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With This Ring (Young Justice SI) (Thread Fourteen)

Discussion in 'Creative Writing' started by Mr Zoat, Jan 27, 2019.

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  1. AverusBlack

    AverusBlack AKA Sky

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    Singularities don't count, I think
     
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    Mr Zoat

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    24th August 2012
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    "So… How are you finding it on Maltus?"

    Nauca hesitates a moment then-.

    A roar echoes through the air and the ground shakes!

    He hesitates a moment longer, making sure that there's not going to be a follow up. Then he uncringes. Slightly.

    "So far, I like it. I'm a lot safer here than I was on Qward, I've got access to better materials to work with and… I don’t know, I kind of like having an objective to work towards beyond 'do this and we don't kill you'."

    "You don't get that from Kalmin?"

    Nauca shakes his head as a little way away Orange Lanterns move in to cover the evacuation and warn people away from the combat zone.

    "He's trying to work out how to teach Weaponers so that they'll turn out like he did, rather than the way most Weaponers did. We're trial runs. He won't kill us accidentally because even if we don’t turn out how he wants us to, he still needs to understand what went wrong."

    "You.. are aware that you don't need to stay with him, right? Maltus actually has a civilian economy, along with the organisations that make up N.E.M.O., and you're perfectly welcome to train for any position."

    He nods.

    "Thank you, but… I really like destroying things. I just want to know that I've achieved something by destroying those things, you know?"

    "We need people like you in the Orange Lantern Corps."

    "I know, but I think I should finish school first. And… I don't really like the idea of using a weapon an alien made."

    I shrug. "It's your life."

    He looks back towards the combat zone as golden lightning leaps skyward.

    "Who was that human? I think I recognise the dimensional overlay defence he used, but I've never heard of a human with something that advanced."

    "That's Thaddeus Sivana, and… A small proportion of humans are vastly more intelligent even than normal 'very clever' humans. He's one of them. He also… Tends to regard everyone and everything around him as a potential experimental subject."

    "He's a Weaponer?"

    "No, because human social structures don't have that title. He isn't part of our ruling elite, he doesn't make weapons for our soldiers, and I don't think he's old enough to qualify. And he's never used qwa matter."

    "He's… That young?"

    "Where we're from he can't legally drink alcohol or drive a motor vehicle."

    "Who enforces that?"

    I nod. "Yes."

    "I see. Are there others like him?"

    "His sister's on Maltus now, if you want to speak to her. She wanted to talk to the asylum wardens, but she's probably-."

    My ring shimmers.

    "Probably available. Excuse me." I raise my ring. "Illustres here."

    Dox's face appears.

    "It's time. Come to my office for briefing."

    "With you momentarily. Ah, Georgia's on Maltus. Is-"

    "I know."

    "-it alright if she turns up?"

    "If it wasn't, I would have told you the moment you appeared."

    "I meant, comes with me to your office."

    Dox frowns slightly. "Of course. I would value her input."

    I narrow my eyes slightly. "Who are you, and what have you done with Vril Dox the Second?"

    "That turn of phrase isn't as funny as humans seem to think it is. We have a complicated security protocol for dealing with shapeshifters and illusionists, and having reviewed the data on the damage they can cause I assure you it is no laughing matter."

    "Right. Sorry."

    "And neither is the fact that I like Georgia. Both Ratchet and Brande regard this as 'progress' on my part. Do you disagree?"

    "No, just.. a surprise. A pleasant surprise. Good for you, both of you. I'll go and find her now."

    "E-." Dox hesitates. "Thank you. End."

    He disconnects, and I lower my ring.

    "Is there any chance that Daciya will negotiate a ceasefire?"

    "What's a ceasefire?"

    "A temporary cessation of hostilities while both sides rearm."

    "He was going through her equipment. I don't think she thinks she has anywhere else to go to in order to rearm."

    "Then I suppose that I'll have to stop them. Excuse me."

    I wrap myself in armour, construct armour and the stuff of desires and drives and fly at speed back to the vault. Fortunately, the building is designed to withstand quite a lot of force being directed at it, so it's unlikely that a Controller will feel the need to involve themselves. A stray plasma bomb detonates on my defences, but otherwise I'm able to convey myself through the somewhat-ravaged corridors into…

    Daciya has recovered several of her abandoned projects and is hastily assembling them into something that's greater than the sum of their parts, a crackling golden bubble shield holding off some sort of flash-fabricated probe that Thaddeus is poking at it. There's some radiation, but it doesn't look that dangerous.

    "Alright, knock it off. One-"

    Golden energy arcs towards me and fails to penetrate my construct.

    "-warning."

    "She started it."

    "I'm not your mother, Thaddeus. And this isn't a duelling arena."

    "I don't duel with-. Actually-."

    "Daciya, this is a draw."

    "But I'm-." I glare at Thaddeus, who appears to recognise that he might have gone a bit far. "She still started it."

    "And he's challenging you to a duel. You can fight him again later, somewhere where it won't inconvenience anyone else. Stand down, now."

    Glaring, she twists a linkage into place, before nodding.

    "Two days, in the southern duelling grounds."

    Thaddeus nods. "Agreed. Try a little harder next time."
     
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  3. BlueMangoAdea

    BlueMangoAdea Alive. For now.

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    [Shipping Goggles]It’s a date.[/Shipping Goggles]
     
  4. Darko

    Darko Well worn.

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    'hesitates a moment'

    The two love birds still going at it.

    'than even normal'

    'He also'

    But space ships and sci fi scooters that fly he can.

    She is vastly more intelligent than you Paul, and Dox most likely values that.

    Love is in the air.

    Oh, just shut up and do each other.
     
  5. Ngamer11

    Ngamer11 I trust you know where the happy button is?

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    Now I'm interested in how that conversation went. Did Ratchet and Brande genuinely wonder if Dox was replaced when he admitted that he liked Georgia?
     
  6. DrThoth

    DrThoth I trust you know where the happy button is?

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    In a few sentences I like Dox vastly more than before, especially after the encounter with Grayven.

    This probably is the way Weaponers (to be) do each other, or at least start the process. And it clearly works for (some of) the Sivanas too.
     
  7. Handlewithcare

    Handlewithcare I trust you know where the happy button is?

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    The Shipping Lantern Corps, subdivision of the Star Sapphires

    Oh, so they were on Maltus.

    Yeah, please don't blow that one up guys.

    Teddy is doing well so far, I think. Trying to kill each other at first sight is an accepted court ship ritual among the superhero/supervillain community.
     
  8. l---erddad---l

    l---erddad---l Wait, google can see this?

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    I don't think they'll be destroying a planet, but more because no matter how smart he is, it's hard to jury-rig your way to beating thousands and thousands of years of prep from people on your level that can also alter matter at will with a thought (because Maltusians are busted and have a... I wanna say symbiote species they bound to? anyway, it granted them dynakinesis+telekinesis to an insane degree).
     
  9. Mr Zoat

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    Thank you, corrected.
    No, I think that's okay.
     
  10. RichardWhereat

    RichardWhereat Aia airëa Fëanáro.

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    they
     
  11. Chojin Patriarch

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    Probably finds it a bit odd he's not at risk of execution for failing at something. Or saying the wrong thing at the wrong time. It's probably liberating, if a bit unsettling for him, I bet...

    Like I said, probably finding the lack of immediate punishment for things odd. To be fair, though, given the presumed Qwardian upbringing... That expectation is probably deeply ingrained.

    ...Honestly, I'd be worried about Kalmin if he didn't at least threaten them once or twice. Just for old times' sake.

    ...Man, how big is the little spat between Daciya and Tad getting? If they start breaking out personal atomic weapons, we'll know it's serious... And I'm surprised Kalmin is looking into the social sciences like that. Guess he believes Qward needs a better class of Weaponer, given how what's-his-face turned out.

    Heh. Do what you love, and you'll love what you do.

    What if he manages to develop his own Orange Ring from basic principles? Would he be willing then?

    ...If this were Earth, I'd be worried that Tad had somehow replicated the Wizard's Lightning. Which the Sivanas have done in the comics, forming their own villainous little group. Briefly.

    Congratulations, kid, you've just had your first scrape with Earth's particular brand of Malign Hypercognitives... :cool: And you even survived unharmed!

    I can understand his confusion, given everything Tad's done has been just like a Weaponer would...

    Not that he'd bother with such mundane options. Why drive a car when you can just build a mag-lev speeder? And I doubt he sees alcohol as anything other than a waste of valuable braincells.

    The implication being that Tad does what he wants because no-one can stop him from doing it... Besides his parents.

    Admittedly, speaking with Georgia would probably be an enlightening experience if he was wanting insight into the social sciences... Especially their ability to be weaponised.

    Ah, another mission? Right back into the saddle, eh? I guess things went well enough on Yuna that Dox isn't rethinking OL's deployments...

    Where it anyone else, I'd be concerned that he's not interested.

    But this is Dox we're talking about. Mister 'Social skills are irrelevant' himself.

    ...Wait, what? :confused:

    I'm guessing it involves long annoying waits in secure containment while people prod you with sensors and probing questions? Kinda like Worm's 'Master/Stranger Protocols'...

    ...Are we really sure this is the actual Dox? Then again... Learning to actually like people is good.

    :eek: Impressive progress. He actually remembered basic politeness.

    ...OL, think about what you asked. Weaponer logic has only one kind of ceasefire: When one party is dead.

    "That's an odd concept. Why would you let an enemy live to get stronger?"

    Welp, time for the giant orange hands of restraining?

    Okay, kiddies, time to stop flirting. Things are getting a little too noisy.

    Good thing that was you. I suspect anyone else, other than Kalmin or a controller, might have had trouble surviving that.

    In other words, kids: Stop making all that noise and get a damn room.

    Huh, looks like she's been getting into it. Nothing like a rivalry to spark some inventive use of parts, after all.

    Preferably somewhere well away from anything valuable, or fragile. Like a city...

    It's a date, then. Ah, young love. Or hate. Well, they're two sides of the same coin, after all.

    Well, then. Time to collect Georgia for her own meetup with a sweetie. Knowing she's older than I was thinking (I figured the younger twins were like 15, tops) makes her and Dox just a little less awkward. Who knows? Maybe her skills at the social sciences can help him break out of that crusty shell he's got. It's already got a few cracks forming, after all...
     
  12. Khettien

    Khettien Perpetually confused

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    Sockmonkey Not too sore, are you?

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    If Thaddeus figures out qwa matter, does he get to call himself a weaponer even though he's not Qwardian? It's really never come up before.
     
  14. Darko

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    Given the Qwardians xenophobic culture, I doubt they'd be all that pleased that he's calling himself a Weaponer.
     
  15. Prognostic Hannya

    Prognostic Hannya Knight in the Yuri Crusade

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    Holy shit Zoat did you just turn this into a Worm crossover
     
  16. goricnac

    goricnac Not too sore, are you?

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    Is this how Thaddeus flirts?
     
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    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    DrThoth I trust you know where the happy button is?

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    This is what Star Sapphires should be doing, finding unlikely matches that could have incredible (and ideally positive) impacts on the world. It's weird saying that in regards to a Sivana/Weaponer potential pairing, sure, but there is an interstellar war going on after all, so it makes a weird kind of sense. And more importantly, makes for every entertaining reading. I hope Ghi'ata is doing something similar (in either/both Paragon and Renegade timelines).

    Edit: And it would be nice to see them championing other forms of love too; the Found Family trope is pretty popular for a reason, and it would give them more nuance.
     
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    I suspect that includes Thaddeus himself.
     
  20. Inbetweenaction

    Inbetweenaction Know what you're doing yet?

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    "It is a socia.." "SOFT SCIENCE!!!!"
     
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    A better answer would be "The government will fine any store they catch selling it to him."
     
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    Good to see he remembers how to not be a pushover.

    I would love to see how Thaddeus would react to knowing that he, a contender for Greatest Human Inventor/Mad Scientist, was gloating about having almost defeated a high-school dropout.
     
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    Thaddeus also isn’t an adult yet.
     
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    Mr Zoat, I know you originally said there were nine Guardians, and then later changed it to eleven. However, this still says nine. If you will make it eleven, will you use the last two Guardians that are Maltusians that I found on the Green Lantern wiki that aren't from after the New 52: Guardian 7 and Scar? If so, are you taking requests for what their names will be?

    Edit: Also, looking up the wiki, the Guardian who was assimilated by Larfleeze is just known as the Orange Lantern of Space Sector 3001. Will you be making that the Space Sector where Maltus is instead of leaving it ambiguous?
     
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  25. WereDragon

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    Qualifications, not age.

    Thaddeus believes there is no one, aside from possibly his father, who could teach him anything. Daciya knows she isn’t even close to matching the average Weaponer. Yet the two found themselves relatively evenly matched.
     
  26. Mr Zoat

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    Neither Guardian would be called those things, due to Scar not having a scar and the Guardian not being a number.
    Probably not.
     
  27. Ngamer11

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    Just to confirm, you will be editing that part to say eleven Guardians and then think up of names for them yourself?
     
  28. Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    If you could please link to where I said there were eleven?
     
  29. Ngamer11

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    Here they are:

     
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    Before you can build a better bomb, you need to build better bombmakers.

    I like it.

    So that you can continue to test yourself against them.
    Remember, the objective isn't to crush your enemies and rule unhindered, it's to produce the greatest destructive technologies possible.

    For a duel, they probably wouldn't, but for a 'friendly spat' like this, letting your competition retreat for a bit to step their game up also gives you the chance to step your game up. So that the next clash can be even louder and more destructive.
     
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