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With This Ring (Young Justice SI) (Thread Fourteen)

Discussion in 'Creative Writing' started by Mr Zoat, Jan 27, 2019.

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  1. Michael Vonica

    Michael Vonica Know what you're doing yet?

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    Huh. I could've sworn...
     
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  2. Darko

    Darko Connoisseur.

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    It's possible that it can in some comic issues, but other writers may have left it out.

    Wouldn't be the first time something like that happened.
     
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  3. Michael Vonica

    Michael Vonica Know what you're doing yet?

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    I thought this was a more well known scene. It's quite silly.
     
  4. Darko

    Darko Connoisseur.

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    I forgot about that.

    Though it's not so weird seeing as it's a magic object and she's the daughter of Zeus, a lighting god, in the movie.
     
  5. Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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  6. Michael Vonica

    Michael Vonica Know what you're doing yet?

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    Now, I never said it wouldn't be.
     
  7. Cuchulin

    Cuchulin Versed in the lewd.

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    That actually sounds a lot like Sun Wukong's Jīndǒuyún (筋斗云 Somersault Cloud) or kintoun/Flying Nimbus to Dragon Ball fans.
     
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  8. Stsword

    Stsword Versed in the lewd.

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    The lasso has been depicted as "infinite in length and strength" in the comics, I don't recall any cloud wrassling though.

    She's manipulated souls with it though.
     
  9. Coda

    Coda Versed in the lewd.

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    The double negative makes this sentence not work. Either "Looks like being ... isn't much healthier" or "Doesn't look like being ... is much healthier".
     
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  10. Pinklestia

    Pinklestia Well worn.

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    I wouldn't have helped Nazi Earth, at most I would have nuked Demon Earth.

    Then again, if I usually made good choices I would be a billionaire.
     
  11. lostapenny

    lostapenny Your first time is always over so quickly, isn't it?

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    i'm imagining the next chapter to start with them ripping off a mask and having demon superman say "That's right! it was me the Horror of War the whole time and i would have gotten away with it to if it hadn't been for you nazi's and your magic rope.
     
  12. DrThoth

    DrThoth I trust you know where the happy button is?

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    I thought Paragon was avoiding Ophidian-related abilities (inasmuch as he can when his soul is actually a piece of/linked to her) due to being in a different dimension.
     
  13. Old Knife

    Old Knife Not too sore, are you?

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    I wish Kid Flash were in the fight so someone could say it without it being weird.
    KF however has grown up and may or may not say these things.

    Need a different young sidekick.

    Of course when it comes to Paul, there are alot of things the team(YJ) may end up doing without batting an eye because weirdness is par for the course with him.
     
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  14. Ganurath

    Ganurath Apologizes For Nothing

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    Why let demons and Nazis kill each other when you can dunk on both?
     
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  15. Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    Thank you, corrected.
     
  16. Threadmarks: Krummkreuz (part 22)
    Mr Zoat

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    Which wouldn't usually do very much, but between the eye damage, kryptonite radiation and concussive head trauma, he doesn't think to use his flying ability to negate their pull. Demon Superman goes down hard, face first into the rubble, which looks impressive but doesn't do anything to injure him further and makes it impossible for us to hit his eyes any further.

    I fire another mage slayer round and wait for orders as Diana and Artemis begin to tie him up and Shadow of War settles back down on his head.

    "I know that he was a great man." Atom Man floats closer, another charged shot pointing at the top of Demon Superman's head. "But would it not be kinder to kill him? If I had done this to the Fatherland, I would not thank you-"

    Overman and Superman slam into opposite sides of Demon Superman's head, the air buckling and blasting outwards at hurricane force!

    Atom Man leans into it, the push of the wind fighting against his flight system.

    "-for sparing me."

    "Think it through, Atom Man. This world is a wreck. They need him alive to put it back together again."

    "Ah. Cruel, but practical."

    Demon Superman manages to move his right hand, scrabbling for something to push against. I fire another teleported mage slayer and Atom Man shoots the questing hand, causing visible burns to appear on the back and making it spasm and draw back.

    "Baroness, bring in Crusader. Orange Lantern, shield him."

    "Sir."

    A red blur and then Baroness Reiter appears, carrying Crusader in both arms while he in turn carries the Spear. They're-. Heh, appropriate, on the Daily Planet ruin/throne. Crusader kneels in prayer with the Spear clasped before him while-

    I transition down and erect a construct shield.

    -Baroness Reiter twitches the twitch of someone used to moving fast who has now stopped moving.

    "I've got this. You can-."

    "I need to stay in case Crusader needs to be repositioned."

    I nod. "Holy water go down okay?"

    She nods, standing so that she can keep Demon Superman-

    Overman and Superman fly into his head again.

    -and Crusader in view as the blue light begins to spread out across the city.

    "How do you know this ritual?"

    "Got possessed by an elemental, once. Met an exorcist called Father Mattias. After we had to interrupt a major summoning I made sure I knew the procedure."

    "Is that common on your Earth?"

    "Common? No, but it happens. How are you handling the added speed?"

    Because when you've got Flash mind controlled and know the procedure for bestowing speed, what sort of ninny doesn't use it?

    "It works. I would be dead without it." She pauses for a moment. "Would it help if I prayed as well?"

    "The words don't matter. Faith matters. If you don’t have it, don't bother."

    "Do you?"

    "No. No faith in any benevolent higher power. I make pacts with gods I can trust as I would anyone else."

    Probably best that I don't mention my interactions with the Host within hearing range of Crusader.

    "You?"

    "Today I found out that demons are real and faith in God can ward them off."

    "Alright, but I'll warn you that faith in the Source cannot be authentically combined with National Socialism. The Source does not care when you hold the Sabbath or what colour your skin is. That 'camel through the eye of a needle' stuff was right on the money."

    "You believe something like that and you say that you don't have religious faith?"

    "I can describe a belief set without holding to it myself. Though if you were wondering, the Hellenic gods don't care about those things either. Though they're more forgiving on the subject of covetousness."

    The blue light spreads slowly at first, moving sluggishly over the ground tainted by demon magic. Then it finds the path that she and Crusader ran earlier and flashes along it, guided by the sanctified water splashed from his thurible. It's not literally being conducted by the water, but partially by the ideas mankind has about sacred spaces and partially by the faith Crusader José Luis Lopez has in the divine plan and his role in it.

    The Lasso of Truth is binding Demon Superman's arms, now, and it looks like he's either too insensible to move or has given up on trying to break out.

    "We will free you, Clark!"

    Demon Superman raises his head at the mention of his host's name, only for Angelika to strike him in the back of the head with both feet. Atom Man also takes the opportunity to shoot him in the face, though between the low power of the shot and Demon Superman's partially regenerated demonic aura it does little but make him instinctively jerk away.

    Hm.

    The blue light is spreading faster, and I see it as it reaches the first unconscious Marked cultists. It… Laps around them, wafting up and over their bodies for a moment before glowing and expanding with greater vigour. Their bodies seem… Perhaps more relaxed? Afterwards.

    It's working.

    But just in case. Railgun. Because there are three other kryptonians in close proximity, and-.

    Overman and Superman dive in for another attack as I see Demon Superman's throat bulge.

    "Caution."

    Demon Superman convulses, his head thrown back as a red.. ball-shaped thing erupts from his throat and flies at Overman, talons outstretched and mouth open to bite! He fires heat vision at it, but it ignores the searing red beams as it reaches for him-.

    And then my angel feather rounds hit it in the chest and head.

    "Gahhhhhh!"

    Golden fire envelops… Whatever the heck it is that caused all of this. No mortal flesh to hide in any longer.

    "Nooo! I can still-."

    Diana punches it in the bulbous chest, and it… Bursts, the few parts of its foul body not consumed by golden fire vaporising as the blue light of Crusader's spell flows over Superman's recumbent body.

    And I hear… Something that makes my soul shudder at the unclean feeling it evokes. I can't… Put it in words. As if some foul presence that felt itself master of the world found that its hold was not as sure as it thought. And felt unimaginable malice for those involved in thwarting it.

    And then it's quiet once more. Crusader sags, Spear falling from his grip as his spell rushes for the horizon in all directions. Superman's body shrinks, and Diana darts down to check on him.
     
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  17. Darko

    Darko Connoisseur.

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    Missing a threadmark.
     
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  18. Darko

    Darko Connoisseur.

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    'You believe'

    'aura, it does'

    'was not as'
     
  19. Bud-E

    Bud-E Stand up so I can push you down!

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    Converting the Nazi's might make them better people. At least less prejudice.
     
  20. Stsword

    Stsword Versed in the lewd.

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    For anyone curious, here's what that beach ball with arms Kryptonian Imp looks like-
    [​IMG]
     
  21. Mr Zoat

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    Thank you, corrected.
    Do you remember a long time ago, when the SI said that he always tried to capture and hold enemy buildings in Command & Conquer?
     
  22. Old Knife

    Old Knife Not too sore, are you?

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    I wonder which demon that was. Mr Smiley face?
     
  23. Xelloss

    Xelloss Know what you're doing yet?

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    Mr Zoat, I heard the British are having a competition for a new royal pudding. Will you do an orange one ? ;)
     
  24. MagnumForce

    MagnumForce Making the rounds.

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    Oooooof, Clark is going to be so traumatized by this.

    A Kryptontian demon huh? Good thing angel feather rounds worked on it.
     
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    Handlewithcare Versed in the lewd.

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    That was a bit anticlimactic. He really was simply possessed?

    The lack of demons made me think it was something more...fundamental.

    Like maybe he tried to destroy hell and got hit by all the freed energy. A lesson in humility.
     
  26. Ngamer11

    Ngamer11 Experienced.

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    Are you implying that Paul has another plan wherein Earth 10 will be defenseless to another force while most of its heavy hitters are on Earth 666?
     
  27. Darko

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    The demon's name is Rakkar.
     
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  28. Chojin Patriarch

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    Lucky. Because, just as they depicted it in the DCEU, being able to basically ignore gravity makes for quite the dangerous physical combatant. Knocked down? Just lift off a little and slide along at ankle-height! Need extra force behind a blow? Use a burst of supersonic speed to add it!

    Better to let him decide that, once he's in his right mind again.

    Not much more damage they can do to the city at this point. Amazed half the towers are still standing after all this.

    A feat worthy of a Super-Man.

    Ah-ah, big guy. Take your licks like a man.

    Got to love how respectful he is, no matter who that might be talking. He's under their command, they're 'Sir'.

    Center of the infection, so to speak. The channels may well already be jammed wide open for his magic to flow through, because of Rakkar's actions. all they have to do is change flavours.

    Actual superspeed, rather than whatever emulation of it she was using before... Quite a heady sensation, isn't it? Especially since there is a Speed Force in this universe...

    Would have been an amusing sight at superspeed: droplets of water suspended in the air as they pass out of her speed 'bubble'.

    Heh. They make quite the 'Bash Brothers' pairing.

    OL has made it a point to know just about everything, after all. And for the things he doesn't know, he has experts he can call in. One of the best super-powers: The Rolodex of Knowledgeable Allies! :V

    Not as much as it could be, for which OL is no doubt thankful.

    So, she's running on speed borrowed from the Flash? Interesting concept. I assume it won't stick once she goes home, though.

    And yes, we've already had the Nazi Christianity discussion before...

    More like business transactions, really. They get as much out of them as he does. Even his worship of Eris was a calculated choice... Which he probably wouldn't have made if he'd remembered Ploutos existed.

    ...Probably best not to break the faith of the only person you've got who can help cast this spell...

    'Eye of a Needle', for reference. A surprisingly common concept in all the Abrahamic faiths, though used in subtly different ways by each.

    ...Well, they'd have to be, after all. Given their own natures... Zeus and Apollo's various 'romantic' obsessions for a start...

    Or he's gained enough strength now to try and fight back against Rakkar...

    ...Who is probably in control of this form, and hopefully feeling every bit of the pain it's receiving...

    Though not actually healed of the... Toothiness? That could be painful.

    Just in case whatever's responsible is contagious, huh? Smart man.

    Oh, this is going to be disgusting...

    Honestly surprised that works on it, but I suppose Kryptonians had their own equivalent to the Silver City, Angels and holy energies.

    'Such a strange fate... That we should feel such fear and doubt over so small a thing...' Not quite tiny, but in the end... It's kind of pathetic, isn't it?

    And so ends the last remnant of Krypton's Hell. A pity it caused so much harm before it went.

    Now, to see if Clark survives the aftermath. Between the changes, the injuries and his own feelings...

    And so the mission is accomplished... Now, the cleanup will begin. Checking to see if the world is entirely cleansed... Whether the people returned to what they once were... And making sure villains like Wolf Kreiger aren't still in the wind to make further trouble. Fortunately, a lot of that can be done via power Ring. At any rate, this Earth has been forever changed...


    As others have noted, a Kryptonian demon from their Hell. A one-issue wonder that appeared in Superman #666. Basically, it survived the destruction by metaphorically clinging to Kal-El's escape rocket, and eventually (by making deals with various Lords of Hell including Neron) got a chance to possess Superman.
    In the comic, this whole universe was only glimpsed in a few pages of story, because Superman somehow foresaw this, and laid a trap with the help of the Phantom Stranger: A 'false soul' for Rakkar to corrupt without harming Kal-El. So in the end, the demon's plan failed... But he survived as a slave of the Lords of Hell.
     
  29. Sojiko

    Sojiko Getting sticky.

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    That's pretty important for someone like the SI.
     
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    The Puritan's were horribly prejudiced people. Don't count on religion making the bigoted less bigoted or intolerant, instead of just slapping a new themed skin on the avatar of their old behavior.
     
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