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With This Ring (Young Justice SI) (Thread Fourteen)

Discussion in 'Creative Writing' started by Mr Zoat, Jan 27, 2019.

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  1. Radix

    Radix I trust you know where the happy button is?

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    So what actially happened in this arc? Cause it was like 40 chapters and I cant really remember what it all was.
     
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    Paul went to the place where the Controllers stored their Sun Eaters because it was taken over by Titans who wish to make proper contact with the Controllers. Unfortunately, while Paul was there, they were attacked by a space fleet that was given advanced tech by an Apokoliptian who wanted the Sun Eaters. The deal was the leader of the fleet would rule the people and/or get a new place to live while Doctor Impossible would get the Sun Eaters. Due to how it has been sealed, Doctor Impossible needed all of the Titan Seeds, the seeming source of the Titans' powers, to access the Sun Eaters. Thanks to Paul, this failed and Sparta, leader of the fleet, as been apprehended and revealed to be a pawn in front of her followers, so now the two forces will need to reach an accord on how to move forward.

    I think I hit all the important notes.
     
  3. Threadmarks: Future Tense (part 1)
    Mr Zoat

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    Future Tense

    13th September 2012
    06:43 GMT -5


    I

    appear in Jade's living room, and…

    I sigh.

    That's one of the features of ultra-advanced home accessories. The home doesn't feel… Lived in. There's no patch of trodden-in dirt around the entrance where the highest frequency of footfalls land. No worn carpet, faded where the sun shines most brightly into the room. No residual scent from a spilled sauce of a hundred cooked meals. No perfumed smell from airing laundry.

    It was alright when I was keeping the place going for Jade, but when I started working off-world for the Corps…

    I don't know. Moving in together is a big deal in a couple's relationship but I'm basically just house sitting here, for someone who might not ever come back.

    We're lucky if we get to see each other a couple of times a week.

    I do actually have my own place, in the… Consulate? Manga Khan built in Bir Tawil. All-round views of desert and sea, if that's your thing. And if it isn't, at least it beats Gotham.

    What's in the fridge..?

    Not a lot. Artemis and Paula have a key, so I thought… Well, I suppose there wasn't much chance of them popping by when I wasn't even on the planet. Jade being Jade we've got plenty of emergency preserved stuff that's reasonably edible, but nothing that's up to my standard.

    I guess this is military life for you.

    Okay. Restocking isn't going to take me more than two hours. But am I restocking for one or two? I need to find out whether Jade's actually free or not. Her current assignment is counter-infiltration, which usually doesn't require a particular Darkstar to stay on site for the whole duration. But maybe she's near the end of an investigation?

    There was a thing in the comics after Supergirl's arrival in Batman/Superman, where she got involved in a fight between the Justice Society and Solomon Grundy. They were struggling -which was bullshit by the way- and then she turned up and Grundy was down in a single punch. Me… Getting involved in certain types of fight is like that. The Reach deploy some sort of mind control agent to a planet, the Darkstars sneak around to try and uncover the plot without alienating the locals by violating their cultural taboos and power structures, then there's a fight with an infiltrator or two…

    Beetles aren't a threat to me at the moment. Which wouldn't be a problem if we had a Batman/Superman responsibility split, but Jade's sensitive to my displays of overwhelming power and… Doesn't have Batman's networks yet. At least nothing I can't blow past with raw power in most of her postings.

    I waggle my left hand as I transmit my 'I'm back for a bit' message to League-affiliated servers.

    Darn, I'm feeling mopey right now.

    Fix that.

    I

    step out and

    13th September 2012
    08:45 GMT -3


    appear next to a flower stand in Sao Paulo… And this is part of the problem, isn't it? Twenty four hour society means that in a lot of places you can do anything at any time of day. No… Cycles. I'm not sure if that causes a magical problem, but it does change the way we interact with our environment.

    And it almost certainly does cause a magical problem.

    And I can literally appear anywhere at any time. I'm not a citizen of the country where I spend most of my time while on Earth, and while I do at least know the names of my-. Our? Neighbours, Jade knows the entire floor. I'm not integrated into my surroundings.

    I look around at the flower displays, and… No. I nod at the locals, who are edging away from me. Unlike a lot of pre-Sheeda Brazil, Sao Paulo is still part of Brazil. In fact, with Brasília barely habitable it's unofficially become the capital, pending… I'm not entirely sure why what's left of the government hasn't committed yet, but it's pending something. The place is kept alive more or less entirely by being the main trading port with access to the novel plant species being created in the continent's interior, which is… Why I'm surrounded by flowers unknown to botany as of a few years ago.

    I take a moment to sniff the bouquet.

    "Can I help you, sir?"

    I smile at the shop assistant brave enough to approach the glowing man.

    "I'd like a combination that will make a home smell like home. My girlfriend's been away for a while."

    "Sir, we specialise in novel plant species. If you want something that smells familiar… This may not be the best place."

    "She's been off the planet for a while. I just want it to feel a bit less… Empty."

    "Ah, in that case, I suggest these." She picks up a small pot containing long-necked purple flowers protruding from a base of fern-like leaves. "They're extremely hardy and release a pleasant floral scent for several months."

    "Are they legal in America?"

    "There's no ongoing magic effect, so they should be."

    "Excellent. I'll take five. Do you still take dollars?"

    "American dollars?"

    Because when your government collapses, the world's favourite reserve currency is what you fall back on. And while no government is going to fail to print money during a global crisis, those places that were hit worst… Some of them have given up on even having their own currency for the time being.

    "Whatever you want, though I imagine they're a little more fungible than bullion."

    I create a construct cart for the pot plants, pay and

    then

    13th September 2012
    06:48 GMT -5


    return to Gotham, putting the plants on the kitchen table before dismissing the construct. Okay, one can go on the dressing table in the bedroo-.

    The doorbell rings. Okay… Zeta tube? Wallace? I look through the wall, but I don't recognise the pattern of desires. No one outside of the League knows I'm back, so… Jehovah's Witness?

    I shrug, put the plant I'm carrying down and open the door.

    "Hey, Lantern."

    I blink.

    "Good morning, Dana. What..? Are you wearing?"

    "Code names." She steps forward, pushing me back inside Jade's apartment with… More than human strength. I do a quick scan but everything I'm seeing matches up. "I'm 'Supergirl' now."

    "That's… Taken." I close the door behind her, following her as she wanders into the living room and drops into a settee. "Ah, three times. Where have you been?"

    "The future. Where the name 'Supergirl' isn't taken." She takes a deep breath. "We need to talk."
     
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  4. Doccer

    Doccer I trust you know where the happy button is?

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    Omg seriously?:V
     
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    Wasn't expecting Dana to show up again. Guess Paul's going to team up with the Legion of Super-Heroes. Hopefully they (meaning Brainiac 5) will be more polite this time.
     
  6. Doccer

    Doccer I trust you know where the happy button is?

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    Anybody know the link to that chapter? I completely forgotten about them showing up.
     
  7. Ngamer11

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    They showed up in Episode 68: Pursuant and Episode 69: Mandated when they kidnapped Paul and Truggs, thinking that they might be why their timeline disappeared.
     
  8. hance1986

    hance1986 A pitiful excuse for a man.

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    Beetles

    Beatles really wouldn't be a threat to a Lantern.
     
  9. crazygrox

    crazygrox Versed in the lewd.

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    This makes me wonder whether he's met a this-time-period version of Dana.


    Also now that we're doing a time travel plot again I have to wonder how traveling from one of the sections of time where there's only one timeline and it can be altered works when you're travelling to a section of time where hypertime exists, or vice versa.
     
  10. Ngamer11

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    After he met his self who became Time Trapper, he got his memories of meeting the LSH and Dana back. As such, he should at least remember that she's a member of the LSH.
     
  11. Darko

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    High tech living isn't all that it's cracked up to be.

    'built in

    And most things beat Gotham.

    Hmm, looks like you got over your habit of destroying money.

    Your scan may not detect the magic coins.

    So are several other people.

    Though maybe Loriel can change it to Angelfire.

    Hmm, it's Loriel, Kara and who's the third one, I can't remember?

    Welp, this is either connected to his whole Time Trapper adventure or something else.

    Now I wonder if Zoat wrote this because Young Justice has the Legion in it now or if this was planned before season 4 came about, or if he was planning to write this episode but chose to release it sooner due to season 4.

    And to be fair the two of them may have been responsible.
     
  12. Ngamer11

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    I think he's counting Overgirl.
     
  13. Darko

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    Not necessarily.

    When he left she was still being held by the Legion so he may not know that she joined them.

    However he may be able to deduce that she joined them if he remembers that she and him encountered the Legion and if she's calling herself Supergirl then she's most likely involved in heroics.
     
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  14. Mr Zoat

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    Not sure what the image was, but I'll put a link to his wiki page and add a page scan.
    Again, no idea what picture that was so I'll stick a deviantart image in there instead. If anyone has a better idea I'm happy to replace it.
     
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  15. Ngamer11

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    If I remember correctly, their conversation at Vanishing Point included her telling Paul that she became a superhero in the future.
     
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  16. Massgamer

    Massgamer I trust you know where the happy button is?

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    I mean, I hope she doesn't hold a grudge for Paul basically forgetting about her and leaving her with Legion.
     
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  17. Old Knife

    Old Knife Not too sore, are you?

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    If she's got those coins and they give her super powers. Shouldn't she be a marvel instead?
    I realize that its just a naming thing but
    Zeus Lighting
    Zeus Power
    Mercury Speed
    Mercury Flight
    Hercules Strength
    Heimdall Speed

    So yeah. ZZMMHH isn't SHAZAM but if you squint and turn your head a bit......
     
  18. Ngamer11

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    She's been hanging out with the LSH. I assume at least one of them told her that he might have had his mind wiped.
     
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  19. Chojin Patriarch

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    That's in her house in Gotham, or her apartment on Maltus? The time suggests the former, of course. I do hope someone's been treating the place right, because an unattended house can get surprisingly flavoursome.

    And thankfully no stink of dried-out drains or trapped heat. Believe me, I've had a few family trips that had our homecoming turn out like that.

    I hope not. Perhaps she could get a permanent posting as embassy security if the Orange Lantern Corps sets up anything long-term on Earth..

    Ah, he left that behind when he left? I suppose it wasn't cost-effective to recover the materials. And if I remember right, you're neighbours with Kahndaq.

    Probably see no need to look in, outside of making sure druggies haven't broken in, though I suspect OL's security system is enough to prevent that.

    ...You didn't even think to check? Boyfriend skill fail.

    Hey, Grundy is technically magic. That there's a pretty big counter to Kryptonians. He's also laced with plant matter, which counters Alan Scott hard, and he's the Society's biggest hitter, even in the modern day. And if' he's on a smart respawn (Because he changes personality every time he's properly killed and reborn,) that's even worse.

    No doubt triggering a 'yellow alert' for all Justice League Members. :D Because OL is nearly always followed by trouble.

    Meet with Kon, see sweaty abs, perhaps?

    And with a Power Ring, you honestly are your own 24 hour society. And no jet-lag either, so bonus.

    Honestly, that's as much the fault of your 'must fix everything' impulses as anything. Too many things to do, no time to stop and smell the flowers.

    Probably delayed by the city folk trying to keep some kind of power over the forest folk. But when said forest folk have a stranglehold over nearly every resource...

    Dang, that's guts. Especially given how you never know what a glowing man who appears out of nowhere might be, these days.

    Heh. I see Euanthe's having some fun remaking old species... :rolleyes: And people wasting no time working out how to make money off of it...

    Just as long as you do a detailed scan. Never know what it is or how someone might react to it...

    Well, that drops some interesting details about both Brazil's plant life and America's current import laws, huh?

    Especially when a lot of currencies actually run off the US Dollar anyway.

    Honest as ever, OL. I suspect the assistant would have been happy to let you go without paying...

    And no wasting time. No doubt the Sao Paolans are breathing a sigh of relief he's gone... :D

    On the upside, if this is some kind of 'Killing Joke' scenario, whoever's out there is going to have trouble with a .45 caliber hello...

    Ah, Dana Dearden. It's been a while, miss Obsession. How's the Thirtieth Century been treating you?

    She's been busy, I see. Using the Flying Brick package the Coins give her for good, I hope.

    Well, then. With a title like that, this promises to involve the Legion of Superheroes. So either OL's going to be taking a trip to their future (hopefully restored after the whole Time Trapper thing) or some of them are here for some reason. Why do I get the feeling., whatever happens, Hinon's going to have another headache?


    Because in the era of Legion of Superheroes, the Marvel family is nearly unknown, whereas Superman is a near-divine figure of inspiration and hope. So someone calling themselves part of the Super-family sends a message.
     
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    I think that should say 'built'.
     
  21. AmericanNumbers

    AmericanNumbers Not too sore, are you?

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    It's weird given that Paul constantly talks about being enlightened but I kinda think he's in the wrong relationship for him. He needs some sort of grounding to keep him from moving into full inadvertent super villainy and yeah, as much as he Wants Jade? She's not what he needs.
     
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    What about HMZZMH? Pronounced Hum Zum
     
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    She may not like that.

    Her skills lean more towards infiltration and assassination.

    The post you suggested would make her essentially a bodyguard or security guard, which she may not like.

    This is his first romantic relationship.

    Not to mention if the Rot was involved.

    I can picture then sitting in the Watchtower all calm and relaxed, then suddenly the dreaded alarm goes off and they realize that Paul is back.

    And then they sink into despair and angrily curse at God.

    And if you try to push them then they'll push back so hard that it'll leave you a bloody smear.

    Or making new ones.

    Humans.

    They don't know who he is and yet they can sense that he's a burden.

    Because Paul is involved.
     
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  24. Rebu

    Rebu hey, little Anna, you're the one

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    Sounds very Golden Age.
     
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    Actually Grundy has an oft forgotten power- energy absorption.

    If he eats enough mojo he can take on the JSA and JLA at the same time, and has.

    Anyway, Dana should be Captain Action. Those are his coins after all.
     
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    Vaermina Well worn.

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    That's never a good thing to hear from a Time Traveler...
     
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    You didn't know about Fallout: Equestria?
    I mean, wrong, but thank you, corrected.
    Thank you, corrected.
    Ah, the putrid odor of Nu52.
     
  28. Chaoswind

    Chaoswind Lord of nonsense

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    Dana Dearden being back is awesome because she was one of the dark horses for the Paul bowl back when this fic was in SB and it had only a little more than a million words.

    Dana is more age appropriate than most and her little deranged yandere girlfriend stick make her awesome as a plot facilitator.

    Anyways, I am happy with this development and want to see where this is going, certainly I hope she is here to stay.
     
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    I didn't actually know that he worked for the Rot in the n52, just thought that was one of his stories of how he became a zombie, or a story where he was empowered by it due to being an undead creature, which makes sense, but not the exact year where it happened.

    Though one origin story apparently had him being a failed plant elemental or something like that.
     
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  30. Senevri

    Senevri Not too sore, are you?

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    Probabably not, but considering Batman has some strong opinions about punk.....
     
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