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With This Ring (Young Justice SI) (Thread Fourteen)

Discussion in 'Creative Writing' started by Mr Zoat, Jan 27, 2019.

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  1. BlueMangoAdea

    BlueMangoAdea Alive. For now.

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    If I recall correctly, the ring was optimized for Paul before he exploded. Immediately after the explosion, the ring was suboptimal for him because his spiritual makeup was damaged. I have no idea how optimal the ring is for Paul after he fixed himself, given that he went through a spiritual change that makes him Empathize harder through his emotional sense.
     
  2. Zig

    Zig Know what you're doing yet?

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    About as good means almost as good in colonial, not sure if it's the same for you? That said, my other question would still remain, what separates quality of power rings of the same color?
     
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  3. Pinklestia

    Pinklestia Experienced.

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    I would totally have said yes. And so would most kids in my class.
     
  4. Joelseph14

    Joelseph14 Getting out there.

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    Man I love how chill and fluid his thought processes are. Wish more protagonists were enlightened it would save so much intergroup angst and struggle
     
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  5. Threadmarks: I Smile To See You Want (part 4a)
    Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    5th July 2010
    14:32 GMT -5


    I watch curiously as the brightly glowing humanoid female with rabbit ears below me has some sort of altercation with the local version of Harvey Bullock.

    "Removing illegal graffiti and checking that electrical systems and plumbing is up to code requires a work permit?"

    "Yer also repairing brick and mortar, replacin' windows, repairin' sidewalks and streets, and gettin' rid of garbage. We got like a dozen different labor unions callin' fer yer head."

    I narrow my eyes slightly, then blink as I suddenly start seeing an emotional spectrum which apparently contains fourteen colours rather than the seven I'm used to. This definitely warrants further investigation.

    "Well boohoo for them that I'm drying up their bribe money, but the electrical and plumbing systems are literally unsafe here to the point it might actually be safer to live in grass huts in deep Africa. Do you honestly want me to leave people living in buildings where flipping the light switch may one day shock them to death just because some crooked unions and government workers are worried about the bribes they'll be losing out on?"

    I drop down beside her, arms folded behind my back.

    "Wrong question."

    "Agh!"

    The lagomorph jumps three metres into the air from a standing start, apparently without ring-assistance. Bullock takes a half-step back, right hand jerking towards his sidearm before his brain fully processes what he's seeing.

    "In your own-"

    She lands, right hand over her heart and eyes wide.

    "-time."

    She freezes up for several seconds, eyes fixed on my face.

    "Um. Joyful.. being..?"

    I raise my left hand and do a Vulcan salute.

    "Live long and prosper, Cyan Lantern."

    "It's… Um. Teal, actually."

    "Ah. I apologise. Teal Lantern. But it's still the wrong question."

    She hesitates, taking a moment to study me. Right, no Orange Lantern Corps in this continuity. Which means that the only Orange Lantern she could know about is Larfleeze.

    "Aaaand..? Then what's the right question?"

    "Do you want to do good, or do you want to listen to a fat fool who wants to stop you doing good?"

    Bullock huffs. "Look. I get she's try'na do a good-."

    "Stop talking-." I don't look at him. ".-or I give you a six pack."

    "I don't drink on dooty."

    My orange beam hits him in the abdomen, converting fat into muscle. His shirt and coat sag noticeably. The Teal Lantern stares at him as he pats himself down to try and assess the damage.

    "I… Like to try and work inside the system? I want to help but I don't want to get the people who live here in any trouble."

    "'Breaking and Decorating' does not fall within the usual purview of the Major Crimes Unit. Even in Gotham, no one is going to be punished because someone else improved their home."

    Bullock finishes feeling himself up, a look of bewilderment on his face. But he hasn't survived this long in Gotham by letting strange occurrences distract him from his job. "Alright, asshole, yer under arrest. We can do this-."

    "And neither is 'Assault and Betterment'. And if you honestly intend to attempt to arrest me, I suggest that you toddle off and get someone with a little more firepower than that peashooter. Speak again and I will fully restore your hair."

    The rabbit frowns. "You're a lot more… Non-crazy than I was… Expecting…"

    I nod. "Expecting an Orange Lantern to be, yes, I've met Larfleeze."

    She puts her hands on her hips. "Well, you're still being unnecessarily rude. Detective Bullock is just trying to do his job."

    "If someone is doing something likely to negatively affect the people you are trying to help, is their motive of primary importance?"

    "It still matters!"

    "Fine. I just added twelve years to his predicted lifespan. How polite do you want me to be?"

    "Ah, look-."

    Another orange beam repairs Detective Bullock's receding hair line and male pattern baldness, as well as restoring the pigment lost to stress and poor diet.

    "Speak again and your penis will grow by a half inch per word. Teal Lantern, I can see within you the shining desire to catalyse joy. You have on your finger the most powerful tool in the universe. If you're going to let people stop you because your actions are inconvenient to them, I can only suggest going home and telling your ring to find a new bearer, because in your heart you have already abandoned your core mission."

    "If it's that important to you, why don't you do it?"

    "If I wanted to commit myself to saving Gotham, I would do so in a rational and pragmatic manner. I would take over the city by force majeure, recruit the handful of obstinately upstanding residents as aides, summarily execute the worst criminals, then ram through whatever other changes I thought necessary over the heads of any local objections. Then, and only then, would I do painting and decorating work, because the time spent to lives improved ratio just doesn't support it until then."

    She glares at me.

    "I don't believe that for a moment!" She points her right arm at me, forefinger extended accusatorially. "You're just a miserable emo who's forgotten how to be nice to people!"

    Bullock writes something on his notepad.

    "I'm trying to help you learn things the easy way before-" Bullock holds his notepad out in front of her. "-you…"

    She focuses on it, arm still outstretched, then frowns.

    "Of course it's one word, why would you think-?"

    Bullock nods. "Okay."

    He looks mildly satisfied as the orange beam hits him, then turns away to head back to his patrol car.

    "Great! Now they're going to think I'm a supervillain because of you!"

    "That says more about them than it does you. But I want to see what you'll do next."

    "Keep helping people! But now I don't know if I should keep doing this, or-"

    "Yes you do."

    "-get some sort of licence-." She lowers her arm. "What do you mean?"

    "People often limit themselves by what is socially acceptable, even if they think it's nonsense. You know what is right, and you've seen the joy you've already brought. At this point anything other than carrying on is an unworthy self-deception."

    Her eyes narrow. "I don't think I like you."

    "But do you think I'm wrong?"
     
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  6. AkazilliaDeNaro

    AkazilliaDeNaro Getting out there.

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    Oh. I was not expecting that. Oh god my sides.
     
  7. Cuchulin

    Cuchulin Versed in the lewd.

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    That was... odd.
     
  8. AkazilliaDeNaro

    AkazilliaDeNaro Getting out there.

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  9. DrThoth

    DrThoth Not too sore, are you?

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    I didn't realize Zoat did real-life April Fool's Day writing, just stuff with in-universe timing.

    Edit: the real fool is me for forgetting the very month we're in.
     
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  10. Darko

    Darko Well worn.

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    You have an interesting view in punishments.

    You monster!

    Spend some time with him and you'll know that he's crazy, just a different flavor of crazy compared to Larfleeze.

    Go back to whatever pit you crawled out of, demon!

    I like her.

    Probably writing down about the two lunatics he's met that night.

    Perfectly understandable.

    Is this future Paragon?
     
  11. AverusBlack

    AverusBlack AKA Sky

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    I don't speak up very often. Zoat, if you're willing to indulge me, what are the other seven colors and what do they represent?

    This is surprisingly important to me but I'm not quite willing to explain why out in the open. It has nothing to do with writing or anything like that, just something personal.
     
  12. Darko

    Darko Well worn.

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    If I remember correctly there's also pride, which was a dark yellow/golden color.
     
  13. Slayer Anderson

    Slayer Anderson Orthodox Heretic

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    I guess we should all be terrified if an Orange Lantern ever wanted to be funny.
     
  14. Coltsguy

    Coltsguy Colts fan. Anime fan. Breast and back fan.

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    Dammit QQ why won't you let me like this more than once!?!
     
  15. AverusBlack

    AverusBlack AKA Sky

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    I took a quick look at that other story and I got that teal is joy while... I'm not sure, light green? Lime? Is sadness. I saw purple but I have no idea what to attribute to that, 's why I figured I'd ask outright.
     
  16. Sockmonkey

    Sockmonkey Not too sore, are you?

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    Did Bullock just ask an apparent supervillain how to spell supervillain?
    He has mastered Gotham zen.
    The world will destroy all your fucks but one, so save it for something truly important.
     
  17. Agent Orange

    Agent Orange Versed in the lewd.

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    I am not entirely sure what laws if any cover 'forced bodily alteration' but they could probably get him on practicing... 'cosmetic surgery'(?) without a medical licence?

    OL no matter the universe seems to have trouble grasping the concept of consent (or tact) when he's in 'halping' mood.
     
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  18. Darko

    Darko Well worn.

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    This song perfectly captures how many fucks Bullock has left.

     
  19. Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    No, he asked whether 'okay' was one word or two, because he's only ever written it as 'O.K.'.
    I honestly don't remember. You'll have to read the whole bunny thing.
     
  20. AverusBlack

    AverusBlack AKA Sky

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    Oh balls.

    Well, thanks anyways, haha.
     
  21. Senevri

    Senevri Know what you're doing yet?

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    Funny, but very imperialist and very "Orange Lantern's Burden" if you think about it.
    Assault and betterment may not be a crime, but Assault is, not to mention violating bodily autonomy is not good,and practicing medicine without a license is probably a literal crime.

    As for "breaking and decorating? Less objectionable, certainly structural fixes aren't a bad thing, but taken literally---decorating to whose taste? Even in a completely benign case, there's the risk of building someone else's lego Death Star, if you don't ask people what they want.
     
  22. doug89

    doug89 Versed in the lewd.

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    The joke is that he would like half an inch of penis growth but apparently not a full inch, so he asked if OK was one word or two.

     
  23. Radiant Knight

    Radiant Knight Phoenix Fire

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    At a glance, the colors in the Teal Lantern SI are:

    Joy - Teal
    Sadness - Lime
    Pride - Gold
    Dissatisfaction - Puce
    Need - Magenta (Not sure on this one, the story died before more than one clue came out)


    EDIT: While the Puce Lantern oath talks about people spoiling fun, the highlighted sections make it clear that the emotion being felt is actually dissatisfaction- the one time the lantern in question feels 'fun' it's the light of hope.
     
  24. AverusBlack

    AverusBlack AKA Sky

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    I've been skimming the story and it might be grief.

    In any case this is helpful, so thank you.
     
  25. cookiemontser

    cookiemontser Getting out there.

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    I have never seen force majeure used in this context. Is it correct?
     
  26. Radiant Knight

    Radiant Knight Phoenix Fire

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    Definition 2. 'Irresistable Compulsion or Greater Force'.
     
  27. Darko

    Darko Well worn.

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    Hmmm, now I'm worried this may be a future version of Tangseid.
     
  28. BlueMangoAdea

    BlueMangoAdea Alive. For now.

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    You believe that Tangseid has achieved enlightenment?
     
  29. Darko

    Darko Well worn.

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    I'm hoping that it's just future paragon, and Paul has said he'd do some pretty ruthless things if it helps him, without going full on utilitarian, but I'm a bit worried.

    Also he did seem jealous of Paul achieving enlightenment, so may have tried it himself.
     
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  30. Z000

    Z000 If this is trash, then find me in the dumpster

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    but it may, not april ?

    or it is just a Zoat thing where he does it a month later
     
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