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With This Ring (Young Justice SI) (Thread Fourteen)

Discussion in 'Creative Writing' started by Mr Zoat, Jan 27, 2019.

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  1. Ngamer11

    Ngamer11 Experienced.

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    That should say 'do'.
     
  2. Doccer

    Doccer I trust you know where the happy button is?

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    do
     
  3. Darko

    Darko Connoisseur.

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    You could just send some of your Lanterns to get rid off it.

    Ahh, back to looking for Constantine.

    "burned"

    "there'd probably"

    Your allies could find it problematic.

    Ahh, Hub City, it truly is a shithole.

    Things can always get worse.

    Planning on attacking him?

    Well Joanna would probably have the most experience with fighting Uncle Sam, or at least a version of him.
     
  4. Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    Thank you, corrected.
     
  5. Chojin Patriarch

    Chojin Patriarch Veteran Lurker

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    And finally, he's tugging on the leads to John Constantine. Don't know how good of one Chas is, but if John's needed anything, he'd have been one of the first people he looked for. Wonder if John's keeping an eye on him? Like, a standing alarm if anything mystical happens to or near Chas...

    Probably a bit of 'Bloody 'ell, how's our Chas know a ruddy superhero, then?'

    Give it a year or two, Pluto should reform nicely. A bit of change to the surface maps, but it's not like anyone's bothered about that.

    No doubt something utterly disgusting. Taxi drivers see it all.

    ..Well, that guy was either heading home after a hell of a party, or to the hospital, if he was that sick.

    Bet he gave the engine a tune-up at the same time. Could easily put it back in a brand new shape if he wanted to.

    To be fair, he's probably been avoiding Chas. He's playing on a new level now, and no doubt the enemies he faces are much nastier.

    Along with a 'Hey, orange lad's looking for you. Think you should go see why?'

    And now where's he off to? Bet that's made quite the impression on Chas' mates.

    Let's hope they're functioning as intended. Delicate spellwork and OL get along about as well as water and phosphorus.

    Not surprisingly, really. He's basically pulling physical matter into a realm of pure emotion and back.

    So the greediport isn't as quiet as we thought it was, huh? At least, without OL's unique protections...

    What's a brief exposure to a little more Orange Light, when the light of Life shines from within the planet?

    Really, OL. I would think even you could realise the answer to that question.

    After all the time working with him? I would hope so.

    Which kind of defeats the whole purpose of using it for precise rapid transit.

    Worst case, learn not to arrive directly on top of someone without an emergency reason to? Flying a few hundred meters generally shouldn't be an issue.

    Well, good to know you're not leaving messes behind you?

    ...Ah, Hub City, home of the Question. Founded by a pirate, run by the corrupt for the corrupt, and one of the few places in DC America worse than Gotham. How bad is it? Their most well-know sports team, for Ice Hockey, is called the Slashers. :confused:

    An orbital laser strike? ...Hey, it worked for Detroit in the Champions Universe. :D

    Why would he want to bother?

    Ask Gotham how well that sort of thing went...

    Yeah, this is one place where 'open carry' would be considered a survival tactic instead of a crime...

    Vic Sage? He'd be the most obvious person to meet, but...

    Either cowed in submission thanks to a previous encounter, or not wanting to shit where they eat, so to speak.

    Interesting. Seeing what she knows of the Earth-10 equivalent, or..?

    Hmm. I wonder where this is going? I can't imagine her knowledge of her universe's Uncle Sam could be applicable here, what with the whole 'not fighting a guerilla war for seventy years' thing. Or is this a follow-up to the Alliance thing they were looking into earlier? Because that's tying into the Uncle Sam thing too... :sneaky: Feels like a major subplot slowly coming to fruition...
     
  6. Ngamer11

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    I double checked, and his name should be Frank William "Chas" Chandler. Is this a mistake Mr Zoat?
     
  7. Darko

    Darko Connoisseur.

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    Ehh, his previous enemies included Satan, so his current enemies may not be all that different.

    Granted, they previously may have underestimated him, which he could exploit, but now that he has power, they may be more wary and actually use their brains.

    Now I want to see a slasher movie with an evil hockey player.

    Or to get her to help fight the fake one in their universe.
     
  8. Ganurath

    Ganurath Apologizes For Nothing

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    How do you feel about goalies?
     
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  9. RichardWhereat

    RichardWhereat Aia airëa Fëanáro.

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    Gangers, or gangsters?
     
  10. Vaermina

    Vaermina Well worn.

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    LePaul really is going full on minimum effort for actually finding Constantine...
     
  11. Sorrow

    Sorrow Getting sticky.

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    Well! A city even a Nazi thinks of as filth!
     
  12. Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    Thank you, corrected.

    You can tell that a wiki's useless if they don't have a character's full name on the character page. No idea where I got 'Raymond' from, though.
    Gangers. Gangsters are more sophisticated.
     
  13. Sockmonkey

    Sockmonkey I trust you know where the happy button is?

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    Your subconscious was thinking of this guy probably.
    https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Raymond_Chandler
     
  14. DAT_NOOB

    DAT_NOOB Accused of writing in a far away land

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    Well... You haven't really been looking for him Paul, that's how he is doing it.
    I imagine even a fairly liberal Nazi (god that's an oxymoron and a half) like her would think of a fair few cities as filth. Hell, I'm not even a Nazi and I think my city is filth.
     
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  15. RichardWhereat

    RichardWhereat Aia airëa Fëanáro.

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    Huh. I thought gangbanger would have been more accurate then, but Paul is a nerd, since he's your SI. :D

    Also, neat. Never come across that term before.
     
  16. Mr Zoat

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    I generally think of a 'gangbanger' as someone on the majority team during a group intimacy event. The other meaning gets me rather confused.
     
  17. Duke Long

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    For the longest time, whenever I saw it used to refer to a criminal I assumed that they were being painted as a rapist or some kind of degenerate. Really surprised me when I found it it’s just a generic word.
     
  18. Ganurath

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    One of the many problems with Nazis is their unreasonably strict standards for what makes a city filthy, rather than a laxity thereof.
     
  19. Pinklestia

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  20. Bud-E

    Bud-E Stand up so I can push you down!

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    Is Paul reading their desires here? Or is he projecting his insecurities?;)
     
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  21. Coda

    Coda Versed in the lewd.

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    This word means that your dinner is full of connective tissue. You're looking for "grisly."
     
  22. Cuchulin

    Cuchulin Versed in the lewd.

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    It's slang, that means it doesn't have to make much sense. Just look at Cockney.
     
  23. Threadmarks: Regnancy (part 18)
    Mr Zoat

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    30th October 2012
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    "The mad bomber from my Earth, or the grinning fool from this one?"

    "The local chap."

    "I have been trying to avoid him."

    Zatanna frowns. "Why?"

    "You know vhat the version from my Earth has been doing?"

    "Leading a rebellion against Nazi control?"

    Johanna looks like she finds that sort of comment tiresome. "No. The National Socialist Party rules Greater Germany. America is an independent country. Ve don’t control them. They make perfectly good fascists on their own."

    "So he's fighting American fascists."

    "You could say that. But America has been fascist for sixty years. Just about everyone is fascist, or nationalist, or at least neutral. Mostly, he just murders hundreds of civilians vherever he can, American, German, or anyone else."

    "What? Why?"

    "Because their grandparents failed him? Because the country thinks that he vas on the wrong side of history? Or perhaps he just doesn't like being reminded that he lost? Or perhaps he is in denial about all of the genocides that America carried out before National Socialists got involved? I don't know."

    "Much as I enjoy mocking America, that's not the version we'd like to know about."

    "I know he's on the contact list, und I saw a photograph of him mit Vincent Edge vhen I visited his office. Do you vant me to ask about him?"

    "'Ask', probably not. Just try and find out what he does. I assume that you've told people where you're from?"

    "Jah. And many negro men have hit on me after being told." She gives her head a small shake. "It is very strange."

    "They're probably just trying to annoy you. Or get you to say something that would make the Alliance kick you out."

    "Or they think they can convert you."

    "I am villing to not call for them to be deported to Africa, but let's not go crazy."

    "Ah, but think how much it would piss off your creators."

    "Psh, please. They vere purged years ago. And then the people who purged them vere purged. Unt I think that the people who purged them vere purged also." She takes on a slightly more serious expression. "If I did that, I vould not be going back. Unt if I do not go back, then Overgirl's oh-so-secret plan to change our society fails. So even if I meet a very nice negro, it vill not happen."

    "But you accept the idea that there could be nice negroes."

    She shrugs. "Sure. If you can accept three nice National Socialists, I can accept nice negroes."

    Zatanna kicks me under the table.

    "It's more that I hope that I can encourage you to stop being a National Socialist."

    "Unt have a nice negro boyfriend?"

    She sounds… Not angry, exactly; I'd see that. Irritated? Disgusted? "That's up to you. Or, will be. Hopefully."

    "Even if the Reich reforms to a degree, sixty years of racial education vill not just vanish."

    "Yes, I can hear that in your voice. I'm not sure what you think I'm suggesting that's so-" She looks away, giving her head a small shake. "-offensive, but I'm pretty sure-."

    "No, no, I vas.. overreacting. I'll… Ah. I'll go back.. to vork."

    I reach out with my right hand. "Johanna, it's not-."

    She pushes back her chair, not meeting my eyes. "I vill go. Goodbye."

    She doesn't walk out at super speed, but she does walk quickly and with purpose.

    "Um."

    Zatanna puts her sandwich down. "What did you expect? Even if she's not super-committed to being a Nazi, she still grew up in a Nazi country."

    I nod. "And having run out of other types of subhuman, they probably use 'negro' as their main racist insult. And she just got hit with culture shock combined with cognitive dissonance." I sigh. "This is one of the times when I shouldn't go after her, right?"

    "I think that's probably best. You can phone her tonight or something."

    I nod, taking a bite of-. Why do they do this? Why do sandwich shops mix mayonnaise with tuna? Shouldn't a cheap café like this go easy on the mayonnaise and not turn the contents of the sandwich into tuna-flavoured mayonnaise gloop? And I can't even get rid of it without using my rings.

    "You don't have to eat it."

    "That would be rude."

    But darn. I swallow.

    "Do you have any advice on the situation with Persephone?"

    "Tell Hades that if he's even pretending to be a good person he should just let her go. I can't imagine what it would be like to be married for thousands of years to someone who terrified me like he does."

    "Yeah… I'm leaving that for.. plan C."

    She frowns at me. "That doesn't sound like you."

    "Hades is actually doing a good job at his main job, and going by the actions of the other Olympians, Persephone isn't missing out on much by spending time in Erebos. There's no overt offence. Sure, other factors aside I'm inclined to agree with you. Hades hasn't done much wrong but it's clearly never going to be the relationship that he wants it to be. But I'm not all that good at persuading people to do things they don't want to get things they don’t want, and Hades doesn't want to completely lose Persephone."

    "He's already completely lost her."

    "I just wish I understood why she was so scared of him. He's never seemed that intimidating to me."

    "You're not most people."

    I smile warmly. "Thank you. Neither are you."

    She smiles, rolling her eyes. "That's not what I meant. What would you do if you did find him scary?"

    "Depends. Being slightly scared of an authority figure isn't necessarily a bad thing. If it was a problem for me… Get stronger until I didn't? Find a new god?"

    "Could Persephone do that?"

    "Euanthe did that, and she was far weaker than Persephone a couple of years ago."

    "Could you help Persephone out the same way?"

    "I suppose I-."

    My phone rings and I pull it out of my jacket. It's Zagreus.

    I guess it's time, then.
     
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  24. Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    The SI is not insecure.
    Thank you, corrected.
    I'd rather not. They're an uncomly folk.
     
  25. AmericanNumbers

    AmericanNumbers Not too sore, are you?

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    So it seems strange to me that Paul would be willing to not help Persephone get what she wants. He can clearly read her.
     
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    AmericanNumbers Not too sore, are you?

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    "Tell Hades that if he's even pretending to be a good person he should just let her go. I can't imagine what it would be luck to be married for thousands of years to someone who terrified me like he does."

    like not luck
     
  27. Stsword

    Stsword Versed in the lewd.

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    Now this is more like it.

    Empowering Persephone is ten thousand times better than reenacting Eternal Sunshine of the Spotless Mind.
     
  28. Darko

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    "Olympians, Persephone"

    And he kinda never had her in the first place.

    Hades wasn't always so mellow.

    The guy can be pretty intimidating and he did have sex with Persephone under incredibly questionable consent, so if course she'd be scared of him.

    Time to see how this shit show will end.
     
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  29. Darko

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    Helping her get what she wants can be detrimental to him since he may potentially no longer have access to a pleasant afterlife.

    Paul can be incredibly selfish point of view, Hades may neglect his duties and his realm can fall apart, so all the souls in it could be put in jeopardy.
     
  30. RichardWhereat

    RichardWhereat Aia airëa Fëanáro.

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    Because without mayonaise, cooked tuna is shit.

    He had the consent of her father to marry her, and then was her husband. At that point, she was his property. They weren't married in 2020's America, they were married in 3000 BC Greece. Social rules were entirely different, and understood different.
     
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