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With This Ring (Young Justice SI) (Thread Fourteen)

Discussion in 'Creative Writing' started by Mr Zoat, Jan 27, 2019.

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  1. Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    Sunset: "Twilight is the Princess of Friendship. I'm the Alicorn of Magic. And as we've previously established that F ≠ M I don't see what the problem is?"
     
  2. Chojin Patriarch

    Chojin Patriarch Veteran Lurker

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    Ah, Corpsman, I must admit... Sometimes, I admire your style... Always entertaining...

    Bwahahahahha! So true. So very true. Well, then, that makes this worthwhile.

    Yep, Celestia was not expecting anything like this. I do hope she's not going to object...

    And the fact that it helps you press your suit with her plays no part in it, I suppose?:p

    Sunbutt, she cold-cocked you (and likely Luna, offscreen) and would have used all of Canterlot as her people's larder had Twilight not suspected something was wrong. She didn't deserve an easy death...

    Solemnity? You were singing 'Dumb Ways to Die' as you beheaded her.:V Nice to see he can still lie his ass off.

    Geez, Sunbutt, don't act so shocked. Guys do things like that these days.

    Then how do you let people know the threat's gone?

    Yeah, what she said!

    A spell to preserve it (and prevent any messy drips?) Good sense.

    Honestly, Sunbutt, you're acting like she's a filly. She's a big mare, you don't need to give him the shovel speech.

    Heh, no ignoring this bit of God-power flexing.

    What, they didn't like you enough?

    Then how do you know they did it? Make a vow, go off for a few days drinking, then come back looking suitably beat-up. I wouldn't be surprised if some tried that.

    Hey, who's in charge here, huh?

    Ah, the big day is at hand!

    Heh. Probably not something he sees every day. Or ever.

    No interfering now, Sunbutt. Gotta let the pony run wild.

    "Or are you building up to the old 'Shovel Speech' bit?"

    Burn. Want some aloe for that one, honey?:D

    It's an Apokaliptian thing. What would you want him to do with an enemy's head, then?

    That's a good question, Celestia. Let's hope you don't mind the answer.

    Need I repeat my complaints of 'Eye candy troops'? 'Living Armour stands'?

    Especially when they have opinions about their misuse.

    "No, that's just because she inspires me. I want the best for her as a person."

    And a fine set they are. Remember, he's not an unattractive stallion.

    ...Pathetic? Terrible? Undertrained? So many ways to say 'they suck'.

    Dammit, how does Music Meister keep getting in here?!

    Oooh, nice...

    Honestly, they really need help...

    Yep, a lot of trouble, often left to decline because Sunbutt won't do something to help... Or simply can't.

    And he's just getting started...

    I can just imagine the smile on Luna's face...

    Wouldn't do to get lost during your big song.

    Nice tempo...

    Honestly, a lot of Celestia's plans seem to be 'Hope for the best'...

    And there's the current state of Equestrian politics: none at all, for the most part. Local mayors, sure. Anything bigger, they just leave it to Celestia. Not a good way to manage a country...

    Heh. Unlucky blokes...

    This is very much Grayven's song, all right...

    Something Luna's been asking herself recently, I'll bet...

    Challenging them to be better? Nice.

    I wonder how Celestia will feel about being obsolete?

    And soon, we'll get to see the fruition of her storyline...

    Dang, another musical bit? Flexing some writing muscles, Mr Zoat? This really does feel a bit like an episode of the show...

    Godspeech:
    ...in your stead at the moment.
    ...mantle as a memento.
    ...perform mighty deeds that they...
    While it could be a local term, maybe 'majesties'?
    Missing full stop.
    ...where Sunset will usher in a new era...
    Quite the amusing slip there...x3
     
  3. Viterbi

    Viterbi Not too sore, are you?

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    It's really kind of troubling that the local magic decided to give the changeling queen a death song. F != M indeed.
     
  4. AidanMorgan

    AidanMorgan Essentially Overworked

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    Grayven is clearly the Alicorn of Trolling. Zoat can say it's conquest, but he's clearly divinely empowered to troll everyone.
    I'm pretty sure that one was just Grayven, because it's the "Be Safe Around Trains" ad song.

    Edit: It's also one syllable out of time, but turning "upon" into "'pon" would fix that.
     
  5. Prosecutor-0

    Prosecutor-0 Getting out there.

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    Another typo, should be "usher".
     
  6. Idkusername

    Idkusername Versed in the lewd.

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    Hmm...
     
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  7. w34v3r

    w34v3r Versed in the lewd.

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    .... Uhhhhhh
    He might be.

    Think about it, his whole ascension process was based on a deception he indulged in to troll the forever mooks, every step of the way has been built around a falsehood so strong he even believes it most of the time.

    Deception and antics are his favored tools for anything that isn't clearly a thing where someone needs a quick stabbing, and even then he indulges in his shenanigans if at all practical.
     
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  8. Simonbob

    Simonbob Really? You don't say.

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    Man.

    I'm wondering when Celestia last had a holiday. Centuries?

    There comes a point where taking a break is just needed.
     
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  9. dogbertcarroll

    dogbertcarroll Random lurker

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    I'm enjoying this. I'd like to see Luna adapting to DC as she visits him at home.
     
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  10. Valint

    Valint I trust you know where the happy button is?

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    I've always considered Twilight's domain to be cooperative magic rather than the entire field; there's a reason why her cutie mark has multiple stars in it, after all. (Also presumably the reason why the trigger for her discovering her special talent was connecting to Spike's magic, Rainbow Dash's, or both, as opposed to having that happen when she first actually started learning magic.)
     
  11. Stsword

    Stsword Versed in the lewd.

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    I prefer the explanation for her cutie mark from here-

    I think her special talent has to do with accomplishing and exceeding her goals. Goals are signified by the sun, and whenever someone meets a goal that goal has past. In essence, it falls like the setting of the sun. There's more. Half of the cutie mark is gold, to represent accomplishing the task. Gold metals and what not. The other half is red to represent exceeding the task, which has to do with her ambition. A red hot burning ambition.

    Sunset isn't as good at magic as Twilight in the Equestria Girls series, and in fact she shows no patience for research in both Friendship Games and Forgotten Friendship, unlike Zoat's version.

    But she was the queen bee of her school. An ace athlete in the Friendship Games, a top student in science and academia, a talented musician, who apparently knows martial arts too. "What Sunset wants...she gets."

    In this theory, Sunset was a born winner.

    So when her attempts to become an alicorn went nowhere, failure was alien to her very nature, so it's natural she freaked out, even if one discounts the theory that ponies whose talents are stymied go berserk as a matter of course.

    I also think it's more interesting, but mileage may vary of course.
     
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  12. Valint

    Valint I trust you know where the happy button is?

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    In both EG and here, she's shown a propensity for doing her own original research, as opposed to Twilight, who prefers to find out what other researchers recorded first.

    Just because she doesn't have the patience for libraries doesn't mean she's not interested in actually researching how something works.
     
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  13. AidanMorgan

    AidanMorgan Essentially Overworked

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    I may have been joking but that doesn't mean it isn't possible.
     
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  14. RichardWhereat

    RichardWhereat Aia airëa Fëanáro.

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    Ah. Because when I googled Docking Sex, I got something entirely different. So I googled Horse Docking, and got a bunch of stuff about tails. Horse Docking Sex got me a combination of the two, but nought of what you spoke.
     
  15. Idkusername

    Idkusername Versed in the lewd.

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    Your FBI agent must be having a jolly good time today.
     
  16. RichardWhereat

    RichardWhereat Aia airëa Fëanáro.

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    I know I'm never getting a security clearance. Never.
     
  17. Ngamer11

    Ngamer11 Experienced.

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    Was reading the Story Only, and found an error. The name is supposed to be Rocket Red. I think remember you saying you tried making it Red Rocket, but found yourself writing Rocket Red and deciding to stick with the original name.
     
  18. Chaoswind

    Chaoswind Lord of nonsense

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    Isn't that a leaguer talking?
     
  19. Mquz

    Mquz Versed in the lewd.

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    I Assume it’s because Chrysallis is anti-friendship Grayven just destroyed what is basically the greatest enemy to Equestrian magic. Might be cool if she was an alien or from another dimension and Wilson had a magical opposite somewhere.
     
  20. Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    I wrote that bit a while ago.
    Um... Yeeeeees.
    Thank you, corrected.
    Do I need to link to the Tree of Harmony Melting Ponies video again?
    Thank you, corrected.
     
  21. Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    I'm at work at the moment and so I can't click on those links.
    Thank you, corrected.
     
  22. Railhazar

    Railhazar I trust you know where the happy button is?

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    Why do I have the feeling that Princess Luna was the Warmaster of Equestria?

    That once peace was achieved, she was given nightduties thus mostly sidelined from
    actualy ruling the place.

    Curious and curiouser?

    Is Celestia a manipulative mastermind who deliberately undermined Luna because she
    didn't quite fit with her vision of Equestria? Or was she so blind that she didn't notice that
    her sister was shaffing under her.
     
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  23. RichardWhereat

    RichardWhereat Aia airëa Fëanáro.

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    No, she's just insane with loneliness, nothing so malevolent..
     
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  24. Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    [​IMG]
     
  25. Sun Dog

    Sun Dog Getting out there.

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    Now the question is, will Luna develop any new powers or questionable character traits, now that she's mantled the Changeling Queen?
     
  26. Fouredged

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    Sunset will be the alicorn of endings. She will break the chains that bind ponies to the past and usher in the option for NEW dawns. She is the setting of the sun, the ending of the day, the completion.
     
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    *groan* I can't tell if you're serious but have a like.
     
  28. WereDragon

    WereDragon Bookwyrm

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    See: Ember being unable to distinguish between Twilight and Starlight.
    Having two alicorns with domains close enough that the layperson doesn’t know the difference will be a subject of confusion. And thus a subject of annoyance.

    I prefer the ‘expose children to their worst fears’ example of Harmony not necessarily being nice.

    What, no link?
     
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  29. Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    I think I hate you.
     
  30. ForeverShogo

    ForeverShogo Not too sore, are you?

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    Well, I don't think Chrysalis picking a fight with an Alicorn was THAT stupid. Her track record with defeating and capturing Alicorns is actually pretty good. It's bullshit deus ex machina and last second superweapons that get the better of her.

    And I'm pretty the idea that the planet is doomed if you take out Celestia and Luna has never once been corroborated. They even showed a timeline where Nightmare Moon won and eternal night hadn't destroyed anything.

    And, well, the day/night cycle still happened when Celestia and Luna were in the cocoons Chrysalis put them in.

    Beyond that . . .

    Celestia: My sister is an adult and can date whomever she wishes.

    Also Celestia: I will use my magic to attempt to forcibly prevent Luna from kissing her suitor.
     
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