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With This Ring (Young Justice SI) (Thread Fourteen)

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Siskulous said:
Then you really should stop complaining until you have.
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Nah. I haven't read a single Grayven arc yet, he's just not interesting. You add in ponies, and I honestly can't describe that level of dull.

Besides, my comment originated via being legitimately surprised that we were still in pony world, and doing so in non-serious, joking action. So don't try to make it sound like I was bitching Zoat out or pulling a Vaermina.

With the one you quoted being me confessing that I haven't read any of this to have caught Zoat's message that it'd be like a two month thing. I can also add to that, that I don't read each and every single post Zoat makes. Because a good chunk of them are nothing more than corrections that he is thanking folks for.

But thanks for noticing.
 
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Maxx Crowley said:
So many corrections Zoat....so many.
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Speaking of which...

Mr Zoat said:
more elegance that I managed
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than

Mr Zoat said:
ascension can be achieved
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I suspect this is a case where "couldst" would probably slip in.

Ganurath said:
fuckton of spiders
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Come now, the queen isn't THAT heavy, is she?

Vaermina said:
I really hope this isn't some secret plan to siphon all of Equestria's magic into herself to turn herself into an actual god.
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I must confess this is where my mind went, too...
 
Is there an Elder Scrolls version? Or does that go away with "no mantling"?
 
Darko said:
either DnD or Forgotten Realms?
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..... Um.... Forgotten Realms IS DnD. Or at least one of far too many possible settings (including homebrew ones, of course) for DnD to count.

Mr Zoat said:
No, because I don't know D&D well enough.
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See my above comment, in particular the bit about homebrew settings. I'd be willing to bet that for every group playing in one of the official settings there are at least 5 playing in either homebrew settings or some world the DM is making up as they go. Though I suppose dropping a SI into one of those worlds would be a little pointless since there's be nothing anyone else could recognize.

Mr Zoat said:
I considered it, then I remembered what happened to the constant-effect-levitate-ring character I made.
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Constant effect levitate ring? So....that character died in orbit? Or fell from orbit when he took the ring off?
 
Siskulous said:
Constant effect levitate ring? So....that character died in orbit? Or fell from orbit when he took the ring off?
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No, in Morrowind 'levitate' makes your character able to walk on air. You didn't have to go anywhere.
Mquz said:
Heh, what was it? Nobody figured out how to attack you?
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Firstly, the best constant effect levitation you can get on a ring is... This is a few decades ago now. 3? 4? Which means that it's very slow. And while it makes you totally immune to melee attacks while in open spaces it doesn't help in tombs, dwemmer ruins... All the places you'll want to explore. Then you add in the fact that you're limited to range attacks yourself. Fine. Morrowind has no static magicka regeneration, so spells are out. Bows? Okay, if you don't mind taking days to kill someone. I went for rings with range damage spells, and as a result whenever I emptied one and tried scrolling through my ring catalogue... The new ring replaces my levitate ring and I plummeted to my death.
 
AidanMorgan said:
Apropos of absolutely nothing I'm messing around with what little German I remember and I'm mad I can't finish the Red Lantern oath and stay in meter.

It starts off so cool too! I'm upset.

Mit Blut und Wut von Purpurrot
Aus einer fichen Leiche gerissen.
Zusammen mit unserem Hass
Du wirst brennen,

And then the meter breaks down entirely, and God forbid anything even close fit into a rhyme scheme.

If anyone has something that's one syllable and might fit at the end of this, I would appreciate it. I know I need to use "es ist dein [blank]" and I'm almost out of syllables. This is worse than haiku.
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A bit late AidanMorgan, but I haven't seen any replies to this so far while skimming the thread. I didn't find an official german translation, but this seems to be Atrocitus's oath word for word:

"With blood and rage of crimson red,
Ripped from a corpse so freshly dead,
Together with our hellish hate,
We'll burn you all - that is your fate"

Your first two lines are perfect, but 'fresh' is supposed to be 'frisch', so my translation would look something like this:

"Mit Blut und Wut von Purpurrot,
von einer frischen Leiche gerissen,
So wie auch unser Höllenhass,
Werd't ihr alle brennen müssen!"

I couldn't get the word 'fate' in there, but the 'müssen' is close enough I feel and it even sorta rhymes with 'gerissen'! Now if only I could rhyme Hass and Purpurrot...

Hope this helps
 
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No, in Morrowind 'levitate' makes your character able to walk on air. You didn't have to go anywhere.

Firstly, the best constant effect levitation you can get on a ring is... This is a few decades ago now. 3? 4? Which means that it's very slow. And while it makes you totally immune to melee attacks while in open spaces it doesn't help in tombs, dwemmer ruins... All the places you'll want to explore. Then you add in the fact that you're limited to range attacks yourself. Fine. Morrowind has no static magicka regeneration, so spells are out. Bows? Okay, if you don't mind taking days to kill someone. I went for rings with range damage spells, and as a result whenever I emptied one and tried scrolling through my ring catalogue... The new ring replaces my levitate ring and I plummeted to my death.
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Don't forget assassin darts, which can Easily be lethal and can be picked up again. If I remember correctly, though, enemy pathing is messed up by either attacking while levitating or having them levitate, so they tend to not be able to attack.
 
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If I remember correctly levitation breaks enemy pathing AI and basically makes them unable to melee attack you while you can Melee attack them (though I may be remembering wrong and you have to levitate them). Don't forget assassin darts, which can Easily be lethal and can be picked up.
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I... Seem to remember getting attacked while near the ground. I could be mistaken, though. It was a while ago.
 
Idkusername said:
Right, I'm not sure if Mr Zoat just missed my message, or if he couldn't be arsed to go and check, in which case I can't really blame him, but just to be sure, I'' ask again.
Mr Zoat, what's the word count right now?

Also, and this is to the rest of the community as well, and somewhat off-topic, but what would be the best way to enclose images in my messages? Would uploading them to Google Drive and using a spoiler bracket to house them work? Would I need some other hosting site, because no one I've seen uses google drive on this site. (They're a lot of images, so I can't hyperlink them). I'm asking because I'm going to try to write a fanfic of my own.

Speaking of, I've decided to set it in Gotham, so where would it be best for me to look for advice on the lore? Both the city and the DC universe in general.
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Chaoswind said:
You didn't tag him and one sentence post are easy to miss.

In regards to your question this fic had over two million words when it was still hosted in SV (and i mean not long after the SB exile), so considering how long ago that was and a rate of around 1,200 words per update on average (365 days a year) that it should have this fic being way over three million words by now, maybe four million words.

If you want the exact numbers you can count them yourself, if you want recommendations in regards what episodes are plot heavy and/or good, and what episodes can be safely skipped that is a whole different thing.


Edit: Using simple math, the average update length and that Zoat has... (i think) posted an update per day (delayed by bans and thread closures, but an update per day is mostly true), will get you almost four million words (give or take a hundred thousand) or over four million words... No wait a few are double updates due to the queen of Fables shenanigans episode... But i guess its a margin of error.
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Alright, it's 120,000 ish words give or take, according to the archive story only thread. Not sure where millions came into it.
 
Mr Zoat said:
Fine. Morrowind has no static magicka regeneration, so spells are out.
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Maybe not static mana regeneration, but Drain Intelligence 100 on Self for 1 second will briefly make your mana supply 0/0... then when your normal mana pool reasserts itself, you're short by the same difference, giving you a full tank. I called the spell Ignorant Bliss, and it was now I learned that stacking Attribute Drain on a Fortified Attribute gets treated as Attribute Damage, which is why you test modifications to your arsenal of spells and equipment in a safe environment.
Mr Zoat said:
I went for rings with range damage spells, and as a result whenever I emptied one and tried scrolling through my ring catalogue... The new ring replaces my levitate ring and I plummeted to my death.
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Did you try removing the depleted ring before equipping the next blaster ring?

These all seem like "computer making my character stupid" issues rather than a problem with the setting itself.
 
DAT_NOOB said:
2,392,000 words roughly then (assuming each update is approximately 1 thousand words)
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Your estimate is low. Consider that the threadmarks alone are 120k words in 93 posts. That's an average of 1290 words per threadmarked post, and there are 2393 posts in the story-only thread, so that suggests it's over three million words.
 
DAT_NOOB said:
I cry
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2,392,000 words roughly then (assuming each update is approximately 1 thousand words)
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The average when the last madman counted was around 1.4k words per update and the fic was already over two million when it was being posted in SV.

Thus is certainly over three million by now, and could be close to four million.

365 updates a year, for almost a decade (I think this fic started in 2012).

There are also the queen of fables episode that had double updates for most of it (Zoat and the Queen retcons).
 
Equestrian Guise (part 3)
Morning
Equestria

Sunset's acquired an unused room in the palace for checking her working. Well, checking her expectations concerning Equestria's magical constants. She looks focused but not flustered, which I assume means that everything is going more or less according to plan. Not sure where she found all this equipment-.

"Sunset, how did you get hold of all of this?"

"Celestia put all my old stuff into storage. Twilight got a lot of it, but she said she was fine with me using it. Have you seen her?"

"Yes, and I apologised for my attitude. I believe that she's going to get some much needed sleep."

Sunset nods, then looks over to where Luna is staring at her blackboard.

"Do you actually understand any of that?"

"Only a little. 'Tis truly a marvel. We had not realised that the thaumatic sciences had advanced so far. Prithee, what doth this segment mean?"

"They haven't. This is all Atlantean notation I learned on the other side of the mirror." She turns away from the machine she was studying. It looks a little like an oscilloscope, only the knobs are sparkling gemstones. "That segment describes the change in the subject's mana flows as they move from the start position to the… 'Unbinding' portion."

Luna glance back as Sunset approaches her. "You told Us that you were gone but a year."

Sunset face-shrugs. "Magic is my special talent. Usually I prefer a more hooves-on approach, but Atlantean notation just made everything make so much sense. This is the mathematical basis for everything I feel when I cast a spell."

She stands next to Luna as the alicorn stares at the equations.

"This is not the notation used in Equestria?"

"It will be now. I've written an introductory guide and I'm going to hand it over to the School for Gifted Unicorns."

"Couldst We prevail upon thee to furnish Us with a copy?"

"Sure, no problem. The other side of the mirror has really cheap printing technology. The only reason I didn't run off a bunch was because I know how slowly things like that get accepted."

"We have not yet fully brought Ourself up to date with modern thaumaturgy." She smiles at Sunset. "Perhaps in this instance We will be able to steal a march 'pon this nation's greatest experts."

"The ones who aren't me, anyway."

"You are confident, then, that your technique will function as intended?"

"Mostly. There's just one magic form that I can't fully account for." She sighs. "And I can't carry on with my ascension until I can isolate where all that chaos magic is coming from. I don't want to end up as a phelddagrif."

"Chaos magic?"

Uh oh. After I stopped The Changing Man turning an entire town into copies of his ex-girlfriend by killing him, I let Sunset study his remains. Which means that she was pretty confident of her ability to prevent chaos magic from interfering in the process. But with Discord still around and probably not all that happy about the sudden proliferation of alicorns…

"Could it be Discord that you are detecting?"

"Discord? That ugly statue-"

I brace for incoming draconequus.

"-out in the gardens?"

I hear a click, as if invisible fingers were clicking. I know he's supposed to be reformed now, but I can't quite suppress my desire to grab the Sword of the Fallen as there's a flash of white light which serves as the prelude to his appearance.

"Did I just hear my name? Hm?" He looks at me, blinks, and then there are two of him blinking at me as they float upside down in the air. Then they rotate their necks so they can look at one another.

"An alicorn stallion?"

"I didn't think they made those."

They blink at each other, then rotate so that their faces are level with mine. Their bodies are left floating up behind them in a way which –if they actually had hearts and blood- would swiftly leave them light-headed.

"How novel." / "How novel."

I smile faintly. "Discord, I presume. Planet Wilson's Lord of Chaos."

Another click and flash of white light and the two are one once more. "Well, I don't like to brag." His right forepaw covers the side of his mouth. "Actually, I do. I mean, 'Lord'? Really? Was that the best title you could come up with?"

"I met one of your colleagues. Klarion, the Witch Boy?"

Discord pulls back, amusement in his mismatched eyes. "Oh, that little scamp."

"And Mordru, the Dark Prince."

Discord strokes his chin. "Haven't heard from him in a while. Hmm. Come to think of it, Klarion's been uncharacteristically quiet as well."

"And Oggar, the Mightiest Immortal."

"Pff, mightiest."

He rolls his eyes. He rolls them down his arms and then holds them out to me. I don't react.

"And The Changing Man."

"Oh, he was always good for a laugh! Have to get back in touch." He clicks his right forepaw and a journal of some kind appears, floating in the air next to him. "Let's see... Huh." He pokes the journal a couple of times, then frowns. "Can't seem to locate them."

"No. Because, do you know what they have in common?"

He pokes the journal again, not looking up. "Oh, do tell."

"They all met me."

"Oh, don't be absurd, it's probably just on the fritz." He frowns, and clicks his fingers. The journal disappears and is replaced by a nineteen twenties era telephone. "Hello, operator? I need the current listing for The Changing Man."

The part of the handset near his ear moves like lips, a nonsensical warbling sound emerging from it.

"Oh. Okay, do you have Oggar?" Another warble. "Ah. I see."

I turn my neck, reach for my shoulder sheath and pull out the Sword of the Fallen.

"How about Klarion? … Or Mordru? … Huh. … How 'bout that."

As Discord looks up, I smile, making sure that he can get the best angle from which to appreciate the Sword. He looks at it, frowns slightly, then his eyes widen and his entire body turns into yellow custard. "I'vegottowashandhairmygo! Tata!"

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Block Retreat.

He clicks his fingers and doesn't disappear. His eyes widen far beyond the borders of his face and he starts frantically clicking his fingers. On the fifth, I feel his magic overpowering my resistance and I let him go.

I smile at Sunset.

"That fix it?"

She glances back at her equipment.

"Actually… Yes."

Luna watches cautiously as I stow the Sword. "What manner of blade is that?"

"What I'd have stabbed him with rather than taking a chance on Fluttershy. What me and mine have used to kill every Chaos Lord we've met to date. I believe in permanent solutions."

She considers for a moment, then nods.

"We are not sad to see him go. Now, We believe that Our guards have had time to array themselves. Alas, We have other work which must occupy our time ere Sister returns, but We are certain that the Royal Guard will be able to assist you in full measure."

Sunset smiles. "Thank you, Princess. By the time we're done, the Guard will be unrecognisable."

Luna looks a little concerned at that, but nods anyway.

"We are pleased that despite your estrangement from Our sister thou art still devoted to the wellbeing of thine fellow ponies."

Sunset looks a little uncertain at that.

"Wellbeing. Yeah."
 
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Ganurath said:
Did you try removing the depleted ring before equipping the next blaster ring?

These all seem like "computer making my character stupid" issues rather than a problem with the setting itself.
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Sure, but ranged rings don't do a lot of damage. Manually swapping them out would require me to go into the menu roughly once every three seconds, dozens of times every fight.
TheMidnightRook said:
Pranked shouldn't capitalized.
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Certainly it should. It's the first word in a new sentence.
 
Mr Zoat said:
Sunset smiles. "Thank you, Princess. By the time we're done, the Guard will be unrecognisable."

Luna looks a little concerned at that, but nods anyway.

"We are pleased that despite your estrangement from Our sister thou art still devoted to the wellbeing of thine fellow ponies."

Sunset looks a little uncertain at that.

"Wellbeing. Yeah."
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I understand that Sunset wants to ascend but what's she doing with the Guard?
 
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