in the field is likely to get someone killed while trying to get some privacy. :p
     
  21. Selias

    Selias Experienced.

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    https://naruto.fandom.com/wiki/Torune_Aburame

    He was basically the adopted brother of the clan head's son. Though, this is before the Uchiha Clan Massacre, so Sarutobi hasn't ordered that Root be disbanded yet. As such, it's less "disappeared" and more "recruited."
     
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  22. Bool1989

    Bool1989 The Face of a Murderer

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    Yeah, i'm pretty sure that just disappearing a clan member is pretty hard to do, particularly if that clan likes that clan member.

    It seems that the Aburame clan didn't like Torune that much, for some reason.
     
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    Selias Experienced.

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    https://naruto.fandom.com/wiki/Fū_Yamanaka
    Sounds more like Danzo has the right to recruit anyone that he wants, maybe? Or more likely, maybe the clans don't have the right to disallow their members from joining?
     
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  24. Bool1989

    Bool1989 The Face of a Murderer

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    I suspect it has to be a politics thing. Fu was just one child out of many in the clan. Maybe if Danzo was trying to recruit a clan hair to the headship, they might exert more political pressure to stop that from happening, but for your regular members, it's not as much of a deal, particularly if they are just asked to join, instead of forcibly recruited.

    Besides, Fu knew a lot of his own clan techniques, so it was likely he still had contact with his clan.
     
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  25. transhumansage

    transhumansage Getting out there.

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    is this on hiatus
     
  26. Bool1989

    Bool1989 The Face of a Murderer

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    No, i will update eventually.
     
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