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With This Ring (Young Justice SI) (Thread Fourteen)

Discussion in 'Creative Writing' started by Mr Zoat, Jan 27, 2019.

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  1. Ngamer11

    Ngamer11 Experienced.

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    I found a picture that doesn't work anymore. I know it was an image of a younger Shazam, but I have no idea on what it looked like.
     
  2. Stsword

    Stsword Versed in the lewd.

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    Well I don't know if it was this picture but here's what he looked like.[​IMG][​IMG]
     
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  3. RichardWhereat

    RichardWhereat Aia airëa Fëanáro.

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    My alerts say you quoted me with this. Somehow.
     
  4. iamnuff

    iamnuff Connoisseur.

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    I would ask Heph about the lightning before asking zeus. He's a lot more likely to actually know, and a lot less likely to tell you to fuck off.
     
  5. Silveraith

    Silveraith Argent Phantasm

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    I can definitely see and believe that Aphrodite is more about desire and using love as a tool but Hephaestean made it seem like the Olympians don't have a god of Avarice and that was why Hades may consider kicking him upstairs if he were to die.
     
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  6. Xelloss

    Xelloss Know what you're doing yet?

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    Best guess : Zeus' lightning doesn't work because you now need electrical and metrological knowledge to operate it.

    Quick Billy, being good at school is needed if you want to save the world, time to hit your physics books !
     
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  7. Patrick Holt

    Patrick Holt Getting sticky.

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    But that's not what he said. He said it wouldn't be quick to cut him off.
    He was working with the titan who made the spell Zeus was using so cutting him off isn't the problem. And the titans getting powered up isn't the problem because they were pulling small bits from many titans so not much difference in strength now that they have it back. The big problem is Zeus is now a mortal target if he doesn't keep his head down it will probably get cut off.
     
  8. Darko

    Darko Connoisseur.

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    The spell on Billy is different than the one on Adom and it's more connected to the Wizard.

    I think he wore a blue version of the Captain Marvel costume.
     
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  9. Valint

    Valint I trust you know where the happy button is?

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    I'm pretty sure most casual fans thought his name was 'Shazam' already, so at some point you might as well just give in to the inevitable.

    Also, the fact that DC could not legally use 'Captain Marvel' as part of the branding for anything makes it better to just switch to a name they could use that way. (I find the story of how that happened kind of fascinating.)
     
  10. Zig

    Zig Not too sore, are you?

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    The same time they renamed him, they also made it so he can say it without transforming.
     
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  11. Doccer

    Doccer I trust you know where the happy button is?

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    I'd have gone to Hephaestusian first. He did bottle some of that lightning in the fight and he almost certainly can make up a tech solution.
     
  12. Pinklestia

    Pinklestia Well worn.

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    Whatever happened with visiting Shazam's daughter, she knows the ritual after all, suee she did it for Mighty Adam using different Gods but she knows it.
     
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  13. Coda

    Coda Versed in the lewd.

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    No it doesn't. "Ex" means "from," while "in" means... um... "in." "Deus ex machina" means that the god came out of the machine. That clearly has not happened here. He's still in it.

    I mean, I suppose all's fair.

    Why not? Hephaestus is the one who forged Zeus's lightning bolts in the first place. He's got a claim to it, and lightning is just unharnessed electricity, and harnessing electricity is WELL within Hephaestaean's domain.

    Colon instead of semicolon.

    Pretty sure there's only one of the Wizard?

    Missing a blank line between these paragraphs.
     
  14. Lord Ernest

    Lord Ernest At the End...

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    Wasn't the Thunderbolt created by the Cyclops or Hekatonkhieres? I vaguely recall that they were the original armorers of the God side in the Titanomachy. They gave the invisibility helm to Haded and the Trident to Poseidon as well, no?

    Although, being mythology, there's probably different interpretations, so it depends on what version this story is using. However, I get the impression that Hephaestean and the other younger Olympians were born once Zeus already was king and, as such, after the Titanomachy so I would personally go with the Cyclops/Hekatonkhieres version.
     
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  15. Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    Thank you, corrected.
     
  16. Stsword

    Stsword Versed in the lewd.

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    The cyclopes Brontes, Steropes and Arges, whose names mean Thunder, Lightning, and Bright are Heph's assistants at the forge.

    Although some myths have Heph's cyclopes assistants killed by Apollo out of revenge for someone Zeus killed with their thunderbolts, other myths that Apollo killed their sons instead.
     
  17. Zig

    Zig Not too sore, are you?

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    Once he's done with this, Paul should start testing fate:

    " Nothing except The Reach suddenly all ceasing to exist will stop me from going after Constantine"
     
  18. Caerwen

    Caerwen Know what you're doing yet?

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    Shaham!
     
  19. AidanMorgan

    AidanMorgan Essentially Overworked

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    Hephaestean steps in to huck lightning at the Marvel kids. "SHAHAM"

    Everyone thinks they're really hungry.
     
  20. hance1986

    hance1986 A pitiful excuse for a man.

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    cameras
     
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  21. Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    Thank you, corrected.
     
  22. Threadmarks: Regnancy (part 2)
    Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    28th October 2012
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    "-daughter's getting up in a few minutes-."

    Helena Sandsmark cuts herself off as she spots me flying in. Zeus appears to have acquired jeans and a shirt from somewhere, and his wounds are less obvious than they were a few hours ago. She's currently standing outside of her house and very clearly not happy that he's here.

    Why is he here? He's clearly spent time on Earth in the modern era; one of the products of that time is currently sleeping in her room upstairs. So it's not as if he needs someone to explain how money works or anything like that. Similarly, he must have somewhere to live.

    I land a short distance away from Cassandra's parents.

    "Doctor Sandsmark. Zeus."

    "Hephaestus's bard." Zeus stares at me with a look of contempt. "Here to narrate my life in verse? Let me pay you your worth."

    He reaches into his pocket, and tosses me… Half a copper coin. An old British halfpenny, if I'm any judge.

    "Half a coin to match your wits. Too kind."

    "Paul, why is he here?"

    "I don't know. He's not on Olympus because he got overthrown by Hephaestaean, but I don't know why he's here."

    "I'm here because I need a reference. I need to get into a college of some sort in order to get back to Olympus, and a published Doctor of Archaeology would seem to be my best bet. A better question is: what are you doing here?"

    "Captain Marvel can't transform."

    "Who?"

    "The current champion of the wizard Jebediah of Canaan. Shazam."

    "Oh. Him. Yes, it wouldn't, would it? I don’t have access to my lightning, because Hephaestus has never been a fool. No one else has it, so even automatic things like my gift to Jebediah aren't working."

    "How do I start it working?"

    "Ah, to do that you must perform an epic quest worthy of the Elysian Fields. First, enter the gateway into the Dream in Erebos, and pass into that eldritch place to retrieve a single petal from each of the strange flowers that bloom in Morpheus's own garden. Next, to Tartarus, and steal a single tear from each of the beings bound there. These you will need to quench the fires which burn beneath Mount Othrys, that you may take the remaining fragments of the bones of Uranus from their vaults. Then you must travel unto the hallowed halls of Harvard University, whereupon you may suck my cock."

    "You realise that Captain Marvel is the one useful thing you've done with yourself in living memory, don't you? The one thing people actually credit you for?"

    "Jeb got me to sign up to that while I was merry with drink. Don't expect me to have any real attachment to the man."

    "I doubt that anyone here expects you to have any real attachment to anyone. What exactly do you want on this reference? I can hardly give you a character reference; we barely know each other."

    "You mean you might have to lie on a reference?" He looks at her incredulously. "Do people actually tell the truth on those things?"

    "Yes!"

    "What do you want?"

    Zeus turns his head my way. "What?"

    "What do you want in order to be helpful? You don't like me and I don't like you, but Captain Marvel respects you and does good work in your name."

    "Ah, no, no, I think I've been discharged of all responsibilities. Captain Marvel will just have to make do."

    I take a quick look at his desire network. Nothing unbearable, but… He's not going to help.

    "Right, fine. Your lack of cooperation has been noted. Good da-."

    "Hey!" Dr. Sandsmark glares at me. "Where are you going?"

    "Erebos. Hades has been nothing but helpful for as long as I've known him."

    "Hm." Zeus grimaces. "Family."

    "You ate your first wife and kept her trapped in your head for thousands of years. You literally threw Hephaestus off a mountain so hard that his leg got crushed and you played away from home so often that the Goddess of Marriage divorced you, the rest of your family says 'Hm, Zeus'. Doctor Sandsmark, I apologise for this inconvenience."

    I raise my right hand to my forehead

    and

    28th October 2012
    17:25 GMT +3


    appear in Erebos, face to face with Zagreus's arrow.

    "Feeling jumpy?"

    "Everyone's feeling jumpy. You just overthrew Zeus."

    "Hephaestaean overthrew Zeus."

    "Hephaestaean exists because of you. He asked me if I'd like to try out for the position of War God."

    "From the way you appear to like pointing arrows at people, I'd say that you were a natural fit."

    "Not really." He lowers the arrow and reduces the tension on the string. "Hm."

    "What?"

    "I just realised that your carefully planned chaos is far scarier than Eris's habit of pulling loose threads."

    "But I'm happy with my current job. Why aren't you taking it?"

    "I don't particularly want to be a god."

    "You were rather born the wrong person, then."

    "No, I mean that I don't have any desire to be part of the kind of active pantheon that Hephaestaean wants us to become. I understand the logic of it; I'm out in the world enough to know what 'competition' is. But I like being a tour guide and hunter. Even though hunting isn't a part of the lives of most humans any longer, there's a job that an Olympian could do… I don't want to. If anyone needs to do it, Artemis can have the job."

    "Were you working the role under Zeus?"

    "No, but he didn't care. Hephaestaean does, and I'm concerned that he might take it badly. I heard about Ares."

    "I don't think he'll geld you for wanting to come off the civil list. Given the backlogs I'm seeing around here, I'd be more worried about what your father will say."

    "I am."

    "What do you actually get out of it, anyway?"

    "Nothing. The power I get from Erebos comes from my being born here rather than being a gift from my father. The spells bound to my equipment have already been paid for and everything else is my innate power."

    "Can I assume that other Olympians are similarly concerned?"

    "Zeus's laziness let people just drift away and do their own thing. If Hephaestaean makes an issue of things, then he…"

    Zagreus jerks his head towards the west, staring with no small amount of concern.

    "Something wrong?"

    "My mother is leaving her grove. She very seldom does-. I should go and see what she wants."

    Between Hera and Aphrodite…

    "I think I can guess."
     
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  23. Darko

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    'explain how'

    Not necessarily.

    He may have only come down to Earth to fuck men and women, so he may only have a general idea of how modern society works.

    'narrate'

    'beings'

    Remove 'unto'.

    He's not happy to see you.

    Well to be fair, they may sometimes embellish things.

    Yeah Paul, at least take the trash out.

    'reduces'

    'though'

    Though then they'll be missing a hunt god.

    Not surprising, seeing as he's a fairly minor character in the mythology, so people may not have thought or prayed too much to him, so he wouldn't have developed too much if an attachment to the god job.

    Don't worry, I doubt he'll castrate you, but he may lock away your divine powers.

    Maybe 'Weren't you'.

    And I think Artemis would be working as hunt god.

    Time for another divorce.
     
  24. Vaermina

    Vaermina Well worn.

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    Still not explaining how Hephaestus just randomly gained the ability to de-power Zeus.

    With almost any other author I would give it a month before the majority of other gods are conspiring with Zeus to return things to the good old days.

    But this is Zoat, so this will almost surely be ignored and nothing bad will come of Hephaestus's takeover.
     
  25. jasonh23761

    jasonh23761 Not too sore, are you?

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    Alright Zeusy-boy, that got a chuckle out of me.
     
  26. FreeGod

    FreeGod If you see a God on the road fuck it!

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    Olympus had alot of unhappy marriages before Paul.

    Man with how much Paul has changed they could call the time before him B.P. on Olympus.
     
  27. Brainwasher-Boy

    Brainwasher-Boy Flectere si nequeo superos, Acheronta movebo.

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    And that's the short list of shitty things he's done. OL proves himself a better man than me, because if Zeus talked shit to my face right after that entire last arc, on top of saying in no uncertain terms he has no plans to make himself useful, I'd've had the Ophidian just eat the bastard. I'm sure Heph would understand, and it's not like you couldn't just make a new weather god if you put your mind to it.
     
  28. FreeGod

    FreeGod If you see a God on the road fuck it!

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    Killing Zeus would have all sorts of unpredictable effects on the everything. If Paul wanted to be vindictive he would imprisoned Zeus somewhere say with a eagle to eat his liver.
     
  29. Brainwasher-Boy

    Brainwasher-Boy Flectere si nequeo superos, Acheronta movebo.

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    "Paul, where is my father?"

    "Ah, well, you see, some unforeseen consequences popped up, so I was talking to him about how it could be fixed. Short story shorter, Zeus Zeus-ed and so I fed him to my primordial space snake."

    "Gods dammit, how am I supposed to get back at him if he's dead?!"

    "Er, the best revenge is letting go?"

    "Oh, fuck off. You, of all people, did NOT just say that to me."
     
  30. Brainwasher-Boy

    Brainwasher-Boy Flectere si nequeo superos, Acheronta movebo.

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    Nah, turn him into a fly and feed him to Cronus
     
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