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With This Ring (Young Justice SI) (Thread Fourteen)

Discussion in 'Creative Writing' started by Mr Zoat, Jan 27, 2019.

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  1. Vaermina

    Vaermina Well worn.

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    Nope, doesn't work like that.

    You remove a Vampire's heart whole and they have six hours before turning to dust.
     
  2. Queshire

    Queshire Not too sore, are you?

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    I keep reading "Heart ready for harvesting" in the bring out your dead voice.
     
  3. Darko

    Darko Connoisseur.

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    That whole six hours thing applies to only that James guy and he had some alterations done.
     
  4. Handlewithcare

    Handlewithcare Versed in the lewd.

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    Wow. This Paul and the Slave-Ring Paul really got it rough. I feel sorry for them.

    Wait, did Slave-Ring Paul get captured? Was he freed of his ring? Zoat?
     
  5. Darko

    Darko Connoisseur.

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    He was captured.

    As fro his ring...well if Krona took it off then he may be dead
     
  6. Agumentic

    Agumentic Not too sore, are you?

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    Wow, reading all that black text in Dark Responsive is annoying.
     
  7. Belenus

    Belenus Versed in the lewd.

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    That was a specific spell that involved removing a vampire's heart as part of the ritual. But you don't actually care about that, you're just Vaermina-posting.
     
  8. Chojin Patriarch

    Chojin Patriarch Veteran Lurker

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    One fresh vamp about to get dusted...

    And they're preying on the homeless? Wow, they are new meat...

    Demonic sadism. They might not even realise why they're doing it, just that it feels good for them to do it. I suppose having a body is a heady feeling for the newly vamped.

    Admittedly, Black Lanterns don't entirely sync up with vampires... An easy mistake to make, I guess.

    Man, Zaul feels really disconnected from everything. Comes from being dead, I suppose.

    Accurate. But not entirely what they were asking, I bet.

    It would be funny if all they knew of Vampirism was from Vampire the Masquerade or something... Thankfully, Twilight doesn't exist here.

    Ugh. Almost as bad as Twilight... And why do I feel like reading Zaul's voice like Death from Discworld. It's not nearly as hollow...o_O

    But it's probably responsible for a lot of new vamps making critical mistakes about themself...

    That whole Black Lantern thing makes him really unmotivated, doesn't it?

    And that would be his ring. Picturing a cold, rasping hiss of a voice.

    Something he does all the time, naturally. Let him demonstrate!

    Any human would probably be getting creeped out hard by this point...

    Yeah, like that. Bet more than the guy's heart is yellow right now...

    Huh, someone rich enough to have a mobile phone? I suppose all types get Vamped up...

    Heh. Oh, they have no idea what's coming and it is hilarious...

    Ah, one of the local rich girls. And not a nice one either...

    No, your meat remembers being human...

    I wonder how many vamps he's gone through this with? Because at this point, he sounds bored.

    Well, at least the victim's mostly out of danger...

    You heard the vamp, Zaul...

    I suppose that's one of the few high points of having to do this: seeing that moment of shock and comprehension on a monster's face...

    Wonder how much charge that's good for?

    Not a lot, eh? Then again, the more power he has, the closer he comes to bad things...

    Sympathetic effect. The same reason shapechangers get magic pants...

    Yeah, he's out of it for the night. Just leave it in his pocket or something...

    Ooof, And now I really feel for Zaul.:( Even though I know it's bad, I kinda want him to get more lights...

    Gotta admit, Mr Zoat, you know how to write. I would hate to end up like this. Hopefully something can be done for him soon, what with this whole mini-crisis coming up...

    Some corrections:
    Are all English vampires, like...
    It then removes its skirt...
    It smiles at me...
    And then I remember the wonderful feeling...
     
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  9. ForeverShogo

    ForeverShogo Not too sore, are you?

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    Interesting that he insisted on thinking of that vampire as an it instead of a she.

    Also rather amused by just how easy it was to convince her to strip naked.
     
  10. Agent Orange

    Agent Orange Experienced.

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    Huh, a stealthy Lantern. And I thought it was an oxymoron.

    6/10 :) Still, surprisingly witty for a fledge

    Someone give the demon lass a Darwin Award.

    What a fascinating effect this has on his personality. He's almost like a robot aside from... what? a few minutes or so after feeding. This would make a pretty interesting - if hard to write - full story on it's own. There's not that many BL fics but few there are have MCs thought processes significantly less affected (initially and on the surface at least). Have you read 'If the Ring Fits...'?

    Also, if his ring can charge on vampire hearts how come he isn't topped off already? Judging from the number of fledges Scoobies slay per night (despite how little sense this makes logistics wise) there should be more then enough of them wandering about to keep him in high charge percentage.
     
  11. Vaermina

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    You might want to go back and watch the actual episode.

    There was no spell involved, just an operation to remove the heart whole.
     
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  12. Darko

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    Demons may technically lack any kind of gender, plus he may be inclined to think of them as nothing more than monsters who like to prey on innocent people who can't defend themselves so treating them as people may be something he finds difficult.
    We know that paragon doesn't really consider demons, or at least most of them, to be people seeing as they are practically made of evil, so I doubt that a Black Lantern one would be any better in this regard.

    She may have easily stripped naked because she considered him to not be a threat plus she has been a vamp for a short time and may still be on a power trip and considered herself invincible.

    And yeah 'If the ring fits' is really an interesting story about a Black Lantern SI that I think becomes an agent for the government going under the name Sentinel if I remember correctly.
    Sadly I don't think that that particular SI is going to become Jade's boyfriend seeing as he kinda killed her boss, Talia, along with a whole lot of Shadows by disintegrating them right in front of her.
    Oh and one of the more recent chapters has a wonderful pearl of wisdom that everyone should trust and listen to.

    'DON'T TRUST JOHN CONSTANTINE'

    Vaermina the Black Lantern just ripped out the vamps heart without performing any kind of operation or surgery on her, so yeah, dusting happens.
     
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  13. Ganurath

    Ganurath Apologizes For Nothing

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    I wonder if that was Harmony Kendall.
     
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  14. Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    Thank you, corrected.
     
  15. Cuchulin

    Cuchulin Versed in the lewd.

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    I'm hoping Zaul either gets a different color ring or gets released from undeath before this Crisis is over.
    Also that if Anti-Green Lantern is involved her get a different color ring as well.
     
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  16. Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    That... Actually wasn't intentional.
    Yes.
    1) He has no other way to recharge
    2) He is using some power
    3) He doesn't get much power per heart
    It wasn't.
     
  17. jaelin910

    jaelin910 habitual lurker

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    Sure he did; he used his hand rather than a scalpel or whatever but the only disqualifier I can see is that it wasn't for medical purposes and even that's arguable.
     
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  18. Darko

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    He may find it difficult to charge his ring because he needs to ambush vamps to take their hearts.

    Seeing as he has so little charge it may be difficult to use some of the rings abilities like increased strength to just fight them.

    Zaul just put his hand through her chest.
    He didn't try to do anything else.
    The other guy removed the heart in a surgical manner and knew enough about how vamps work to do it without the patient dusting on the spot after the removal.
    Zaul probably doesn't know how vamps work all that well so he lacks the knowledge of how to remove a vamps heart without them turning into dust on the spot, and he probably wouldn't try to do it even if he does because then he would have a super strong demon that would try to kill him after he rips the heart out.
    Seeing as he doesn't have that much of a ring charge being torn limb from limb is probably something he would like to avoid.

    Also just had a thought that maybe the Scoobies wouldn't know that he's a Black Lantern seeing him as just a guy with a magic black ring.
    Ripping hearts out to survive isn't really something exclusive to Black Lanterns so it isn't really a clue to what the ring is.
    If they don't know about Black Lanterns from comics then they would probably think it is just some magical necromantic ring instead of something from the comics.
    It would also be difficult to see the symbol seeing as the ring is black.

    The other explanation is that maybe Zoat decided that DC comics don't exist in this Buffy universe so they wouldn't know what a Power Ring even is in the first place
     
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  19. ForeverShogo

    ForeverShogo Not too sore, are you?

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    The fact that the vampire in question had to go to a specialist demon surgeon kind of implicitly means there's some special procedure involved to avoid getting dusted. Not that you can just rip out the heart any way you like.
     
  20. RichardWhereat

    RichardWhereat Aia airëa Fëanáro.

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    John had a good reason to do that.
     
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  21. varoksa

    varoksa Getting sticky.

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    From the language Zoat used he is a vampire but the ring bound his soul to his corpse so he is like Angel, a vampire with a soul, difference being he always had his, or he was referring to both of them as being undead and i could be wrong.
     
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  22. Belenus

    Belenus Versed in the lewd.

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    I would think the corpse appearance of a Black Lantern is similar enough to a Buffyverse vampire that the vampire assumed incorrectly, and he's just a normal undead Black Lantern. Also, remember that Pauls don't have souls.
     
  23. Vaermina

    Vaermina Well worn.

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    No... It means he wanted the rest of his body intact so he could get his revenge...
     
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  24. varoksa

    varoksa Getting sticky.

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    Oh right forgot about that... thinking about that what would a soul created by wearing a Black Power Ring would do i wonder, probably be pretty predisposed towards being undead.
     
  25. Darko

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    Richard John nearly released Nekron.

    Even if he does have a good reason for doing something he has a tendency to screw it up in massive ways.
     
  26. WhiteNoise

    WhiteNoise Making the rounds.

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    Should be singular "minute and a half."
     
  27. Sordid Snake

    Sordid Snake (Verified Viper)

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    Gah! Don't SAY things like that. Use a comma please.
     
  28. Belenus

    Belenus Versed in the lewd.

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    That is a pretty horrifying thought.
     
  29. Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    Thank you, corrected.
     
  30. Blarfnik

    Blarfnik Your first time is always over so quickly, isn't it?

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    Knowing Buffy Summers' predilection for undead older guys with sad backstories? Wouldn't be a bit surprised if she has a massive crush. With Xander being the voice of misguided (right idea, wrong reason) reason.
     
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