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With This Ring (Young Justice SI) (Thread Fourteen)

Discussion in 'Creative Writing' started by Mr Zoat, Jan 27, 2019.

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  1. mastermenthe

    mastermenthe Mint Thistle

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    Is that right? I thought it was from aeration drawing the sword of khaine? Or did malekith do something I didn't know about?
     
  2. Vaermina

    Vaermina Well worn.

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    Last I checked the Emperor's Sword was still with Guilliman.
     
  3. Pinklestia

    Pinklestia Well worn.

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    Oh he probably told him that if ither Grayven gets to Earth, he will look the other way as long as he kills him and his whole army in the end.

    In other words, the Shade would have FUN.
     
  4. Tzeentch

    Tzeentch I trust you know where the happy button is?

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    I think The Curse being Malekith's fault is an End Times retcon, so if that's getting thrown out the window, and until Zoat says otherwise, it's Aenarion's fault for drawing Widowmaker from the Altar of Khaine.
     
  5. Michael Vonica

    Michael Vonica Know what you're doing yet?

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    What are the details of Aenarion's curse? Casual browsing has lead me to believe that it had something to do with making Aenarion and those close to or descended from him crazy or something, and possibly messed up in body, mind, or soul. It looked like it differed on a case by case basis. For Teclis, it looks like it took the form of physical disability, with a possible boost to his soul or mind, that could have contributed to him becoming a better mage. What exactly are Teclis' symptoms? Is there one good source for all this?
     
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  6. Tzeentch

    Tzeentch I trust you know where the happy button is?

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    The first book in the Tyrion and Teclis Trilogy gives us a few details in regards to what he's suffered from before he got proper spellcraft and medicines to help treat the symptoms. Seemed as though he was having to put up with almost every ailment elf-kind is usually free from.
     
  7. Handlewithcare

    Handlewithcare Versed in the lewd.

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    But they still integrated it so badly she is basically a split personality right now.
     
  8. Threadmarks: Veganism (part 15)
    Mr Zoat

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    1st September 2012
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    I feel it as the fleets engage those allied to the pretender, and I feel it -albeit distantly- as those reluctantly gathered beneath my banner begin to die.

    Satisfactory.

    Sinthia is monitoring the situation by conventional means alone. Her limitations are a mild disappointment to me, but even the more intelligent gordanians are not given to sophisticated research. My scouts indicated that the pretender has not yet been able to access either Auron or X'Hal, so the Tamaraneans aligned to him will not have been able to truly ascend either.

    And he is hardly the only man with power rings.

    My awareness of the Citizenry dims. They were to be another distraction, but they were unreliable. So long as they keep a portion of the pretender's fleet occupied elsewhere, it is acceptable. And if I am honest I expected little better from a people so filled with so unwarranted pride.

    "Transfer the fleet."

    "Yes, Lord Grayven. Boom tubes opening."

    The tubes open in front of the rapidly moving assault ships. Unlike the ships I dispatched in the first wave, these do not open into extra-stellar space.

    No. These will go right into the atmosphere.

    I feel it as they fly over the cities on the target world, their passage through the skies marked by exploding windows and eardrums. Ruthlessly they target defence silos and military bases, ordnance that could have disrupted my efforts annihilated before it can be brought to bear.

    I cannot help but be puzzled at the pretender's fixation with Vega of all places. For me, assimilating my gordanian clan was a matter of convenience. I made them the core of my force precisely because no one would notice them. Because no one was tracking them or cared what they did. But if I'd had a power ring at that point there are a hundred places I would rather have gone to begin my ascension.

    I suppose that I can rip the answer from his disassociated soul.

    "Initial attack is meeting expectations. No unexpected resistance."

    I knew that, but auditory confirmation is good to hear. When she first entered my service she was barely competent to shine my boots, but now? She serves as a competent second in command.

    "Their fleet?"

    "Ships are being recalled from the edge of the system and reinforcements are being called in from nearby duchies."

    It may be a little premature, but I can't help but smile a little.

    "Their command ship?"

    "We have the location."

    I raise my right hand, palm vertical. Then I drop it forward. Smite Them With My Wrath.

    "Opening boom tube now. Shall I charge the hyper blaster?"

    "No." I rise to my feet and open a boom tube to the-

    Boom!

    -upper surface of the Absolute Dominion. "I will attend to this personally."

    "Yes, Lord Grayven. Four seconds to complete passage.. mark."

    "Good. Maintain fleet awareness."

    I step through the tube and out onto the hull. I see the upper circumference of the capital ship sized boom tube aperture pass over me, the stars of one part of the universe replaced by the stars of another. A beautiful sight; a reminder of the freedom I have won and the power at my command.

    The battleship before us at relatively short range is only just activating its weapons. Even from here I can see the protective cowling retract and the guns run tests on their gimbals as their master tries to decide what to do.

    I widen my eyes slightly, and embrace desolation.

    "Be not."

    I don't see it, but I feel it as the twin orange beams leap out to unmake anything in their way. Anything that exists, ends, and those things that attract my attention end sooner.

    I may not be able to see the beams, but I can feel it when they punch through the shields of the Crown Imperium's flagship before boring through its hull towards its bridge. I can feel it as the ship begins to fall apart around them. And I certainly feel it when they strike the commanding Admiral and reduce him to his component atoms, his soul to wisps of mana and his mind erased forever.

    As my vision clears I see the slowly-expanding hole in the ship, and the panicked faces of the bridge crew as they scramble to don their helmets as the air leaks away. I Cause You Loss of Direction.

    Now I need but one thing to occur for the opening stage of my attack to be an unqualified success.

    I am authority. But the claims of another abut the space my psyche defines as mine. The pretender does not realise it, but his attempts at usurpation give him away.

    "Tamaran. He's on Tamaran, his capital and fastness. Do the soldiers who formed the first wave have a precise location?"

    A brief pause as Sinthia reviews reports.

    "Contact with New Gods was reported. His bodyguards."

    "Any record of them?"

    "One. Knockout."

    I barely remember her from my days on Apokolips, but she struck me as a simple-minded fighter. A Fury, true, but I never believed that Granny Goodness was creating anything beyond dumb muscle. A problem with the more controlling New Gods: they refuse to take the risk of creating someone who could supplant them. Like koross tamers who pluck out the beasts' teeth before displaying them, they cripple themselves as much as their trainees.

    Father…

    How the pretender managed to-. No. That doesn't matter now, and it will cease to have any meaning upon my final victory.

    "Dispatch combat robots. Keep them on him and keep him distracted. The Absolute Dominion will be able to track his location if he retreats. I want him focused on his immediate surroundings until it is time for me to end him."

    "Yes, Lord."

    The Absolute Dominion rotates and the capital planet of the Crown Imperium burns in the wake of my fleet. Ah, now this is a world from which I can build an empire! An educated population, an existing power hierarchy and an unwed queen. Weak and unstable neighbours whose territory will be the training ground for my armies and fleets!

    As if anyone with any sense would care about Vega.

    The Absolute Dominion's secondary batteries open fire on Kranaltine's defence stations. They aren't quite powerful enough to destroy them in a single hit, but three hits is an acceptable rate.

    I could go down to their royal palace now. They don't have anything powerful enough to stop me. However, the effect of my divine panoply will be greater if I have the pretender clearly defeated when they first see me. And my forward teams should be able to secure my other objective without my drawing more attention to it.

    "My lord? The robots are reporting that the pretender isn't there. The New Gods appear to be guarding a small child."

    What? Indecision is Death.

    "Dispatch Estrogina's team. Bring the child here that I may interrogate them. If he is hiding from me I will have the pretender broken and bleeding at my feet before I grant him the mercy of oblivion."
     
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  9. Chojin Patriarch

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    And Grayven-16 speaks!
     
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  10. moralrelativity

    moralrelativity Recovering pendant.

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    Looking bad for our gravvy.
     
  11. yingyang590

    yingyang590 Getting out there.

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    Kinda confusing there, is his flagship ship called the Absolute Dominion or does he have a ship also called the Doomsday?
     
  12. Ngamer11

    Ngamer11 Experienced.

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    So the Zamaron Pirates work for Grayven in the Renegade timeline. At least they're dead in the Paragon timeline, so Paul doesn't have to worry about them anymore.
     
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  13. Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    Thank you, corrected.
    They got handed over to the psions. That doesn't necessarily mean that they're dead.
     
  14. Darko

    Darko Connoisseur.

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    'my banner'

    So we finally got to Actually Grayven.

    If she's a Tamaranean in this setting then I'm betting some of the Gordanian clans took some slaves with them and when Actually Grayven took them over he got her service..

    No, I'm betting their most interested in how to better raid.

    He's not wrong.

    Oh, yeah, New Gods can steal the powers of others.

    The only time this was shown in this story was after the Captain Planet chapter where renegade apparently killed that evil god from there.

    In the comics it was stated that Darkseid would absorb the powers of other pantheons, though I think it was only shown in the n52 when he killed those Old Gods and later fought Zeus and absorbed his power.

    Ahh, the New God desire to get their hands dirty even if it isn't very practical.

    'my attention'

    Was this admiral Ozpin, or whatever his name was, the guy that renegade talked to about a ring?

    'about the space'

    She isn't creating more than dumb muscle, but renegades time with her has ensured she's a bit smarter.

    True.

    Am I detecting some jealousy here?

    I wonder how the comic version of you would react.

    I mean Darkseid 16 at least.acknowledges that you're his son. Comic Darkseid may not even remember who you are.

    Well it was where the CPB was.

    There's also the fact that it's isolated so he can work with more peace.

    And a feeling of pride of being able to turn a shithole into a galactic power.

    I think you'll be surprised at how far Vega has come.

    Oh boy.

    These are the Zamaron pirates.

    I guess Actually Grayven has a thing for strong and violent women.

    To quote Alucard.

    "You done goofed"

    I think Lynne will do that to you first.

    I know that this isn't connected to the story but let's take a moment and think about TTS and what it has brought to our lives.

    At least we got one more episode..

    Goodbye TTS, you will always be the Weird Al of Youtube parodies.
     
  15. Darko

    Darko Connoisseur.

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    The planet being turned into a wasteland may point to them being dead.

    Though they may have somehow survived or were never on the planet, either escaping the Psions or being in another location.
     
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  16. Bud-E

    Bud-E Stand up so I can push you down!

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    Earth-16 Grayven is on Tamarean right? Cause the Queen's still married to the King
     
  17. Darko

    Darko Connoisseur.

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    No he's on the Crown Imperium world.
     
  18. FeepingCreature

    FeepingCreature Not too sore, are you?

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    Actually no. :) "Abut" is a real word meaning sharing a border.

    Which actually shares an etymology with "butt up against"! And "butt" in general, for that matter.

    Spiritually, Renepaul has his butt¹ all up in Grayven's business.

    ¹ Boundary! Really! Look it up!
     
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  19. yingyang590

    yingyang590 Getting out there.

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    I think Darkseid still regards Renegade better than Graven 16 here.

    Darkseid seems to like people who defy him. After all, you can't be a tyrant over the hopeless or the willing. Renegade has created a fully independent powerbase with a novel way to contain and purge his fragment of the Anti-Life. While Graven 16 has just gone and become a lesser version of Darkseid.
     
  20. Darko

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    Didn't know that.

    For a moment I thought it was the Canadian way of saying 'about'.
     
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  21. Handlewithcare

    Handlewithcare Versed in the lewd.

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    Lin is going to tell her Not-Father what for. He is going to get such a talking too!

    And Other-Grayven is going to find out how motivated a pissed off father becomes...
     
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    Thank you, corrected.
    What?
    No, 'abut' is correct.
     
  23. Darko

    Darko Connoisseur.

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    https://forums.sufficientvelocity.c...young-justice-si-thread-twelve.25032/page-917

    I lean forwards. Gaea's a few inches shorter than me, and to an external observer it looks like I'm leering. I'm not. I'm staring directly into her eyes.

    "What do I want? Well, like any good businessman-" I take a moment to focus on the metaphysical additions I gained when I slew and absorbed that idiot Zarm. "-I want to tear the coverings of the Earth to get at the stuff underneath."

    She raises her eyebrows.

    I grin. "But for now, I'll settle for the rights to your photovoltaic technology. I've a mind to abolish fossil fuel use worldwide within a century and yours are the best available."

    "Really."

    "And as a gesture of good will..." I open up the well ventilated box I brought with me. "I brought you a present."

    I pick up the Tasmanian Tiger cub within and hold it out to her.
     
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  24. Chojin Patriarch

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    Ah, Grayven-16. The man, the legend, the arsehole boss. An interesting chance to see what drives him, what brought him to fight the Renegade, and what he's planning... Shortly before the Renegade comes steaming in in full Papa Bear mode. :cool:

    Yes, but his don't have the restrictions the Guardians placed on theirs. Don't assume he'll operate anything like the way you assume he will, boy.

    So, 'Citizenry as distraction' confirmed. I honestly doubt he ever planned to give Astarte what she wanted from him...

    "Ultra-rapid insertion!" No need for subtlety, eh? Straight to the terrifying close assaults. Which may end up biting him in the ass.

    Because everyone who's heard of the sector has written it off as a den of scum and villainy, eh?

    Expanding considerably on the comics version, eh? Knowing Mr Zoat, she'll have much more character, at least.

    Opening up holes in their defence. Unfortunately, Grayven-16 doesn't care about lines of defence... He'll simply smash them aside or bypass them entirely...

    Not the Doomsday, or that would have been remarked upon... So this is likely not the Kryptonian Creche-world.

    Ah, New Gods. Always indulging a flair for the dramatic.

    Thanks goodness for that. At least he has no intentions of blowing up planets he could simply conquer...

    Handy, that Apokoliptian fascination with getting their hands dirty.

    ...And if this were a show, that would probably be ranked as a Crowning Moment of Visual Effects.

    Oh, that can't be good...

    To quote from Kill Six Billion Demons: "Behold the awesome fires of god. The limitless power of pure creation itself. Look carefully. Observe how it is used for the same purpose a man might use an especially sharp rock." Grayven is not subtle, is he?

    ...I hope that wasn't someone the Renegade found useful. Otherwise he is going to be pissed.

    And since we know the Renegade isn't in Vega right now... He's sensing Lynne, on Tamaran. Because her soul is shaped a lot like the Renegade's...

    At least he can't narrow it down from this far away.

    And that's all that's needed. She's come a long way under the Renegade's leadership...

    And you're a fool if you think that's true of Darkseid. He's not so simple or straight-foward in His planning.

    It's called 'not being a petulant little twit', you petulant little twit. :p

    Overconfidence. Because he would never step away from his place of power when trouble was calling, would he?

    Don't count your chickens before they're hatched, boy. You evidently having been keeping up with the times...

    No, you want to be able to drag his lifeless corpse along behind you, or bear his head on a pike, don't you? A pity you'll go disappointed.

    Ah, beginning to realise you're not as in control of things as you think you are, eh?


    Yes, I don't see that backfiring on him at all, nosirree. :sneaky:

    A good look at Grayven-16's mindset. And it's as bad as I thought. Overconfident, arrogant and almost completely lost in his belief that he has the upper hand. Though I can understand that being necessary to reinforce his Godhead. It's going to be very satisfying to watch him stagger from blow after blow as the Renegade turns the tables on him.
     
  25. Rebu

    Rebu hey, little Anna, you're the one

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    I understood that....reference?
     
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    The saying "don't assume, it makes an ass out of u and me" is something that can be applied to Actually Grayven.

    He may have.

    If a powerful magical being makes a promise then they may need to keep it or face consequences.

    Also he may want to raise any child from that union as an heir or useful tool.

    Now I'm getting White Scars voxcast flashbacks.

    To be fair, it basically was that.

    Unless she's killed off.

    No, no he isn't.

    I think it may have been Ozpin.
     
  27. jasonh23761

    jasonh23761 Not too sore, are you?

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    I really hope that wasn't Duke Oswin. I really liked him as a character. He was someone with drive!
     
  28. BartlettMagic

    BartlettMagic peekaboo, you fucks you!

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    ohhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh are we going to get to see Lynne flex her little New God tele-muscles?
     
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    NightmareWarden Versed in the lewd.

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    I wish Lynne and Artemis had taken the time to work out “Mind Arrows” as a valid form of attack. Ah well, time for Lynne to do something clever, perhaps make Sunset nod in approval.
     
  30. Mr Zoat

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    I completely forgot about that. Well remembered.
    No, he's in Vega as part of the defence.
     
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